B.O.We apocalypse RP

[Deliciae]

(Great. Just some critique if you don't mind. When a character does something, it makes for a better read if you don't put it inside asterisks like

*plays with a ball of yarn*

Instead, you should just type out exactly what is going on as if you were describing it to someone and leave the symbols behind. You'll find it's much easier and less dictionaly restrictive. Also,if it is not obvious, you might want to explain how your character does this. For example:

Having nothing else to do, he begins to play with his ball of yarn, rolling it back and forth.

It gives the reader a better mental view of what's happening and your character's thought process. Secondly, I'd advise against using notifications like "Eris:". Those are mostly found only in scripts and also superfluous if you only have one character. Instead, simply put "She says" or "Eris says" after the quotation marks. It accomplishes the same thing, only more professionally. Also, there's no need for a space before punctuation.

Finally, I humbly request you reread whatever you type so as to make sure it's grammatically correct before you post it. I mean no offense but the first few seconds of that post wasn't the best thing I've ever read. Just remember to provide as much detail about the character and it's actions in your posts as possible and you'll be a 5-star RPer/writer in no time.)

As Officer Break listened to the girl speak, he could feel nothing but compassion. He had been trained not to pay attention to the pleading of criminals or unfriendlies, but he could tell Erlene wasn't just acting. Once he had finished handcuffing them, he got stood near them and took off his helmet so they could see his face and know the depth of his sincerity.

"My name is Mister Break. I am an ex-Marine, ex-FBI SWAT Team officer. After a SWAT mission, I came home to see my family and half of my neighborhood torn to shreds by what are called bio-weapons. I now search for the whoever caused all this so I can put a stop to it and bring him to justice."

He turned to Erlene to speak directly to her

"Your friend is not dead, she only has a flesh wound. She will be tended to. As for letting you go? No. You two are too ill equipped to deal with all those beasts out there. They'll tear you to shreds. You'll stay with me until I can find somewhere you'll be safe. I am not your enemy."

Gesturing for them to get up, the officer tells them to start walking and he puts his helmet back on.

She, gasps in pain, dropping her weapon, clutching at her bicep. The profound malic had left her unique pools, plummeting to the ground with a heavy thud in agony, dark locks tumbling over her eyes.
In misery, she takes a glance upwards, inspecting the officer she hisses,“ I will send you to hell... You'll see.. I don't care if you're not my 'enemy'...” she drops her head, observing her bloody wound.
Distracted by her injure, the man's words were tuned out it was like he was oblivious to her. When he proceeded chaining the two of them, she reacted. In an instant, with snake like swiftness, she in a failed attempt tries to bash him, but only for her to crumble in sheer pain, she disliked being vulnerable.

Just as he gestured her to get up, she as pure usual shakes her head in negation,
“ No...” was her simple answer, looking down.

 

[Fearmonger]

She, gasps in pain, dropping her weapon, clutching at her bicep. The profound malic had left her unique pools, plummeting to the ground with a heavy thud in agony, dark locks tumbling over her eyes.
In misery, she takes a glance upwards, inspecting the officer she hisses,“ I will send you to hell... You'll see.. I don't care if you're not my 'enemy'...” she drops her head, observing her bloody wound.
Distracted by her injure, the man's words were tuned out it was like he was oblivious to her. When he proceeded chaining the two of them, she reacted. In an instant, with snake like swiftness, she in a failed attempt tries to bash him, but only for her to crumble in sheer pain, she disliked being vulnerable.

Just as he gestured her to get up, she as pure usual shakes her head in negation,
“ No...” was her simple answer, looking down.

The officer frowned at Rosemarie's display of insubordination. Of all the times to be difficult...

"Look, if you don't come with us, you'll either die from an infection or be killed or worse by whoever or whatever happens to pass by! So quit acting like a little kid, get your head out of your ass and get to stepping!"

He had already tried being nice. He'd stood there and opened up his heart to them, but if she was unaffected by kind words, he had no problems exercising his experience as a drill sergeant on her. In truth, they didn't really have much time. Between all the commotion and the loud boom of his gunshot, all the noise had to have attracted some bio-weapons. It'd be only a matter of time before some started to swarm.

