A Anbu wanting to be senei. (Title might change)

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A Anbu wanting to be senei.

Well...Like I said on the konichiwa thread. That I will post up a fanfic. That I started on.

Some things to inform though. I tryed my very best to organise and made sure that everything was..legible to read. But as I said, I'm slowly improving my writing skills best as possible. Right now testing out, FPV style of writing and even though it is comfortable for me.


This is a what if story so...Yeah. So there's going be alot of diffrences and changes to character. To warn those who don't like these type of things.

Also to inform you that, the teams are change a bit. While having Haku in there...Whos well...Going to be female and before anyone say anything. Let me explain that, when I first saw Haku. I thought 'HE' was a 'SHE'. So yeah.

Without further adiue. I hope you all enjoy the first Chapter. I have 6 Chapters done already, so I'm going back and forth between chapters. To fix and make things more readable. But yeah...What you see, is what I can read lol...So umm. Enjoy ^^.

This story here is mostly me, practicing my writing skills.
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Chapter 1: Wanting to be Sensei

"You really think you could take me on?!" The man shouted, as I just sneer behind my own mask. Why does every criminal or bandits. Think their so high and mighty, believing themselfs to be invincable. When all they do is send their lackeys, to handle most of their work.

I got intell from my anbu team. That they've gotten all the captives out and safe. Which means...I can go all out with this one...No careful Panther, don't let your emotions cloud your thoughts.

Quickly ducking from one of his futile attemps. To de-capataite my head. With the blunt of the blade missing completly, while back flipping backwards from a downward slash. This guy is very skill. Since he almost caught me off guard, by doing a full 360 kick towards my chest.

Thankfully, I am nimble enough to tilt just about right for the kick to miss entirly. During the tilt of my body. I swung my kick into his jaw. Sending the leader flying and crushing his belongings and destroying any valubles in the room. Getting back to my feet, by spinning up right. I quickly formed multiple handsigns. Concentraiting alot of Chakra for one of my high level Jutsu.

After finishing the handsign. I felt alot of liguid around all of me. Shouting out, "Water Style: Twin Water dragon jutsu!" I shouted, with water bodys forming and swirling around and above my body. Seeing the mans fearful and terrified look. Brought me to smirk a bit. Okay so it was cold of me to smile, but I highly dislike scum bags like him.

Watching his fruitless effort to dodge my attack, in this very small room. Was pointless, with the sounds of roaring and screeching. The entire place erupted in loud thunderous booms. Sure he gave me a hard time, through out the castle. He set up alot of traps and pitfalls, just to slow me down. Although high level traps for a bandit. That even I was surprised of, even with my Byakkugan active during the time.

Getting out of my train of thought for that moment. Saw the dirtbag coughing eraticly. Trying to get his breathing back to normal. Well I won't give him that chance, since we were order by the Hokage. To deal and finish this guy off, since he was netorious for his crimes and schemes. Including kidnapping and capturing citizens from each Nation. Even capturing woman for his own needs.

Boy was I furious and also glad that CAT. Took the assaination job and had me come along, including Dragon. Which I wonder at first as to why. Why you may ask? Cause lets just say I have...What you would call a short temper and tendacie to lose my cool and over due my jutsus too much. How he calms me down, I will never know. Probably the fact of being child hood friends might have something to do with that.

Walking slowly to the frantic man, along with his pleading and begging. I un-seathed my blade slowly. Rubbing against the scabber and flip it forward to adjust the weight and handle of the blade. Concentraiting chakra through the blade and just watch the fear on the mans pale face.

" Iwadi Jokanshi, your crime and sinister gang are under arrest. You are hear by to be executed by the order of Hokage", I exclaim outloud. Seeing the man reaching something behind the counter, which I figure would be more weapons. But threw my blade expertly. Straight dab in the middle of his palm and up against the desk. With him franticly trying to pull the sword out.

I then walk closer, un-gloving my hands and got into the stance. That is very dangerous and powerful in the Hyuuga clan. Of course though, since I was born as a half Hyuuga. From my mom marrying a man outside the hyuuga compound. Hid me from the Hyuuga council's, along with Hiashi agreeing to keep my mom and I away from them. But 10 years later when I was thirteen. My mom did a mission at the land of waves. Under cover as a cilvillian, got killed and murder.

I was devastating by that and couldn't live myself. Through time and effort, I slowly increse my skills. No thanks to my sensei, only training the Inazuka and Yamanaka clan members of our team.

But I'm getting way ahead of myself. I have a job to do and that was to kill this low life, that I dare call us...Humans. Thrusting forward with incredible speed. I used the 64 Palm strike, to cause internal damage to the mans body. Not letting him live and tell the day, or even inspire future people. To comit his evil deeds.

Seeing the body just lay up against the desk. With blood coming out his mouth. I just stood up straight, dispel the chakra that was around my blade. Pulling it out with out any trouble and seathing it back to the scabber. Analyzing the room once more with my Byakkugan active. I didn't see anything that was out of place or any traps. Beside a button under the desk. Probably a ditch effort trap, to get rid of anyone who wasn't paying attention.

Lifting my hand up to the side of my ear. To contact the others and of course. My luck as I know it. Their talking behind my back...

"Dragon, what do you think the chances of her causing the castle to break?" As I can tell it was bears voice. Who asked Dragon the question and I bet hes going to exagerate and say highly possible.

"Pretty likely", ...I was close. Then as luck had it out for me, the entire castle started rumble around me and I just stare up at nothing. Shrugging my arms and whisper out. Why...What did I ever did to you Kami. So I made my hasty escape and made sure I got out in time, before the entire land scape. Collaps all around me.

Took me almost about 1 hour to meet back with my team. Who were watching the castle just fall and crumble. Causing a huge dust cloud along with thunderous booms. Walking up to my team, whom turned and saw me standing there panting and breathing badly. Trying hard to catch my breath. I was not in the mood for toung lashing...

"So what you been up too?" Especially smart allecs. Took alot of self control to not pound him where he stands. As he probably figure I was glareing behind my mask. Seeing CAT raise her hand to the comm, alerting the other members of the group. That the job was finished and to take care of the hostages and bring them back home. This mission was a success.

3 weeks later.

