[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[Mattobi]

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(Kage: Tama) -Shadow Sphere

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(Kage: Tama) -Shadow Sphere
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will gather his chakra into his shadow wich will extend. Afterwards the user will use the chakra in his shadow to form a sphere around his opponent. He will be unable to see anything and won't be able to run out of the shadow.
Note: One must have finished his shadow training.
Note: One must be member of the Nara Clan (Social group).
Note : Can only be used by Nara's.
Note: Can only be used with the permission of MikeyDread.

~Declined: What are the requirement for your jutsu to take effect? Must it connect with your opponent's sword? Elaborate~

(Kage: Tama) -Shadow Sphere

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(Kage: Tama) -Shadow Sphere
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will gather his chakra into his shadow wich will extend. As soon as the user's shadow has connected with the opponent's, the user will use the chakra in his shadow to form a sphere around his opponent. He will be unable to see anything and won't be able to run out of the shadow.
Note: One must have finished his shadow training.
Note: One must be member of the Nara Clan (Social group).
Note : Can only be used by Nara's.
Note: Can only be used with the permission of MikeyDread.

~Declined~ Restrictions?

(Kage: Akumu) -Shadow Nightmare

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(Kage: Akumu) -Shadow Nightmare
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description: After the user has performed the Kage: Tama jutsu he creates tentacles out of the sphere wich surround the opponent to stab him. The user will be able to locate his opponent in the sphere thanks to the chakra in the shadow.
Note: One must have performed Kage: Tama.
Note: One must have finished his shadow training.
Note: One must be member of the Nara Clan (Social group).
Note : Can only be used by Nara's.
Note: Can only be used with the permission of MikeyDread.

~Declined: Kage Tama was declined~

(Kage: Akumu) -Shadow Nightmare

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(Kage: Akumu) -Shadow Nightmare
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description: After the user has performed the Kage: Tama jutsu he creates tentacles out of the sphere wich surround the opponent to stab him. The user will be able to locate his opponent in the sphere thanks to the chakra in the shadow.
Note: One must have performed Kage: Tama.
Note: One must have finished his shadow training.
Note: One must be member of the Nara Clan (Social group).
Note : Can only be used by Nara's.
Note: Can only be used with the permission of MikeyDread.

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~Declined~ Kage: Tama wasn't approved.

(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Nankin momen)- Summoning: Nankeen

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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Kyodaina Nankin momen)- Summoning: Nankeen
Rank: S
Type: Summoning
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: After drawing some blood and performing the seven handseals, the user summons Nankeen. Nankeen has brown feathers and is large enough for an adult to stand on and have enough place to keep his balance. Nankeen can perform wind techniques upto S-rank thanks to his wings. But, the jutsus he can perform are those wich doesn't need handseals. However, when the summoner stands on Nankeen's's back, he can perform the handseals so that Nankeen can use the jutsus.
Note: Only stays on the field for 5 turns
Note: Nankeen' s Wind jutsus count as a move of his summoner.
Note: Can only be used by someone who has signed the Kerstel contract.
Note: Can only be used with the permission of Yoshi..

~Approved~

 

[Kurisutina]

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(Fuuton: Seikūken) - Wind Style: Control of the Air Sphere
Rank: A
Type: Defensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user creates a sphere of air around them mixed with their chakra. The air around it creates a "barrier" that outstretches to the user's arms. When an enemy's attack pierces this barrier, the user can react incredibly quick to the breaking of the barrier and their speed increases due to the air current. The user's mind must be clear when entering the Seikūken and can be done so at the start of a battle. The user can react to A-Rank Taijutsu and B-Rank ninjutsu. Although with the reactions to Ninjutsu, the user can only use Wind jutsu to counter Ninjutsu.
Note: Only stays active for 5 turns
Note: Must be done while calm. (At the Start of the Battle or a turn to enter during a battle.)
Note: The user's speed is increased a huge amount when an object or person pierces the "barrier".
Note: The "barrier" is only in effect while the user is on the ground.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle and the user must wait 5 turns before reentering.

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~Declined~ A similar jutsu already exist, but instead of being a sphere it's up to short range. Also, it needs more strict restrictions. If you want to resubmit make it drastically different.

(Satetsu Guntai) - Iron Sand Army
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user constructs four soldiers made of Iron Sand and they cannot use any techniques besides ones that utilize Iron Sand. They can be used as a medium for Iron Sand jutsu. The Iron Sand soldiers are slow moving and can only take one hit from a B-Rank jutsu. Two of the soldiers together can block an A-Rank jutsu. When all four of them are together, they can block an S-Rank attack.
Note: Soldiers are slow-moving.
Note: Can't go into the air.
Note: Block one B-Rank jutsu by themselves, block an A-Rank move with two, and block one S-Rank jutsu all together.
Note: Only usable once.

~Declined~ Rip off of another technique. I've been accepting those "soldiers" justu for many elements, it's over now.

(Iaijutsu: Zen no Idō) - Art of Drawing The Sword: Moving Zen
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: This type of Iaijutsu has been passed down from generations of samurai and has become an advanced skill known to few samurai in the Land of Iron. After practicing Iaijutsu for extensively long periods of times and building muscle memory of the Iaido motions, the user calms their muscles down with chakra and releases the muscles in their body to a more natural state. The reason they do this is to add a more natural movement to their attacks due to being tensed in a battle. This allows for the forms of Iai they use to become quicker and stronger due to the tension being withdrawn. The ability to relax their muscles and speed up their movements was named after a state of enlightenment and was called the "Moving Zen" because it enlightened the body into a faster speed.
Restrictions:
-This jutsu can only be used once in a battle.
-This jutsu is only usable by Samurai.
-This jutsu requires a quick moment to entire.

~Declined~ Elaborate on the abilities; what kind of speed? Restrictions on how long it last?

 

[Mephistopheles]

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(Raiton: Ten no hikari) 
Lightning Release: Heaven's Light
Rank: S
Type: offence/defence

Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 40

Damage Points: N/A

Description: The user performs the needed set of handseals, then he discharges lightning chakra into the sky, which produces a strong flash of light with the help of solar based light, covering the entire battle-field and temporarily obstructing both the user and their foe's vision. Thus, providing a chance for retreats. 

- Both the user and target gets blurred vision as long this it active

- Can only be used twice per battle

- No A-rank Raiton and above next turn.

- The jutsu lasts for 1 turn


~Declined~ A flash that last for one turn? Work that out and take out the part about using "solar based light", doesn't really make any sense in the context you used it.

(Genjutsu: Koe) - Illusion Technique: Voices

Rank: S

Type: Defence/Offence 

Range: Long

Chakra Cost: 40 

Damage Points: N/A

Description: The unique illusion technique,makes the foe think that the user has some how taken control over his whole body. whilst in actual sense the user casts an illusion on him/ her making him/her hear voices and at the same time obeying them. however, this technique is not that strong for it only works on bodies with less chakra e.g clones. Which makes it useless ,as the foe would disperse the clone noticing any suspicious move.

- Can be used twice per battle.

- Lasts as long as the clone isn't dispersed.

- The clone's moves count as the users move per turn.

