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HiddenDemons
Season 1
Chapter 5 – Becoming a Fighter!
(Note: I tried to make this new version of my fanfic, please comment, read my other fanfics, and please tell me if it is better this way or the way it was before. Thanks!)
Characters – Shogun; Kyodu; Baemisui; Three Men sent by Baemisui, their names are Otoko, Josei and Furui (just a small info)
-Well, now that we have arrived, we have to find the caves - said Kyodu while he pulled his blue shorts a little up and removed his katana.
- Yes, you go and search over there and I will search here – said Shogun.
Suddenly, some big stones started falling from the old mountains that surrounded the abandoned village named Mujin.
- What is happening?! – Thought Shogun.
- Are we going to die? – Said Kyodu, trembling while his eyes and body couldn’t move.
- Kyodu, run!! – Said Shogun, while he rushed to save Kyodu who didn’t noticed that a rock was almost crushing him.
- Ah thanks!... – Said Kyodu, embarrassed because he didn’t wanted to be ‘saved’, especially by Shogun.
Shogun and Kyodu try to escape the rocks while running inside an abandoned house.
- Uff, we’re safe! – Said Shogun, after they entered the old and abandoned house.
- Yes, as long as the rocks don’t crush the house. – Thought Kyoru.
- Let’s wait 5 minutes, after that we will check if the rocks started falling – Said Shogun, after sitting in a rusty chair. – Ouch – Yelled Shogun – I sited on top of a nail!
- Ahahah – Kyoru laughs.
For a short moment Shogun and Kyoru heard a loud noise and after that it all became quit and peaceful like it was before the stones started falling.
- I think it stopped – Said Kyoru, uncertain with what he said.
- Yes, I will go check – Said Shogun.
- I will go with you.
They went outside and the rocks stopped falling, after that they saw the caves.
- Hey, there they are! – Said Shogun.
- Yeah, but they are blocked – Said Kyodu while he scratched his head thinking on a solution to remove the rocks that were blocking the way into the caves.
After a long time thinking, Shogun found a solution to that.
- I got it! – Said Shogun, very happy.
- What? – Asked Kyoru.
- Let me explain, when we were in the house, I saw some explosives… - Said Shogun.
- And…? – Asked Kyoru, he didn’t understood what Shogun said.
- And we can use them to blow the entrance of the cave! – Yelled Shogun, angry for Kyoru’s question.
Shogun went back into the house, and brought explosives and a light, he was very nervous because he never used explosives before.
- Well here it is, let me just place the explosives near the entrance and light it – Said Shogun.
Shogun lighted the explosives and got back.
BOOOOOOOOM!!!!
- Ahh , my ears – said Kyodu.
They were getting happier while they were entering the cave…
- Uff, it’s hot in here – Said Shogun, while he remove his black sweatshirt and showed his thin and white body.
- Look, there it is, those shining green rocks! – Yelled Kyodu, amazed.
They get closer to the rocks, and they start feeling powerless, the rocks were emanating some great power, suddenly, Kyodu falls into the ground, *cough* *cough*.
Kyodu! Are you alright? – Asks Shogun trying to get near the rocks.
Yes, go on… - Said Kyoru, his voice was weak and his eyes were almost closed, is he going to die?
Finally, Shogun reaches the stones, he opens his eyes while he bleeds from his nose and mouth. Despite all of that, he was very happy and surprised. He joins hands and makes some sort of shell with them. He puts his hands on the liquid and brings them up to his mouth. While drinking it, he kneeled down and ended up passing out.
In the meantime, Baemisui discovered who the kids that killed his subject Sora were and sent three men after them.
Sometime later, Shogun wakes up, and feels ‘good as new’, he tests his abilities with his Katana, slashing a rock easily, things that a normal human like he was before couldn’t do. He notices that Kyodu is still on the ground and in a ‘Quickstep’ mode he grabbed Kyodu and took him away from those rocks.
Finally, Kyodu wakes up.
What happened? – Said Kyodu, recovering his breath.
You passed out because of the rocks.
What about you – Asked Kyodu.
I succeeded; I became a fighter – Said Shogun, very proud of himself not only for becoming a fighter, but also for surviving to the rocks powers.
…
Shogun… hmm … can you help me to become a fighter too? – Asked Kyodu, embarrassed.
Aha, of course, we are friends… best friends. – Replied Shogun.
Hmm… thanks – Said Kyodu.
Again in a ‘Quickstep’ mode, Shogun took Kyodu near the rocks, where the second drank the weird green liquid and passed out. After that Shogun took him on his shoulders and returned to Jigoku.
Sometime later, the three men sent by Baemisui arrived at Mujin and found some blood on the ground. They weren’t aware of what happened there, but afraid of being executed by Baemisui for not finding them, they started following the footsteps trying to find them…
THE END
Plz comment and tell me if this new way i make fanfic its better than the other. (before - all chat)
Season 1
Chapter 5 – Becoming a Fighter!