Standing behind my teammates. Trying to hide myself from the Hokage, best as possible. While CAT was giving out the mission report. Apparently I accendently injured an hostage during the rescue, which I figure it was probably the man that touch me perversly. While I disabled his body with my jyuuken strikes out of anger. So...Yeah I have trouble hiding my emotions during Anbu missions. Which causes me to get strikes and slight probations from the Hokage.

Especially the dreaded D-Ranks missions. I just shudder at the thought of Tora the evil demon cat! Hearing the report was over, I slightly shook. Hearing my name being mention by the Hokage.

"So...Why you three hiding Panther in the back?" The Hokage asked, causing all 3 Anbu to move to the sides. Causing me to move my head left and right. Seeing my team ratted me out. So I step forward with a straight posture. Ready for anything the hokage haves to say.

Seeing him letting out small puff of smoke. From his cigar, which I detest those who smoke. But let that opinnion to myself. Knowing how thats the only way the Hokage calms himself, while slightly looking to the right of him. I saw tower of papers pile up higher than him.

Paying back attention to the hokage. Ready for the lash out, sensing my team leaving the room. Caused me to just leer slightly behind my mask. "Thanks for the sappurt guys..." I whisper to myself, letting out a sigh. Seeing the hokage starring at me sternly. Asking me to remove my mask. Which I did, by lifting my hands up to the mask and remove it from my face.

Showing my deep blue pupiless eyes. Blinking a bit, to adjust from the light blinding me a bit. Then my vision adjusted a bit. Seeing the Hokage letting out a small smirk. Always finding a way to make me smile. He took care of me during my time of need, helping and sappurting me when I needed. But I digress...

"Mia...Why did you attack a hostage?" He asked me, using my real name. Which is very bad to me. Since he only uses my name when ever it directs towards me and my mission. Which I let out a audible sigh, informing the situation as best as possible. Explaining how I felt a bit violated during the time. He nodded and understood my predictament.

Though inside, I snarl a bit. Knowing he haves one of those Icha Icha books. That I remember Sannin Jiraiya wrote. I honestly cannot see, how any one get into those things. Especially the pig headed men...Though to be honest with myself. I shouldn't judge. Since their selling like hotcakes...That and I kinda did, assist Jiraiya a bit. When I asked his help with my ninja training once.

Back then I was stupid and naive. So I didn't know the book, was like that. Thankfully Jiraiya said, he wouldn't use me in the book. Which I found out later he kept his promise...

"Still though Mia...", the hokage getting me out of my train of thought. Seeing him continuing his lecture. "You shouldn't let your emotions get the best of you, during your Anbu missions." He continue, while looking down to the floor. "Sure, what the man did isn't right. But you shouldn't let your judgement control yourself." He added, while bringing his cigar out and tap it on the ash tray. Letting out a sigh, "Sorry to say Mia...But your once again. On probation", He announced,

Which I just hung my head low and nodded. I figure as such from my experience. Its going to be back to D-Rank missions and the dreaded Tora the demon cat. Which then I heard the Hokage clear his throat. Raising my head up a bit, with my hair sliding over my shoulders. I saw him smiling at me, in turn confusing me alot.

"Think of it as, taking a vacation Mia. You deserve it." He said. Getting up from his chair, walking around his desk. Standing up near a window, starring out into the city of Konoha, with citizens and children running around. The life of the city, becoming more and more active.

"Mia tell me? When was the last time, you had a break from Anbu missions?" He asked me, which I just stood up straight. Starring down in thought, feeling his eyes scanning my emotions. Through the reflection of the window he was looking at. Then I just shook my head and responded honestly.

"Not that I re-call Hokage...", I reply while watching him. Turn around and chuckle a bit. Figuring he knew that much and sat back down on his chair. Resting his elbows on the desk, then this question suddenly threw me off and my status as Anbu.

"Mia...Is there anything you truly wanted? Before becoming Anbu?" He asked me, which threw me off guard. Causing me to almost lose my balance. While blinking and starring at the Hokage. With confusion in my eyes. "Heh, let me ask again...", He chuckle while sitting back on the chair. "Was there something, that you wanted to do?" He asked again. Which made me settle down a bit. Getting my stature back to normal, from the sudden question.

Going through my thoughts slowly and carefully. Remembering something I used to say to my mom. About wanting to be a Sensei...Which I looked up to the Hokage, informing him that if its alright to come back to him on that. Which he nodded and dismiss me. Letting me know, to come back any time I have an answer for him.

2 hours later...

I was just sitting down on a bench in the plaza, of the village. Watching everything take it course around me. Which if one will have a caculated eye. Can easily read and tell how life goes in this village and the residents. I might as well introduce myself now, that I have free time.

My name is Mia Hyuuga, I'm a half hyuuga. The Hyuuga council was going to place a Bird cage seal on my mother and I. After I was at the right age to receive it. But one of the councils, the good ones. Didn't let the order take its place, consisdering the high respect my mother had as a Ninja. While being the first Hyuuga to achieve good Chakra and Chakra control, while able to use element jutsus.

Any way, I am 20 years old. With Blue short hair, reaching down to my shoulders. My opal blue eyes, scanning around the area. Seeing everything and watching the people do their own buisness. Wearing my favorite kamino dress, with the green vest over it. I wouldn't say I have a good taste of fashion. I more into casual clothing, along with long sweat pants. With black slippers.

I then sense Dragon appear next to me, sitting down carefully. Along with watching whats going around in the village. Handing me a ramen box, which I accept with open hands. I was feeling peckish myself. Just slurping and eating the noodles carefully, just enjoying the peace between us. Dragon and I just sat there quietly, eating the food and enjoying it.

"So? How did it go?" He asked me, which he figure or wonder. If I'm on probation again. Which in a way I was. But more of a vacation. Then explain everything that occur with our conversation. Which caused Dragon to nod and eat more of his noodles. "I see, well...Didn't you always wanted to be a Sensei?"

Which he was right...I always told him when I was a kid, that I always wanted to train my own set of Genins! Nodding my head and understanding what Dragon wanted me to do. But not now, I just need to make sure I am ready and willing to give up my anbu rank. To become a Sensei...

"Yeah I do...But not sure if I am willing enough...", I explain to him. Telling him that wanting to be sensei is one thing, but willing to do it is another thing. He nodded and told me he understood. I had alot of reputation as an Anbu, along with bad reputation of training exessfully...Near brink of death at that matter. Of course I goten used to the training schedual over the years.