~Declined do not resubmit~ Not only is this jutsu OP in what it does, but it doesn't work either. Clones have the same amount of chakra as their creators since the Clone techniques divide the user's chakra equally between him and the clones he create

(Genjutsu: Sasayaki) - Illusion Technique: Whispers
Rank: A

Type: Defence/Offence 

Range: Short/Long

Chakra Cost: 30 

Damage Points: N/A

Description: After the opponent is trapped in this Genjutsu, he will start to hear whispers around him, distracting him as he tries to find out who is talking and where it’s coming from. With every turn this Genjutsu is still active, the whispers will be louder, disturbing the opponent.
- Note: The Genjutsu lasts until it’s broken or the fight ended, whichever comes first.
- Note: Can only be used twice per battle
- Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

~Declined~ I like the idea, but you have to restrict the number of turns it last and explain how loud it would get near the end of it.

(Doton: Sokonashi Pitto no Iwagakure) – Earth Release: Bottomless Pit of Iwagakure
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 65
Description: The user performs two handseals (Ram → Rabbit) and stamps on the ground, creating big spikes that emerges with high speed from the ground before and on both sides of the opponent, forcing them to either jump backwards or upwards, while at the same time a huge pit is created behind the opponent without them knowing it. As the user jumps backwards he will fall into the bottomless pit.
- Note: The user must have mastered Doton.
- Note: The jutsu can only be used trice per battle.
- Note: The jutsu can only be performed while the users feet touch earth.
- Note: Can only be taught by Leaf.

~Declined~ Again, great idea but it just need some work. How big is the pit? Is it immediately behind the enemy? Make it reasonable (no 50m wide pit).

 

[Drizzy]

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Katon: Tanjou Za Kishi (Fire Release: Birth Of The Knight)
Type:Attack/Defense
Rank: A-Forbidden
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:30 (+20 depending on the charged turns)
Damage Points:60 to 90
Description: The user performs six handseals, finishing off with a clap of the hands, the user then focuses his/her chakra, releasing a large amount of chakra from the body, by manipulating the chakra, a cloak is formed. The user then exhalesmore chakra, either short or mid ranged in front of him. The fire builds up, burning throughout the oxygen to form an image of a fiery armored knight, with a hexagon shaped flaming shield and a flaming sword. The knight is displayed from his waist up.There are three different levels of the knight.
Level One: A ranked versionThe knight has only the flaming shield, which can deflect up to B rank water techniques as the water would just evaporate upon contact. The shield is placed in front of the user to protect him, the user is not harmed by this heat because of the cloak of chakra used .
Level Two:S ranked TechniqueThe knight has both a flaming sword and the flaming shield, the sword can perfom any fire technique A rank and below, if the jutsu requires a handseal, the user would perform it. The chakra cloak can successfully resist the heat for the S ranked Version, the shield can now block A ranked water techniques.
Level Three:Forbidden Version:The fiery armored knight then gains maximum power, as the ground below burns to devastation, this version boosts all fire techniques used by the sword by 5 damage points, this version can only be used for two of the five turns, as the fire begins to affect the user, draining out more chakra, The flaming shield can now block S ranked water techniques two times per battle.
Note:
~Only Sannin Rank and higher have access to the Jutsu
~Requires to be taught by ~Drizzy~
~Can only be used once per battle
~Stays on the field for 5 turns
~ no water jutsu for the rest of the battle by the original user
~Forbidden ranked version requires the space of two moves

~Declined: OP and as already been done, but less powerful~

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Fuuton:torune-do rasen (Wind Release: Tornado Spiral)
Type:Supplaementary
Rank:B
Range:Short- Long
Chakra Cost:25
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user, focuses their wind chakra, creating rapid rotations around the lower section of the body, this rotation forms a spiralling tornado shaped gust of wind which is used to quickly transport the user to another location. This technique can also be used in mid air.
Note:
~can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined~ Define "transport". Are you teleporting? being moved slowly? Fast?

-Custom Summoning-
~Dinosaur, already searched the thread if existed,,results: no~

Summoning Animal: Dinosaur
Scroll Owner: ~Drizzy~
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: Jinbo [below]
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:Matrix [Below]

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Dinosaurs are a diverse group of animals that were the dominant terrestrial vertebrates for over 160 million years, from about 230 million years ago until the end of the Cretaceous (about 65 million years ago), when the Cretaceous–Paleogene extinction event led to the extinction of most dinosaur species at the close of the Mesozoic era. The fossil record indicates that birds evolved within thero pod dinosaurs during the Jurassic period. Some of them survived the Cretaceous–Paleogene extinction event, including the ancestors of all modern birds. Consequently, in modern classification systems, birds are considered a type of dinosaur—the only group of which that has survived to the present day.

Dinosaurs are a diverse and varied group of animals, birds, at over 9,000 species, are the most diverse group of vertebrate besides fish. Scientists have identified over 500 distinct generations and more than 1,000 different species of dinosaurs. Dinosaurs are represented on every continent by both extant species and fossil remains. Some dinosaurs are herbivorous, others carnivorous. Many species possess elaborate display structures such as horns or crests, and some prehistoric groups developed even more elaborate skeletal modifications such as bony armor. Avian dinosaurs have been the planet's dominant flying vertebrate since the extinction of the pterosaurs, and evidence suggests that all ancient dinosaurs built nests and laid eggs much as species do today. Although generally known for the large size of some species, most dinosaurs were human-sized or even smaller.

Dinosaurs can be generally described as terrestrial reptiles with limbs held erect beneath the body, that existed from the Late Triassic (fto the Late Cretaceous (going extinct at the end of the Maastrichtian.Many prehistoric animals are popularly conceived of as dinosaurs, but are not classified scientifically as dinosaurs. Dinosaurs were the dominant terrestrial vertebrates of the Mesozoic, especially the Jurassic and Cretaceous. Other groups of animals were restricted in size and niches, mammals, for example, rarely exceeded the size of a cat, and were generally rodent-sized carnivores of small prey.

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(Kuchiyose) Summoning:Jinbo The T-Rex
Type:Attack/Defence/Supplementary
Rank:S
Range:short- long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user performs a chain of six handseals, then, with a clap of the hands, a dinosaur is summoned, Jinbo, the summoning Boss, is a male gender,T-Rex dinosaur who can perform any Earth based technique A rank and lower, for the ones requiring handseals, the user performs them, and the dinosaur releases the attack. Jimbo is black, with white stripes on his back, he also has blood red eyes and a Earth Symbol tattoo on is back. His hard rough skin can deflect kunai and shuriken. His long tail can also be used to launch the user to to mid or long range.
Note:
-Usable twice per battle
-Stays on the field for 4 turns
-Needs to have signed Dinosaur contract
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined do not resubmit~

Fuuton:torune-do rasen (Wind Release: Tornado Spiral)
Type:Supplementary
Rank:B
Range:Short- Long
Chakra Cost:25
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user, focuses their wind chakra, creating rapid rotations around the lower section of the body, this rotation forms a spiralling tornado shaped gust of wind which is used to quickly transport the user [it races across the ground/air].
Note:
~can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined~ Precise whether you "become" part wind or are simply transported and add restrictions on the speed and usage. Also make it clear whether or not it can be used against your opponent.
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Lightning Release:Lightning Stabilization (Raiton:Raikou Anteika)
Type: Defence
Rank: A
Range:short
CHakra cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user coats himself in a suit of chakra, once the chakra is formed, any Lightning technique B rank and lower will be absorbed and stored in the body. The Lightning when stored, will cause the body to be instantly paralyzed for a period of one full turn. The user is vulneerable for all incomming attacks during this time.The Lightning will then be released in the form of a bolt up into the sky just to release the energy
-Can only be aught by ~Drizzy~
-Requires the mastery of Lightning

