[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[Sasuke Sarutobi]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Suiton: Sakashima Bakufu Waza) – Water Release: Reverse Waterfall Technique
Rank: B-A
Type: Supplementary/Defense/Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 25-30
Damage Points: 40-60
Description: The user concentrates a large amount of water chakra into their hands (or feet) as they perform two handseals (Tiger -> Snake) and then proceeds to strike them onto the water source they are standing on, creating a large amount of water to burst vertically upwards towards the sky. This large burst of water is essentially a large stream/blast of water that travels in a straight line up vertically from the water source. Depending on the user, the amount of water in this blast of water may vary from a small-size lake worth of water up to a medium-size lake worth of water (the maximum volume -100m3) - all of which always takes the same amount of time to happen (a few seconds). Furthermore, the force behind this blast of water is sufficient enough to knock an opponent unconsious.
Note: Requires a water source.
Note: A-rank version usable three times per battle.
Note: If A-rank version is used, must wait at least 1 turn to use again.
Note: Can only be taught/used by Sasuke Sarutobi.

±± Approved ±±

(Suiton: Suijin Seidou) – Water Release: Suijin's Sanctuary
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (+15 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will concentrate a large amount of water chakra as they performs two quick handseals which they then proceed to release the chakra into the water source they are standing on. This jutsu is used to alert the user about the location and presence of any nearby chakra on the battlefield (must be on the water source though), it works by applying one of the most basic principles/techniques known to shinobi - "water surface walking" which requires one to constantly emit a stream of chakra from the soles of their feet in order to be able to walk on water. Because of this, any being that is walking on the water's surface can be detected through this technique (due to the hige amount of chakra used for this jutsu), alerting the user of the presence of other people/beings walking on the water. This jutsu can also detect the presence of chakra hidden within the water (i.e. ninjas swimming in the water) purely due to the fact that ninjas are large "containers/vessels" of chakra.
Note: Requires a water source.
Note: The opponent must be touching the water.
Note: No S-rank water jutsus in the same turn (turn of activation).
Note: Can only be taught/used by Sasuke Sarutobi.

±± Declined ±± similar sensing techniques exist.

(Hetto-neko Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Beta) – Civet Summoning Technique: Beta
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Beta is a relatively young, caramel Civet about the same size as Gamakichi who exhibits bright yellow markings around his eyes and mouth. He is a very fast and agile Civet characteristic of his natural affinity for lightning (Beta is capable of using lightning jutsus up to the user's rank). He wields a wide range of weapons such as chokutōs, katanas and sickles which he grasps and swirls around in his paws, mouth and tail infusing them with his lightning chakra. Despite his affinity for lightning, he prefers to use taijutsu and weapons play while in combat and also has good hearing and a keen sense of smell allowing him to track targets much more effectively even when he is unable to see the target.
Note: Can only be summoned twice.
Note: Remains on the field for only four turns.
Note: Must wait two turns to summon again.
Note: Must have signed the Civet Contract.
Note: Can only be taught/used by Sasuke Sarutobi.

±± Declined ±± when submitting a summon provide link to contract signing.

 

[Erzo]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Tei Hitooshi-(Air push)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user jumps into the air and whilst in the air quickly uses his right foot to slam against the bottom of his left foot to suddenly increase his speed and land within touching distance from his opponent, leaving his opponent very little time to react. (If however the user is facing his opponent with the right side of his body (right shoulder basically) then he would have to slam his left foot against his right in order to speed up)
Note: Can only be uesd 2 times.
Note: Due to the speed only someone who is a taijutsu specialist/heightend reactional capabilities or has a 1t sharingan can see the person who jumped coming.

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±± Declined ±± How can you achieve this in naruto verse context? putting the soles of your feet together doesn't have that effect. Explain how you do this.
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Kyuusho Mahi Waza: (Secret Paralysis Technique)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user throws a normal kunai at his opponent however he secretly also throws small needle like projectiles in between his opponents leg joints preventing his opponent from moving that leg once it has been hit without his opponents knowledge, unless the projectile is noticed and removed that leg will remain paralyzed. Due to the thinness of the projectile it is not noticeable whilst it is getting throw and the opponent feels no pain when it pierces their body, however once it has hit the opponent and his leg is no longer able to move, should the opponent look down at their foot they will easily recognize that there is a needle and so can remove it in order to be able to move their leg again.
Note: Can only be used once.
Note: Must throw kunai in order to hide the presence of the small needle like projectiles.
Note: Due to the thinnes and sharpness of the projectile, it can easily peirce throw an opponents shoes, but because the needles are long, they'd be pocking out of the shoes still remaining easily noticeable.

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±± Declined ±± You need medical training to pinpoint such a vital spot and attack it for that purpose.

 

[Awesome Face]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Okina ningyo no jutsi)- greater puppet technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Cost: N/A
Description: The user creates strings that are used to control puppets. These strings are much faster than the original, seeing as how all the user has to do is extend their hand and the strings are already attached to the target .

±± Declined ±± Do not Resubmit

 

[Pervyy]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Soshi kishimu Kuchiyos) - Elemental summoning gourd
Rank: S
Type: Attack/defence
Range: Short – Mid
Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
Damage points: 80
Description: The user will peform 2 handseals slamming their hands down performing a summoning. The two handseals will depend on the element they choose. The user will summon a gourd that they have prepared before the battle. Each gourd was prepared with a barrier in it and will contain one of the 5 elements that will be infused with the users chakra. The element will act as an extension of the user. The user is able to control the element on their back with their chakra, much like Gaara can with his sand just not as fast. The way the elements are released in the gourd, is that the gourd is filled with fuuin seals which contain the desired element, like a scroll can contain fire. The use will release that seal releasing the element with each gourd.The elements are:

Katon: This gourd will have special flames sealed within it that were created by the user and are infused with the users chakra. The user can control these flames with hand movements or special handseals.

Suiton: This gourd will contain a portion of water infused with the users chakra allowing him to control it and bend it into shapes. The user can control the shape of the water and movements by moving their hands or using handseals.

Fuuton: This gourd will contain spiralling, violent winds that are visible to everyone and are infused with the users chakra. The user can control these winds for attack and defence with their hands or handseals.

Raiton: This gourd will contain pure lightning sealed within the gourds barrier infused with the users chakra that the user can release, bend and control, reshape, attack and defend with using their hand motions or handseals.

Doton: This gourd contains mud infused with the users chakra. This Mud can be controlled through hand motions or handseals or handmotions. Upon performing 1 handseal, the user can harden the mud to solid stone.

Each gourd has taken a long time to be created and only the user can control the contents due to the amount of chakra infused within the elements. If the use is using their hand motions to control the shape and motion of the elements, they are unable to use other jutsu. All the gourds have the same one ability, the user can perform the snake handseal and the element from within the gourd will surround them in an orb creating a protecting barrier.

Note: Only one gourd can be summoned by a person or clone at at a time and only one gourd can be present in the battlefield at a time.
Note: Each person or clone can only control the one gourd at a time.
Note: Once the element has been destroyed it can no long be used. An exampe would be if the fire was overpowered by water, it would be gone for good.
Note: The gourd only lasts on the field for 4 turns
Note: Each gourd can only be summoned once
Note: Can only use this jutsu 3 times per battle.
Note: Controlling the movement of the element counts as one of the users 3 jutsu per turn.
Note: The speed of the elements is the same as that of normal elemental jutsu of that nature.

±± Approved ±± Amazingly well done.

 

[House]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

resubmitting an approved custom jutsu:

(Hakke Eien no) - 8 Trigrams Eternal

Spoiler

Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This technique will enable the user to release a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points on the tips of toes or exerting from his palms (incase he is standing on his hands) enabling the user to move at fast speeds when he kicks/pushes off the ground or kicks/pushes onto a direction within mid-air in order to evade an incoming jutsu, or to move into hand-to-hand combat.
Note:
-This jutsu won't deal any damage.
-Can be taught by Dr. House

To be:

(Hakke Eien no) - 8 Trigrams Eternal

Spoiler

Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This technique will enable the user to release a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points on the tips of toes or exerting from his palms (incase he is standing on his hands) enabling the user to move at fast speeds when he kicks/pushes off the ground or kicks/pushes onto a direction within mid-air in order to evade an incoming jutsu, or to move into hand-to-hand combat. As the user is releasing a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points, the user is moving at a speed of Lee without weights.
Note:
-This jutsu won't deal any damage.
-Can be taught by Dr. House

I added this (forgot to add the speed of the jutsu):As the user is releasing a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points, the user is moving at a speed of Lee without weights.

±± Declined ±± Keep the old one. A normal Taijutsu Master that is a Gentle Fist Master of your rank already moves at that speed and i won't allow you to boost it up even more.


(Jūho Chikarar No Ken) – Gentle Step Taking Control
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Supplementary/Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80 (+Depends on the Jutsu's Damage Points being taken)
Description: As the hyuuga user is known for the disruption of the chakra stream, and hyuuga member may exert a line chakra, line like stream from their palm, the hyuuga member has learned to take control ti'll some extent of the opponents jutsu. The hyuuga user will first have to either use a chakra burst, or the chakra stream exerting from their palm, in order to take control of the jutsu. As the hyuuga's arm movement are close to the speed of 3rd gate, he'll be able to take over the jutsu within that timeframe. The user had to go through extreme training of Gentle Fist, streaming chakra, and this technique has to be taught.

