[CFS] A Song of Spring,9 Verses of Summer,the Staff of Autumn and the Power through Winter

[Lili-Chwan]

I don't think so, should be alright. I've also used quite a lot of Shakujo techniques in my battle with Toku, it was quite nice xD

 

[Sharingdork]

Well, good to know that they're actually effective.

(Sainana no Uta: Jigoku) Seventh Verse: Naraka
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 per turn)
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will release the rings from their Shakujo (or manipulate them further if they're already released), and will send the rings into the sky. From there, the rings will all begin to spin as the user channels his Katon chakra into the rings. As the rings spin, they will generate a multitude of small fireballs, about the size of a ping-pong ball, which will fly in every direction and rain down on the ground. Due to the spacing of the rings and the range of the fireballs from each ring, the only safe place is a meter radius circle around the Shakujo's staff, which will cause the floating rings to move with it (meaning if the user, holding the staff, walks forwards, the rings above will move so that the user remains safe). When the technique ends, the rings will remain in the air for a second after they finish spewing flames before returning to the Shakujo.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Requires two turn minimum in between usages
~Lasts 3 turns, or until canceled
~The user can only use Katon and chakraless techniques while active

Okay, so now we're raining death upon people. You just send the rings up into the sky and cause them to spin, sending your katon chakra to them as they float. The rings then produce small fireballs that fall down and burn everything except for you and a small circle around you. And yeah, it's just fire falling from the sky - not much to it. It's really simple and I don't have much to add to it. Just be mindful of the time gap between ending and the rings coming back.
So any questions, comments, etc.?

 

[Lili-Chwan]

Well, good to know that they're actually effective.

(Sainana no Uta: Jigoku) Seventh Verse: Naraka
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (-5 per turn)
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will release the rings from their Shakujo (or manipulate them further if they're already released), and will send the rings into the sky. From there, the rings will all begin to spin as the user channels his Katon chakra into the rings. As the rings spin, they will generate a multitude of small fireballs, about the size of a ping-pong ball, which will fly in every direction and rain down on the ground. Due to the spacing of the rings and the range of the fireballs from each ring, the only safe place is a meter radius circle around the Shakujo's staff, which will cause the floating rings to move with it (meaning if the user, holding the staff, walks forwards, the rings above will move so that the user remains safe). When the technique ends, the rings will remain in the air for a second after they finish spewing flames before returning to the Shakujo.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Requires two turn minimum in between usages
~Lasts 3 turns, or until canceled
~The user can only use Katon and chakraless techniques while active

Okay, so now we're raining death upon people. You just send the rings up into the sky and cause them to spin, sending your katon chakra to them as they float. The rings then produce small fireballs that fall down and burn everything except for you and a small circle around you. And yeah, it's just fire falling from the sky - not much to it. It's really simple and I don't have much to add to it. Just be mindful of the time gap between ending and the rings coming back.
So any questions, comments, etc.?

I like the idea... but I don't think it's a a technique I'd use all that much. I think if you take out Fire and make it all-elements, as in, you can pick which element you'd like the rings to rain upon your enemy, it would be so much better. Imagine a rain of Decay or Lightning, or Lava or Perfume xD

 

[Sharingdork]

I like the idea... but I don't think it's a a technique I'd use all that much. I think if you take out Fire and make it all-elements, as in, you can pick which element you'd like the rings to rain upon your enemy, it would be so much better. Imagine a rain of Decay or Lightning, or Lava or Perfume xD

Honestly, I could potentially see the Base 5, but beyond that I'm not sure how approvable it would be. However, your concerns are valid.

(Saihachi no Uta: Kāma-Dhātu) Eighth Verse: Desire Realm
Rank: S
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 per sphere per turn) (-20 per sphere regeneration)
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user, after having the rings of their Shakujo separated either from an earlier technique or specifically for this jutsu, will have their rings begin to spin, but differently than normal. Normally, the rings spin along their own circular formation, which would make the ring appear to not be moving at all if one doesn't look closely. This is normally done to make the edges hot with friction and cause it to gain a type of cutting quality. The Kāma-Dhātu has the rings spin on a different axis so quickly that it almost looks like they've formed into small spheres instead of being simply rings from the blurring effect from the high-speed rotation (as if you took a ring or coin and spun it on its side on a table top) [see video below for further explanation]. As the rings spin, the users chakra is sent out to each ring equally and creates a field of chakra around the outside of each ring. As the rings spin, they move at a speed so fast that the chakra cannot cling to the physical being of the ring effectively, which creates a drag-like effect where the chakra from each ring is curved to such a high degree that the other end of the ring connects with the chakra "flowing" from the opposite end, creating a true sphere of chakra surrounding the spinning rings. Each sphere may then be controlled individually with strength granted by the constantly-rotating spheres of chakra equal to a B-rank technique of any element. When these spheres are damaged by C-rank and below techniques, the user may send more chakra to the damaged sphere to regenerate it and raise its strength back up to B-rank.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Must wait a three turn gap between uses
~Rings may return to the Shakujo at any time. Rings are forced to return if damaged by a B-rank technique. If they are damaged by an A-rank or above technique, the user must physically collect the ring as it can't "fly" back to the user being out of chakra
~Regeneration of spheres is a choice of the user's and counts as a move of their turn . Returning to the Shakujo staff if damaged by a C-rank or under technique (including no damage) is also a choice but doesn't count as a move. Rings which are returned to the staff or are damaged by A-rank and above techniques no longer count to the "-5 per sphere per turn" chakra cost