After going through my thoughts and finishing up my food. While throwing it away. Then I looked over towards the Ninja academy. Which I seem to do alot these past few years. Causing Dragon to notice my distraction and look back to me. Shaking his head, knowing what the giant Shuriken symbole. That indicates the academy for young ninjas to attend too. Without warning, he grab my hand and started pulling me towards the school.

I swear, he acts some what childesh. With his black hair bouncing a bit, from being to spikey. Along with his black eyes closing, giving a smile. His real name is Sho. Which at first, we made fun of his name when we were kids. But he didn't mind, he actually think its a funny name too. Over time, we respected his name and his skill. He was wearing a black long sleeve shirt and pants. That had some what a fire design on them, which suits him very well. Since his jutsu element is fire.

After arriving and walking down the halls of the school. Going to diffrent classes and peaking through the windows. To see if there were any promising ninjas this year, which some of the children inside. Wave quietly towards me and Sho. Out of probably 180 or 200...Who knows how many students that attend here, a Yamanaka and an Inazuka manage to catch us peeking. Which felt weird to me, since they shouldn't be able to sense our Chakra at this low of a level.

Continuing on ward through the academy. Sho and I were very upset and a bit angry, seeing how easy these test were. What were they thinking?! A ninja shouldn't constantly get repeated lessons of our history and junk like that. Back when we were young, our tests were very hard and challenging. Ranging from data collecting, how to ambush an enemy. Or sneaking through enemy base.

This...This is just sad and waste of perfect talents. Stopping at the last class, which was Iruka's class. Having the most clan related ninjas along with cilvillians. Especially the last survivor of the Uchihas. Which me and Sho just let out a sigh, we really didn't like the Uchiha clan at all, especially back in our child hood days.

Then my eyes caught Naruto. Who isn't hard to spot, he haves blond spikey hair and a orange outfit. That most will scream, walking target. But deep down, I bet everyone knows he pulls it off. While matching his personality and prankster like behavior. Heck he even gives ninjas, of all ranks a hard time catching him.

Like the one day, he was practicing a bit on a rooftop. Working on one of his pranks, for who knows what victim. Back fired on him and some how fell into the Womans bath house by accendent, poor boy. Ran for his dear life, from multiple kunoichis that were resting there. Chasing the poor boy down and threaten to hurt the boy...

Of course I was one of those Ninjas, that was in the hot spring at the time. But I didn't go after the boy, since I spotted him with my byakkugan. Which I did warn the girls and ninjas. But as fate will have it for him and me. They didnt listen or believe me, while Naruto was trying to explain to them it was a accident.

Looking through the rest of the class. I spotted, A Aburame, A Hyuuga which is Hinata. Inazuka Kiba, Nara Shikumaru, Yamanaka Ino, Akimichi Choji. I was surprise how many clan members. Was in this class alone. Though my heart sank and felt disguested at how the girls. Were fawning over Sasuke Uchiha.

Just leaning up against the wall, along with Sho on the other side of the door. Watching the class take place.

"So Mia? What do you think? Will any of them might do good, ninja wise?" He asked me, with a raise eye brow. Knowing him, he probably spotted alot of good candidates in Iruka class. Which I agree, all these kids. Atleast from Hinata, all the other clan members to Naruto and Sasuke. Will make great ninja, although for the Haruno child. I can't be so sure, since she seems more knowledgeable. Than a ninja talent. Who knows, I've been surprised before...

Although, the one year class. We past, have no doubt will be great ninjas. Although if I were a sensei, I need atleast 3 students. The female Inazuka and the male Yamanaka from a diffrent class. Wouldn't be enough and will have to be balance...

I let out a sigh and shook my head a bit. "I can't be sure myself. But seeing Iruka's class, half the majority of the class. Will do great as ninjas", although seeing Sho shake his head at me. Confused me alot.

"No, I meant...If you were to sensei any of these children. Who will they be?" Which he smirk a bit. Probably knowing who will be great students for me. By counting in his head and seeing him twitch about 5 times. In forms me that he came up with 5 students. Which I chuckle slightly, resting my head up against the wall.

"I say, the two children who spotted us earlier. Might be great students...As for the other 3 here in Irukas...Who do you think?" I asked with a raise eye brow, while my left eye. Was half open. Curious who he conjure up. On what student will be good for me.

"Well...Besides Naruto and scratching off Sasuke. Cause I know how we both, detest about Uchiha's. Minus Itachi", which I nodded my head. Itachi and his mom, were great people. Just wanted to know why Itachi slaughter and destroy his clan. Including his mother...Any way, back to what Sho was saying. We detest Uchiha's, is all you know. Minus Itachi and his mom of course...

"Well, I was also thinking that. Shikamaru and probably Shino might be good", he answered. While I nodded slightly. Although I don't think, I will be able to stand with all guys in the team. Along wtih a Nara and Aburame...I have slight fear of bugs back in the day. I don't think Shino will appriciate me teaching him.

"That might be true, but even still...Nara's can be a bit difficult to teach. While...", which I saw Sho nodded his head. While raising both hands up. Telling me not to worry about my fear. Knowing about it for his whole life.

After looking through the rest of the school. Leaving the premises and seeing that the sun was slowly setting. With me just sitting ontop of the Hokage mountain, by myself. Knowing that Sho left and went home, since he had nothing eles to do. Feeling the slight breeze that was blowing. Starring down at the lights and sounds that were emmitting in the village.

I just sat there, going through my thoughts. Thinking of the suggestion Sho told me, about being a Sensei. But that could be a bit diffacult. Since I only saw 2 promising Ninjas. I need a 3rd one if I were to be sensei...Oh well, beggers can't be choosers. I'll just have to wait and see what happens. Thinking about being a sensei just fuel me into, accepting it even more! I'll give the hokage my answer some time later. After visiting my mom's grave in the Land of waves...
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I keep seeing people, making seperate posts with their next chapters. Which I have to ask if we're even allowed to do that?? Oh well...Here's Chapter 2. If any one haves questions just ask.

Edit: and I need to seperate this chapter into parts>_<
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Chapter 2: Adoption

It took awhile to convince the Hokage, to allow me visit my mothers grave, even though her grave wasn't in Konoha, but her name. But her real grave was in one of the village at the land of waves. Where she tryed and help the citizens there from under attack. But got surrounded quite easily and lost her life.