 

[Akai Hime]

(Great. Just some critique if you don't mind. When a character does something, it makes for a better read if you don't put it inside asterisks like

*plays with a ball of yarn*

Instead, you should just type out exactly what is going on as if you were describing it to someone and leave the symbols behind. You'll find it's much easier and less dictionaly restrictive. Also,if it is not obvious, you might want to explain how your character does this. For example:

Having nothing else to do, he begins to play with his ball of yarn, rolling it back and forth.

It gives the reader a better mental view of what's happening and your character's thought process. Secondly, I'd advise against using notifications like "Eris:". Those are mostly found only in scripts and also superfluous if you only have one character. Instead, simply put "She says" or "Eris says" after the quotation marks. It accomplishes the same thing, only more professionally. Also, there's no need for a space before punctuation.

Finally, I humbly request you reread whatever you type so as to make sure it's grammatically correct before you post it. I mean no offense but the first few seconds of that post wasn't the best thing I've ever read. Just remember to provide as much detail about the character and it's actions in your posts as possible and you'll be a 5-star RPer/writer in no time.)

As Officer Break listened to the girl speak, he could feel nothing but compassion. He had been trained not to pay attention to the pleading of criminals or unfriendlies, but he could tell Erlene wasn't just acting. Once he had finished handcuffing them, he got stood near them and took off his helmet so they could see his face and know the depth of his sincerity.

"My name is Mister Break. I am an ex-Marine, ex-FBI SWAT Team officer. After a SWAT mission, I came home to see my family and half of my neighborhood torn to shreds by what are called bio-weapons. I now search for the whoever caused all this so I can put a stop to it and bring him to justice."

He turned to Erlene to speak directly to her

"Your friend is not dead, she only has a flesh wound. She will be tended to. As for letting you go? No. You two are too ill equipped to deal with all those beasts out there. They'll tear you to shreds. You'll stay with me until I can find somewhere you'll be safe. I am not your enemy."

Gesturing for them to get up, the officer tells them to start walking and he puts his helmet back on.

(i cant tell you how thankfull i am ill try my best and about the grammer english is my secong language and im trying my best to get better so im sorry and i sure will try to use everything you said cause i love the way you write )

starts walking sadly and thinks about what he just said again and again but cant think straight untill she think of word he said about wanting to look the responsible

" I KNOW WHO IS RESPONSIBLE!" she shouts looking up at him

"But i wont tell you till you release us..." says in a lower tone but tries to look confident and strong

 

[narutorikudoumode]

Mind if I join you guys? I was on this thread in the beginning but it looks like you guys are the only ones active..

 

[Akai Hime]

Mind if I join you guys? I was on this thread in the beginning but it looks like you guys are the only ones active..

( yeah we should all join. So I can start the story anyway )

 

[Deliciae]

The officer frowned at Rosemarie's display of insubordination. Of all the times to be difficult...

"Look, if you don't come with us, you'll either die from an infection or be killed or worse by whoever or whatever happens to pass by! So quit acting like a little kid, get your head out of your ass and get to stepping!"

He had already tried being nice. He'd stood there and opened up his heart to them, but if she was unaffected by kind words, he had no problems exercising his experience as a drill sergeant on her. In truth, they didn't really have much time. Between all the commotion and the loud boom of his gunshot, all the noise had to have attracted some bio-weapons. It'd be only a matter of time before some started to swarm.

An irritated sigh escapes her lips in a slight huff,“ Listen old man, I can't walk. And don't talk crap about opening your heart, you're the one who shot me.." She tries to stand, but miserably drops to her knees,“ It wasn't my fault, I was only trying to protect another! In fact it's your fault!" Tears slide down her flushed cheeks as she begins to cry, it was apparent she was afraid and lost. It seemed she was only trying to be strong, although she seemed different in a way.

