Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act XV: Cringe

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HELVETES GJENFØDELSE
[Infernal Rebirth]

Note: I apologize (to those who are up to date with my fanfiction) for another late release. My reasoning was due to allowing the readers who had not yet read a chance before I was to post the following act. Also, I’ve made a grave error-yet again -_- with Tiberiu’s classification. I was under the assumption that he belong in the category of a "hybrid" vampire when he instead should be labeled a "mutated" vampire. I tool time while I was offline here to edit all Acts/Monster Encyclopedias as it was my fault initially and thus when I refer to Tibeiru it will be by a mutated vampire (do feel to check out Tiberiu’s character info to refresh yourselves)

-Thank you ;)

Act XV

Cringe

[Setting Change: Castle room; Tiberiu’s location]

Narrator: Memory flashes began to attack his unstable mind. Memories of his brother, his beloved and the place he lived for many years where those two; so precious were robbed from him forever.

Lulian: I see it has finally taken effect *snicker*

Narrator: At the realization of his whereabouts; the hybrid vampire’s pupils dilate as he then stares blankly.

Tiberiu: (Inner voice) YOu aRe SO CLosE...dO NOt ALlow tHIs TO bE tHE EnD!

Narrator: The words of the stranger in his head somehow willed him out of his shocked state as he began to gradually recover.

[Setting Change: Castle room]

Bokor: (In thought) This one is persistent!

Bokor: (In thought) I cannot say how much further my magic can sustain that force..

Bokor: (Telepathy) Master..

[Setting Change: Castle room; Tiberiu’s location]

Lulian: (Telepathy) I am not to be disturbed!

Narrator: He slurred as he pounded his cane-like stake onto the floor.

Lulian: Now if you’ve settled..why not I release you from these restraints so tha-

Narrator: A deep bluish-black aura seeped through Tiberiu’s body in which counteracted with Lulian’s aura.

Lulian: Oh?

Tiberiu: ...

[Setting Change: Castle room; Bokor’s location]

Bokor: (In thought) I suppose I will have to take care of this matter myself..

Narrator: The black fire revealed Venera’s whereabouts through a reflection.

Bokor: Take this!

Bokor: (Shouts) Black Resonance!

Narrator: Spiraling black colored mist is discharged through both of its hands passing though the fire which in turn appeared before the emotionless Dhampiresa. The mist collides with her shattered aura and it ceases her movement. However, the mist isn’t able to penetrate.

Bokor: (In thought) This is unlike anything I’ve ever encountered!

Bokor: (In thought) No matter...I’ve created an opening for those two..

[Setting Change: Castle room; Venera’s location]

Pureblood Follower V : This is our chance!

Pureblood Follower IV: Right!

Narrator: Due to her pause; the purebloods use the opportunity to attack Venera.

Pureblood Follower V : (Shouts) Cease your attack!

Pureblood Follower IV: (Shouts) What is it!

Pureblood Follower V : Look! It seems as though this was the result of some sort of bad reaction and now it is becoming undone.

Narrator: Venera wrapped her arm around her body as she moved into fetal position. The black mist began to disappear.

Pureblood Follower V : Her bizarre defense is falling apart!

Narrator: An aura cloak forms over each pureblood; an intense white and deep red color. Pureblood Follower V then unleashes his blood weapon; a double edged sword and IV reveals his to be a blooded shield with a height and width that completely hides his body.

Pureblood Follower IV: Its too bad she does not see our perfect combination arsenal *snicker*

Narrator: The deep red shield breaks into four parts and covers the perverted pureblood entirely. Two intensive white colored blades form on the wise pureblood's arms as they extend from each side, two extend from the front chest and back area, two extend from the front abdomen and back area, one on each thigh extend front and back and one on each lower leg extends through the front and back. V launches himself and IV begins to spin rapidly before propelling into the Dhampiresa’s direction. Blood is then splattered over her fragmented aura barrier.

[Setting Change: Castle room; Bokor’s location]

Bokor: (In thought) Hmm...it appears as though she has put an end to herself-

Bokor: (In thought) There is no need for my involvement any longer..

[Setting Change: Castle room; Rahmah’s location]

Narrator: Ex-follower clashes with her former member who cloaked himself in a deep greenish aura.

Pureblood Follower VI: Not bad!

Rahmah: (In thought) Though I’ve been forcefully associated with these dirty creatures I was unable to properly scout how they all operate..