I remember, one of her close friends. Who visit her from the land of waves, came to our house and inform me about what happen. Especially handing me her Headband...I was a emotional wreck and couldn't believe my mom died during a mission. I was told how she was protecting, children during the attacks. Managing to save almost every signle one of them. While sacerficing her self to finish off her attackers. So this way, no one will ever get the byakkugan eyes.

That day, I ran away and just didn't care where I ran too. I was blind and full of sadness and anger. I just ran where ever my legs took me, who knows where I was going, all I remember was tripping and falling on my stomach in the middle of no where. Just letting the tears come and go. The forest I collaps at though, was the forest of death! But since I was a kid, I didn't had any knowledge of the place and got further lost in it. Took me about 1 week, to finally get out of the forest. I had to survive by eating some of the wild life and berries that were out there.

Luckily my mom...Before her death and leaving on her mission. Taught me how to survive in the wilds. Of course, I failed missirably and had trouble handling myself on my own. But this time around, I manage to survive long enough and got back to the leaf village, where it felt strange in the forest. I felt like some one was still helping me through the forest, spiritualy and non-spiritually. Thats when I realise, I had my mom guide me through the forest, along with couple of Anbus. Who watch over me in the woods...

But all they did to protect me, was get rid of the most dangerous creatures. Everything else and explaining to me how. While I was passed out most of the time, my body would react and fight back during any attacks. They told me that they never saw anything like that before, which could only be seen in Anbus.

After getting me to the hospital too recover and restoring my chakra back to normal. I was resting and laying on a bed, in a white room like facility. Noticing that I was in the hospital room, with the Hokage and some Anbu that were in the room.

That was all I could remember, before falling back to sleep and hearing that. Everything will be fine.

Getting out of my memories, feeling the cold winter snow on my cheeks. Making them rosie. The land that I was standing at, was being cover in snow, with the tree branches and bushes cover in white powder. Starring down with slight tears, threatening to show themselfs in my eyes. As I just tighten my scarf more around my neck, to keep myself warmer, along with my snow coat.

"Hey mom...", I whisper out. Looking at the wooden cross, along with my mom's name written in permanent ink. That was infused with charkra, making them really difficult to wash out and erase. "I hope, I've been making you proud...", course I know she was. If I didn't know better, I believe she help me out many times and countless of times. When I was a child and during my ninja missions.

I just knelt down infront of the grave, pulling out a white snow flower rose. Which are common in this part of the village. Along with other Snow Roses, which I figure were probably people, she protected here in the past. I just let the tears come and let them drop down from my cheeks.

I heard some crunching noise, from some one walking through the snow. Very slowly and carefuly. With my senses, I could tell it was a child. The way they were walking in the snow, were very cautious and hoping that I will help them out. Which I would gladly, letting the child get use to me and feel safe. I stayed crouch down infront of my moms grave, letting out some calming chakra. So the child will feel safe around me.

Feeling a tug on my shirt, feeling how light it was. I smiled and closed my eyes. Whiping away the tears quickly, then turn my head around. To see that it was a orphan...A Girl to be around 9 or 12 years old. With black long hair reaching down to her back. With brown pleading eyes, starring up to my blue pupuiless eyes. Smiling at the little girl, causing her to blush a bit and smile. Feeling nervous, spoke up quietly too me.

"E..Excuse me...D...do you have anything to eat?" She asked me, which I nodded and saw her smile increse tens fold. I couldn't believe how this girl, from the way her brown tatter cloths were slightly shredded. Survived this long out in the cold and without any food and water. After pulling out a loaf of Bread and handed the girl the bread. She giggle and took the bread and started scarfing the food down.

I look up towards the sky at nothing...Wondering if my mom out of fate, wanted me to find this girl? Actually...This girl reminds me alot of myself. I too was a orphan in the leaf village, along with defending myself and taking care of myself. Although I had the Hokage and the Anbu's to back me up and took care of me. So why not?

Seeing the girl finishing the bread, half way. Gave it to me with happy eyes and smile. Wanting me to finish the rest, which was very sweet. So putting a hand on her shoulder, with a careing smile. I asked her one question and this might make her the happiest girl ever...Although I better get to know her name first. "Hi...So whats your name little girl?" I asked, which she lower one eye and just points at me. Which made me giggle...I didn't think I could giggle or laugh like that ever.

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I was told that my smile and laughter, was contatious. When I was a child. I believe they were right. Seeing the girl getting even a bigger grin and laughing along with me. It was fair, I gave her the bread and only fair. That I give my name first. "My name is Mia...Mia hyuuga", I explain, which she nodded and bow slightly. Then back up.

"Alright Mia...My name is Haku...", she said quitely while shaking hands with me. Feeling how freezing cold they were. I couldn't believe she was even functioning in the snow, matter of factly. How the heck is she even alive!? Looking at her eyes carefully, I could see alot of pain and hardships. Even terror and probably something that would for ever haunt her.

Looking around to see if any one was looking. I quitely activated my Byakkugan and couldn't believe how much chakra. Was coursing through this little girls body. Meaning that she haves a blood line or Kekkei Kengai...Atleast I believe she haves one. De-activating my byakkugan, I saw her mouth open and looking at me with amazement. I chuckle a bit while arching a eye brow.

"Did you know, your eyes looked beautiful there?" She answered honestly, which made me just smile and rub the back of my head. I was never told that before, I figure my eyes looked ugly when ever I activate them. Seeing her asking me to do that again, I just shook my head making her groan. While standing up, I told her to follow me and will show her outside the villager. Which she nodded with alot of Vigor. Holding her hands, making her look up at me confusingly.

Just winking at her and saying it will be a surprise. Just fuled the girls curiosity even more. After a few minutes of traversing through the village and getting outside. Far enough from prying eyes. After making sure we were alone, I turned around and saw her. Bouncing on the sole of her feet.

Waiting impaitiantly for me to show her the surprise. Which is one of them, the other one will probably have her so excited and probably in tears. So I explain everything about my eyes changing. Saying how it was my blood line, while quickly explaining. That this was normal in my village and that everyone who does have a blood line. Are welcome in the leaf village.

This made both her and I surprised, when she asked me.

"You mean?? No one will hate me, for having a blood line?" She asked me. Which I totoally forgotten that the land of waves, hate and are afraid of those. Who have blood lines and kekke kenki. So getting to eye level with her smiling to her, saying how it is normal and no one will ever hate you for it.