To take control over Solid like Earth/Ice elemental:
As the Solid based jutsu is coming into the user's way, the user may channel a fine chakra steam from their palm, as the chakra stream will impale the jutsu and make cuts where the opponents jutsu is controlling the very element. Thus cutting off the enemy's chakra control from the jutsu, the hyuuga user may take control of the jutsu, and re-direct the jutsu onto any way they're want it. Since the enemie's chakra control was disrupted this is possible. As the chakra line had made cuts into the very element, it may be possible for the hyuuga member to re-figure the structure of the earth jutsu. the hyuuga member has to constantly emit the chakra line, because the very element stands together with their chakra.

To take control over Gas forms like Fire/Wind/Steam elemental:
As the fire/wind jutsu comes in their way, the hyuuga user will expel a serious amount of burst of chakras from their palm at high speeds, as these bursts reach the jutsu, it will disturb the momentum of the chakra, and the very chakra of in itself, and as the user is exerting chakra, he will disturb the chakra within the jutsu, and as the momentum goes the opposite way, the very element (meaning wind/fire) will follow the path of the bursts of the chakra.

To take control over liquid forms like Lava/Water elemental:
This is the most difficult of all, because the user has to perform a spin, which will re-direct the flow of the element. As The user starts spinning from left to right, (this barrier is not intended to protect up fully, but to take control of the enemie's jutsu) in order to create a spinning barrier, as the liquid had made a contact with the barrier, as the barrier spins, instead of having razor sharp dents on the barrier, it will have blades like dents like water turbine, and it will re-direct the water straight back to the enemy. As it makes contact, the barrier will channel chakra (disturb enemies chakra within the liquid) into the liquid (the very element) in order to re-direct it into a direction of the user's wish. If the liquid has taken a form and as it makes its impact, the jutsu will be re-directed as a wave. As the user begins to spin, the barrier will reach onto mid-range, since it is intended to re-direct a jutsu, and not completely deflect it, like the original barriers, which is for defending. As it is connecting, the barrier will absorb the chakra of the enemie's chakra and replace it with his own as the distruption of the enemie's chakra happening, thus regenerating the user's any minor injuries and chakra.

Notes:
~Can be used by Dr. House
~If used with S-Ranks, it can be used 4x
~If used with A-ranks it can be 5x
~If used with Forbidden, it can be used 2x but the user will take 15% damage from the jutsu, and another -30 from the very basic of taking the jutsu over.
~May be used by Sannin, must master Jyuuken
~Doujutsu may see it
~While this used against S-ranked, there can be only 2 jutsus in that turn, if used against forbidden, there can be only this technique within that turn.
~After re-directing Forbidden, the user won't be able to move from the current position, and perform Jyuuken for the next 2 turns.

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. No taking controll of your enemies jutsu. Didn't i decline this already a while back?


(Jyuuken mōdo) – Jyuuken Mode
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra cost: 40 (-10 Each Turn)
Damage points: 80 (+15 points to every Jyuuken Style)
Description: As we know, Hyuuga users are famous for their very own unique techniques, the Gentle Fist. Gentle Fist as we know, had to do with exerting a serious amount of chakra, which will either way disturb or cause several damage to the user, or the user's techniques. While the Jyuuken Mode is on, similar to (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists where the user's arms are covered within chakra due to the constant emit of chakra over his arms, but in this technique, the user's whole body will be covered within that type of exertion of chakra. As this Jyuuken is active, all of the Jyuuken techniques' abilities will increase +15 in the view of damage points, due to the exertion of chakra being already implemented, and the chakra which has to be used in order to perform the technique itself. The 80 damage point is because it is made of similar technique like the (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists, the user's whole body will be covered within the exerted chakra, and will cause damage when the hyuuga user is implementing its attacks. As because the hyuuga's user most complemented abilities is to disturb the chakra flow, once the hyuuga master has made a physical contact with the enemy, the chakra being exerted from the hyuuga master's body will disturb the enemy's chakra flow. The enemy will become paralized for 1 turn upon touch. As because of this, the user's reach will increase 3 feet. Because of this extreme exertion of chakra, the user's heart rate will increase, and because of fast blood flow, the user's reaction will increase +1, their speed will match to 1st gate.
Notes:
~May be activated 1x, but lasts 5 turns.
~After 5 turns, the user will feel -50 damage because of the over exhaustion of themselves, and will be hardly able to move in the turn when the jutsu has been over and for another 2 turns.
~When this jutsu is active, only one jutsu may be performed during the turns.
~No clones can be active, only Kages may perform this, Masters of Jyuuken.
~Due to the excessive useage of Jyuuken, the user won't be able to perform any tai moves, nor any Jyuuken styles in the same turn when this mode was over and for another 2 turn.
~If the user de-activates this before the 5 turns had been over, the user will feel -30 damage and for the same turn and next turn will only be able to use 2 jutsus, barely be able to move for the same and next turn, won't be able to use any jyuuken for the same turn.
~In order to perform this, the user has to first activate (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists and (Juho Tsuin Raino no Ashi) Gentle Step Twin Rhino Feet in the same turn (They're basically an exertion of chakra from arms and leg, therefore the user shouldn't have a problem using these two at the same turn), and the next turn he may activate this Mode.
~While this mode is active, jutsus which require handseals or something that may be exerted from the body like Nagashi won't be able to use.
~Can be taught only by Dr. House


±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Its grossely overpowered and it doesn't respect the concept of Gentle Fist. I+ve explain this before.


Also you should have quoted your submission of the other techniques.

 

[ZK]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Gijutsu: Yoroi | Technology: Armor
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Supplementary/Defensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 20 (+20 Every turn)
Damage points: N/A
Description: While the Land of Iron developed and perfected several anti-Ninjutsu devices and generally flourished technologically, the Hidden Villages continued to use terribly outdated technology, focusing their funds and time on developing their abilities with chakra control and Elemental Ninjutsu. While the vast majority of the Shinobi Nations were content with this arrangement, a small group if Ninja, mainly Yukigakure and a few collaborating corporations, sought to better the general effectiveness of their soldiers through the usage of technology. After many years of research, experiments and adjustments, the T-51b Power Armor was finally developed.
The initial form of the T-51b is dozens of metallic rings placed almost everywhere on the users body, thought not hindering his movements in any way as the rings are quite thin and small. The rings are all very light-weight and made from a special metal that is created and compressed by masters of the Earth element, and constantly fed with chakra for many years. This special metal reacts very uniquely to chakra, inflating rapidly outwards while hardening when exposed to it. As long as the wearer is actually channeling chakra through his body with the intention of upholding this armor, the rings will remain inflated and hardened. The durability of the metal is about as strong as titanium diboride and it is capable of absorbing great amounts of kinetic impact. Furthermore, the metal is very resistant to temperature changes, as the suit basically uses the wearers’ body heat and small, one-way vents to regulate the temperature. While extremely expensive and complex, the creators of the T-51b succeeded in controlling the metals’ inflation-process, allowing them to shape an armor of the metal when it reacts to chakra. Of course, the metal alone serves nothing more than a defensive purpose and its inflated form is extremely heavy, creating the need for a system that could aid the wearers’ movements. As such, the wearer will be equipped with more than just the rings in the initial form.
In addition to the rings, the wearer will be equipped with a small, hollow and circular device that is connected to one of the rings and placed on the wearers back. The small device is coated with the chakra-reactive metal on the inside, which inflates, like all the other rings, when the user channels chakra through his body. The difference between the metal rings and the metal coating is that, instead of inflating only outwards and hardening into armor, the coating inflates both inwards and outwards. The outwards inflation opens several perfectly circular holes in the device, but leaves the general structure intact. The inwards inflation crushes some thin containers that contain the wearers’ blood. While the weak containers seem like an obvious fault in the design, they are reinforced by metal on all sides except a small opening, allowing only the chakra-reactive metal to crush them unless the entire device is subjected to great pressure. The blood released from the crushed containers will immediately cover several summoning seals, and because the chakra-reactive metal acts as a conduit for chakra, the seals are all activated simultaneously. Since the inflation process happens simultaneously for all the chakra rings, and therefore also for the coating, the entire summoning and armoring process happens in perfect synchronization with each other.
The summoning seals will call forth a hydraulic frame, a pneumatic frame and a helmet. The perfect design will ensure that the whole inflation and summoning process will happen so that all summoned components settles perfectly with the armor itself, allowing the combined result to function perfectly immediately upon activation. The pressurized gas and liquid that is used to power the pneumatic and hydraulic frame respectively, is placed in the frames themselves. While such a placement would normally expose the machinery to damage, the perfect design ensures that the armor itself protectively covers all vulnerable parts. Both frames are also extremely resistant to electricity-based attacks, ensuring that such disturbances does not compromise the system or the wearer.
The hydraulic frame is used, mainly, to support the users’ movements, enabling him to actually move around in the suit. The massive power of the hydraulic system ensures a speed almost similar to the users’ original speed, but his maneuverability is worsened severely. The hydraulic liquid and the pressure itself are controlled by the user through chakra-receptive points in the armor, allowing the user to distribute the pressure and thereby adjust his speed as he see fit. One great advantage of the hydraulic system is its ability to transfer vast amount of power through a small frame, this allows the user to jump much higher than he normally would and travel with insane speed in a linear motion, though his already limited maneuverability is almost voided if he does that.
The pneumatic frame is used mainly to support finer motions and aid the user on points the crude hydraulic frame does not cover. The pneumatic frame functions as an invaluable assistance in regards to the users balance. It is almost impossible to fall or lose your balance while wearing the T-51b. The arms, legs, elbows and knees of the frame slightly differs from the rest of the frame, in the sense that the pneumatic system aids the users movements much easier and much more refined when it comes to these points. The extra assistance allows the wearer to move his arms and legs freely, without losing speed or flexibility. Furthermore, the pneumatic system aids the wearers’ offensive movements, offering a boost of power by using the pressurized gas as propulsion. The pneumatic frame is, like the hydraulic frame, controlled through chakra-receptive points in the armor.
The helmet that is summoned alongside the two frames are made from the same chakra-reactive metal as the rest of the armor, only that it is made specially to maintain its form. Since the helmet is still chakra-conductive, the chakra flow through the suit of armor is not disturbed anywhere if the entire set is equipped. The helmet consists of a dual layered air-purifying respirator, a wireless radio and tinted eyeslit.
The entire machinery functions on a mixture of chakra, gas and hydraulic fluid. Should the user already be wearing a suit of armor, the rings will simply destroy it from the inside out as they inflate. Finally, the complete chakra-circuit ensures that the wearer has a certain feel as to what happens on the armor, meaning that if he’s hit in the back, even if the damage is minimal and he wouldn’t notice under normal circumstances, the disruption in the chakra-circuit warns him of the attack immediately after it has happened.
-Reduces the users speed by one rank.
-Gives a +5 Damage bonus to all Kenjutsu and Taijutsu attacks.
-The wearer cannot use A-ranked and above Ninjutsu or Genjutsu while the armor is activated.
-Can be used by both Samurai and Shinobi alike.
-The frames lasts for 6 turns, after which the wearer will be unable to use any of the abilities linked to the frames.
-The user can free himself from the suit by using one of the three techniques allowed per turn to activate the armors' emergency breakdown function.
-Created by Zero Kelvin