(Note: I tried to make this new version of my fanfic, please comment, read my other fanfics, and please tell me if it is better this way or the way it was before. Thanks!)
Characters – Shogun; Kyodu; Baemisui; Three Men sent by Baemisui, their names are Otoko, Josei and Furui (just a small info)
-Well, now that we have arrived, we have to find the caves - said Kyodu while he pulled his blue shorts a little up and removed his katana.
- Yes, you go and search over there and I will search here – said Shogun.
Suddenly, some big stones started falling from the old mountains that surrounded the abandoned village named Mujin.
- What is happening?! – Thought Shogun.
- Are we going to die? – Said Kyodu, trembling while his eyes and body couldn’t move.
- Kyodu, run!! – Said Shogun, while he rushed to save Kyodu who didn’t noticed that a rock was almost crushing him.
- Ah thanks!... – Said Kyodu, embarrassed because he didn’t wanted to be ‘saved’, especially by Shogun.
Shogun and Kyodu try to escape the rocks while running inside an abandoned house.
- Uff, we’re safe! – Said Shogun, after they entered the old and abandoned house.
- Yes, as long as the rocks don’t crush the house. – Thought Kyoru.
- Let’s wait 5 minutes, after that we will check if the rocks started falling – Said Shogun, after sitting in a rusty chair. – Ouch – Yelled Shogun – I sited on top of a nail!
- Ahahah – Kyoru laughs.
For a short moment Shogun and Kyoru heard a loud noise and after that it all became quit and peaceful like it was before the stones started falling.
- I think it stopped – Said Kyoru, uncertain with what he said.
- Yes, I will go check – Said Shogun.
- I will go with you.
They went outside and the rocks stopped falling, after that they saw the caves.
- Hey, there they are! – Said Shogun.
- Yeah, but they are blocked – Said Kyodu while he scratched his head thinking on a solution to remove the rocks that were blocking the way into the caves.
After a long time thinking, Shogun found a solution to that.
- I got it! – Said Shogun, very happy.
- What? – Asked Kyoru.
- Let me explain, when we were in the house, I saw some explosives… - Said Shogun.
- And…? – Asked Kyoru, he didn’t understood what Shogun said.
- And we can use them to blow the entrance of the cave! – Yelled Shogun, angry for Kyoru’s question.
Shogun went back into the house, and brought explosives and a light, he was very nervous because he never used explosives before.
- Well here it is, let me just place the explosives near the entrance and light it – Said Shogun.
Shogun lighted the explosives and got back.
BOOOOOOOOM!!!!
- Ahh , my ears – said Kyodu.
They were getting happier while they were entering the cave…
- Uff, it’s hot in here – Said Shogun, while he remove his black sweatshirt and showed his thin and white body.
- Look, there it is, those shining green rocks! – Yelled Kyodu, amazed.
They get closer to the rocks, and they start feeling powerless, the rocks were emanating some great power, suddenly, Kyodu falls into the ground, *cough* *cough*.
Kyodu! Are you alright? – Asks Shogun trying to get near the rocks.
Yes, go on… - Said Kyoru, his voice was weak and his eyes were almost closed, is he going to die?
Finally, Shogun reaches the stones, he opens his eyes while he bleeds from his nose and mouth. Despite all of that, he was very happy and surprised. He joins hands and makes some sort of shell with them. He puts his hands on the liquid and brings them up to his mouth. While drinking it, he kneeled down and ended up passing out.
In the meantime, Baemisui discovered who the kids that killed his subject Sora were and sent three men after them.
Sometime later, Shogun wakes up, and feels ‘good as new’, he tests his abilities with his Katana, slashing a rock easily, things that a normal human like he was before couldn’t do. He notices that Kyodu is still on the ground and in a ‘Quickstep’ mode he grabbed Kyodu and took him away from those rocks.
Finally, Kyodu wakes up.
What happened? – Said Kyodu, recovering his breath.
You passed out because of the rocks.
What about you – Asked Kyodu.
I succeeded; I became a fighter – Said Shogun, very proud of himself not only for becoming a fighter, but also for surviving to the rocks powers.
…
Shogun… hmm … can you help me to become a fighter too? – Asked Kyodu, embarrassed.
Aha, of course, we are friends… best friends. – Replied Shogun.
Hmm… thanks – Said Kyodu.
Again in a ‘Quickstep’ mode, Shogun took Kyodu near the rocks, where the second drank the weird green liquid and passed out. After that Shogun took him on his shoulders and returned to Jigoku.
Sometime later, the three men sent by Baemisui arrived at Mujin and found some blood on the ground. They weren’t aware of what happened there, but afraid of being executed by Baemisui for not finding them, they started following the footsteps trying to find them…
THE END
Plz comment and tell me if this new way i make fanfic its better than the other. (before - all chat)
i though this one was better, then i will keep doing the play version