[Approved] bio of bara :) please aprove :) (corrected)

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Basic Information
Name:Baratsuki no ken yūzā
Nickname: bara, the persion sword
Gender: male
Age:23
Clan:none

Looks: normal, slim, long dark brown hair, mosculate, uses a dark shirt with a long grey hokage smililar coat, with metal shard spread on the outside of the coat, as a long persian like sword on his back, wheres some black pants and the normal ninja sandals

Personality: funny, likes to laught, good loyal friend, never abandoning his friends, prefers to die in they're places

Village Info.
Village of Birth: no village, born in a cotage in the lighting country
Village of Alliance:kumogakure

Rank//Chakra Info.
Ninja Rank: chuunin
Specialty: waiting to be trained
Elements: wind and lighting (not trained yet)
Your ninjutsu:
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
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(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
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(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
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(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
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(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
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(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
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(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)



Background Info.
History: born in a smal cotage in the lighting coutry in a family of missing ninjas both father and mother from komugakure. From smal age his father trained him in the ninja arts. Demonstrading great mastery in taijutsu and ninjutsu but not so much in genjutsu. One day when he was training he found a cave and in that cave was a dying old man that asked him for help he then helped him and when the old man was minutes away from death he gave him a persian like sword and said that that sword proteced him from many foes and that he tought i would be good to give it to the person who helped him and that that sword was special. The man died after saying that. the boy also took a smal knive from the man backpac and started to train with the sword and ater 2 years he was famous by is persian like sword play and very deadly. he continue to train and starded to do some smal errands for a nearby village and strated to grown famous.And he wanted to become more powerful and joined kumugakure in order to learn jutsos and train more.

Other

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Theme Song and Background Music: brother's in arms by dire straits

Battles

Won:none
Lost:none

~Approved~ have fun RPing.

 

[Caliburn]

And why didn't you just edited your other bio and made a new bio?

 

[missing]

because this one...i think...doesn't have any mistakes

 

[~Racher~]

he means to say...that instead of making a new thread for your bio; you should have edited in other thread you made just before it.You cant just make new threads everytime you make a mistake in your bio...you edit it.

 

[missing]

sorry i now get it but i still hope this one get's aproved

 

[~Cross Marian~]

Just an advance should be to put your ninjutsus in a spoiler tag else I think it's good. Good luck mate

 

[missing]

thanks

 

[Caliburn]

As a chunin you can learn up to 2 elements, but you still need to be taught in them. Or you place the first element you want to learn or you place both elements you want to learn but specify you still need to be taught in them as now it looks like you learned them both.

Also considering you sword channels chakra, it means it has become a custom sword and you can only have a custom weapon if it got approved in the Custom Jutsu submission thread, which didn't happen as this is your first bio and you need to have a bio to post custom jutsu's.
So remove that it can channel chakra. You can use it as a normal sword though.

 

[missing]

ok thanks