±± Declined ±± I understand liking to put some background and story in a jutsu but this is just too much Zero. The description of a weapon should contain its look, size and abilities. Not its story. Unless that story is like 5 or 6 lines. not 50. Its too dense and you've hidden key aspects of it inside the giant description. You can add this background to your bios. Resubmitt in a more readable version. And yes, i read it all. The concept needs a bit or working otherwise it will escape the concept of Narutoverse.

 

[Scorps]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

±± Sorry for the delay on this weeks marker. ^^

Submissions starting on 02/06/2012 and ending on 02/12/2012. ±± ​

 

[XZA]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Jiton: Sakin Buririanto Panku)- Magnetic Release: Gold Dust Brilliant Punk
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Desription: The User gathers gold dust summoned from gold dust wave and encases parts of their body with it. they then take two steps forward at an enemy at high speed and slams the person with his gold encased arm dealing damage and launching the target a fair distance back.
Note: can only be used by fourth kazekage bios
Note:can only be used three times
Note: the gold dust can only cover parts of the body not all

Spoiler

±± Approved ±± However, next time submit the technique with the correct name. It helps members identify the technique.


(mizu hashira)- water pillar
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short-long
Chakra cost:30
Damage Points: none
Description: The user wraps the lower half of their body in and manipulates the water to suspend and manoeuvres themselves in mid-air at high speeds. The water maintains contact with the water source, thus creating a pillar-like formation.
Note: requires a water source and must be standing on the water source
Note: can only be used three times per match

±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists.

Suna Dai teitaku no Jutsu | Sand Mansion Creation Technique
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra cost:30
Damage Points: none
Description: A technique created by the first kazekage and renewed and refined by gaara. It Is said to be the jutsu that create the hidden sand. The User will preform the following hand-seals Snake → Rat → Ox → Ram → Snake and then sends their chakra into the ground, Then Breaks down the earth minerals in the ground to make more sand. The User Gathers the best possible mineral-rich sand and then constructs the sand into building, much like the ones in sunagakure.
Note1: The User Can Only create One House per turn
Note2: The User Must Wait one turn before being used again
Note3: Can only create up to three houses
Note4: The user can manipulate the sand to create sofas and such on the inside, and make things light or heavy to make comfy beds or steel bookcases
Note5: Due to richness and hardness of the sand, only A-rank lightning can pierce
Note6: The User can not use A-rank or above sand the next turn
Note7: May Only be used by a gaara or a first kazekage bio
Note8: may only be taught by the fifth kazekage

-On hold. Edit the red parts to make them less OP-

(Suna Dai teitaku no Jutsu)- Sand Mansion Creation Technique
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra cost:30
Damage Points: none
Description: An old technique which was renewed and refined by gaara. The User will preform the following hand-seals Snake → Rat → Ox → Ram → Snake slams their hands on the ground and then sends their chakra into the ground, Then Breaks down the earth minerals in the ground to make more sand. The User Gathers a large amount of chakra and then constructs the sand into building, much like the ones in sunagakure.
Note: can only be used once per turn and three times a match
Note: can not use A-rank or above sand the next turn
Note: can only be used by a Gaara bio

±± Pending ±± VM me explaining the bold. Are you referring to a NB username or to the cannon first kazekage, founder of the manga's hidden sand? because, if you are, that part needs to go. We don't know who else other than Gaara could use sand release.

Edit: ±± Approved ±±


*took out the creation of suna part and rich sand part. also took out/shortened the restrictions.

 

[Mathias]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Ame Sutairu: Ame Kumo Kadou) - Rain Style: Rain Cloud Vortex
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description After performing the Boar → Dog → Ram, the user will form rain clouds in the sky. Using the chakra that is spread throughout the clouds, the user will then bring down the rain clouds in the form of a vortex that surrounds the edges of the entire battlefield, leaving both the user and opponent inside of the vortex. Then the rain that comes from the clouds falls sideways, down, up, and near every direction. This technique is very similar to Vortex Storm Technique to bring down the rain clouds. The falling raindrops are closely linked to the users senses allowing him to sense any chakra source they come in contact with.

Note: Can only be used once per battle
Note: Must know Rain
Note: No Rain techniques before using this technique
Note: The clouds stay around the battlefield until they are blown away.
Note: No Rain techniques for the rest of the battle after the Rain clouds are blown away
Note: Can only be used by Mathias

Edit: ±± Declined ±± I want you to add a note restricting the clouds from this technique so that they can't be used to perform Kirin or other techniques which require stormy weather or clouds. Other than that its fine

Feel free to edit anything ^_^

Resubmitting:

(Ame Sutairu: Ame Kumo Kadou) - Rain Style: Rain Cloud Vortex
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description After performing the Boar → Dog → Ram, the user will form rain clouds in the sky. Using the chakra that is spread throughout the clouds, the user will then bring down the rain clouds in the form of a vortex that surrounds the edges of the entire battlefield, leaving both the user and opponent inside of the vortex. Then the rain that comes from the clouds falls sideways, down, up, and near every direction. This technique is very similar to Vortex Storm Technique to bring down the rain clouds. The falling raindrops are closely linked to the users senses allowing him to sense any chakra source they come in contact with.

Note: Can only be used once per battle
Note: Must know Rain
Note: No Rain techniques before using this technique
Note: The clouds stay around the battlefield until they are blown away.
Note: No Rain techniques for the rest of the battle after the Rain clouds are blown away
Note: These rain clouds can't be used to perform Kirin or any other techniques which require stormy weather or clouds.
Note: These clouds can only be used for Rain Release techniques. (you can delete this note if you'd like, I'm just making sure 100%)
Note: Can only be used by Mathias

±± Approved ±±

(Doton: Going Merry Kibarashi) - Earth Style: Going Merry Recreation
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 every time a cannon ball is shot)
Damage Points: 80
Description: After performing a series of five hand seals, the user will concentrate all of his/her doton chakra and slam their hands onto the ground. By doing so the Straw Hat Pirates’ full size ship the “Going Merry” will be created made completely of earth from the ground itself. As long as the user is aboard the ship his/her earth style techniques will require three less hand seals to perform. The ship itself is able to float in water sources(The ship will not turn into mud unless it is on that water source for longer than two turns) and mud itself (for ex. Swamp of the underworld). Depending on the elemental advantages the ship can block B-Rank and below techniques but the part that was hit will crumble afterward. If any attacks are coming from above, the user can walk inside the “meeting room” of the ship for cover. The unique ability of the ship is that it can shoot A-Ranked cannon balls made of earth from the ships main cannon in the front. The ship has a stock of five cannon balls. Every cannon ball has multiple explosive tags attached to them that can be detonated with the use of a single hand seal.

Can only be used once per battle.
No earth style techniques in the previous turn.
No earth style techniques in the same turn the ship is being created. (Shooting the cannon ball does not count)
If the ship is not destroyed it will stay in play for 3 turns.
Because of the massive use of doton chakra, the user will not be able to form A-Rank or above earth techniques for the next turn or S-Rank for two.
Shooting the cannon balls counts as one of the three jutsu’s per turn.
The shot cannon balls reach up to mid range.
Can only be used by Luffy..