 

[narutorikudoumode]

The sun had reached it's peak in the sky, slowly it begin to wind down creating a scenery that displayed a ruddy flush against the mirrored river. "the perfect sunset for this bloody scene", he said while rising to his feet. After finishing the rest of the infectees, Tsuda climbed the slippery slope of the hill, mounting on to his motorcycle he then started the ignition and drove in the direction of the unfamiliar noise.

"Luck, lets just hope you're on my side today, because I'm going to need every bit of you."

 

[Fearmonger]

An irritated sigh escapes her lips in a slight huff,“ Listen old man, I can't walk. And don't talk crap about opening your heart, you're the one who shot me.." She tries to stand, but miserably drops to her knees,“ It wasn't my fault, I was only trying to protect another! In fact it's your fault!" Tears slide down her flushed cheeks as she begins to cry, it was apparent she was afraid and lost. It seemed she was only trying to be strong, although she seemed different in a way.

(The bicep, which is where Rosemaria got grazed, is on the arm, not the leg. Also, the parts of the post not in quotation marks are input from the writer, not spoken word)

After Rosemaria was done with her emotional retort and had started sobbing, Officer Break looked blankly down at her. The hazel eyes fixed on her form from his emotionless face told only of a severe lack of patience. All the steely resolve and empathetic care had fled to be replaced by sheer intolerance. It was possible the officer was angry, maybe even extremely livid. Who would know?

He unholstered his taser and immediately set to pressing the trigger. Two shock probes would be released from the device and attach themselves to Rosemaria's shoulder before sending thousands of volts of electricity into her body. He'd let the taser shock her for the full five seconds before the safety automatically shut off the electrical current, leaving her paralyzed and pliable. He'd then gently lift her up and carry the girl in his arms.

(i cant tell you how thankfull i am ill try my best and about the grammer english is my secong language and im trying my best to get better so im sorry and i sure will try to use everything you said cause i love the way you write )

starts walking sadly and thinks about what he just said again and again but cant think straight untill she think of word he said about wanting to look the responsible

" I KNOW WHO IS RESPONSIBLE!" she shouts looking up at him

"But i wont tell you till you release us..." says in a lower tone but tries to look confident and strong

After he had picked up Rosemaria, Officer Break sharply regarded Evelyn, partially because her sudden yell had startled him.

"Then that will be discussed later. Now, we have to move"

He gestured for her to keep walking. There was a police station nearby.

 

[Deliciae]

(The bicep, which is where Rosemaria got grazed, is on the arm, not the leg. Also, the parts of the post not in quotation marks are input from the writer, not spoken word)

After Rosemaria was done with her emotional retort and had started sobbing, Officer Break looked blankly down at her. The hazel eyes fixed on her form from his emotionless face told only of a severe lack of patience. All the steely resolve and empathetic care had fled to be replaced by sheer intolerance. It was possible the officer was angry, maybe even extremely livid. Who would know?

He unholstered his taser and immediately set to pressing the trigger. Two shock probes would be released from the device and attach themselves to Rosemaria's shoulder before sending thousands of volts of electricity into her body. He'd let the taser shock her for the full five seconds before the safety automatically shut off the electrical current, leaving her paralyzed and pliable. He'd then gently lift her up and carry the girl in his arms.



After he had picked up Rosemaria, Officer Break sharply regarded Evelyn, partially because her sudden yell had startled him.

"Then that will be discussed later. Now, we have to move"

He gestured for her to keep walking. There was a police station nearby.

( Oops, my bad.. Sorry...
I know it was by an accident, tried to edit, but I'm on a device that is not ment for the internet. Sorry, again. ›_‹!)

Her unique coloured pools gazed towards the officer, she felt a a wave of guilt wash over her body of how she had behaved earlier. Tearing her vision from his stern hazel eyes, she sniffed in disappointment she knew she looked pathetic in his eyes, a brat, a wreck a worthless little girl.

To her great astonishment, she was tazed all of a sudden. It was a real surprise for her as profound fear became vivid in her orbs. Rosemaria felt her body become numb.

She managed to choke out,“ I'm sorry... I really am.....“ her eyes nothing but blank as a sheet.

( Rushed it...)