~Declined~ Restriction?
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Earth Release: Earth Marbles (Doton:koudo ohajiki)
Type:Attack
Rank:S Rank
Range: Short- Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user performs six handseals, he then stomps his foot onto the ground, channeling his doton chakra throughout the Earth, the chakra is then focused at any point below the opponent, almost instantly, with a single hand gesture made by the user, a great number of holes are formed in the ground, hundreds of small marbles of earth emerge from the holes at rapid speeds, constantly hitting he opponent from below, the heavy force of the rock marbles can cause severe damage to the body.
-Can only be used two times per battle
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Approved~ Made it two times per battle

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Chakra Vortex: [kadou]
Rank:A
Type: Defence
Range:Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description:The user clasps his hands together, using his chakra to release a chakra vortex which spins around the user, which is capable of restricting wind circulation around the user.
-Can only be used three times per battle.

~Declined~ Make it a Wind technique. Normal chakra is weaker then elemental chakra so there's no reason for this technique to stop wind. Also, work on the name (follow the template).

 

[Fomo]

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Summoning Animal: Reindeer
Scroll Owner: Akira & Keyaki Bios
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Gurōbā
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None

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Name: {Tonakai Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Gurōbā} Reindeer Summoning- Grover
Rank: S Rank
Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Grover, the boss of all reindeer, is formed drastically matured and more stag-like than any other reindeer. Grover's size is that of a full sized reindeer. His antlers have grown and branched out being able to pierce human skin quite easily. His fur in this form is also notably fluffier and heightens his sense of awareness, of whats in the air, because its abnormal fur serves as receptors. During battle, Grover usually uses his incredible speed to run across the battlefield to dodge an enemy's attack or otherwise. During any other time, Grover is completely disguised in this form as he usually looks like a pet. This form also allows him to track his friends or enemies more easily thanks to the reindeer's high sense of smell.
~ Gurōbā is able to speak the human tongue in this form, similar to a few other boss summoning animals.
~ This is considered Gurōbā's Walk Point, meaning he has many more Transformation Techniques in store.

~Approved~

 

[Sharingdork]

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(Raiton: Kaminari no ​​Yumi) Lightning Style: Thunder Bow
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user picks up a stick, or other long object at the center (if using a bladed weapon, it can be on the handle), and then places their other hand in a fist next to it. The fist then creates a chakra string, which is then pulled back, turning the stick into a makeshift bow. The user then conducts their lightning chakra through the bow and lets go of the string, shooting a bolt of lightning at the target.
Note: ~Can only be used three times per battle
~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

~Declined~ Go on Wikipedia and check how a bow works. Than, work on your description and resubmit. Also, elaborate on how many arrows you can shoot with it and how long the bow is active on the field.

(Shōkandeatta) Ranged Summoning
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user will place their blood on an object of desire, and then place the object in a desired loctation. Afterwards, the user will weave the handseals for a summoning, summoning the creature to where the user's blood is instead of where the user is.
Note: ~Can only be used three times per battle

~Cannot be used to summon more than one summoning at a time
~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

~Declined do not resubmit~ The blood is used to be spread on a summoning seal, it is not the medium used for the summon.

 

[Migualon J.J.]

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(Tes-Oite-Pojettos Mo-Do) - Hands-In-Pockets Mode

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Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (-10 each turn it is active)
Damage points: N/A (+5 to Taijutsu and Kaito´s Taijutsu that doesn´t use hands and uses legs)
Description: The user puts his hands into pockets and focuses all the chakra from his hands into the rest of his body, and mainly into his legs. Thanks to this, the user´s strength in legs increases. Logically, the user cannot use any Jutsu that requires hands or hand seals, cause if he puts his hands from his pockets, than this mode ends.
This mode has been found by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ when he was too tired to use his hands in Taijutsu so he decided to make use of the chakra from his hands, he than made some techniques which can only be used in this mode.


Note.
*Can only be used once per battle
*This mode lasts only 4 turns
*Only in this mode the user can use Hands-In-Pockets techniques (power bonus from this mode DOESN´T work with these techniques)
*The user can use every jutsu that doesn´t need handseals or hands

~Declined~ Similar technique exist based on Sanji's fighting style in the manga One Piece.

 

[Scorps]

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Genjutsu: Akuma Houyou | Ilussionary Arts: Demon Hug
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short to Mid
Chakra: 30 (+10 next turn to keep active)
Damage: 60 (at the end of the 2 turns)
Description:
The user makes 3 simple hand seals (Boar+Serpent+Rat) and makes the enemy feel as if he's being tightly squeezed; as if pressure is being applied to every point of his body, rendering him restraint and unable to move. The pressure on the enemy's body is so great that if he doesn't dispel the illusion in 2 turns he'll have trouble breathing and will eventually faint. To maintain the illusion, the user has to keep the Rat hand seal performed and stay still on the same place.

Note: Can only be used twice
Note2: Has to be taught by Scorps
Note3: Can't use Genjutsu in the same turn or the next
Note4: While keeping the illusion activated, user can't perform any jutsu except via clones
Note5: In the 2nd turn its active, it counts as a users move, so only 2 other jutsu can be performed in that turn

Changed the name (this was the Pressure genjutsu in the previous submission), lowered the rank as it was not exactly as powerfull as any S-Rank gen seen so far, uped the resctritions and bettered the description.

~Declined~ please explain how a genjutsu could cause physical problems? I understand he'll undergo some "mental" pain, but the only way he could faint is by being mentally shattered (same as Kakashi when facing Itachi's Tsukuyomi). You can still cause your opponent to faint, but change the description as to how he gets there.

Resubmitting, last one of the week!^^ (PS-Took the other jutsu from the quote and quoted only the one i'm resubmitting, hope that is ok)

Genjutsu: Akuma no Houyou | Ilussionary Arts: Demonic Hug
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short to Mid
Chakra: 30 (+10 next turn to keep active)
Damage: 60 (at the end of the 2 turns)
Description:
The user makes 3 simple hand seals (Boar+Serpent+Rat) and makes the enemy feel as if he's being tightly squeezed; as if pressure is being applied to every point of his body, rendering him restraint and unable to move. The pressure on the enemy's body is so great that he'll feel it hard to breathe and will begin to hyperventilate and eventually will enter a panic state as the pressure keeps building on his body. If he doesn't dispel the Genjutsu he'll faint from hyperventilation in the second turn.

Note: Can only be used twice
Note2: Has to be taught by Scorps
Note3: Can't use Genjutsu in the same turn or the next



Explained why the enemy would faint after the 2 turns and also added the limits of the dispel. I added this last part because the user keeps fueling the Genjutsu for the 2 turns, so like odor driven genjutsu or sound driven, while the source is kept active, only high amounts of pain would be able to dispel it. But if you think it doesn't make sense or its just too big of a trait just delete it if possible ^^

~Approved~ I took out the part on how to get out for a simple reason; if you're not a Kaguya or didn't create a clone before hand, it's nearly impossible to get out of this genjutsu considering it makes it impossible for you to move. Also, I took out the restrictions about you needing to stay still and maintaining the hand seal (Genjutsu always require the user to keep a chakra connection anyway). Also, you said it could be broke with Kai, but Kai can only be used on B-rank and under genjutsu (that doesn't matter though since I took out the restriction).