Feel free to add any restrictions or edit anything, thanks ^_^

~Approved: I changed what's in bold and took away the part about fragment going to long range.~

Updating old technique:

(Doton: Going Merry Kibarashi) - Earth Style: Going Merry Recreation
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 every time a cannon ball is shot)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After performing Monkey → Horse → Dog → Ox → Boar the user will concentrate all of his/her doton chakra and clap their hands together. By doing so the Straw Hat Pirates’ full size ship the “Going Merry” will be created made completely of earth from the ground itself. As long as the user is aboard the ship his/her earth style techniques will require three less hand seals to perform. The ship itself is able to float in water sources(The ship will not turn into mud unless it is on that water source for longer than two turns) and mud itself (for ex. Swamp of the underworld). Depending on the elemental advantages the ship can block B-Rank and below techniques but the part that was hit will crumble afterward. If any attacks are coming from above, the user can walk inside the “meeting room” of the ship for cover. The unique ability of the ship is that it can shoot A-Ranked cannon balls made of earth from the ships main cannon in the front. The ship has a stock of five cannon balls. Every cannon ball has multiple explosive tags attached to them that can be detonated with the use of a single hand seal. The users chakra is infused with the ship itself, so only S ranked or above enemy earth techniques will be able to overpower the ships earth chakra and use it as an earth source.

Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: No earth style techniques in the previous turn.
Note: No earth style techniques in the same turn the ship is being created. (Shooting the cannon ball does not count)
Note: If the ship is not destroyed it will stay in play for 3 turns.
Note: Because of the massive use of doton chakra, the user will not be able to form A-Rank or above earth techniques for the next turn or S-Rank for two.
Note: The first cannon ball that the user shoots immediately after the creation of the ship (and shot in the same turn he is created) will not count towards the three jutsu per turn. (This would be so I don't waste two precious moves when wanting to create my ship to attack)
Note: Any other cannon ball shot afterwards counts as one of the three jutsu’s per turn.
Note: The shot cannon balls reach up to long range.
Note: Can only be used by Mathias

±± Approved ±±

New submission:

(Doton: Umou Sono Ga-goiru) - Earth Style: Descent of the Gargoyles
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: After performing the Ram → Dragon → Dog hand seals the user will clap his hands. Thereafter a portal will open up in the sky above the user following the same principles of Earth Lid & Mud Fall. Out of the portal there will be three human sized Gargoyles that will glide down towards the desired target using their lightweight earthen wings to keep them airborne. Due to the their weight and the gravity pulling them down, their velocity is equal to that of a thrown projectile. The Gargoyles are flying down in a V formation with an explosive tag already pre-set on each of their backs. Upon using a simple hand seal to active the desired tag the Gargoyles can blow up. If detonated, the explosion will cause the spikes surrounding the Gargoyles' abdominal and chest area to be released outwards towards the target they were already heading to.(There are six spikes all together with each being three feet long and two feet wide.) Each individual Gargoyles is evenly spaced apart so that the detonation of one of their tags doesn't set a chain explosion. The Gargoyles' flight path can be determined once the portal is open. However, once the path is chosen it can't be changed due to the fact that the Gargoyles are gliding down and not flapping their earthen wings to fly.

Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: No earth techniques above A-Rank for one turn after the use of this technique
Note: Must be taught by Mathias

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±± Approved ±± Well restricted and neatly written.

 

[Serpent]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kinjutsu Katon: Hinote Doki) Forbidden Fire Art: Infernal Wrath
Type: Attack
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage points: 90 (-30 to user)
Description: The user makes one hand seal holding it as he charges his Katon Chakra, A symbolic ring of flame will form around a mid range area with the user in the center. The user will then rise his hands in the air releasing the Chakra in an all out blaze. anyone within the ring will be burned as columns of Flame rise from underneath them. Because of the intense heat the user will be chard causing damage upon himself. Because of the output of chakra, the user will feel drained, leaving them in a dizzy state.
Notes:
-Can only be used once per battle.
-Must have Mastered Fire Element.
-No S-ranked or above Fire Next 2 turns.
-Must Charge for 10 seconds.
-User takes 30 damage.
-Dizziness last 2 turns
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

±± Declined ±± Almost there. If you are burned from the fire/heat of the technique you should also experience some kind of penalty in terms of speed and movement.

(Kinjutsu Katon: Hinote Doki) Forbidden Fire Art: Infernal Wrath
Type: Attack
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage points: 90 (-30 to user)
Description: The user makes one hand seal holding it as he charges his Katon Chakra, A symbolic ring of flame will form around a mid range area with the user in the center. The user will then rise his hands in the air releasing the Chakra in an all out blaze. anyone within the ring will be burned as columns of Flame rise from underneath them. Because of the intense heat the user will be chard causing damage upon himself. Because of the output of chakra, the user will feel drained, leaving them in a dizzy state and because of the pain of the burns, the user will have limited movement.
Notes:
-Can only be used once per battle.
-Must have Mastered Fire Element.
-No S-ranked or above Fire Next 2 turns.
-User moves at half speed for 2 turns.
-Must Charge for 10 seconds.
-User takes 30 damage.
-Dizziness last 2 turns
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

wasn't that the point of the dizziness was to limit my movement? lol

±± Approved ±± Well, i've seen people walking and jumping around at immense speeds with stabbed legs from releasing from genjutsu so we need clear expressions regarding those "little" questions.

(Ranton: Bakuha Joukai) Storm Release: Heavenly Blast
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user will place both hands out in front of them, creating a focused amount of Storm in a condensed sphere, they will then shoot the baseball sized sphere at the opponent. upon contact with the opponent or any surface, the ball will expand as a giant blast that covers a mid range area leaving a creator in it's wake. if the user is caught in the blast they will surfer the same damage as the opponent.
Note:
-Can only use twice per battle.
-No S-ranked next turn.
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

±± Declined ±± blast is too big as its ignited by simple impact and covered everything mid range around

(Ranton: Bakuha Joukai) Storm Release: Heavenly Blast
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user will place both hands out in front of them, creating a focused amount of Storm in a condensed sphere, they will then shoot the baseball sized sphere at the opponent. upon contact with the opponent or any surface, the ball will expand as a large blast that covers an area short range around the impact point leaving a small crater in it's wake. if the user is caught in the blast they will surfer the same damage as the opponent.
Note:
-Can only use twice per battle.
-No S-ranked next turn.
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

I feel as if 15ft is to small of an area... if it is able to be larger or you feel as if it should be smaller please edit making it a size that you see fit ^^

±± Approved ±± I don't like explosions and blasts to be defined by RL measurements as it confuses the RP. In my reasoning we have 3 distances in our RP: Short range, Mid Range and Long Range. Why complicate things? ^^

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(Suiton: Hebi Doki) Water Release: Serpents Wrath
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user will make 6 handseals while focusing their chakra into a water source. this will cause the water under the opponent to rapidly become thin by making the water molecules speed up. this makes the opponents fall into the water, even if they have chakra at their feet. Then Eels will form out of the water and will attack the opponent in a feeding frenzy.
Note:
-Requires a water source.
-Can only use twice per battle.
-Can only be taught by Serpent.


±± Declined ±± To make the water thinner you need to make its molecules become further apart (much like it happens when you heat water) so you'll be expanding the water. By doing so your opponent is bound to note something is wrong beneath his feet as the increase in volume would leave some indication. Also, its an S-Rank. You need one more additional restriction.

 

[Kurisutina]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Ame no Miryoku) - Attraction of Rain
Rank: C-Rank
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user does 2 hand seals and focuses their chakra to any point in where rain is falling and they begin to use the same principle as the Rain Capture Technique in which they will attract rain to that point. They are then able to form a small source of water where that point is. This can be combined with the Rain of Glue technique and cause that water to be sticky.
Restrictions:
~Only usable three times.
~Must be raining to use

±± Approved ±± put a range and added a note

(Zan'nin'na kōi no geijutsu: Hasen rikoiru no kyōka) - Ferocity Arts: Dashing Recoil Enhancement
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: N/A (40)
Description: The concept of this style is supported by the laws of momentum, though supported with chakra in order to mold it's molecular structure in such shape, that it will allow energy and momentum of collisions to be conserved (negleting loss of energy by sound and heat). The user will channel chakra through his sword, giving two results: A coat of chakra that will work as the "bounce" mechanism, and the other small increments between the molecules of the sword, making the sword a little bigger and the mass a little lighter (as it will have a larger volume). By combining both enhancements together, the user is able to produce much more efficient and dangerous slashes. The secret behind the technique is the recoil of the exchange of clashes between the user's sword and the enemy's. The sword, being lighter, will gain more velocity from each slash in order to balance out the momentum gain and lost, thus making each strike accelerate even faster. The more the enemy defends against a slash, the slashes will hold much more force and speed. The user will also channel chakra through the arm (s) in which he is using the sword in order to prevent the wasting of the fiber muscle produced by the intense speed of this strikes.
Restrictions:
~Usable by Samurai and Shinobi.
~Once this technique is activated, the technique is able to sustain itself unless the user stops administrating chakra into the sword or the user releases the chakra somehow (such as a wave for example).
~This technique is only an enhament, though is able to defend against other sword enhancements of similar rank and below. User cannot defend against ninjutsu with this technique.
~Though elastic collisions occur when hitting a hard surface such an opponent's sword, the infused chakra will be able to cut through a person's flesh.
~Can only be taught by Gin-San and Xanthe.
Declined, i like the concept however it will require a turn limitation of activation otherwise the technique everytime it clashes will just continuously get faster until at one point it will become stupid

(Zan'nin'na kōi no geijutsu: Hasen rikoiru no kyōka) - Ferocity Arts: Dashing Recoil Enhancement
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: N/A (40)
Description: The concept of this style is supported by the laws of momentum, though supported with chakra in order to mold it's molecular structure in such shape, that it will allow energy and momentum of collisions to be conserved (negleting loss of energy by sound and heat). The user will channel chakra through his sword, giving two results: A coat of chakra that will work as the "bounce" mechanism, and the other small increments between the molecules of the sword, making the sword a little bigger and the mass a little lighter (as it will have a larger volume). By combining both enhancements together, the user is able to produce much more efficient and dangerous slashes. The secret behind the technique is the recoil of the exchange of clashes between the user's sword and the enemy's. The sword, being lighter, will gain more velocity from each slash in order to balance out the momentum gain and lost, thus making each strike accelerate even faster. The more the enemy defends against a slash, the slashes will hold much more force and speed. The user will also channel chakra through the arm (s) in which he is using the sword in order to prevent the wasting of the fiber muscle produced by the intense speed of this strikes.
Restrictions:
~Usable by Samurai and Shinobi.
~Once this technique is activated, the technique is able to sustain itself unless the user stops administrating chakra into the sword or the user releases the chakra somehow (such as a wave for example).
~This technique is only an enhament, though is able to defend against other sword enhancements of similar rank and below. User cannot defend against ninjutsu with this technique.
~Though elastic collisions occur when hitting a hard surface such an opponent's sword, the infused chakra will be able to cut through a person's flesh.
~Only lasts 3 turns after activating.
~Can only be taught by Gin-San and Xanthe.

