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BIO Akuma Mecchen (needs approval)

Basic Information
Name: Akuma Mecchen
Nickname: none
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Clan:
Looks:Brown hair, brown eyes, always wears a black shirt and skirt like this

Personality: sweet, nice, loving, friendly, caring

Village Info.
Village of Birth: Village hidden in the leaves
Village of Alliance:

Rank//Chakra Info.
Ninja Rank: Gennin
Specialty:
Elements: Water
Your ninjutsu:
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
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(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
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(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
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(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
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(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
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(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
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(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)

Background Info.
History:
Akuma was young when her parents had moved near the water. Akuma always liked the water the feeling against her skin made her calm. She had a pet it was a dog. Akuma named her Neko, Neko was a husky but always stayed at her side. Akuma and Neko had watched Akuma's parents be slaughtered. Akuma had grown up along with Neko they both set out to get revenge. Akuma remembered the mans face, the one that had killed her parents. He had peircings snake bites, 3 in his nose, and a couple in both of his ears. She noticed that all the men with him was wearing cloaks black with red clouds. Akuma had later through the years heard about the men in cloaks called the Akatsuki.

Akuma had turned 17 on May 14 and had finally found the hideout, but all the members of the Aktsuki were gone. Akuma had began her search again only to find out a kid named Naruto had killed the leader the one who had killed her family Pein.
Akuma and neko now stay in the hidden leaf village. Akuma seeking training and Neko just a dog at her side. Neko had died, she had nothing left.
Akuma is now a ninja and prepared to be trained by a sensei. Akuma age of 17 will still find a way to get revenge.

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Sorry, but some of this bio is messed up.

1. Though I think it is enough, you could also describe the type of clothing to give more juice to the bio. Everyone likes making their character wear some cool threads or nice gear.
2. Personality is fine as well, but it doesn't help to show how you are outside and inside of battle.
3. All genins have no specialty unless it's a special bio like Kakuzu or something. Just erase it until you have gained something for this bio through training or battling.
4. Even to this day of NB age I only see the following ninjutsu available for genins that are fresh from the academy.
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
_____
(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
_____
(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
_____
(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
_____
(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
_____
(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
_____
(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)
5. Your history is long enough, but I think the only thing that couldn't have happened is when you talked to sasuke. O_O Either way it's nice, maybe lack of a punctuation, but it's fine. Only thing I suggest is maybe fixing it a bit.
6. You, and I tell this to a couple of people that tried it, can not have anything sealed within you. Just remove that entirely.

Fix it or risk this bio never being approved. ;_; Good luck.
 

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Sorry, but some of this bio is messed up.

1. Though I think it is enough, you could also describe the type of clothing to give more juice to the bio. Everyone likes making their character wear some cool threads or nice gear.
2. Personality is fine as well, but it doesn't help to show how you are outside and inside of battle.
3. All genins have no specialty unless it's a special bio like Kakuzu or something. Just erase it until you have gained something for this bio through training or battling.
4. Even to this day of NB age I only see the following ninjutsu available for genins that are fresh from the academy.
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)
_____
(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.
_____
(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.
_____
(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.
_____
(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
_____
(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).
_____
(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique

Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)
5. Your history is long enough, but I think the only thing that couldn't have happened is when you talked to sasuke. O_O Either way it's nice, maybe lack of a punctuation, but it's fine. Only thing I suggest is maybe fixing it a bit.
6. You, and I tell this to a couple of people that tried it, can not have anything sealed within you. Just remove that entirely.

Fix it or risk this bio never being approved. ;_; Good luck.


OKAY FIXED ^.^ I hope it gets approved soon
 
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