 

[Konoha's Yellow Flash]

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Summoning Animal: Reindeer
Scroll Owner: Akira & Keyaki Bios
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Choppā
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None

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Name: {Tonakai Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Choppā} Reindeer Summoning- Chopper
Rank: S Rank
Type: Offensive, Defensive, Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Chopper, the boss of all reindeer, is formed drastically matured and more stag-like than any other reindeer. Chopper's size is that of a full sized reindeer. His antlers have grown and branched out being able to pierce human skin quite easily. His fur in this form is also notably fluffier and heightens his sense of awareness, of whats in the air, because its abnormal fur serves as receptors. During battle, Chopper usually uses his incredible speed to run across the battlefield to dodge an enemy's attack or otherwise. During any other time, Chopper is completely disguised in this form as he usually looks like a pet. This form also allows him to track his friends or enemies more easily thanks to the reindeer's high sense of smell.
~ Choppā is able to speak the human tongue in this form, similar to a few other boss summoning animals.
~ This is considered Choppā's Walk Point, meaning he has many more Transformation Techniques in store.

I alredy have chopper as part of my approved Usopp Bio as a companion.
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(Raiton: Kaminari no ​​Yumi) Lightning Style: Thunder Bow
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user picks up a stick, or other long object at the center (if using a bladed weapon, it can be on the handle), and then places their other hand in a fist next to it. The fist then creates a chakra string, which is then pulled back, turning the stick into a makeshift bow. The user then conducts their lightning chakra through the bow and lets go of the string, shooting a bolt of lightning at the target.
Note: ~Can only be used three times per battle
~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

this is practically the same as my custom weapon, the only difference is that my bow is a cw and yours a jutsu.
Custom weapon:
(Sora no kuni eshaku)- Land of the skies bow

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Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range:short/long
Chakra Cost:0( shooting arrows 30)
Damage:60 per arrow (the arrows are equivalent to A-rank jutsu)
Description: This bow, specially crafted by the land of the skies blacksmiths, is made of a light but very resistant metal which is deep blue and trimmed with gold alloy. The bow's trims were sharped relentlessly in order to ensure that, over the years, it may still cut through rock or common metals. The bow has a black handle made of tar-covered sharkskin, just like samurai katanas, ensuring maximum grip. The user of this bow can infuse raiton chakra in great quantities and apply shape manipulation in order to create a thick arrow of pure lightning energy which can be later shot in a straight line but at great speeds and a normal chakra bowstring. The arrow have a penetrating power comparable to chidori, but once they struck the opponent they will revert back to lightning energy and shock the particular area numbing it.
But the utility of this ancient weapon does not end here, the bow can be disassembled in two separate blades that the user can use freely as very sharp and light weapons. If infused with raiton chakra, the sharpness of the blades is taken to a whole new level.
Notes: Raiton arrows may be used up to 3 times per battle and shooting up to a maximum of 2 arrows per use.
Notes: The numbing effects of the arrow last for a turn.
Notes: No lightning the same turn the arrows are used.
Notes: The arrows travel so fast that is very hard for the naked eye to be able to react accordingly, however, they are able to see it if thrown from a considerable distance but may be a hard target to avoid or counter if shot or is at a closely dangerous distance.
Notes: Arrows thrown will count as a jutsu, however it does not matter the amount of arrows thrown( although it cannot exceed 2 in the same turn).
Notes: The bow cannot be disassembled and assembled in the same turn.

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[Ushiro]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Sogeki no Geijutsu: Dangan Reijingu)- Sniper Art: Raging Bullet
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user pulls back the string on his bow and materializes a highly condensed arrow made up of either wind, fire, water, or lightning that he then shoots at a target. The arrow spins as it travels like a drill and has great piercing ability. By forming a handseal, the user can make the arrow expand and burst into a dozen arrows that can accurately strike different targets. Each arrow has different effects: Wind causes deep cuts, fire burns, water also causes cuts but not as deep as wind, and lightning paralyzes the target area temporarily.
-Usable 4 times per battle once per turn
-The turn this jutsu is used no other jutsu can be used with the same element as this one.

~Declined~ Already exist.

 

[Uchiha91]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Karasu Mo-do) Raven Mode
Type: Supplemenary
Rank: S
Range: N/A
ChakraCost: 40
Damage points: +10 Nin, +10 Tai
Description: This jutsu is based off of the principle that where there is light, darkness lingers near. The user draws in nature chakra from his/her surrounding area and instead of stoping at that, the user concentraits on their own hatred and malace. The darkness in that nature chakra is drawn to the user and used instead. When the transformation is complete, The Users hair becomes longer and black, there nails become black and slightly pointed, their iruses become yellow and the sclera becomes black. The Dark nature chakra is shaped into black feathers and stored arround the waist and back. The user uses the dark nature chakra to enhance their strength and ninjutsu. Because of it's dark nature, the user risks loosing themselves in there own hatred. As the jutsu begins to wear off, the feathers start to fall of of their body and eventually dissapear all together. When Karasu Mo-do wears off, the user is left exohsted.
Note: Can only be taught by Uchiha91.
Note: Must have signed the Raven contract.
Note: This jutsu lasts for 5 turns.
Note: After this jutsu wears off, the user cannot use ninjutsu for one turn.
Note: The user cannot summon in this mode.
Note: It takes one turn to use this jutsu
Note: Can only be used ONCE per battle

~Declined~ Work on the restrictions, add more then those already in place.

(Karasu Mo-do: Kuro Kyuutai) Raven Mode: Dark Orb
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: While in Raven Mode, The user focuses Dark Nature chakra into their dominant hand and forms a large black orb corsing with energy. The orb is then shot at the target, causing some of the black feathers to fly arround the user and dissapate. When it hits the target, it explodes causing massive damage to the surrounding area.
Note: Can only be taught by Uchiha91.
Note: Must be in Raven Mode to use.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle

(Karasu Mo-do: Kuroi Kiri) Raven Mode: Black Blade
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: While in Raven Mode, the user will hold both hands out and form a large black sythe made out of dark nature chakra. The sythe is corsing with sparks of the dark nature chakra and leaves a dark ora around itself. When the user swings it at the target, it leaves black feathers behind.
Note: Can only be taught by Uchiha91.
Note: Must be in Raven mode to use.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle.

(Karasu Mo-do: Kuro Bakushin) Raven Mode: Dark Dash
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: While in Raven Mode, The user concentraites their dark nature chakra into their feet and uses it to dash from on point to another almost instantly and effortlessly.
Note: Can only be taught by Uchiha91
Note: Must be in Raven mode to use
Note: Can only be used 4 times per battle

(Karasu Mo-do: Kage Dageki) Raven Mode: Shadow Strike
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: While in Raven Mode, The user concentraites dark nature chakra into either their fists or their shins and strikes the enimy with them. When they hit or miss the target, a large burst of dark nature chakra comes out of the limb used, nocking the target away from the user and dealing tremendous damage.
Note: Can only be taught by Uchiha91.
Note: Must be in Raven Mode to use.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle.