 

[Akai Hime]

(The bicep, which is where Rosemaria got grazed, is on the arm, not the leg. Also, the parts of the post not in quotation marks are input from the writer, not spoken word)

After Rosemaria was done with her emotional retort and had started sobbing, Officer Break looked blankly down at her. The hazel eyes fixed on her form from his emotionless face told only of a severe lack of patience. All the steely resolve and empathetic care had fled to be replaced by sheer intolerance. It was possible the officer was angry, maybe even extremely livid. Who would know?

He unholstered his taser and immediately set to pressing the trigger. Two shock probes would be released from the device and attach themselves to Rosemaria's shoulder before sending thousands of volts of electricity into her body. He'd let the taser shock her for the full five seconds before the safety automatically shut off the electrical current, leaving her paralyzed and pliable. He'd then gently lift her up and carry the girl in his arms.



After he had picked up Rosemaria, Officer Break sharply regarded Evelyn, partially because her sudden yell had startled him.

"Then that will be discussed later. Now, we have to move"

He gestured for her to keep walking. There was a police station nearby.

In great fear and hopelessness Head down follows you step by step Slowly following him

"you're a maniac... Just,let us go....we can survive.. Just.. Leave...." says in dissapiontment

Walk behind you handcuffed gets closer looking at her *

Hey you Ok? You're gonna be fine....Ok?" says with worried voice

 

[Deliciae]

In great fear and hopelessness Head down follows you step by step Slowly following him

"you're a maniac... Just,let us go....we can survive.. Just.. Leave...." says in dissapiontment

Walk behind you handcuffed gets closer looking at her *

Hey you Ok? You're gonna be fine....Ok?" says with worried voice

Rosemaria paralyzed, she is unabled to move her limp body and limbs such as turning her head towards Erlene. Her face betrayed no emotion,it was quite difficult how she felt.
But is was quite clear that she wasn't okay.
“ ............. S-s-so-r-r...y.....” the words came out feeble, yet strained. Barley upove a whisper.

 

[Fearmonger]

Officer Break felt a twinge of guilt as the two girls sulked behind him. But it was fleeting. He'd feel even worse letting them go. No matter what they said, they couldn't even handle him, so let some other trained men or monstrosities find them and the two defenseless girls could be killed or even--

He didn't want to even think of the latter. It was sickening. Instead, he focused on carefully removing the broken glass from the doors of precinct's main entrance. Afterwards, he led them past the lobby and set Rosemaria down in a chair and ordered Evelyn to sit beside her. Looking around at the blood sprayed walls and floors littered with paperwork and the occasional body in a pool of blood, Mister felt a sudden wave of nostalgia for the fellow officers that once walked about in there, talking, joking and carrying out their duties.

"Want something from the vending machine?"

He asked the two of them. Rosemarie should have completely recovered by now.

 

[Akai Hime]

Officer Break felt a twinge of guilt as the two girls sulked behind him. But it was fleeting. He'd feel even worse letting them go. No matter what they said, they couldn't even handle him, so let some other trained men or monstrosities find them and the two defenseless girls could be killed or even--

He didn't want to even think of the latter. It was sickening. Instead, he focused on carefully removing the broken glass from the doors of precinct's main entrance. Afterwards, he led them past the lobby and set Rosemaria down in a chair and ordered Evelyn to sit beside her. Looking around at the blood sprayed walls and floors littered with paperwork and the occasional body in a pool of blood, Mister felt a sudden wave of nostalgia for the fellow officers that once walked about in there, talking, joking and carrying out their duties.

"Want something from the vending machine?"

He asked the two of them. Rosemarie should have completely recovered by now.

looks up at you with furious with rage

" how about some freedom.? " shouts up

looking up at him with rage and looking around and at Rosemarie

"you ok..? " says tilting head to see her face" youre gonna be ok......" says while she doesnt believe it herself

 

[Deliciae]

Officer Break felt a twinge of guilt as the two girls sulked behind him. But it was fleeting. He'd feel even worse letting them go. No matter what they said, they couldn't even handle him, so let some other trained men or monstrosities find them and the two defenseless girls could be killed or even--

He didn't want to even think of the latter. It was sickening. Instead, he focused on carefully removing the broken glass from the doors of precinct's main entrance. Afterwards, he led them past the lobby and set Rosemaria down in a chair and ordered Evelyn to sit beside her. Looking around at the blood sprayed walls and floors littered with paperwork and the occasional body in a pool of blood, Mister felt a sudden wave of nostalgia for the fellow officers that once walked about in there, talking, joking and carrying out their duties.