Rahmah: (In thought) My perception is of most importan-

Narrator: He extends his arm directly before himself and two deep green aura limbs form stretching perpendicular from his writs. Her arm is then sliced off by a shot which released a deep green aura crescent shaped slash.

Rahmah: (In thought) Even at my best..they appear superior!

Pureblood Follower VI: (In thought) I see so she can regenerate...I did not know much of a Ghoul’s abilities..interesting

Narrator: The decapitated arm dissolves into sand and quickly floats back to the Ghoul’s opened wounds as it reforms.

Rahmah: (In thought) Something feels different..

Rahmah: (Shouts) What have you done!!!

Pureblood Follower VI: *Snicker* I don’t know what-

Rahmah: (Shouts) Damn you!

Narrator: Mud began to pour out of the Ghoul’s opened mouth as it rapidly began to fill the room.

Pureblood Follower VI: (In thought) Suffocation huh?-

Pureblood Follower VI: (Shouts) I won’t let you!

Narrator: Multiple shots are fired towards her but she dodged what she could and she succeeded.

Pureblood Follower VI: (In thought) I was forced to withdraw my aura weapon..

Narrator: The room was flooded halfway; leaving only the hooded foe’s head exposed.

Rahmah: I want answers!

Pureblood Follower VI: ...

Narrator: The male pureblood’s aura cloak began to exert pressure and cracked the hard mud that surrounded him much to a shocked Rahmah.

Rahmah: (In thought) To be able to destroy my defensive mud..

Narrator: A small crater is created as the hooded figure floats in place. The crossbow-like limbs aura weapon is released and forms afloat before himself as they connect creating an arrowhead. From the head down a shaft forms stretching into a giant arrow. The arrow is then injected into the crater and deep green lines are then formed all over the mud mass appearing like a grid. Once the aura lines reach the room floor an explosion of shafts occur engulfing the room shooting from the floor up all happening abruptly. Particles of mud are then scattered all around the room.

Rahmah: (In thought) I was unable to obstruct him!

Pureblood Follower VI: (In thought) Now..

Rahmah: (In thought) I can barely avoid this!

Narrator: A sharp pain suddenly strains the pureblood as he is headlocked.

Rahmah: This stake is about an inch or so from your heart..move and your dead- *pant*

Narrator: During the shaft attack; she had previously transported herself through the scattered earth particles receiving various cuts. The stakes were given to all of the group by Tiberiu including himself; in case any of them were to come into contact with Lulian’s loyal followers.

Rahmah: Tell me what you did?!

Pureblood Follower VI: ...

Rahmah: Not even to save yourself...*pant*

Narrator: His eyes then associate with the steak that has struck his heart.

Pureblood Follower VI: (Shouts) YOU BITC!!!!!!!!!

Narrator: His head is then abruptly beheaded as she tore through his neck with her mineral blade formed arm.

Rahmah: My hatred for you purebloods continues to burn!

[Setting Change: Castle room; Octavian’s location]

Pureblood Follower III: (In thought) Hehehe...silly wolf is simply testing me..

Octavian: (In thought) Their speed is remarkable!

Octavian: (In thought) I can barely keep up with his movement..

Narrator: Both of his wings began to flap all around the room which then quickly revealed the child-like foe’s location.

Pureblood Follower III: (In thought) Impressive-

Pureblood Follower III: (In thought) This is what I’ve been waiting for!!!

Narrator: This time his movements can be seen whereas Octavian prepares his counterattack.

Octavian: (In thought) Closer..

Narrator: The sharp gusts of pressure force the enemy in his direction.

Octavian: (In thought) I have you!

Octavian: (In thought) What!...an afterimage

Pureblood Follower III: You’re fun to tease..

Narrator: His eye rolled to the side; to his left before being slashed singly in a deep pink colored aura. The gash slide across the hybrid bestial’s upper left shoulder to the lower right waistline.

Octavian: Kyaaa! *blood is coughed*

[Setting Change: Castle room; Attila’s location]

Narrator: Narrowly escaping the chakram’s capture; the hooded vampire then quickly vanished.

Attila: (In thought) Almost...but I now know what I’m up against..

Narrator: He reappeared crouched on the ground behind Attila and he swung a deep yellow colored hammer-like aura weapon at his heels. As a result, Attila falls to the floor in agony from the bone-crushing smash.

Attila: (Screams) Gahhhhhhhhh!