~All Declined~ Raven Mode was declined

 

[Axle]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Greed
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: Greed is a turtle that can never be full. He's as big as a trailblazer, he can eat any kind of attack. He can only be pierced by S-rank and above attacks
Note: can only eat 3 jutsus per battle
Note: Must have signed the turtle contract
Note: Must be taught by Axle
Add japanese name, and restrict his eating ability and make it count as one your 3 per turn ability

(Raiton: Junsei Erekiteru) - Pure Electricity
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 35
Damage: N/A
Description: The user focuses pure raiton chakra into his hands with electrical properties. By touching another object (except the ground) the user has the ability of giving it an electrical charge by releasing the raiton chakra into the object. When the user touches the object, he's simply either adding one proton or taking away an electron. Since every substance that has doesn't have an electrical charge (such as a tree) has an equal balance of electrons and protons, but if that balance was disrupted, then that object would have an electrical charge. And if the user adds a proton then the object would have a positive charge, if the user added an electron then the object would have a negative charge. Objects with a positive charge are attracted or drawn to objects with a negative charge. Also the charged object with the lower mass is drawn by an electrical bond to an object with the opposite charge and higher mass (so a human being with a positive charge is drawn to a tree with a negative charge. And a kunai with a negative charge is drawn to a human being with a positive charge). The force that attracts these objects is near impossible to escape, because no human can defy gravity. If the user has touched the objects once, he can do it again to restore the balance, and only he can do so.
Note: Can only be used/taught by Axle

(Raiton: Nyu-toron Soujuu) - Neutron Manipulation
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 35
Damage: N/A
Description: The user channels pure raiton chakra into his hands, and by touching an object with this raiton chakra, he can add or take away neutrons. By doing adding neutrons, the object gains 10lbs for each second the user touches it. By subtracting the neutrons, the object loses 10lbs for each second the user touches it.
Note: can only be used/taught by Axle
Both declined, do not resubmit
(Genjutsu: Netsu) - Fever
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: (-10 Taijutsu to the opponent each turn)(-60 to the user for exhaustion)
Description: The user casts a genjutsu where the opponent thinks that they are coming down a fever. The opponent's temperature starts rising higher due to psychology which states that if the mind thinks that there is something wrong with the body, then the body will act accordingly to the mind. By staying on the battlefield, the opponent is constantly making his conditions worse by the turns.
(1 turn - reaction speed decreases)
(2 turn - overall speed decreases)
(3 turn - becomes weaker)
(4 turn - unable to maintain balance)
(5 turn - vomiting occurs)
(6 turn - vision becomes blurry)
(7 turn - passes out due to massive exhaustion and dehydration)
Note: can only be used once per battle
Note: no genjutsu for the rest of the match
Note: can only be used/taught by Axle
Declined, OP, do not resubmit
Tut
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 50
Damage: N/A
Description: Tut is the best deffensive turtle alive, he's as big as a 7 story building, he has spikes on his back that are a story tall each. All lightning attacks used, are directed to his spikes, and are then shot back at the opponent. He can only be pierced by Forbidden rank jutsus
Note: Must have signed the turtle contract
Note: Must be taught by Axle
add japanese name, being forbidden also costs damage and it requires abit more restrictions

Custom Weapon (Dyuaru Zanbatō Touken za Taizen Suto-mu) - Dual Zanbatō Blades of the Calm Storm
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: 30
Description: A Zanbato (斬馬刀 Zanbatō?, literally "horse-slaying sword" or "horse-chopping saber") is an especially large type of Japanese sword, the historical use of which is disputed. The sword closely resembles the Nodachi or ōdachi, however it differs from the Nodachi by having a ricasso of approximately 12 to 18 inches (30-45 cm). This lends more credence to the theory of the sword having a practical use in feudal Japan. The increased length of the blade, along with the extra grip, would give it dual use both as a sword and as a polearm for attacking advancing cavalry. This style of Zanbatō sword can be found for sale in rural tourist shops and stands in Kyoto and Nara prefectures of Japan. This sword may have been inspired by the Chinese zhan ma dao (see below), as both were said to have been used for killing the horse and rider in one swing.
Such extremely long and curved Zanbatō swords did exist, and were solely used for ceremonial purposes. Experienced smiths often took upon themselves to prove their talent by creating these so-called "Zanbatō" as a way to challenge themselves. This led to the extremely long blades often seen in ancient depictions, some of which were so long (over a dozen feet long) that they could hardly be mistaken for something other than display pieces.
The user unsheathes their blade, after he unsheathes it, he then pulls it apart forming a pair of dual blades. The right one is "Flow" while the left one is "Peace". These blades weigh almost nothing, and can be swing in high speeds. Because of their weightless mass, they cannot stab nor do they have almost any power. When these blades make a slicing motion at objects such as kunai, shurikens, or any other regular ninja tool, the tool is split in half and the halves are sent in 90 degree angles away from their original destination.The user can swing these blades as hard as they can, and by doing this, they release B-rank wind waves. When these B-rank waves come into contact with D-rank fire or anything of another element below B-rank, the attacks are immediately cut in half. Also, Fuuton chakra is being input into the swords at all times, meaning that if the user attacks with the sword in short range, even if the opponent blocks the sword, they face slight cuts where the sword was aimed
Note: Can only be used by Axle
Note: The wind waves count as moves
Note: Can only shoot up to 4 wind waves per match

~Approved~ Added the bold part.

(Kuchiyose: Kame) - Greed
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: Greed is a turtle that can never be full. He's as big as a trailblazer, he can eat any kind of attack. He can only be pierced by S-rank and above attacks
Note: can only eat 3 jutsus per battle
Note: Must have signed the turtle contract
Note: Must be taught by Axle
Note: Everytime he eats, it counts as a move

(Kuchiyose: Kame) - Tut
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 50
Damage: N/A
Description: Tut is the best deffensive turtle alive, he's as big as a 7 story building, he has spikes on his back that are a story tall each. All lightning attacks used, are directed to his spikes, and are then shot back at the opponent. He can only be pierced by Forbidden rank jutsus. He cannot do any offensive jutsus. Yet he can use Earth Supplementary and Defensive jutsus S-rank and lower.
Note: Must have signed the turtle contract
Note: Must be taught by Axle

~Both Declined~ Check my post at the bottom of page 278, we only check re-submission if you bold the part you added while quoting the original custom submission.

 

[Nagato..]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Fuuton: Ōfū no Tekunikku) - Wind Style: Crosswind Technique
Type: Defense /Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80

Description: The user clasps his hands together channeling his wind chakra into the air causing the wind to form a cross like formation around the user that rotates rapidly creating a shield around the user that defends well against most techniques, even from under his feet as well as can cause serious skin lacerations if the opponent is caught within range of this technique.

Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
Note: Cannot perform fire techniques while inside the sheild.
Note: Can only be taught by Nagato or Zenryoku
~Declined~ Can't submit jutsu's with only one post

It would be greatly appreciated if my checker could edit if possible to allow the technique to be approve able, if its within reach.



(Fuuton: Ōfū no Tekunikku) - Wind Style: Crosswind Technique
Type: Defense /Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80

Description: The user clasps his hands together channeling his wind chakra into the air causing the wind to form a cross like formation around the user that rotates rapidly creating a shield around the user that defends well against most techniques, even from under his feet as well as can cause serious skin lacerations if the opponent is caught within range of this technique.

Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
Note: Cannot perform fire techniques while inside the sheild.
Note: Can only be taught by Nagato or Zenryoku

~Declined~ Please explain how a "cross" could rotate around you and protect from underground attacks without constantly hitting your legs? Other than that it seemed fine and should be approved once you fix that part.


(Jishaku Ninpou: Jiki hōkai) Magnetic Ninja Art: Magnetic Disintegration
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will release his magnetic chakra into the air around him, magnetising any nearby metallic objects allowing him to not only control this metallic object but be able to reach his hand out and manipulate his Iron sand to grind the metallic object to make more Iron Sand for sand techniques.

Note: Can only be used 4x per battle
Note: Can only be manipulated for 1 Full turn
Note: Cannot use magnetic arts techniques for 1 turns after this jutsu is finished.
Note: Can only be taught by Nagato..

~Approved~


(Doton: Akuma chikyū no dōka) Earth Style: Demonic Earth Assimilation
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/a

Description: User gathers his earth chakra and manipulates his body to form into a loose mud like substance that allows him to avoid certain techniques by seeping into the earth or mud basically being soaked up by the soil and the user can travel through the earth/swamp and reform out of the ground as the mud like substance retaking form. It looks similar to Suigetsu's Hydration technique.

Note: Can only be done 3 times per matchup.
Note: User has to be standing on earth or in contact with earth.
Note: Works faster if the ground is wet or the user is trapped in mud.
Note: Getting hit by lightning is fatal to the user.
Note: Can only perform Earth techniques up to B rank while in this form.
Note: Can only be taught/used by Nagato..

~Declined do not resubmit~ No more Suigetsu's Hydration rip off.

(Hiero Taka Geijutsu: Hiero mōdo) - Hiero Falcon Arts: Hiero Mode
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: -15 per turn
Damage Points: (+15 Tai +20 Jutsu)

Description: To enter Hiero Mode the user must gathered their Hiero Falcon chakra in a meditative state or have gathered it from a previously summoned Falcon. The falcon will then start transfering its chakra to the user while the user contains the chakra and slowly attain characteristics and special ablities that Heiro Falcons have. The abilities the user obtains are the following:

-The user's senses, speed, and agility/relexes are enhanced beyond the normal capabilities of the average ninja. The sense of smell is now capable of tracking the opponent if the user has lost sight of him/her while the sense of hearing is capable of hearing a heart beat from mid range.
-The strength of the user also is increased to a level that can stand up with Tsunade's strength. The hands take a claw-like appearance and underneath the users arms small underwings will form that allows the user to glide in mid air for short spurts.
-After Hiero Mode is worn of, the users body will be exhausted because of the drastic changes his body had to undergo.

Note: Only lasts for 4 turns
Note: A turn has to pass before completely entering Hiero Mode.
Note: The user can't perform any jutsus while trying to abtain Hiero Mode.
Note: Can only glide while already in mid air. Gliding Ex: (Short-Mid/Mid-Long) depending upon the altitude the user was at
Note: The falcon(s) used to attain Hiero Mode will automaticly dissapear.
Note: After Hiero Mode has worn of, the user can't perform S-rank to A-rank jutsus of any kind for 2 turns
Declined, do not resubmit to much like my hawk sage mode

(Hiero Taka Geijutsu: Hiero mōdo) - Hiero Falcon Arts: Hiero Mode
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: -10 per turn
Damage Points: +10 Tai +10 Nin

Description: To enter Hiero Mode the user must be in a meditative state or be completely still while a previously summoned Hiero Falcon will send its chakra into the user which can happen pretty fast. The user contains the chakra and manipulates his the given chakra with his wind chakra and slowly attains characteristics and special ablities that Heiro Falcons have. The abilities the user obtains are the following:

-The user's five senses, speed, and reflexes are enhanced beyond the normal capabilities of the average ninja. The sense of smell is now capable of tracking the opponent if the user has lost sight of him/her. The users eyes will form silver patches over them that extend from the temple to the nose.

-The strength of the user also is increased to a level that can stand up with Sakura's strength. The hands & feet take a claw-like appearance using manipulation of wind chakra and underneath the users arms small underwings will form from wind chakra as well that allows the user to fly.

-After Hiero Mode is worn of, the users body will be exhausted because of the drastic changes his body had to undergo.

Note: Mode only lasts for 4 turns
Note: User Gains a +1 Base Speed Lvl & x1.2 Reaction Speed
Note: The user can't perform any jutsus while trying to obtain Hiero Mode since he has to be completely still.
Note: User will be unable to perform wind element for the next two turns after this wears off.
Note: The falcon(s) used to attain Hiero Mode will automatically disperse.
Note: After Hiero Mode has worn of, the user can't perform S-rank techniques or above for one turn.

Originally declined by Zenryoku but he gave permission to remake this technique. Ask him if needed.

~Declined~ OP. Also, did you get my approval to have the Falcon summoning?

 

[Venus]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(魔王の腕; Akuma Raikou Genkotsu) -Demonic Lightning Fist

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Rank: S
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:40 (to activate) -10 (per turn used)
Damage: +10 (only to Raiton)
Description:
The user gather's chakra in their left arm, they then release it in their arm, causing it to take on a demonic form.

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With this, the user can manipulate lightning from close, and boosts the power of all Raiton jutsu.

Conditions:
1. User can only use raiton whilst arm is activated.
2. -15 chakra for every turn active.
3. Can only be used for three turns. (Can deactivate, but that is counted as all three turn's)
4. Can only be used twice per battle.
5. Cannot use raiton jutsu for 1 turn, after arm is released.

~Declined do not resubmit~ There are many reasons to delete that one, but I'll go with this one; manipulating element is a no-go.

 

[The_Empire]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

-(Hiru: Hiru Chika)-Leech Style: Leech Underground
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons 50-75 normal adult rl size leeches underground. The leeches are underground undetected except doujutsus and sensors. The leeches uses their heat and chakra sensing to find the opponent. The leeches pop up and attaches themselves to the opponent's legs. They suck on the opponent's chakra.
-Must have signed the Ninja Leech contract
-Only used by Dei Dei and Mugiwara
-Leeches suck -15 from the opponent's chakra per turn
-Only used four times per battle

~Approved~ I took out the part about sucking the blood undetected. Underwater they can reach their target and bite them without their prey knowing about it, but above ground they're need to crawl on their body to reach a piece of flesh (on boots and pants for example), making them noticeable.

-Batman (Batei)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: This is a mode made by the bats so the humans can be closer and feel the same as a bat. The user channels natural energy and wind chakra through their whole body while standing still. The user whole body changes into the pic in the link below(no red just straight black). The user gains the ability to use Inner Sonar Skill(it is a real bat ability in rl). The user can fly with their new wings. The user can also use the Bat FightingStyle, Wing Slash, which is when the user uses their wings to slash at their opponent.
-Only used once per battle
-Lasts for four turns
-The user is exhausted after the mode is over
-No wind jutsus for two turns after the mode is over
-Must have signed the Bat-contract and trained my Dei Dei
-The user gains + 10 to taijutsu and wind ninjutsu, + 2 to speed only when flying
-Flying counts as a move when used to dodge/avoid attacks
-Only used by Dei Dei

(I would have made it "Bat Mode" but that is a boring title.)