±± Approved ±±

(Zerosen: 10 Inochi) - Speed Drawing: 10 Lives
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short (Mid)
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This technique is an advanced variation of the Iaido technique and Samurai Sabre Technique. Through combining both concepts, the user is able to apply a chakra coat to the inside of their scabbard (used to reduce friction and increase the speed of the blade), chakra around the blade (released in the form of a crescent wave of chakra from the blade as the user draws it), chakra in the wrist, forearms, biceps, triceps, and shoulder of the user's dominant hand in order to increase their speed of draw and cause their muscles to be relaxed for maximum speed, and chakra around the tsuba, or guard of the sword, and scabbard's top so that when it makes contact with the scabbard, it bounces off and uses that momentum to strike again. When using the chakra around the guard and the scabbard's top, it will cause a near fully elastic collision that will transfer the majority of momentum in the opposite direction so that it can be used again. This process can be repeated 10 times in a consecutive barrage. While drawing the sword incredibly quickly, the user will release a heavy crescent blade of chakra, as sharp as the Samurai Sabre Technique (Not as strong). The speed of the strikes are incredible as they use the Iai method and an elastic bounce to speed them up. Their draw speed is much faster then a ninja's hand seals, Iaido proved this, and the speed of the released blades of chakra are even greater as they combine the speed of the draw and their natural speed.
~Usable 3 times.
~Only usable by Samurai.

±± Leaving this one for Izanami ±±
Declined, though the enhanced is good , the initial quick drawing combined with samurai sabre style chakra is an existing technique

 

[Professor Sarutobi]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

I meant the user standing still like making a false surrounding.

(Suiton: Kyousei Mizu Katai no Jutsu) - Water Release: Great Water Leg Technique
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: (+10 to physical attacks done with legs) Description: By putting the Hydration Technique into practical use, the muscles in the user's legs are temporarily enlarged and strengthened. Moisture is gathered from the whole body and compressed into the both legs. However, because it is essential to properly control the moisture balance inside the body, this technique's degree of difficulty is very high. This jutsu gives the user enhanced speed the user is also then capable of crushing both rock walls (c rank and below) and making large dents in steel doors with a single kick.
Note: Must use Hydration Technique before hand and be a member of the Hozuki Clan.
Can only be used 3 times per battle
Lasts 3 turns

±± Declined ±± Still not enough resctrictions. You can only use it 3 times and for 3 turns...and what more? Its still not rearly as restricted as it needs to be.


(Ninpo: Rijekuto ) Ninja Art: Reject
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User sends a massive amount of chakra to his palm and places it on a target and forces the chakra out in a rapid and powerful focused blast that causes damage to both user and target with full body backlashs making the technique a double-edged sword. If used more then twice per battle it will kill the user on the third use
-Three times per battle
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi
-First use causes small wounds and heavy breathing in user, 2nd use will crack bones and cause loss of balance, 3rd use will result in death.

±± Declined ±± This is a rip off of the hyugas blunt chakra blasts.

Summoning Technique: Garp
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: After doing the necessary hand seals and wiping blood on their hand the user can summon Garp a giant elder hyena as tall as gamabunta with grey and black fur who has unnaturally strong willpower and amazing strength and durability able to smash through anything A rank and below without slowing down. Garp also has an incredibly thick hyde making him immune to all but S rank lightning.
-Once per battle
-Lasts for 4 turns
-Can only be used by those who have signed the Hyena contract.

±± Declined ±± Nothing but s-Rank lightning? size of gamabunta? Can overcome anything A-Rank without slowing down? Need i say more? OPed. Tone it down. Way down. Besides, this is more like a Boss summon.

Feel free to adjust the turns/uses

Summoning Technique: Garp
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40 Damage points: N/A
Description: After doing the necessary hand seals and wiping blood on their hand the user can summon Garp a giant elder hyena halfas tall as gamabunta with grey and black fur who has unnaturally strong willpower and amazing strength and durability able to smash through anything earth based B rank and below without slowing down. Garp also has an incredibly thick hyde making him resistant to Lightning B-Rank and below
-Once per battle
-Lasts for 4 turns
-Can only be used by those who have signed the Hyena contract.

±± Approved ±± Had to edit a few things. This is a summon. Don't push its resistances and abilities.

(Suiton: Kyousei Mizu Kataino Jutsu)- Water Release: Great Water Leg Technique
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: (+10 to physical attacks done with legs)
Description: By putting the Hydration Technique into practical use, the muscles in the user's legs are temporarily enlarged and strengthened. Moisture is gathered from the whole body and compressed into the both legs. However, because it is essential to properly control the moisture balance inside the body, this technique's degree of difficulty is very high.This jutsu gives the user slightly enhanced speed the user is also then capable of crushing both rock walls (c rank and below) and making large dents in steel doors with a single kick.
Note: Must use Hydration Technique before hand and be a member of the Hozuki Clan.
Can only be used 3 times per battle
Lasts 3 turns.
While in use the user can't use elements other than Water.
While in use the user's arms are weaker then normal, preventing Arm based taijutsu.


±± Approved ±±

(Suiton: Kyousei Suiton Bodi no Jutsu)- Water Release: Great Water Body Technique
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost:80
Damage points: N/A (+20 to physical attacks)
Description: By putting the Hydration Technique into practical use, the muscles in the user's entire body are temporarily enlarged to the same size as A and strengthened. Moisture is gathered from an outside water source (small lake at least) and focused into the muscles. However, because it is essential to properly control the moisture balance inside the body, this technique's degree of difficulty is extremly high even more so because of enhancing the entire body. This jutsu gives the user superhuman strength and speed,capable of smashing through Earth jutsu of B rank and below with their fists and C rank and below with their legs, dent earth based elements and obtain enhanced speed.
However due to the body and chakra strain and intense control of Water while fighting the user is left exhausted after this technique.
Note: Must use Hydration Technique before hand and have a Hozuki bio.
-Once per battle, 4 turns.
-While in use can't use elements other then Water and can't use ninjutsu or genjutsu above C rank
-requires user to merge with a water source to use. (small lake or larger)
-after use the user can't use water for 3 turns or taijutsu for 4 turns and is slower then normal in those 4 turns
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

±± Declined ±± Its a water jutsu...why do you only refer that it will enable you to overcome earth? It escapes the basic nature of the technique. Also, the beneficts are too big. And modes (which is what this is) are currently very very unapprovable as they all exist in excess. Try toning this down, making it S-Rank and more approvable.

 

[BluePhenix]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Dropping the above weapons since it seems Hellraiser Techniques have no chance of getting approved due to them being over-powered I'll be replacing them with the below.

(Arkana Chain) – Arkana Chain
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40 for activating Arkana
Damage points: Vary with the techniques used (Separate submissions)
Description:

Arkana is a chain which became legendary when it was used ages ago to capture a bijuu. When it was being forged, it was enhanced with highly advanced fuuinjutsu in order to make it able to restrain anything, whether its constitution is tangible like living beings, or intangible like chakra. Its creator also tried to replicate the Yata Mirror’s ability by endowing the chain with all nature transformations, such that it changes its own characteristics and becomes impervious to the characteristics of the attacks it receives. This was successfully achieved and as such, the chain has an aura similar to that of the Yata Mirror which gives it a somewhat spectral form, and prevents it from suffering from elemental weaknesses as well as conducting electricity and/or heat from enemy attacks.

Many fought over the power of Arkana and it was therefore kept hidden for decades, until recently when it has been finally passed down for combat. When in dormant status, Arkana is wrapped around its wielder’s left arm without affecting his/her mobility. The wielder can use it to block attacks from edged weapons, whether or not these are enhanced by wind or lightning chakra.

In active mode, Arkana will adopt its “spectral” form and the wielder will be able to use his chakra to manipulate it around, making it crawl in mid-air in order to reach and pierce through opponents and concrete techniques with its edged end. The wielder can also imbue it with chakra to make it increase in length, similarly to Shun’s Andromeda Chain in Saint Seiya.

Arkana’s hyper mode, which enables it to restrain everything and achieve even more, is not accessible to the wielder unless the latter has mastered fuuinjutsu.