Thats one thing true about the leaf village. We accept any visitors or those who move in and have a blood line. Live in the village in peace and harmony. After telling Haku that, she then showed me her blood line. By making perfect Ice Rose in her hands. While giving it to me, this really surprised me. Then it hit me, looking at her with concern look...Was this the reason why she became an orphan? More of factly, how she survived most of her life?

Well then...Better change that around and give her the biggest gift. That anyone and I mean any orphan will love. That being adopted and living with a family...Course this will be very new experience for me. Well its now or never.

Putting the Ice rose in my bag, twisting my bag a bit and zipper it back up. Looked at her and gave her a very careing look. Resting both arms on her shoulders. Massaging them to make her feel comfortable.

"Haku? How would you like...Like to stay with me? As my daughter...", I asked slowly, making sure I said everything with the purist of hearts. Seeing her widen her eyes and just stare down to the snowey ground. Hoping I didn't upset her or scare her of the offer. Then felt her shoulders starting to shake and then looked up at me. With closed eyes and tears streaming down her cheeks. Using my thumbs to whipe away the tears, while she tackle me down to the ground. Hugging me tightly causing me to lose some air.

Saying yes and nodding her head vigiously. Just hugging me tightly afraid that I will leave her alone. So after getting her to settle down, while giving her the green vest. That I loved to wear when I wasnt working. Telling her if there was anything that she needed and forgot that she was an orphan. But still smiled at me, saying she didn't need anything. Now that she found me.

Which made me just felt glad that I ran into her and found her. I looked to the sky and just whisper out. "Thanks mom..."

5 weeks later

We finally arrived the hidden leaf village. I was carrying Haku on my back, who have fell asleep and wrap her arms around my neck. Resting against my shoulder, while I looked at her calm and peaceful face. Remembering all the good times I gave her, during the trip back to the village.

Now she was sporting a brown long sleeve pants and a brown short sleeve shirt. Which I have to say, fits her quite nicely. I just smiled more. While turning my head back forward, seeing the large village gates. Showing the village from the inside.

Before entering fully into the city, I showed and explain the gate guards. About my identity, along with Haku being with me and informing about her being a orphan. Which they nodded and smiled, seeing how even if I am an Anbu. I still show hearts to those in need. I remember the guards, they help me alot when I was a Genin. Giving me a map to examine with. Along with giving me directions and locations of where my Sensei and Teammates have gone too.

They were glad, that I kept my concerns and feelings when ranking to Anbu. Since Anbu aren't sappouse to show any signs or hints of emotion. While coming into the city and stopping for a breif stop, sensing that Sho appearing right infront of me. Before he could brief me about my probation ending couple weeks ago.

He slightly point at the girl that was sleeping on my back. Which I shook my head and knew I had alot to explain, of what happen during my travel to my mom's grave and back. Lifting Haku over my body and holding her bridal style. I asked Sho if he could watch over her for me, then telling him about me adopting her. This gave a funny reaction from him, with his eyes bulged and looked down at the girl.

Took me awhile, but manage to explain everything to him in less than 5 minutes. Accepting and acknowledge that it was me and not some...Crazy imposter that he imagine up.

"In all honesty Mia. You never shown this side of you before", he quickly added. While holding the girl for me, since she was starting to get heavy from holding her for a long period. I was really, really threaten to thrash him right there and now. Sure I may not show emotions or concerns. During our Anbu missions, but doesn't mean I'm a heartless, cold person...

Okay so, maybe my temper can some what get the best of me. But come on...Any one with half a brain. Knows that if someone is short temper, its very easy to set them off. Like a ticking time bomb.

Any way, I explain to him to take Haku to my house. So this way I can go and visit the Hokage, about adopting Papers. He nodded and said was very proud of me. Also remarking how, the old Mia is still in that Icy shell of mine. Oooh, if he wasn't my friend. I would have pulverize him right there and now. But that wouldn't be good on my end and going back into doing probation again and those...Dreaded D-Rank missions again...Man do I hate that cat...

Couple minutes haves pass. Since my encounter with Sho. Standing infront of the secretary of the Hokage office, seeing her writing and signing diffrent papers. At the same time, sitting them on a huge pile of paper work to the side of her desk. I swear? How many papers and folders does the Hokage need to sign and approve?

Who ever wants this job, must be really, really nuts and...Did I hear someone shouted..."Believe it"? Ignoring that, I just took a glance around the brown room. With some photos and pictures of the village of the old days and preseant time. Along with faces of Hokages hanging on the walls. With some of them having smiles and some of them, giving a smirk with serieousness behind them.

Also seeing some green curtains gently moving from the slight breeze. While the birds were chirping happily through out the skies. I heard the secretary sneeze a bit. While using her right hand and waving for me to enter. Which it felt like hours of waiting...Okay exagerating. It was only 15 minutes...Man was I always this impatiant?

Entering the double brown doors, walking in the room. With the same view of Hokage behind his desk, with mountain of papers. Smoking his pipe, looking through a paper he was holding. His eyes carefully scanning through them. So far, so good. No elders in...Aw gosh darn it...They were sitting on the two chairs.

Seeing Hokage looking up to me, with a slight surprise look on his face. Was I really gone for that...Okay I was gone for a month...Letting out a sigh. I slowly walked up to his desk, with determination of adopting Haku.

"Mia? What brings you here?" He asked, with a raise eye brow. Thats right heh...I never visit the hokage, unless it was for a Anbu mission with my team. Seeing me come in here without my Anbu gear and out of the blue. Might felt a little weird in his perspective, including the Elders. Telling the hokage of my visit to the land of waves, along with finding Haku.

Who was an orphan of the village. Brought her here so that she can live a happy life in the leaf village, while also explaining. How I would like to adopt her and raise her like my own child. Seeing the expression on all 3 of them was priceless. The elders were...Well surprised and showed dare I say...Proudness behind those eyes, wow I must've really miss judge them...On second thought? I never once heard any ill intent from them. Just their way of trying to defend the leaf village, I guess elders see the cilvillions and ninjas as a home.

The Hokage though was the most priceless one of all. His face wide with shock, including his eyes threaten to come out of the eye socket. His pipe that he always smoke from, fell on the desk and roll to the floor. Causing him to quickly shook his head out of his, stupor. Leaning forward a bit with his hands folded. And so here comes the bad news...