"Want something from the vending machine?"

He asked the two of them. Rosemarie should have completely recovered by now.

Rosemaria flinched a bit once Offcer Break had placed her into a chair.
She leisurely inspected her surroundings, not a pretty sight, the red liquid that was painted everywhere made her feel un-easy. She felt like she needed to empty out her stomach, the dead bodies didn't exactly make her feel any better, if anything she became even more sickly.

Keeping her gaze low, not wanting to linger on the dreadful thought about the eerie room, she barley upove a whisper answers,
“ Um... I'm fine... Thank you very much....Sir..”
she still felt guilty for attacking this man, a very generous man indeed. She considers herself lucky that he didn't leave her injured,vulnerable on the streets for the ' disfigured things.' She was greatful, but did not show it.She wanted to show that she was, but couldn't.

She turns towards Erlene with a pained smile, she didn't say a word, even though she felt sad and guilty she expressed it with a hug, she took a sharp breath as she did so. Her bicep continued to bleed.

 

[Fearmonger]

looks up at you with furious with rage

" how about some freedom.? " shouts up

looking up at him with rage and looking around and at Rosemarie

"you ok..? " says tilting head to see her face" youre gonna be ok......" says while she doesnt believe it herself

Rosemaria flinched a bit once Offcer Break had placed her into a chair.
She leisurely inspected her surroundings, not a pretty sight, the red liquid that was painted everywhere made her feel un-easy. She felt like she needed to empty out her stomach, the dead bodies didn't exactly make her feel any better, if anything she became even more sickly.

Keeping her gaze low, not wanting to linger on the dreadful thought about the eerie room, she barley upove a whisper answers,
“ Um... I'm fine... Thank you very much....Sir..”
she still felt guilty for attacking this man, a very generous man indeed. She considers herself lucky that he didn't leave her injured,vulnerable on the streets for the ' disfigured things.' She was greatful, but did not show it.She wanted to show that she was, but couldn't.

She turns towards Erlene with a pained smile, she didn't say a word, even though she felt sad and guilty she expressed it with a hug, she took a sharp breath as she did so. Her bicep continued to bleed.

The officer simply shook his head at Erlene's reply. She just wouldn't accept the fact that she was under his scrutiny now until further notice. He uncuffed Rosemaria to tend to her wound, only to watch confused as she hugged her friend. Well, that was one question out of the way. Now he definitely knew they knew each other.

He got some cleaning agents out of a first aid kit and applied it to her wound. It would sting a bit, but it was worth it. After applying a few more things, he simply wrapped up the wound and he was done.

"I'm going to get a few things from around here, I expect you two to be smart enough not to try and escape."

He walked away from the two girls and turned a corner. Eventually he came to the door of the armory, which he promptly opened. Stepping inside, he took off his police jacket, ballistic vest, shirt and pants and donned his personal jet black S.W.A.T. uniform complete with military grade ballistic vest. He equipped a carbine onto his back and took some extra ammunition. He was ready.

Assuming they haven't run off, Officer Break returned to the girls and uncuffed Evelyn.

"There, now tell me what you know about the origin of these bio-weapons."

 

[Akai Hime]

The officer simply shook his head at Erlene's reply. She just wouldn't accept the fact that she was under his scrutiny now until further notice. He uncuffed Rosemaria to tend to her wound, only to watch confused as she hugged her friend. Well, that was one question out of the way. Now he definitely knew they knew each other.

He got some cleaning agents out of a first aid kit and applied it to her wound. It would sting a bit, but it was worth it. After applying a few more things, he simply wrapped up the wound and he was done.

"I'm going to get a few things from around here, I expect you two to be smart enough not to try and escape."

