Good luck!
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons (which includes... I never found a quick way to explain this, meh), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and, this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and, this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
Another NEVER do in a sentence is use the same word twice. Mix up your vocab say different things that mean the same, but refrain from using the same words often.
LOL! Commas are not your friend (lines 1 and 2). You also repeat yourself sometimes (Lines three and four). Line 5, Personally I would say, We get an understanding/feeling of vs. "We get a feel on"; and , an article isn't needed for tradition in that sentence (take out the "the"). Take out "inside the story" as well while you're at it. Focus on not using the word "story" too much. You follow the next sentence with the same word that started the previous sentence *gasps*; that is a no-no. Do not ever do it! Instead say, My group and I or something along those lines. OMG! (Last sentence of the Paragraph), do I need to tell you what a third is considered? Death Penalty! Also, you forgot the word going between "was to be".
Not bad so far. But tell me if you want me to go further since I'd hate to be here all night and you won't take my criticism.
LOL! OK! I'd love to see the first person who finds my small error though
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and, this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
I was supposed to put *voice of --* then I realized I forgot the show and the actor. So, I left it as is. The exclamation still stands though for emphasis in someone else's voice:shrug:.
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, (to) never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph , but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and , this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and, this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well.
EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