"Now...", he started, I notice he was trying very heard and thinking through his thoughts. Trying his best to say this right. But it won't matter, I won't leave this office for a 'no' answer. "You do relize? That if you adopt Haku...That means you will be fully responsible for her?" He continue. Which I nodded my head...I swear, I'm not a little kid. I'm a grown woman. "And that, your Ninja career will sometime get in the way, of taking care of Haku. Along with the ninja work. Doesn't pay that well in the funds department?" Okay...Maybe I haven't thought this thoroughly as planned...

Looking down in thought and remembering how happy I felt. Of wanting to raise Haku and treat her like my own child. Made me feel like it would be something my mother would've done in a heart beat. As people says to me...I have the spirit of a ninja. But the heart of my mother. Looking up back to the Hokage, with a nod. "I understand the risk Hokage. But I truly want to raise Haku and help her...Its...What my mother would do", I said at the end.

Which all 3 of them nodded in agreement and have also told me. The same sentence, with my heart being of my mother. Going through his thoughts, planning something. How I know? Well if you been working with the Hokage for a long time, you start to pick up something from spending brief times and hanging around him. His eye brows will constantly go up and down, then one side will lower and the other will raise itself. His lips will sometime, shift left and right. Meaning he was moving his toung against his mouth.

Then pieace of resistonce. He would chuckle and have the most happiest of all face. Including the elders, chuckling. As if all 3 of them, were in sync and plan the samething. All of the sudden, my stomach was having butterflys. I never get nervous and when I am nervous,that useually means. I aint expecting things at all or during missions. Would warn my teammates, that its something we all would have to be becareful of.

Seeing one of the bewers opening from his desk. Moving his hands inside, shuffling around things. Which I could hear paper clips, pens, some loose change. Which was weird...And a book, which no doubt. Is the icha icha book, that I heard rumors. That he secretly reads during his free time...No wait, that sounded more like his crystal orb moving...Not his book. My bad, can be off sometimes.

Then heard him said 'ah ha'. Succeeding in finding something he was looking for. Which I slowly shift my eyes to the right, seeing the two elders. Nodding at me with big grins. Okay, what do they have plan? Looking forward again and with wide eyes and shock on my face. He was sliding a paper a cross his desk. With Adoption in bold letters at the top of the paper. I...I couldn't believe it!?
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"Here ya go Mia...All you have to do, is fill this out. With your signature and name. Along with Haku's name and birthplace. Along with Age, Gender and Birthday." he explain, along with the Elders also adding in their explanation to me. Knowing the 3. They probably knew, that I never done adoption before and was very helpful. That they were taking their time to help me, get things started. With a bow and a thank you. I turn around and left the building and office.

Little did I know though. The extra paper he gave me. Was a Jonin sensei application, which I wasn't really paying attention at the time. Thought was part 2 for the adoption.

30 minutes after meeting with the Hokage. I came home, with everyone standing infront of my house. Everyone wondering what the heck was going on inside. I heard crashes and banging and screaming from the inside. Which all the screaming was coming from Sho. Which is weird? He never screams...Then it clicked to me! Haku must've woken up and got scared! I quickly ran inside, by asking everyone to move, which they did.

After bursting through the door, almost tripping over my own two feet. Shouting. "Haku...Huh?" Which, my eyes blink with my pupils getting small at the scene infront of me, along with every one else outside the door. In the corner of the room, was Sho with his blade out. Trying to dodge and deflect every signle silver wear that came flying at him. With almost perfect aim. His mask was still on, so he must have activated his eyes. Cause I too was having a hard time, keeping up with the projectiles.

Wondering who was attacking him. I shouted out. "Where's Haku!", which the response I got was everything stopping. Then a blur came crashing into me, hugging me tightly as we landed on the floor. It was definitaly Haku...Then looked up and saw a butcher knife. Stopping a couple inches from a personal spot was for Sho. Who slowly stood straight up and step over the butcher knife. Panting and breathing for the first time. His life and being a man, was threaten.

I looked down at the scare girl. Well...Scared and giving death glares to Sho. Then without warning everyone and including me, went into a fitful of laughter. From what I saw and what the villager saw. Was hilarious, how Sho couldn't contain the girl. That was hugging me, from almost killing him. It was hilarious. "Serves you right for teasing me all those years", I chuckle out, which Sho slash Dragon just huff and poofed away in a sushin.

After that little fiasco, I'm sure Haku will probably be scared of any one. With a mask on, which I inform the other Anbu members, that if they were going to visit my house. If any means that Haku is there outside or inside the House. I told them to make sure, to notify me before hand. Before walking or stepping through the door. Of course Cat asked me why, then everyone went into a laughing fit. With Dragon sitting at a table, glareing at everyone. Because of the little mishap at my house. After settling down, every nodded and agree that they would. Take their masks off before entering the house.

Now here I am with Haku. At the park, telling her to go and enjoy herself and not to worry. About making friends, which she smiled and happily ran to the playground and started to have fun. I figure she needed this after the scene at the house. Also I needed some place to focus and write out the Adoption papers.

I started to sense more people coming, which were from Clans. Started entering the palyground with their children, who were happily running around and enjoying themselfs. Along with couple others, wanting to play with Haku. I took a quick peak at her and saw her laughing and smiling along with. Choji Akimichi, Kiba Inazuka, Shikamaru Nara and Naruto uzumaki.

I was really glad that Naruto took the time and bravery. To ask if he could play with Haku. Which she accepted with open arms, and let the boy play including the others. Even Ino got into the fun. I then felt someone leap over the bench I was sitting on. Resting and laying her arms on the top of the bench. With her toothy grin too me...It was Tsume Inazuka. The head clan of the Inazukas. While Inoichi just leans against the bench.

These two were my Genin partners, back in my childhood. When ever our Sensei would train one of the two. The two of them, would disobey orders and help me train too. I would've been lost without these two. Tsume and her roughness and tough attitude, was hard to get by. But became really close friends with me...Though wish her teasing would cease to exist. Even till today, when she haves free time. Will always find a way to tease me.

Inochi. Before getting paired up with Shika and Choza. Forming the first Ino-Shika-Cho formation. Help me study and practice with my Jutsu and Chakra training exercise, even teaching both me and Tsume how to water walk. Boy was that embarrassing, since both of us had trouble. Keeping our chakra under control, along with having a slight large Chakra reserves. Okay so Hyuugas don't have big chakra reserves, but you have to remember. That I am a half hyuuga. My mom fell in love with another ninja, although my father died. Before I was even born. So I don't know what clan he was in nor if he was a normal citizen.