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~Declined do not resubmit~ No animal fusion (at least I don't approve them), no using of cannon sound techniques if you didn't learn sound, and no Batman.

-Chakra Ring (Chakra Ringu)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary(Weapon)
Range: Short
Chakra cost: N/A
Damage points: N/A
Description: The ring was made by Dei Dei who wanted a custom weapon for different situations. The ring is made of a metal that absorbs and stabilze the user`s chakra. The ring can make the following: a thin coat of chakra around the user(protects against C rank and below attacks), hammer, katana, wall(blocks B rank and below attacks), platforms, slide, rope and key. The ring is yellow and everything it makes is yellow also.

-Chakra Ring Manipulation (Chakra Ringu Soujuu)
Rank: B
Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user channels chakra into the ring the user can manipulate the chakra and is yellow when making the following: a thin coat of chakra around the user(protects against C rank and below attacks), hammer, katana, walls(blocks B rank and below attacks), slide, rope, and key
-Only used every other turn.

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~Both Declined~ Read my post at the bottom of page 278. We don't check re-submissions unless you quote the declined submission and put the added part in bold.

 

[Black Butler]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Ranton: Kago za Arashi) Storm Release: Cage of the Storm
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 70
Damage: 140
Description: THe user does 4 handseals and 16 pillars made of storm erupt from the ground and encage the opponent. Once the target is encaged, the user can clap his hands together, causing the cage to shrink into a tiny cube, killing the opponent, or they could just encage them.
+ 40 Damage to user, because of immense strain
User can't use Water/Lightning/Storm A-Rank or above for 2 turns
Usable 1x

~Declined~ Follow proper template for Forbidden rank technique and work on the restrictions. Forbidden technique need to have many drawbacks to the user, putting him in a dangerous position as he do the technique or after. Don't write -40 damage to user as this does absolutely nothing to you in the fight (doesn't hold you back).

(Raiton: 1000 Ryouken) Lightning Style: 1000 Hounds
Rank: S
Range: short-Long
Type: Attack
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: Then user does 4 handseals, then slams both hands onto the ground. 1,000 small hounds, made of lightning will erupt from the floor, going full speed at the opponent. On contact they will rip the opponent to shreds.
Usable 2X

~Declined~ lower the count of hounds...

(Doton: Kibaku Tsuchi Toris) Earth Style: Exploding Earth Birds
Rank: S
Range: Long
Type: Attack
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will do 2 handseals, while gathering up their doton chakra. Then suddenly, small, 6 inch, tiny birds, will arise form the earth and surround the opponent. On another handseal, the birds will explode, sending the earth shrapnel at the opponent.
Usable 2X
No S-Rank Earth for 2 turns

~Declined~ Similar technique exist. Also, no more exploding projectile, too many were already accepted.

(Fuuton: Futon Heki) Wind Style: Wind Burst
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Type: attack/ Defense
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will do 1 handseal, then release a concentrated burst of wind from 360 degrees around their body. This wind will destroy everything around them, also slicing things. If caught in it, it will severly slice the opponent.
No S-Rank Wind next turn
Usable 2X

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist

(Ranton: Tentou Arashi Shinsui) Storm Release: Heavenly Storm Flood
Rank:S
Range: Long
Type: Attack
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will do 3 handseals, then raise both hands towards the air. After a few seconds, it will start to rain storm droplets, flooding the battlefield. The user will do another handseal, causing the rain droplets to become very dense. These droplets will attempt to rip the opponent apart.
Usable 1X
No A-rank storm next turn

~Declined do not resubmit~ This falls under the range of Rain techniques, and even if you knew Rain that jutsu is simply too OP

 

[Sterling Malory Archer]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kuchiyose: Kokuou Reo) ~ Summoning: King Leo
Type: Attack/Defence
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short/Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user offers a sacrifice of blood and then stretches their arm at full length to summon the King Leopon, Leo. Leo has the size and strength of a lion. But, unlike the lion, he have extraordinary climbing abilities like the leopard. He has a very strong jaw and can use certain ninjutu, and has his own set of jutsu that he utilizes against his prey.
~Can only be summoned by ~CoOkie Monster~
~Lasts 5 turns
~Can do C-rank of Earth and Wind and Water (Some only)
~Can be summoned twice after a 1 turn break

Declined. please expand on his climbing abilities as wells as which elemental techniques he can use since you mention he can only do "some"



(Reopon Gigei: Sabure Kei) ~ Leopon Arts: Sand Whip
Type: Defence
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: King Leo whips his tail first one way then whiplashes his tail in the opposite direction which cause the sand to shoot at an enemy causing their movements to halt or to recoil and lose accuracy.
~Only to be used by King Leo

Declined. if the sand is comming from the ground then you need to add that detail into your move


(Reopon Gigei: Doku Sukin) ~ Leopon Arts: Poison Skin
Type: Defence
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: King Leo brings out the inner leopard inside of him and causes his skin to become a dangerous toxin which is dangerous upon contact.
~Only to be used by King Leo
~Lasts 3 turns and can be used twice

Declined. Again, elaborate on its effects

(Kuchiyose: Kokuou Reo) ~ Summoning: King Leo
Type: Attack/Defence
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short/Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user offers a sacrifice of blood and then stretches their arm at full length to summon the King Leopon, Leo. Leo has the size and strength of a lion. But, unlike the lion, he has extraordinary climbing abilities like the leopard, which enables him to climb on Natural objects such as trees allowing him to pounce at an angle at prey. He has a very strong jaw and can use certain ninjutu to his advantage (He can do Earth, Wind, Water), and has his own set of jutsu that he utilizes against his prey.
~Can only be summoned by ~CoOkie Monster~
~Lasts 5 turns
~Can do B-rank of Earth and Wind and Water
~Can be summoned a second time after a 1 turn break

~Declined~ Under what contract does that animal belong to? Restrict it to 1 summon per match and reduce the elements he can use, 3 is too much.

(Reopon Gigei: Sabure Kei) ~ Leopon Arts: Sand Whip
Type: Defence
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: King Leo whips his tail first one way then whiplashes his tail in the opposite direction causing the sand on the ground to shoot at an enemy causing their movements to halt or to recoil and lose accuracy.
~Only to be used by King Leo
~(If Restriction is needed) Can be used 4 times


(Reopon Gigei: Doku Sukin) ~ Leopon Arts: Poison Skin
Type: Defence
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: King Leo brings out the inner leopard inside of him and causes his skin to become a dangerous toxin which is dangerous upon contact to non contract holders who haven't been taught the way of the Leopon. The poisonous skin can cause a victim to have his movements slowed down (Such as his handseal movements and motor movements). If enough contact is made with the skin, the victim can become temporary paralyzed.
~Only to be used by King Leo
~If touched twice within 2 or 3 turns (Don't know which is more suitable), the opponent is paralyzed for 1 turn.
~Lasts 3 turns and can be used 4 or 5 (Again not sure which is more suitable) times

(Reopon Gigei: Doku Hari) ~ Leopon Arts: Poison Needle
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 30
Description: King Leo, after emitting his Poisonous skin, can eject the hairs on his back to pierce his prey. The needles are covered in Leo's poison and is very harmful to his targets. These needles are like bee-stings in that if they are not taken out in the correct manner, the poison will do more damage then it would've. The needles cause the same pain as a bee-sting would (Making the target want to take them out as fast as they can).
~Only can be used by King Leo.
~Can paralyze target if struck 3 times (2 if they are not taken out properly).
~If needles are not taken out in the correct manner, the target can be paralyzed quicker.