So I wasn't so sure this technique would get approved. Basically, you release the rings from your Shakujo and then cause them to spin as in the video. Sending chakra to the rings allows you to turn them into six mini flying Rasengans (each B-rank and playing equally with all elements). There is then a series of clauses described in the jutsu to explain what were to happen if one of the rings made contact with X or Y, etc. etc. It is a technique that you must continually fuel and manipulate, and you can even strengthen the technique once more if a ring becomes damaged. Honestly, this is a more damaging Dancing Rings with less supplementary purposes.

 

[Lili-Chwan]

Honestly, I could potentially see the Base 5, but beyond that I'm not sure how approvable it would be. However, your concerns are valid.

(Saihachi no Uta: Kāma-Dhātu) Eighth Verse: Desire Realm
Rank: S
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40 (-5 per sphere per turn) (-20 per sphere regeneration)
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user, after having the rings of their Shakujo separated either from an earlier technique or specifically for this jutsu, will have their rings begin to spin, but differently than normal. Normally, the rings spin along their own circular formation, which would make the ring appear to not be moving at all if one doesn't look closely. This is normally done to make the edges hot with friction and cause it to gain a type of cutting quality. The Kāma-Dhātu has the rings spin on a different axis so quickly that it almost looks like they've formed into small spheres instead of being simply rings from the blurring effect from the high-speed rotation (as if you took a ring or coin and spun it on its side on a table top) [see video below for further explanation]. As the rings spin, the users chakra is sent out to each ring equally and creates a field of chakra around the outside of each ring. As the rings spin, they move at a speed so fast that the chakra cannot cling to the physical being of the ring effectively, which creates a drag-like effect where the chakra from each ring is curved to such a high degree that the other end of the ring connects with the chakra "flowing" from the opposite end, creating a true sphere of chakra surrounding the spinning rings. Each sphere may then be controlled individually with strength granted by the constantly-rotating spheres of chakra equal to a B-rank technique of any element. When these spheres are damaged by C-rank and below techniques, the user may send more chakra to the damaged sphere to regenerate it and raise its strength back up to B-rank.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Must wait a three turn gap between uses
~Rings may return to the Shakujo at any time. Rings are forced to return if damaged by a B-rank technique. If they are damaged by an A-rank or above technique, the user must physically collect the ring as it can't "fly" back to the user being out of chakra
~Regeneration of spheres is a choice of the user's and counts as a move of their turn . Returning to the Shakujo staff if damaged by a C-rank or under technique (including no damage) is also a choice but doesn't count as a move. Rings which are returned to the staff or are damaged by A-rank and above techniques no longer count to the "-5 per sphere per turn" chakra cost

So I wasn't so sure this technique would get approved. Basically, you release the rings from your Shakujo and then cause them to spin as in the video. Sending chakra to the rings allows you to turn them into six mini flying Rasengans (each B-rank and playing equally with all elements). There is then a series of clauses described in the jutsu to explain what were to happen if one of the rings made contact with X or Y, etc. etc. It is a technique that you must continually fuel and manipulate, and you can even strengthen the technique once more if a ring becomes damaged. Honestly, this is a more damaging Dancing Rings with less supplementary purposes.

I do like it, though, it's quite unique. Now, we have 6 rings, and each is like a B rank technique neutral to all elements (which is amazing). Does it mean 2, in conjunction, are equal to B, 4 are equal to A and 5-6 are stronger than any A rank, though weaker than any S rank? An in case I used those 5 or 6 rings, how much damage would each ring sustain from an A rank? Would it be equal to C rank on all 5, equal to C rank on all 6? Would it be higher?
I can rotate the rings around eachother to sort of fuse them together and disperse the damage through all of them equally, so that shouldn't be a problem. I'm just thinking about the damage itself.