"So, Mia what brings you here? Studying future ninjas again?", Tsume asked. Which if you would know, I always come to the park. To watch children play and stuff, but also. Curious if there are any future ninjas that would become good. See Tsume and Inochi knew about my dream of becoming sensei. They would always visit me here at the park. To help me figure out, which child will become good canditates. Though they also said, that they could always get Ino and Kiba to become my students. But always turn them down and said let them, join a team normally. By test resaults.. Seeing Tsume finding me looking at Haku, with that Mother like careness.

She let out a whistle, while making me blush and close my eyes in irritation. She is so going to..."Some one been busy! I didn't know you got married", she said smirking at me. While I could sense Inochi shaking his head, already figuring out the situation at hand.

"Tsume...If Mia was married, we would already see a Child, that looks exhactly like her. Or the matter of taking days off as Anbu" He said, crossing his arms over his chest. Watching Ino and Haku. With Ino fixing up Haku's hair, while some how convincing naruto and the others to help out. Minus Kiba of course as he was playing with Akamaru. When he tried to explain Haku about his statuse as Clan heir. It went over Haku's head. Paying more attention at Akamaru than Kiba, which the boys ego drop down badly. Making his mom laugh out and boasting. Causing him to growl and grumble. Shouting to his mom to be quiet.

Then blushed, after I heard Tsume saying that. Clan heirs don't go and wet the bed. Loud as possible, causing everyone to laugh in the park. With Kiba pulling his hood over his head, whining out 'mom'. Before I could continue writing, Tsume quickly took the papers. To see what I was filling out.

I knew it was futile, to get it back from Tsume. Consisdering her strength is alot better than mine...If you don't believe me? Try taking her on with her Beast Mimickry and combine with her ninja hound. You will be dead ASAP.

"Ah. Okay, so that girl. With the brown cloths", she exclaim. While pointing towards Haku. Who was now playing Tag with the others. "Name is Haku? And you found her at the land of waves?", she asked me, making Inochi turn his eyes towards me. While I nodded my head, explaining them what happen. Which she playfully punch my arm. Causing me to wince a bit. While Inochi patted my back and said, that my mother would've done the samething.

"Whos Adopting whom now?", asked the head clan of the Hyuugas. Hiashi Hyuuga. Which everyone including me smile. Knowing that he brought Hinata to the park, to enjoy herself. Poor girl, havent got 2 seconds in. without Ino pulling her towards Haku and introducing them to each other. He sat down next to me, while Tsume handed him the papers.

Seriously! All I have to do, is finalize the signature and Hakus name. Is all I asked! Seeing Hiashi carefully scan through the papers. Chuckling to himself...Yes my hand writing skills...Aint the best. "I see your handwriting is normal in your standards", He joke. Causing me to let out a sigh and lower my head. I prefer print than cursive any day. So yeah...I wasn't really taught how to write that style.

"Oh? Haku haves a Kekki Kenkai?" He asked, surprised and surprising Tsume and Inochi. Which I just nodded my head at the three. Now they all understood why I brought Haku here, since the history of Land of Waves was big. He then handed me the paper back, while taking the extra one for me. Just in case the Hokage or...In our hopes, the Elders didn't plan a CRA for Haku to take once she was older. Tsume and Inochi standing up, to look over Hiashi shoulders to get a better look of the paper.

It...Felt like one those Anime moments for me...If the camera were to face us infront. Would be something in a comical way. With me writting down my own papers, while sneaking some glances at the three. Who just smiled at me and back to the paper, with slight chuckles and smiles ever growing. While I just tap my foot. wanting to know what is funny. But gave up and work back to my papers. Man, I'm not even half done with this...Good thing I took Haku to the park, or eles she would be like me and be irritaited to just be inside the house.

It gotten later and everyone by now left the park. With their children, along with Inochi, Tsume and Hiashi saying their good byes to me. While Kiba, Shikamaru, Choji, Naruto, Ino and Hinata. Said fare well to Haku.

I wasn't really paying attention with my surroundings, getting all worked up with the papers. I finally got to the final part of the paper and let out a big breath of fresh air. While stretching my arms above my head. Closing the said papers onto the folders, that I got from the office. Getting up from the bench. I felt...Dread. Thats not a good sign for me.

"Haku?" I shouted out and as I fear. She didn't respond back! Oh no! Not good, not good! I panick and ran all over the park. Shouting out her name over and over, I looked up trees and look under a rock...Don't ask. This can't be happening! This just can't be happening! My stupid luck, why now! I look at the lake...There were kids but no Haku. I look at the jungle gym. Kids but none of them were my kid.

My heart was racing fast. My thoughts were thinking straight. Heck I wasn't thinking straight, she still new to the village. Something bad must've happen, man, oh man! I...I should've kept a better eye on her! She disappear out of sight and now shes probably lost and alone! How could I let this happen! I was now running through the village, with neon lights and street lights turned on. With the night shift shops open and bars serving their foods. Made me even more worried!

I went through each and individual ally way, hoping to find Haku...My daughter some where in this huge city. She didnt get any chance. To navigate through the city or a map of the place. She probably trap...Or kidnap...Scratch that thought, this village may have its bad side. But no kidnappers have ever been notify in the village...Except foreign ninja. But there arent any here. I even check the bad part of Konoha with my KI intent at a dangerously high level, causing any one who would mess with me. Faint from feeling it.

I check houses, I check abandon buildings, I even check behind dumbsters, sign posts, under bridges. Any where. But she wasn't popping up, I started looking through roof tops and hidden passages that I only know about, I even check the dreaded Uchiha compound. No where! I am now turn from panick. To Freaking out and going beserk. My heart was breaking every passing moment. I was litterly crying tears as they fall from my eyes.

I check all over konoha with all my Anbu speed. But no where...Not at the hokage, not at the messenger bird house. Not at resturants, hotels, complexes. I even looked through both the men and women bath houses. No where in sight, everyone in the village was also helping out. Knowing and remembering who I came back with. Okay so it took them awhile, for who I was looking for. But seeing me search through even the most darkest places, allys and resturants. They knew that I was looking for Haku.

Then it clicked with Ayame at Ichiraikus ramen shop. Shouted from the counter.

