As a Konoha Shinobi! Ninja Scroll,1, Back from Training

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Naruto and his master, Jiraiya, one of the legendary Sannin walk through a road of dirt in between long green grass that is being moved by the winds. Naruto is wearing an upgraded form of his jumpsuit, one that fits his size, since he has grown since two and a half years ago. The blue parts of his jumpsuit are now black, along with the part that covers his neck. Above that, he wears a red coat with black flames on the bottom back and sides. A medium sized scroll is tied on at the bottom of his back. It is a sunny day, so much that Naruto keeps on covering his eyes with his left arm.

“Hey, ero sennin?” How much longer till we get to the village?”

Asked Naruto

Jiraiya did not answer, he seemed more focused on his thoughts, his thoughts that involved Akatsuki.

“(Once we arrive at the village and Naruto is given a mission of any kind, it will be dangerous. If he goes out of control and I’m not there, then there’s no stopping him. Not only that but, it will make him invulnerable if Akatsuki makes their move on him. We really are in one sick of a mess… Maybe it’s bes-)”

Just then Jiraiya hears Naruto yelling.

“Her ero sennin!! Quit ignoring me will ya!?,”

Demanded Naruto.

“Oh will you pipe down already! You made me lose my train of thoughts!!,” “Jiraiya yelled back.”

“Hey! It’s not my fault we’re going to arrive later then we planned! If it wasn’t for you peeking at the women in the bath house then we would be at the village by now!“

Replied Naruto.

“Oh really!? Well that didn’t seem to stop you from peeking in the first place either!! So why complain!?,

Asked Jiraiya.

Both Naruto and Jiraiya keep on going at it like this for a little while.


Ninja Scroll,1, Back from Training!

The village hidden in the leaves seems calm and peaceful, but under all of that the village is at a very busy state. A certain amount of shinobi have to stay in konoha to help secure it ever since Orochimaru’s invasion. The village seems to be getting back on it’s toes though, which is good news for the Godaime Hokage, Tsunade, since it means she will have a lot less paperwork and since training sessions for her student, Sakura Haruno have been completed she might actually have a small bit of spare time to relax and gamble while drinking some sake.

As of right now our Hokage is stamping papers at her office while her assistant Shizune as she holds her pig Tonton with one arm, hands Tsunade one sheet of paper at a time as she stamps them. To both their surprise a Konoha nin slams the door open and runs in the office.

“What is it!?” Our blond Hokage asked urgently.

“It’s…!!”

Sakura Haruno is shown standing in front of her mirror. She has the same wardrobe as Tsunade, except she does not have on a gambling coat like her. Her shirt is red and is of the same design patterns she normally wore about two and a half years ago, but without the sleeves. Her breast seem to have grown quite a bit like her masters, it’s like she is a direct copy of her. She walks over to a drawer by her mirror and takes out some white lipstick and slowly puts it on while she continues to look onto the mirror.

She looks down on her green painted toes and moves them around in which after she poses and puts her right arm on her waist, puts one look forward and winks for the mirror.

“There, all finished!” She cheerfully said to herself.

She walks outside to the balcony and sits on a chair and puts her bare soles on a stool in front of her. Suddenly the shinobi that was at the Hokage’s office arrives.

“Sakura Haruno! Godaime Sama wishes to speak to you!!”

“I’ll be on my way!”

At Tsunade’s office…

“That brat Naruto is back.”

Tsunade said bluntly.

Sakura seems shocked but happy, she begins to shake a little. She clenches her fists and smiles with tears dropping from her eyes. Tsunade smiles.

“Go, go see him Sakura."

Tsunade said.

Sakura puts her head down in respect.

“Thank you Tsunade Sama!”

Sakura runs from Tsunade’s office while tears run from her face.

“(Naruto, I’m, I was so worried! I-)”

She brushes away some of the tears and begins jumping from building to building until she is close to one of Konoha’s main gates and sees Naruto.

“Naruto!”

Sakura happily cried.

To Naruto’s surprise he notices Sakura running over to him. He smiles.

“(It’s just like her to cry at a moment like this..)" Thought Naruto

Sakura reaches Naruto and hugs him tightly. She begins to let out all her tears.

“Naruto, sniff, sniff you idiot! You didn’t have to go through this much trouble and risk getting attacked by Akatsuki just so you didn't break your promise about Sasuke Kun! Tsunade Sama told me all about Akat-”

Naruto interrupts her.

“Sakura, I made a promise… in order to keep that promise I’ll do anything! Even if it means risking my life!”

He replied.

Jiraiya begins to smile at Naruto.

“(Kid, you really do have a way with words. Ha, ha, look at me. I said I wouldn’t train you if you keep going after that Sasuke kid and now look at me. Back from training…)”

N-naruto…”

A convinced Sakura replied.

Back at Tsunade’s office.

Tsunade is revealing the news to Kakashi, who is both Naruto and Sakura‘s sensei.

Kakashi closes his make out paradise book and puts it away in his Shinobi tool bag.

“Well, well well, I come back from a mission and it seems Naruto has returned already.
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Well, what can I say. This was written over a year but I have decided this will be the new path this story of mine will take. I wont get too into why, but it's better in my opinion. Since this chapter was written like a year ago this isn't up to my current writing level. I did however fix a lot of stuff, added as much detail as I felt I could so yeah. Enjoy!
 
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Great work ^^

I suggest keeping dialogue to a minimum though, a good story consists of about 20-30% of dialogue and the rest is describing. :p

Not everyone has the same mind as you and in order to write a good story you must describe the area, their emotions, their thoughts; etc, etc. It help gives more depth and a more realistic feel to your characters.
 
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Glad you liked it! BTW this isn't how my current writing style is. It's more like this...



Please tell me what you think of that one too. (On that thread though...) if you can.
 
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