Note: The wielder of Arkana must be Kage rank or above.
Note: Activating Arkana counts as a move and must be done during battle.
Note: Arkana can only be wielded by BluePhenix and those he lends it to.

~Declined~ This is a big no. No Yata mirror's copy cat. Reaching up to long range as you extend your weapon is absolutely out of the question, and I don't even want to know what the hyper mode does lol.

Dropping Chaos Trinity for the below, which I've edited further to your review:

(Arkana Chain) – Arkana Chain
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40 for activating Arkana
Damage points: Vary with the techniques used (Separate submissions)
Description:

Arkana is an indestructible chain which became legendary when it was used ages ago to capture a bijuu. When it was being forged, it was enhanced with highly advanced fuuinjutsu in order to make it able to restrain anything, whether its constitution is tangible like living beings, or intangible like chakra.

Many fought over the power of Arkana and it was therefore kept hidden for decades, until recently when it has been finally passed down for combat. When in dormant status, Arkana is wrapped around its wielder’s left arm without affecting his/her mobility. The wielder can use it to block attacks from edged weapons, whether or not these are enhanced by wind or lightning chakra.

In active mode, Arkana will adopt a somewhat spectral form by glowing, and the wielder will be able to use his chakra to manipulate it around, making it crawl in mid-air in order to reach and pierce through opponents and concrete techniques with its edged end. The wielder can also imbue it with chakra to make it increase in length, similarly to Shun’s Andromeda Chain in Saint Seiya. Lastly, when in active mode, Arkana is constantly imbued with the wielder's chakra, which makes it impossible for the opponent to conduct electricity, heat or cold through it by using his lightning, fire or ice chakras.

Note: The wielder of Arkana must be Kage rank or above.
Note: Activating Arkana counts as a move and must be done during battle.
Note: Arkana can only be wielded by BluePhenix and those he lends it to.

±± Declined ±± Restrictions? What can stop this spectral indestructible and unconductable chain?

 

[Zoro..]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

New Weeks submission

(Suiton ude mori)-Water Arm Lance
Type:Offensive
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage:60
Description: The user focuses water chakra into theyre arm and when they punch forward they release it creating a water lance with the diameter of theyre arm which shoots forward forming into a complete lance up to mid-range. The lance is dense and solid enough to have a sharp piercing point.

±± Approved ±± edit it a bit.

(Katon toburai)-Fire Burial
Type:Offensive
Rank:S
Range:Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damgage:80
Description:The user slams his hands on the ground while exhaling a gas all over the battle field. This is a dense gas which settles on the ground and then when the user focuses he explodes it enflaming the battle field this also gives the user 2nd degree burns.

Fell free to edit

±± Declined ±± Restrictions? Its an S-Rank for crying out loud!

 

[Ryūjin]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Katon: Nenshō Yaiba) - Fire Release: Burning Blade
Type: Supplementary/Offense/Defense
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description: This is a variation of the Vacuum blade technique in which the user uses his Fire chakra instead of wind chakra. The user infuses his fire chakra into a Kunai, Sword...etc forming a fire aura around the blade, increasing it's sharpness and range, allowing the kunai to take the form of a Katana, even though the kunai is maintaining the same shape, fire extends out of the kunai forming the shape of a Katana, however the user cannot extend the kunai's range to be longer than the shape of a Katana of a regular scale, the fire aura gives the blade a burning ability, in which it burns any areas it cuts, and is able to cuts through normal Katana's/blades with ease.
-Can only be used 4 times.
-Can only be taught by ~Crow~

±± Declined ±± Fire isn't known in narutoverse to increase sharpness. Also this is a variation fo a cannon technique

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(Karasu Geigei: Karasu Kyuuzō No Jutsu) - Crow Arts: Crow Explosion Technique
Type: Supplementary/Offense
Rank: C
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: 30
Description: This is a ninjutsu technique in which the user infuses normal sized crows with a large amount of chakra, creating a large deal of pressure in the crow's body formed by the compression of chakra into the crow's body, causing the crows to explode each forming an explosion that has the same power and range of an explosive tag, this technique can only be used to infuse small sized/normal sized crows and causing them to explode, and cannot be used to cause large sized crows to explode, for this to work the targeted crows that are going to be infused with this chakra must be already present on the field, and must be summoned by the user of this technique.
-Can only be used 5 times per battle.
-Must have signed the Crows contract.
-Can only infuse a maximum of 4 crows at a time and can't be used more than once per crow or once per turn.

±± Approved ±± Added a restriction


(Karasu Geigei: Kuroi Umō Renda) - Crow Arts: Barrage Of Black Feathers
Type: Offense
Rank: B - S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 20 - 40
Damage Points: 40 - 80
Description: This technique is solely used by Crows with no exceptions, The Crow that's utilizing this technique opens his mouth while concentrating a great deal of pure chakra into his belly, forming the chakra into a large number of feathers which attain a solidified form through the concentration of chakra making it as hard as Iron, the Crow releases the feathers at the target through his beak, these feathers are pitch black colored attaining the same color as the feathers which are covering the crows body from the outside, the feathers range depending on the size of the Crow that is releasing the feathers, the bigger in size the bigger feathers released from it's beak up to the size of a normal sized Katana which is the biggest size the feathers could get and classified as an "S-rank", for this size of feathers the Crow that's releasing the feathers must be at least half the size of Gamabunta or bigger, any smaller sized crows than that release feathers that are the size of a kunai, if the Crows are normal sized the feathers they release are going to be the same size as a needle, having the size of a needle up to a Kunai is classified as a B-rank version of the technique.
- The S-rank version can only be used once per battle.
- If the S-rank is used the Crow cannot form an A-ranked or higher technique(s) the same and following turn.
- The B-rank version can only be used twice per battle and once per turn
- Must have signed the Crows contract

±± Pending ±± I edited and was going to approve this but i remembered the parrots arts Luiz has. I need to check those first.

EDIT: ±± Approved ±±

 

[-Tauburn-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Hyougo: Tokuhei)- Glacier Style: Sheilding Wall
Type: Deff
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The user will bring their sword to their side (about waist height) focus wind and water chakra into their blade, and swing their sword in an arc around the front half of their body, releasing wind and water chakra from their sword, creating a slanted wall of layered ice that, holds a 70 degree angle from the ground to the top of the wall, that stands at 7 ft, that can with stand fire of the same rank without any melting.
- Can be used 2 times per battle.
- Must have a Yuki Bio.
- Must have permission from -Tauburn- to use.

±± Declined ±± Well, the idea is cool. However, look at the bolded part. An S-Rank fire either concentrated or big enough could overcome this wall of ice. Ice is strong against Fire but strong fire can still overcome it. Reword it a bit. Also, add one resctrition more like "Can't perform any other Ice Techniques in the same turn" or something around those lines.

♆Hyouga: Hachi Ken no Ringu (Glacier Style: 8 Sword Ring)♆
Type: Defense/Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user channels Water and Wind Chakra into a bladed weapon while holding it in front of them with the blade facing straight upwards. A ring of 8 transparent ice swords will surround the user’s waist, constantly swirling over the user’s body, protecting the user from physical attacks. The user can also send from 2 to 4 swords at B Rank towards a target per turn. The ice swords, as they are transparent, are nearly invisible at a distance (Mid – Long), and difficult to dodge or see until they are very close (Short).
- Can only be used 5 times per battle.
- Must be a member who has learned Glaicer Style.

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±± Declined ±± Restrictions? Also, at what range can you create the blades from you? Nearly invisible at the distance...hum...

(Hyougo: Tokuhei)- Glacier Style: Sheilding Wall
Type: Defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The user will bring their sword to their side (about waist height) focus wind and water chakra into their blade, and swing their sword in an arc around the front half of their body, releasing wind and water chakra from their sword, creating a slanted wall of layered ice that, holds a 70 degree angle from the ground to the top of the wall, that stands at 7 ft, that can with stand most fire techniques of the same rank.
- No Ice techs in the same turn.
- Can be used 2 times per battle.
- Must have a Yuki Bio.
- Must have permission from -Tauburn- to use.

±± Approved ±± Edited a bit.


♆Hyouga: Hachi Ken no Ringu (Glacier Style: 8 Sword Ring)♆
Type: Defense/Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user channels Water and Wind Chakra into a bladed weapon while holding it in front of them with the blade facing straight upwards. A ring of 8 transparent ice swords will surround the user’s waist, constantly swirling over the user’s body, protecting the user from physical attacks. The user can also send from 2 to 4 swords at B Rank towards a target per turn. The ice swords, as they are transparent, are nearly invisible at a distance (Mid – Long) but still visible.
- The swords can only be made in short range.
- No Ice techs in the same turn.
- Can only be used 4 times per battle.
- Must be a member who has learned Glaicer Style.

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invisabilty has been shown possible in this jutsu,

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(Hyouton: Aisu Disuku no Jutsu) Ice Release: Ice Disk Technique
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Defense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will gather particles into the air and change them into a disk of ice. The ice disks are transparent, and they are therefore nearly invisible at a distance, and difficult to dodge or see until they are very close. They can also be used as highly durable shields or can be used to allow the user to hover in the air by using standing on it. Because of their transparency, the ice disks can be used as a large lens to focus rays of heat from the sun into a powerful beam to capable of melting or exploding a pinpointed area.