How to remove Needles properly (Like a Bee sting):

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(Reopon Gigei: Yajuu Mo-do) ~ Leopon Arts: Beast Mode
Type: Supplementry
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage Points: 0
Description: King Leo and the contract signer who have a special connection already in place, fuse together. King Leo becomes one with the summoner and lends all his beastly strength and instincts to the summoner. When in the form, the user's taijutsu damage become amplified (1 rank up). The user's motor movements on land and on water become faster (From beastly instincts and muscle expansion). The user is also able to use Reopon Arts to his ninjutsu arsenal as well as his own.

In Summary: Fusion increases speed and reflexes and senses and allows user to use Reopon Arts.

~King Leo must be summoned
~King Leo cannot be summoned again for the rest of the battle
~Lasts 4 turns and can only be used once
~Must be used in the 1st time of King Leo's summon.
~The turn Beast Mode wears off the user can only use 2 moves in the turn (Instead of 3)


User takes the form of:

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If you are wondering about the water part, this is from wiki:

They will climb like leopards and seem to enjoy water, also like the leopard (oddly enough, the Japanese leopons were born of a water-loving lioness and a male leopard that did not seem to like water)

~All Declined~ Leo wasn't approved.

 

[Lucifer]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Yōton: Rensei Yougan Tama) – Lava Release: Drilling Lava Bullet
Rank:A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short – Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The User will concentrate on his (lava) chakra and then take a deep breath. Once, the user is ready he will quickly perform 4 handseals and, blow out Max. 5 bullets of Lava/Maguma and direct it at his opponent(multiple opponents). This jutsu is strong enough to do major damage to even a Summoning like Gamabunta.(size) It also melts objects surrounding the lava bullet like gras, kunais, shuriken etc.

.Note: This can be taught by Ichigo.
.Note: You must have a Kurotsuchi, Mei or Rõushi bio.

(Yōton: Maguma Sukin) – Lava Release: Lava Skin
Rank:S
Type: Defence/Attack
Range: Short – Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: After the user performs a single handseal he channels his entire body with Lava chakra then,the user coats himself with the Lava(skin) making him impervious to all katon and Yoton jutsu's of A-rank and below. Also, the user can not be harmed by Lava.

.Note: You, must be sannin or above to use this jutsu ._.
.Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo Kurosaki.
.Note: Can only be used 2 times in RP battle.
.Note: This jutsu lasts 2 turns.

(Yōton: Yougan Arashi) - Lava Release: Lava Storm
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 50
Damage points: 75
Description: The user gathers a great deal of chakra within their body then the user performs various hand seals. And, take in a deep breath as they bring about the ideals of most fire exhaling jutsu into play. Upon exhaling, a burst of condensed lava emerges and is fired off at the opponent. But, as the user fires it at the opponent it explodes so creating a Lava storm. Also, this jutsu can harm the user due to the heat and force of the Lava (damage -20 to the user). And, this jutsu can be be used in combination with Magma Shower to make the Lava storm even stronger and more brutal thats why this jutsu is forbidden it becomes even hard to encounter with a high level lightning jutsu.

.Note: This jutsu can be used once er battle.
.Note: This jutsu can only be used by Ichigo.
.Note: This jutsu can only be taught by Ichigo.
.Note: The user must be at Kage Level.
.Note: This jutsu can only be used by a Kurotsuchi bio.
.Note: This jutsu can b used in combo with a wepon.

~Pending~ Are those re-submissions? If yes, you should know by now that we only check those if you put the added part in bold (which you did) and if you quote your first submission. This way we're able to compare both. Resubmit.

 

[-Hatake-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Summoning Animal: Harpy Eagle

Scroll Owner: Kushimaru

Other users who have signed the contract: N/A

Summoning Boss if existing: N/A (Later)

Other summoning animals tied to contract: N/A (Later)

Approved

~Updating~

Summoning Boss if existing: Kuchiyose: Inazuma Harpy Washi: Krillic (Summoning: Lightning Harpy Eagle: Krillic)

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Type: Supplementary
Rank: S-rank
Range: N/A
Chackra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: Krillic reigns over the harpy eagle world and is the leader and ruler of all harpy eagles. and nearly the same size as Gamabunta. He has huge wings which enable him to fly swiftly through the air at fast speeds and can use his claws as a means of attack. He is a master at lightning allowing him to use lightning style justu's upto S-rank and is also skilled in defending against them and can block lightning based techniques upto A-rank.

Note: This summoning can be used once and lasts for 4 turns.
Note: He can only be destroyed by getting hit by 3 B-rank attacks (Excluding Lightning B-ranks.), 2 A-rank (Excluding Lightning A-rank attacks) and 1 S-rank.
Note: Can only be summoned by someone with the Harpy eagle contract.
Note: His lightning attack counts as one of the 3 turns.

~Declined~ Take out the bold part and restrict the amount of lightning attack it can use and block. Also, reduce the size, with just a swing of his wings he could blow back anyone on the field.

Other Summoning animals tied to contract: Kuchiyose: Kaji Harpy Washi: Pyralis (Summoning: Fire Harpy Eagle: Pyralis)

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Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: N/A
Chackra cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Pyralis is one of the main Harpy eagles, second in command to Krillic, he is just a bit smaller than Krillic and has big wngs which allow him to fly gracefully in the air and also uses his claws as a mean of attack. He is an expert user of the fire element and can use fire based attacks upto A-rank and can also defend against fire based attacks up to A-rank.

Note: Can be summoned once and lasts 5 turns.
Note: Can only be summoned by people with the Harpy Eagle contract.
Note: Can only be destroyed by taking a hit from 2 B-ranks (Excluding Fire type B-ranks), 1 A-rank (Excluding Fire type A-rank), or 1 S-rank.
Note: His fire attacks counts as one of the 3 turns.

May add more later.

~Declined~ Same as above, though I've put something else in bold; the A-rank restriction. Make it B-rank and restrict the number of times it can block such jutsus.


Doton: Chikyuu Enchou (Doton: Earth Dome)

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Type: Defence
Rank: S-rank
Range: N/A
Chackra cost: 50
Damage points: N/A
Description: By focusing the users earth chackra, the user gathers his earth chackra and keeps doing so and then covers himself with earth in a dome made from rock-hard thick earth material that is so thick (about 3 foot thick), and strong that it can block any technique up to S-rank. He can de-activate the dome anytime he wants. It takes up so much chackra because of the amount of chackra you are putting into the dome to make it so thick.

Note: Can only be used 3 times in battle.
Note: Can only be taught/used by -Hatake-.
Note: The user cannot use any S-ranks the next turn because of the amount of chackra it drains.

Edit if needed.

~Declined~ Fix the bold part. Never say such words as "instantaneous, immediately, any techniques..." in a jutsu description, it's almost always an auto-decline. Kirin is S-rank, do you believe your earth technique could block it?

 

[BusinessManTeno]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(genshuku seichuu) Gravity Restriction
Type:Supplementary
Rank:C
Range-Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Chakra Damage: N/a
Description: The user Creates 2 hand signals to release a increase in gravity pressure making the oppenent vulnerable and unable to move his body for 2turns

Declined, do not resubmit ever