He walked away from the two girls and turned a corner. Eventually he came to the door of the armory, which he promptly opened. Stepping inside, he took off his police jacket, ballistic vest, shirt and pants and donned his personal jet black S.W.A.T. uniform complete with military grade ballistic vest. He equipped a carbine onto his back and took some extra ammunition. He was ready.

Assuming they haven't run off, Officer Break returned to the girls and uncuffed Evelyn.

"There, now tell me what you know about the origin of these bio-weapons."

Let's go of Rosemarie as I was hugging her facing you and starts rubbing my wrists there's obvious marks of injury as I hide it with my shirt looking back at you as I start getting up to stretch my legs

" no.." she shakes no " I'm not.telling you anything " she says serious and not afraid with boiling anger in my eyes

" top secret... " says sitting back down.next to Rosemarie

 

[Deliciae]

The officer simply shook his head at Erlene's reply. She just wouldn't accept the fact that she was under his scrutiny now until further notice. He uncuffed Rosemaria to tend to her wound, only to watch confused as she hugged her friend. Well, that was one question out of the way. Now he definitely knew they knew each other.

He got some cleaning agents out of a first aid kit and applied it to her wound. It would sting a bit, but it was worth it. After applying a few more things, he simply wrapped up the wound and he was done.

"I'm going to get a few things from around here, I expect you two to be smart enough not to try and escape."

He walked away from the two girls and turned a corner. Eventually he came to the door of the armory, which he promptly opened. Stepping inside, he took off his police jacket, ballistic vest, shirt and pants and donned his personal jet black S.W.A.T. uniform complete with military grade ballistic vest. He equipped a carbine onto his back and took some extra ammunition. He was ready.

Assuming they haven't run off, Officer Break returned to the girls and uncuffed Evelyn.

"There, now tell me what you know about the origin of these bio-weapons."

She wearly eyed the Officer uncuff her, she gently tended to her slightly red wrist, rubbing them. At first, She was perplexed at why he had uncuffed her, but then it became vivid once Officer Break took out a first aid kit. Rosemaria inwardly cringed,she knew what was comming, but didn't bother to move as she was tired. Allowing him to tend to her wound she gritted her teeth in pain, it stung, yet it was worth it. She'd rather be stung for a matter of seconds then being torn apart....
She nodded her head in a silent 'thank you.' towards him once he had finishec.

She quietly inspected her now bandaged bicep, she was quite impressed, was there anything this man didn't know? He seemed like he knew almost everything about combat, medics... Was there more? She wondered if he was taught by someone or had taught himself.
Shaking her head to banish the thought from her mind, she look towards the Officer who had stated something which she did not quite catch as he headed out, leaving both of them alone. Was that a clever thing?

Rosemaria pondered over the un-intelligent thought of escaping, she knew she shouldn't after what he has done for her and Erlene, so she soundessly turned to Erlene with a smile.

When, after a few minutes, the man had returned this time he was clad in a different uniform, she wondered why, again, she was always wondering.

Confused as he askes Erlene a difficult question, she tilts her head,“ Co-weapons?” she looks towards Erlene as she seethed with anger, trying to calm her down she pats her back,“ It's okay... Sssh.. Calm down, we don't want another accident..” she in a failed attempt tries to smile, but it appears to be strained.

 

[Akai Hime]

She wearly eyed the Officer uncuff her, she gently tended to her slightly red wrist, rubbing them. At first, She was perplexed at why he had uncuffed her, but then it became vivid once Officer Break took out a first aid kit. Rosemaria inwardly cringed,she knew what was comming, but didn't bother to move as she was tired. Allowing him to tend to her wound she gritted her teeth in pain, it stung, yet it was worth it. She'd rather be stung for a matter of seconds then being torn apart....
She nodded her head in a silent 'thank you.' towards him once he had finishec.

She quietly inspected her now bandaged bicep, she was quite impressed, was there anything this man didn't know? He seemed like he knew almost everything about combat, medics... Was there more? She wondered if he was taught by someone or had taught himself.
Shaking her head to banish the thought from her mind, she look towards the Officer who had stated something which she did not quite catch as he headed out, leaving both of them alone. Was that a clever thing?