±± Approved ±± However, even if a cannon technique has a certain capability doesn't mean that we would approve a CJ with that same capability. Also edited a bit.


(Akumaitosen)- Devils Threading Wire
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The Devils Threads is a weapon that was made by an old semstress and her husband a black smith, they both worked on the Devils Threads for many years only to have it stolen from them, by -Tauburn-. The Devils Threads are wrapped around the users wrists and fingers under the users gloves or around the gloves, the thread are very flexable and cant be broken from use of any other weapons. The Devils Threads is a shape tranformation weapon, given enough chakra will harden into a solid sheild like shape, or a weapon of any kind, even into indiviual stradess that will bind the opponent. The threads are only able to channel Fire and Lightning chakra thoughout the thread, if any other element is used the threads wont even respond to the users chakra. The threads themselves are made out of a thin chakra absorbing metal, that will give shape to the users will, The threads also have silk braided into the chakra absorbing metal threads, giving the thread a greenish tint from the silk.

C -Rank - 20 chakra/30 damage: Will create shapes out of the threads to make a strong defence/offence againist attacks, while giving the threads shape for a extended amount of time.

B -Rank - 25 chakra/40 damage: The user will channel chakra into the threads and munipulate them into a weapons shape Meaning the weapon will have the same weight of a weapon and the same sharpness of a weapon.

A -Rank - 30 chakra/ N/A damage: The user will release chakra into the threads, then control the threads to wrap around the opponents body restraining him. (Arms, legs, neck, wrists, figers, and ankles.)

S -Rank - 40 chakra/80 damage: The user will channel lighting or fire chakra through out the Devils Threads and use them to attack the enemy. Lightning will hit the opponent and give them a numb feeling for 30 secs, while if the user channels fire chakra throughout the thread the opponent will receive critical burns if hit by the thread.

>- The weapons techniques count towards the jutsu per turn
>- Can only be used by -Tauburn-.
>- Can only be used once per turn.
>- The threads can only be used 3 times for the techniques above A-Rank.
>- The threads are always connected to the user and will not be usable if said connection is severed.

So if the above is approved ill be dropping my... Old CW and the jutsu i made for it.

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(Kaze Sai Katana)- Wind Cutting Blade
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: This sword is made of chakra absorbing metals. The sword makes any wind jutsus A-Rank and down have no handseals. every time a wind jutsu is used 10% of the chakra is saved within the sword so that when the user preforms a wind jutsu the wind chakra absorded by the sword can amplify any fire jutsu B-Rank and down by releasing a wind gust, which once its released will keep going untill the fire is extinguished. The sword can be used to defend againist C-Rank wind jutsus and down and by doing so the sword absorbs 25% of the chakra from that jutsu.
Note: Absorbing tech can be used 4 times per battle
Note: Wind jutsus A-Rank and down do not handseals
Note: Fire jutsus B-Rank and down, damage is increased by 5
Note: sword has to wait untill the first wind jutsu is used (by user) to be activated.

(Kaze Katto)- Wind Slicing
Type: Defence
Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: -
Description: the user focuses wind chakra into Kaze Sai Katana, as the user preforms one handseal the sword tranforms into a scythe made up of wind chakra, sending a blast of solid wind chakra at the opponents jutsu slicing it in half destroying the jutsu. Kaze Sai Katana stays transformed for one turn then shifts back to its original form.
Note: Only B-Rank Wind, Lightning, and Water can be sliced with this jutsu.
Note: Other elements of A-rank used againist this jutsu cancel the jutsu out.
Note: Tranformation lasts 1 turn then must wait 2 turns to activate again.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note: Must have Kaze Sai Katana atcivated.
Note: Can only be used againist Wind/Water jutsus.
Note: Doesn't count for Kaze Sai Katana's absorbing ablity. (wont absorb opponents jutsu's chakra)

±± Approved ±± Added some bits in the restrictions and abilities to make ti approvable

 

[Piccolosan]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Fūton: ketteiteki senkou) Wind Release: Final Flash
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User draws his hands back and gathers up all of his Fūton chakra. On his left hand he molds the Fūton chakra that is more solid and on his right hand he molds Fūton chakra that has properties of cutting. Then, he thrusts his palms forward and discharges a massive amounts of Fūton chakra into his palms creating a swirl of wind. The more solid wind is in the middle while the slicing wind is in the outer. The user releases the wind in a beam like effect. In the center is wind that will knock the opponent back, on the outside of the wind "beam" is the slicing wind. This wind will rotate and expand slowly like a tornado and thus make it impossible to just dodge the jutsu, even with a jutsu that will make the opponent move out the way etc. pillar from ground or fist hurricane.
-usable three times in a fight
-Can not use S-rank Wind jutsu in same turn and next
-Can only be taught by Piccolosan

±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists.

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(Nyoi-bō) - Mind Stick
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Chakra cost: 10 (when activated)
Damage Points: 60 (when using wind)
Description: This weapon is a staff, origins unknown but its unique material makes it able to expand and retract into any size. In fact, when Majuub found this pole it was a pillar supporting an ancient temple. Thus the material is also indestructible. This staff also combines with the user and can use wind chakra to coat around the staff to make it cut through, even though its a pole. Even though the pole can expand to long range, it is not instant so if the user tries opponents could easily dodge it.
-The user can use this without activating the wind coating, but it won't have the slicing effect of wind chakra.
-(+10)Up a rank, to Kenjutsu techniques when used with this staff.
-Can only be activated once per battle, but can be used diffidently.
-The coating can only be activated for 5 turns.
-Expanding/retracting the staff doesn't count as a turn.
-The staff can only block 3 times with S rank wind coating
-Can only block once per turn with staff
-Only Piccolosan can use this staff.

±± Declined ±± Similar cannon technique exists. Sarutobi Hiruzen's staff.

 

[Yagura]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Umm just asking when those jutsus from last week be looked upon)

(Suiton: Genni Kame Kaigara) - Water Style: Fortified Turtle Shell
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points:
Range: Close
Description: The user focuses water chakra on his back to counter A-rank and below Katon jutsus or something that is related to fire. The water chakra is formed like a turtle shell in his back, making it able to counter Katon.
Limit: Can only be used 5 times and only use once per round

(Suiton: Su-pa Mizudeppō no Jutsu) - Water Release: Super Water Gun Technique
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Using the Hydrification Technique, the user fires a 3 big amounts of water that looks like a clam at the intended enemy with a tremendous amount of force. The user points out his two fingers and forms it like a gun to shoot at the opponent. One bullet comes out late because the user only has two index fingers.
Note: Can only be used by Nidaime Mizukage and must be taught by Yagura

(Jouki Bo-i Ken Nidaime Yuukai) - Joki Boy and The Second Fusion
Type: Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Close
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage: n/a
Description: The Nidaime after liquefying himself merges with Joki Boy by going inside the Joki Boy's body. Now the Joki Boy has the ability to use Suiton Jutsus and still having its speed abilities and the explosion everytime he is full of water vapor. After this technique, Nidaime can only use jutsus up to A-rank because of the power drained from the jutsu. The technique only lasts for two turns. During the technique, the user can only use Suiton and Taijutsu
Note: Can only be used by Yagura or be taught by Yagura.

±± Declined ±± Resubmit when you get off detention

 

[Mephistopheles]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Soul Reapers collection (Shinigami no kaishuu)
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: Soul reapers collection is set of swords, spears and axes, the primary weapon is a sword named Mephistopheles which retains the weapons most abilities. The set is a Caelum family treasure and thus can only be used by the current head of the family (being Leaf), anyone else to wield it is instantly electrocuted. To indicate the swords abilities are in effect, the sword turns the user’s eyes to red from blue. To ensure the users ease, he only needs to keep the Mephistopheles with him at all times, other weapons can be summoned at any time in the battle with a single swing of the sword which materializes a weapon from thin air and can then be launched via telekinesis (though the ability is limited to launching to only weapons that are part of the set).
Contents:
Mephistopheles: Weapon appears to be a falchion fashioned with an engine at the hilt, this is the primary weapon. Its abilities include: Being infused with lightning release(effectively allowing it to cut through tough surfaces unless the surface is hardened with chakra) and thus being able to cancel out other jutsu of Earth and lightning nature (Up to B rank) and other technique (Up to C rank). Summoning other weapons of the set and controlling them via telekinesis.
Other weapons: includes Single handed and both handed swords both double edged and single edged, Spear and javelins and battle axes. Up to 6 weapons can be used at a time (including Mephistopheles) and each weapon can attracts a unique value of voltage which user decides while summoning them (it cannot however attract an opponent’s jutsu as it is literally impossible to calculate the lightning technique’s volts in midst of battle)
Note: Can only be used by Leaf.
Note: Only the sets weapons can be used with telekinesis and requires Mephistopheles to be in users hands.
Note: Weapons don’t attract opponents lightning jutsu.
Note: Other restrictions are stated in the description to keep it clean.