One way I could go about it would be the reverse process. It's an A rank, so, if it went against 2 rings, it would disperse into B rank damage each. 4 rings would be C rank each, more than that means less than C rank each. That would mean we could use these rings indefinately against C ranks, using, at most efficiency, 5 rings, against all A ranked techniques, completely defeating them and keep the rings going, and, then, regenerate them.

Again, it's quite chakra costly 25 per turn just to keep them, 100 chakra per regeration after an A rank... but for the possibility... then again it's 40 chakra to use... so it's not that good now that I think about it... lol... Would rather use just a technique of opposite strength, A rank even... Nevermind...

All I said is correct right? Maybe we could find a way to make it more efficient? As it is now, it's not even stronger or on the same level as an S rank... maybe we could lower the rank to A? I don't know.... Or maybe up the regeneration from C damage to B damage

 

[Sharingdork]

Each ring is B-rank, as stated in the technique. 2 B-ranks, as a generally-accepted rule of thumb, become a single A-rank. If all 6 are together, you add them all up and then subtract whatever rank they are defending against. So yes, it is as you described in your second paragraph. I'll consider the update for a time when I'm less busy.

(Saikyū no Uta: Ku) Ninth Verse: Dukkha
Rank: S
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user, either by manipulating his rings as they are floating or by separating them from his staff first, will cause the six rings to touch together, transferring all of their chakra to a single ring. This ring will then emit a chakra coating over itself as it spins, the chakra acting to help protect and strengthen the ring. The single ring, carrying the chakra of the other five, will then be able to move faster than an average kunai with as much precision as the user wishes, controlling it's direction with the end of their Shakujo. The ring may pierce through up to A-rank techniques without so much as losing momentum due to its small size, high rotation speed, and powerful protective chakra coating, allowing it to pierce through a great deal of defenses to pierce an opponent's body. Even if the opponent dodges, the user can control the direction of the ring with their empty Shakujo. The user may also, as all the chakra is transferred to a single ring, choose to imbue said ring with an elemental nature, giving it the strengths and weaknesses of said nature, as well as basic effects of the element on contact with an opponent (burning with fire, cutting with wind, numbing with lightning, etc.). When the technique has ended, the user must touch each of the fallen rings with their Shakujo to recollect them, as they have lost their chakra.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used once per battle
~The user cannot use any other jutsu while controlling the rings.
~If elemental natures are imbued, then jutsu above S rank for that element cannot be used next turn.
~No Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu techniques may be used for two turns after this technique's usage

A simple technique. So, at any point you must have the six rings touch together, allowing all of the chakra to transfer to a single ring. This ring then spins really fast with a chakra coating. This coating can either be neutral, or of an elemental nature. The ring can destroy S-rank defenses, at the cost of the technique, or cut clean through A-rank and below structures without losing momentum, and thus remaining just as deadly. The ring moves faster than a kunai, and is directed with your Shakujō - with up to and including perfect precision - which allows you to follow a moving target, or to even avoid certain defenses you can move the ring around. With an element, it can pierce through S-rank defenses the element is strong to and B-rank defenses the element is weak to. Finally, I would recommend initiating the technique with the rings near you so that collecting them afterwards isn't a hassle, though Manipulate Advancing Blades can be used to retrieve them if they happen to not be near you.

 

[Lili-Chwan]

Sounds like a very nice technique! No questions!

 

[Sharingdork]

"With an element, it can pierce through S-rank defenses the element is strong to and B-rank defenses the element is weak to." Just to clarify, as I re-read my last post, that is "pierce without losing momentum". You probably figured that much out, but I wanted to make it clear.

And finally:
(Saishū-Tekina Uta: Rengoku) - Final Verse: Purgatory
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user releases the rings of their Shakujo, which leave the main staff and fly through the air, each to a separate location in order to create a sort of "box" (more akin to a sphere or ellipse) around the user and his opponent. Then, each ring will begin to spin and release the user's chakra from itself, the chakra being drawn to the four rings immediately adjacent to it (chakra will not travel from, say, the ring to the left relative the user, to the right relative the user) in order to form a barrier in the form of a black sphere of chakra around the user and his opponent. While inside the barrier, the only techniques which can be used are those which originate from the user; earth release techniques that manipulate the ground, water release techniques which require a water source, and wind release techniques which manipulate the wind in the atmosphere are a few examples of techniques which cannot be used within the barrier. Because the sphere is comprised of the user's own, dense chakra, seals created by a foreign chakra (that of an opponent or ally), including those required to perform a summoning (ie. the ones that spread out from the hand), need to be of equal or greater potency to take effect, otherwise being "swallowed up" and diluted by the user's chakra. This is to further aid the purpose of the technique, which is to sever the user and the opponent from the environment, and any allies or other enemies nearby. Because the dense chakra also blocks light, it causes the interior of the sphere to be pitch-black, and such renders regular vision useless.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of the Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu style
~Only lasts 3 turns
~The barrier becomes self-sustaining after forming completely
~The barrier can only be destroyed by a concentrated S-ranked technique, or unfocused Forbidden-rank technique, shot at the barrier, meaning all other techniques are contained within the barrier, making wide-scale attacks dangerous for the user as well as the defender
~Can only be used one per battle
~When the barrier disappears, the Shakujo's rings return to the staff and become unusable for four turns