"Maybe Naruto-kun might know where she went?". She shouted, which the villagers, although didn't like Naruto or what he holds. All nodded with smiles, cause they know Naruto can spot something out of place and knows the village like the back of his hand. All asked me if I knew where I last saw him, which was...AT THE PARK! And they were right, Naruto may be an Orphan. But he knows the village layouts more than the Hokage and Anbu's put together. Which they smiled and to my surprise, went to search for naruto and let me know if hes any where eles. This got Naruto's trust ratio up a bit more, I was still crying and thank Ayame for the advice and darted off to find Naruto.

It was still 7pm. Knowing Naruto, he won't leave till around 7:30Pm...I hope. After arrving there around 7:50pm. I just spotted him about to leave the playground, so I slow down my speed a bit. So I won't frighten the boy and jog up to him. Seeing him a bit frighten at me, but blink and smile. Remembering me from the park and surprising me, saying.

"Hey, your that Anbu who help me out, during my birthday! Black Panther right?", he asked. Close with the name. Though Black panther has a nice...NO! Haku first, names later. I quickly and softly grab his shoulders, seeing me crying strike his heart bad. Asking me if I was alright and if there was anything he could do to help me. I nodded my head as, best as possible. Naruto is my only hope now...

"Naruto, I want you to be honest and help me with this question. It involves Haku", which his face surprised me and harden. Saying he will do anything he can. So I asked him, if he haves seen Haku and blinked his eyes. Looking at his eyes, I notice alot of things. I can read eyes very good and clearly and what they were telling me. Is that she didn't know Haku went some where?

"Of course! Heh, I knew you probably didn't hear us from the park. Since you were busy with that Ado..Adu..Adu?" Which I chuckle slight and said Adoption paper and snap his fingers and nodded. "yeah! She asked me if there was any rare flowers. That she could give to you and I explain that. While I go to the Hokage mountain. I always find these out of place flowers".

He smiled while blushing a bit, I knew that one of his hobbys was gardening. Though not sure if its a lie or not? But he does like flowers, as I seen him stop by the shop of the Yamanakas flower shop here and there.

Getting the direction and infomation I needed, I hug the poor boy and thank him. Leaving him confuse and just grins while bringing both his arms behind his head. Shouting that he glad he could help. Boy Naruto, you help more ways than you think. You help me re-unite with my daughter...

After finally reaching to the top of the Hokage mountain, while sending a shadow clone. To the villagers, saying Naruto did knew where she was and help me found her. Which one of them pop and got the memory from it. Hearing how some of the citizens cheer and said Good job naruto. Well now everyone that lives around Ichirakus, will treat him with more respect. Atleast some of them. One half was the ninja side. The other half were civillians. Though 30 Civillians out of 50 Ninjas, was good amount of respect for Naruto. He haves to earn the rest of them by himself.

Sitting at the edge of the mountain. Was definitaly Haku, humming along and gathering the rare to find flowers. Which Naruto was right, they only exist at the Land of Waves. Called water flowers. My eyes were probably red from all the crying and running around the village looking for Haku. But here she is...With hardly a care, picking flowers to bring them and thank me for probably taking her in...I notice her head jerk up a bit and giggle. Okay...Something I don't get?

"Mom...I...well...", she stutter while turning around with that smile on her face and worryment. Haku your worried? Then again...I would be too if I disa... "I couldn't find our house...Are you mad at me?", she asked with her head lower a bit. While kicking at the dirt. I just stood and laugh really loud along with Haku.

Thats why Haku was worried! She wasn't scared at being lost in the village. She just didn't remember where we live. After explaining to me of Naruto and Ino talking about the Water flower, which Ino explain more for the two of them. Surprise and at awe that Naruto found something like that. Told Haku that it would be a perfect gift for me, saying how I love those type of flowers. Which Naruto adding his two scents, saying that the Anbu that help him, thank him for that same type of flower. Which was true, he gave me the same flowers. For helping him out in the village. He too got lost a bit, forgetting where he lived.

And Ino was right. I always come into her parents shop. Asking if they have any new batch of Water flowers, that I always called them Snow roses when I was a kid. For my mom's grave, which I was sadden at the time. Saying they didn't had any, along with Ino telling me, that she haves seen a boy with Blond hair with them. Even though that discription wasn't useful at the time.

During scouting around the village as an Anbu. I ran into said boy, who was Naruto. Saying he couldn't find his way home. I asked him what he was doing out in the hyuuga district. Then explain that one of the kids in school, said a princess was capture by evil men. Which he pointed at the guards, who were smiling and chuckling under their breaths. Trying so hard to not burst into laughter. The kids must've trick Naruto and wanted him to get into more trouble, but seeing the smiles and chuckling hyuugas. They probably played along with Naruto and guided him to Hinata. Boy that was funny at the time.

Which now this time, it was Haku who was the princess and I as her mother. Going through teeth and nails to try and rescue and find her. Oh boy...My day was long and tired along with fun and excitement. My god, my anbu missions were never like this. This is why I want to be sensei, to enjoy what my students do.

Running and hugging Haku close to me, with a big smile on my face. Just letting the tears fall. I told Haku to always talk to me, before going some where on her own. Or atleast till she figure out the layouts of the village. Which she hug back and cried happy tears, after telling her. That she is now...

Haku Hyuuga, Daughter of Mia Hyuuga...OH and yes, I accepted the flower and walk home with my daughter. My new life as Parent, begins on the new day.
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My fanfic is nothing if we compare length o.o
There's a lot of spelling mistakes in this, but it doesn't ruin much.
The plot is good, i wonder who will be on the team? O:
Great FF, it's awesome to see someone writing this style, and doing it good ^_^
 

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My fanfic is nothing if we compare length o.o
There's a lot of spelling mistakes in this, but it doesn't ruin much.
The plot is good, i wonder who will be on the team? O:
Great FF, it's awesome to see someone writing this style, and doing it good ^_^
Well, lol I still say yours beat mine XD I don't think, I could ever pull off an Alter verse, with them in school and stuff.

Yeah, I must've gone through each individual chapters, like 5-10 times. Trying to find things that were miss spell. So your going to run into those. Though luckily their not that bad lol.

Glad you enjoy it! Hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters XD Though team placement along with old fashion naruto humor, is going to be more of surprises.

I like to use minor characters alot in my fanfiction. Cause they can surprisingly provide interesting plots and ideas XD Any way, hope you enjoy the rest. While I can't wait to see future chapters from your fanfic ^_^
 
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