±± Declined ±± The lightning ability is a copy of many existing weapons. Also, don't you already have a CW? If so, you need to link it stating you drop it as you submit a new one. Btw, nice interesting weapon ^^

Resubmission for update.
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To Scorps: The lightning ability is actually a copy of my excising weapon, so yeah lol

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Soul Reapers collection (Shinigami no kaishuu)
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: Soul reapers collection is set of swords, spears and axes, the primary weapon is a sword named Mephistopheles which retains the weapons most abilities. The set is a Caelum family treasure and thus can only be used by the current head of the family (being Leaf), anyone else to wield it is instantly electrocuted. To indicate the swords abilities are in effect, the sword turns the user’s eyes to red from blue. To ensure the users ease, he only needs to keep the Mephistopheles with him at all times, other weapons can be summoned at any time in the battle with a single swing of the sword which materializes a weapon from thin air and can then be launched via telekinesis (though the ability is limited to launching to only weapons that are part of the set).
Contents:
Mephistopheles: Weapon appears to be a falchion fashioned with an engine at the hilt, this is the primary weapon. Its abilities include: Being infused with lightning release(effectively allowing it to cut through tough surfaces unless the surface is hardened with chakra) and thus being able to cancel out other jutsu of Earth and lightning nature (Up to B rank) and other technique (Up to C rank). Summoning other weapons of the set and controlling them via telekinesis.
Other weapons: includes Single handed and both handed swords both double edged and single edged, Spear and javelins and battle axes. Up to 6 weapons can be used at a time (including Mephistopheles) and each weapon can attracts a unique value of voltage which user decides while summoning them (it cannot however attract an opponent’s jutsu as it is literally impossible to calculate the lightning technique’s volts in midst of battle)
Note: Can only be used by Leaf.
Note: Only the sets weapons can be used with telekinesis and requires Mephistopheles to be in users hands.
Note: Weapons don’t attract opponents lightning jutsu.
Note: Other restrictions are stated in the description to keep it clean.

±± Approved ±± Awesome weapon ^^

 

[McKnockout]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

My submission for Little Moon before the following quoted one.

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Submitting Custom Weapon:

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(Kinshou Getsuei) – Little Moon
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A (+10 to Tessenjutsu)
Description: The Kinshou Getsuei was crafted by McKnockout many years ago shortly after his return from the Land of Iron and creation of his own element, Platinum. Kinshou Getsuei is a large Japanese war fan or Tessen similar to one that Temari wields. However, unlike Temari’s fan, the Kinshou Getsuei is a Tessen made from hardened, light-weight Platinum which is highly infused with his chakra – so much so that it can only be wielded by him and starts to emit a bright, shining glow/light akin to that of the Moon. If any other person picks up the fan, they would not be able unfold the fan and as result, use any of its abilities. The Kinshou Getsuei is a folding fan with 10 ribs that are in fact blades of Platinum disguised to look like a normal, harmless fan. The fan itself is about 3/4 of McKnockout’s height and has countless engraved kanji inscriptions all over it. The fan itself, when collapsed, can also be used as a make shift sword and is able to deflect kunai and shuriken when opened and/or planted into the ground. This suggests that the fan is entirely made of Platinum rather than paper.

Like Temari’s fan, the wielder of Kinshou Getsuei is able to call down a variety of wind-related jutsus as well as some other unique abilities. These are:

• Indestructible (though it can't cut through anything)
• “Wind Release: Wind Spinning Blade Barrage Technique” gets 2 Ranks in strength when used.
• “Wind Release: Severe Hurricane Wall” gets 2 Ranks in strength when used.
• The engraved kanji inscriptions are in fact summoning seals and when chakra is channelled into them allows the user to summon various things.
• By channelling wind chakra into it, the user can dispel up to B-rank lightning jutsu by hitting into the jutsu or releasing an appropriate gust of wind (two times per battle). And an A-rank lightning jutsu using the same method (once per battle).

Note: Must have mastered Wind element.
Note: Can only be wielded by McKnockout.
Note: All abilities count towards the user’s jutsu count.
Note: To use the fan’s abilities, the user must have it in his hands or strapped to his back.
Note: The user is more vulnerable to fire jutsu when he is holding the fan in his hands and receives +10 damage.

~Declined~ Very well made technique, the abilities are ok, my only problem is the restrictions. You have none O-o. While being a weapon, it still release S-rank jutsus, and hence need to be restricted.

(Kinshou Getsuei) – Little Moon
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A (+10 to Tessenjutsu)
Description: The Kinshou Getsuei was crafted by McKnockout many years ago shortly after his return from the Land of Iron and creation of his own element, Platinum. Kinshou Getsuei is a large Japanese war fan or Tessen similar to one that Temari wields. However, unlike Temari’s fan, the Kinshou Getsuei is a Tessen made from hardened, light-weight Platinum which is highly infused with his chakra – so much so that it can only be wielded by him and starts to emit a bright, shining glow/light akin to that of the Moon. If any other person picks up the fan, they would not be able unfold the fan and as result, use any of its abilities. The Kinshou Getsuei is a folding fan with 10 ribs that are in fact blades of Platinum disguised to look like a normal, harmless fan. The fan itself is about 3/4 of McKnockout’s height and has countless engraved kanji inscriptions all over it. The fan itself, when collapsed, can also be used as a make shift sword and is able to deflect kunai and shuriken when opened and/or planted into the ground. This suggests that the fan is entirely made of Platinum rather than paper.

Like Temari’s fan, the wielder of Kinshou Getsuei is able to call down a variety of wind-related jutsus as well as some other unique abilities. These are:

• Indestructible (though it can't cut through anything)
• “Wind Release: Wind Spinning Blade Barrage Technique” gets 1 Rank in strength when used.
• “Wind Release: Severe Hurricane Wall” gets 2 Ranks in strength when used.
• The engraved kanji inscriptions are in fact summoning seals and when chakra is channelled into them allows the user to summon various things.
• By channelling wind chakra into it, the user can dispel up to B-rank lightning jutsu by hitting into the jutsu or releasing an appropriate gust of wind (two times per battle). And an A-rank lightning jutsu using the same method (once per battle).

Restrictions:
Note: Must have mastered Wind element.
Note: Can only be wielded by McKnockout.
Note: All abilities count towards the user’s jutsu count.
Note: To use the fan’s abilities, the user must have it in his hands or strapped to his back.
Note: The user can not use an ability twice in the same turn.
Note: Due to the strain of handling such a big weapon, the user must have mastered taijutsu to use this weapon.
Note: The user is more vulnerable to fire jutsu when he is holding the fan in his hands and receives +10 damage.

I lowered one of the jutsus to just A-rank and added more restrictions.

~Pending~ Link me to "Severe Hurricane Wall" please. Do it though VM and I'll recheck this technique.

(Kinshou Getsuei) – Little Moon
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A (+10 to Tessenjutsu)
Description: The Kinshou Getsuei was crafted by McKnockout many years ago shortly after his return from the Land of Iron and creation of his own element, Platinum. Kinshou Getsuei is a large Japanese war fan or Tessen similar to one that Temari wields. However, unlike Temari’s fan, the Kinshou Getsuei is a Tessen made from hardened, light-weight Platinum which is highly infused with his chakra – so much so that it can only be wielded by him and starts to emit a bright, shining glow/light akin to that of the Moon. If any other person picks up the fan, they would not be able unfold the fan and as result, use any of its abilities. The Kinshou Getsuei is a folding fan with 10 ribs that are in fact blades of Platinum disguised to look like a normal, harmless fan. The fan itself is about 3/4 of McKnockout’s height and has countless engraved kanji inscriptions all over it. The fan itself, when collapsed, can also be used as a make shift sword and is able to deflect kunai and shuriken when opened and/or planted into the ground. This suggests that the fan is entirely made of Platinum rather than paper.

Like Temari’s fan, the wielder of Kinshou Getsuei is able to call down a variety of wind-related jutsus as well as some other unique abilities. These are:

• Indestructible (though it can't cut through anything)
• “Wind Release: Wind Spinning Blade Barrage Technique” gets 1 Rank in strength when used.
• “Wind Release: Severe Hurricane Wall” gets 2 Ranks in strength when used.
• The engraved kanji inscriptions are in fact summoning seals and when chakra is channelled into them allows the user to summon various things.
• By channelling wind chakra into it, the user can dispel up to B-rank lightning jutsu by hitting into the jutsu or releasing an appropriate gust of wind (two times per battle). And an A-rank lightning jutsu using the same method (once per battle).

Restrictions:
Note: Must have mastered Wind element.
Note: Can only be wielded by McKnockout.
Note: All abilities count towards the user’s jutsu count.
Note: To use the fan’s abilities, the user must have it in his hands or strapped to his back.
Note: The user can not use an ability twice in the same turn.
Note: Due to the strain of handling such a big weapon, the user must have mastered taijutsu to use this weapon.
Note: The user is more vulnerable to fire jutsu when he is holding the fan in his hands and receives +10 damage.

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(Futon: Kibishii Shippuu Kabe) - Wind Release: Severe Hurricane Wall
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user will swing their Giant Folding fan or Giant War fan at their target to create a small but powerful hurricane that drags the target with it several meters. Normal users can perform this technique by use of 3 hand seals before creating the Hurricane.

(Fūton: Kaze Rasen Yaiba Rendan no justu) - Wind Release: Wind Spinning Blade Barrage Technique
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: A more advanced version he user uses their Giant Folding fan or Giant Fan and swing it forwards at the target creating a single spinning disk of wind that ressembles a demon wind shuriken. A non wielder of the Giant Folding Fan or Giant Fan can perform this technique with use of four hand seals and releasing wind from their mouth and using shape manipulation to form the disk of wind.

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Please do not just DNR this, I have put alot of work and time into this.

±± Pending ±± You spent a lot of time indeed...reading my cj thread. This uses the same principle i put into my own CW, the Staff of Gaia. This coupled with your other copies of my techniques means we need to talk. VM me when you read this.