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Separation and encapsulation. With this technique you separate yourself and your opponent from the outside world. Honestly, it's only really useful in specific situations, such as opponents who rely primarily on earth or water techniques. While inside the sphere, everyone is cut off from external resources - drawing lightning or tornadoes down from the sky, drawing water or earth from the ground, etc. is all out the window. Those with foreign chakra cannot place seals on the surface, which means the user can use summonings and place Fuuin seals as they please while their opponent's can't. You're both blocked off of light, as well, meaning either artificial light sources or a different form of sensory location other than sight will be needed. As for encapsulation, wide-scale techniques are contained within the shell, thus concentrating them which can make them more potent, but also gives the potential for backfire (should, say, the wide-spread technique fill the entire sphere). To be perfectly honest I kind of wish I made a different technique instead of this, but I suppose it has a few uses.

 

[Lili-Chwan]

"With an element, it can pierce through S-rank defenses the element is strong to and B-rank defenses the element is weak to." Just to clarify, as I re-read my last post, that is "pierce without losing momentum". You probably figured that much out, but I wanted to make it clear.

And finally:
(Saishū-Tekina Uta: Rengoku) - Final Verse: Purgatory
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user releases the rings of their Shakujo, which leave the main staff and fly through the air, each to a separate location in order to create a sort of "box" (more akin to a sphere or ellipse) around the user and his opponent. Then, each ring will begin to spin and release the user's chakra from itself, the chakra being drawn to the four rings immediately adjacent to it (chakra will not travel from, say, the ring to the left relative the user, to the right relative the user) in order to form a barrier in the form of a black sphere of chakra around the user and his opponent. While inside the barrier, the only techniques which can be used are those which originate from the user; earth release techniques that manipulate the ground, water release techniques which require a water source, and wind release techniques which manipulate the wind in the atmosphere are a few examples of techniques which cannot be used within the barrier. Because the sphere is comprised of the user's own, dense chakra, seals created by a foreign chakra (that of an opponent or ally), including those required to perform a summoning (ie. the ones that spread out from the hand), need to be of equal or greater potency to take effect, otherwise being "swallowed up" and diluted by the user's chakra. This is to further aid the purpose of the technique, which is to sever the user and the opponent from the environment, and any allies or other enemies nearby. Because the dense chakra also blocks light, it causes the interior of the sphere to be pitch-black, and such renders regular vision useless.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the owner of the Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu style
~Only lasts 3 turns
~The barrier becomes self-sustaining after forming completely
~The barrier can only be destroyed by a concentrated S-ranked technique, or unfocused Forbidden-rank technique, shot at the barrier, meaning all other techniques are contained within the barrier, making wide-scale attacks dangerous for the user as well as the defender
~Can only be used one per battle
~When the barrier disappears, the Shakujo's rings return to the staff and become unusable for four turns

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Separation and encapsulation. With this technique you separate yourself and your opponent from the outside world. Honestly, it's only really useful in specific situations, such as opponents who rely primarily on earth or water techniques. While inside the sphere, everyone is cut off from external resources - drawing lightning or tornadoes down from the sky, drawing water or earth from the ground, etc. is all out the window. Those with foreign chakra cannot place seals on the surface, which means the user can use summonings and place Fuuin seals as they please while their opponent's can't. You're both blocked off of light, as well, meaning either artificial light sources or a different form of sensory location other than sight will be needed. As for encapsulation, wide-scale techniques are contained within the shell, thus concentrating them which can make them more potent, but also gives the potential for backfire (should, say, the wide-spread technique fill the entire sphere). To be perfectly honest I kind of wish I made a different technique instead of this, but I suppose it has a few uses.

Well, it's pretty straight forward and interesting, almost like a Genjutsu so it's perfect for me.

One question, can we re-manipulate elements after creating them? Say I shoot a mass of water from my mouth, can I use it as a source? ( question from the opponent's perspective )

 

[Sharingdork]

Yeah, the water you release will be contained so it should be perfectly feasible to use as a source for further techniques.

Alright, any final questions before we finish up?

 

[Lili-Chwan]

Yeah, the water you release will be contained so it should be perfectly feasible to use as a source for further techniques.

Alright, any final questions before we finish up?

No more questions