Rosemaria pondered over the un-intelligent thought of escaping, she knew she shouldn't after what he has done for her and Erlene, so she soundessly turned to Erlene with a smile.

When, after a few minutes, the man had returned this time he was clad in a different uniform, she wondered why, again, she was always wondering.

Confused as he askes Erlene a difficult question, she tilts her head,“ Co-weapons?” she looks towards Erlene as she seethed with anger, trying to calm her down she pats her back,“ It's okay... Sssh.. Calm down, we don't want another accident..” she in a failed attempt tries to smile, but it appears to be strained.

looks over her with a slight smile of hopelessness thinking about what she was doing before getting caught by the weirdo and what her plan was looks at the hopelessness on her eyes with hopeless eyes myself
" you're being forced like you're cage when you should be running..... He wounded you and helping you the man who got you in trouble is now playing the hero so you would trust him " moves hy hair out of me face " how can things possibly get worse? And how the hell can you expect me to be calm in this!!! " SHOUTS IT ANGER
As the words come out of my mouth after a few seconds of silence all over the place...

Oh no....." whispers looking at the door

Knocking noise starts on the door... Followed by voices of heavy steps as the heavy steps get closer the knock on the door gets louder and louder almost slamming and smashing the door

" just when I thought things can't get any worse...." gets up looking at the door in fear and waits holding my breath

 

[Fearmonger]

looks over her with a slight smile of hopelessness thinking about what she was doing before getting caught by the weirdo and what her plan was looks at the hopelessness on her eyes with hopeless eyes myself
" you're being forced like you're cage when you should be running..... He wounded you and helping you the man who got you in trouble is now playing the hero so you would trust him " moves hy hair out of me face " how can things possibly get worse? And how the hell can you expect me to be calm in this!!! " SHOUTS IT ANGER
As the words come out of my mouth after a few seconds of silence all over the place...

Oh no....." whispers looking at the door

Knocking noise starts on the door... Followed by voices of heavy steps as the heavy steps get closer the knock on the door gets louder and louder almost slamming and smashing the door

" just when I thought things can't get any worse...." gets up looking at the door in fear and waits holding my breath

(Remember, Tobi, say "he or she" or the name of your character or some other descriptive term when describing your character's actions. Like what I do here)

Once he had walked in, he meant to take off Evelyn's handcuffs and ask her about what she knew, but he was cut off by a sudden banging on the door.

"Girls, take cover behind the counter, hurry!"

He half-whispered-half-yelled at them. The Officer hid behind the reception desk opposite of them and took his carbine from his back. Whether the people coming in were armed men or bio-weapons, he couldn't risk getting the two girls hurt. By being behind different cover, he could focus all the enemies' attention on him. He trained the holo-sights on the door, he was ready for whatever would come from behind those doors.

"Girls, keep your head down!"

 

[Akai Hime]

(Remember, Tobi, say "he or she" or the name of your character or some other descriptive term when describing your character's actions. Like what I do here)

Once he had walked in, he meant to take off Evelyn's handcuffs and ask her about what she knew, but he was cut off by a sudden banging on the door.

"Girls, take cover behind the counter, hurry!"

He half-whispered-half-yelled at them. The Officer hid behind the reception desk opposite of them and took his carbine from his back. Whether the people coming in were armed men or bio-weapons, he couldn't risk getting the two girls hurt. By being behind different cover, he could focus all the enemies' attention on him. He trained the holo-sights on the door, he was ready for whatever would come from behind those doors.

"Girls, keep your head down!"

( there name is erlene and you already did uncuff me you can't change you're mind -_- plus I enjoy writings in first person view so it's all cool)

I closed my eyes for a second and didn't hide and Gave him a half smirks

" you obviously been trained too much to fight humans and barely know anything about what you're up against..... " I said walking back to Rosemarie

" come on!" grabbed her hand and we both ran toward other side of the room farther into the police station

The door starts to Crack with heavy beats if some kind of punch but way too strong for a human standard *