The foe then rises, backs away a few feet and quickly swings his weapon back and forth; releasing numerous deep yellow aura waves that strike the elder vampire’s body. The weapon’s momentum traveled through the waves and could be felt as being hit directly by the weapon.

Attila: (Screams) GGhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

Pureblood Follower I: How boring..

Narrator: Whilst the enemy continued with his attacks; Attila sacrificed pain in order to direct his chakram in a swinging motion. With the exertion of his aura; this grants his weapon to reach the foe’s back and it spins as it cuts through and out of the chest.

Pureblood Follower I: Gaah!

Pureblood Follower I: (In thought) I was too reckless-

Narrator: His weapon falls to the ground as it disperses and the blooded aura is then absorbed back into him. Attila’s eyes widen as the wounded pureblood quickly appears before him revealing a steak from within his cloak as he proceeded to strike at his heart. The auburn haired vampire gathered the last of his strength and clutched the foe’s wrist before it penetrated.

Pureblood Follower I: Your gong to hell *cough*

Attila: (In thought) No!

Narrator: The brief struggling comes to an end as the foe succeeds in piercing his heart.

Act XV End

Is Tiberiu’s group falling apart?


[ Monster Encyclopedia ]

The text in bold is relevant to this Act:

Origin: Vampires originate in central and eastern Europe.

[Insight: Pureblood Vampire]

Description: Is the result of one born from a genuine vampire mother and father. Pure blooded vampires are rare and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity.

Appearance: Is one who has vampire ethnicity and is born into or owns great power and money. An aristocrat of sorts.

[Insight: Turned Vampire]

Description: Is the result of a human bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chooses to turn their victim thus is cursed and transforms sometime within the hour.

Appearance: Will usually be a human who cannot fend for themselves. A tramp or an unfortunate victim in the wrong place.

In Attila/Neculai’s case, after having their leader’s aura infused into themselves later on in an emotional state invokes them to awaken heightened abilities as a result to the absorbed aura surpassing a turned vampire thus making them unique. They both in the beginning lose control as the power-up overwhelms their willpower. However, once the initial awakening stage has occurred and passed will they be able to begin controlling their new powers.

[Insight: Mutated Vampire]

Description: This occurrence is unique and the result of Tiberiu’s soul not being able to normally pass on as due others who are turned.

In Tiberiu's case, he was bitten and sucked to death by a vampire who chose not to turn their victim thus at that time somehow a mutation occurred rather than death. The soul was imprisoned from continuing onto the afterlife and subdued into an enforced transformation. His form is unique as he died never turning into a vampire and was then forcefully given life again. He was re-birthed with vampire-like qualities. A mutated vampire has not been ranked due to this being the first of its kind.

Appearance: In the requirement for more power; Tiberiu undergoes a slight mutation in terms of his body becoming enveloped by a sphere of his own aura and a limb-like appendage that grew on his upper back; blood red in color. The next occurrence results in a second blood red colored limb to have risen and the initial limb has changed into a black color though his aura seems to take a longer time to retract. The following time a third blood red colored limb rises while the previous limbs; the initial turning black and second retaining the blood red color and it has also taken an even longer time for his aura to retract. Tiberiu’s fourth invoke for more power enforces his three appendages to extend; the initial limb black, the second blood red and the final limb which changed into a white color. When the required power had been met it then withdraws.

[Insight: Lycanthrope]

Description: Is one who is bitten by another Lycanthrope during a full moon and thus cursed. After the next full moon and their official transformation, they can then transform at will on any given time of day.

Appearance: It usually has a height of around 6'5 to 7‘0 weighing of about two hundred-fifty to three hundred pounds. A bulky body, silvery fur, long thick claws, large jaw, massive fangs, powerful mid to long length tail and huge hind legs in appearance. It's origin is Europe.

[Insight: Hybrid Lycanthrope]

Description: Is a Lycanthrope who consumes blood of a differing ethnic creature. In Octavian’s case; he drinks the blood of a mutated vampire thus his form is unique.

Appearance: This pre-hybrid form invokes the Lycanthrope’s fur to malt, skin to turn a white color and the body becomes covered in opened cuts which is then stained red with the exposure to their blood.

[Insight: Lythimpir]

Description: Is a self named term Octavian gives himself and is unique to him as he transcended from that of a Lycanthrope by means of drinking the blood of a mutated vampire. It’s power differs by the vampire who offered his/her blood. This hybrid form is unique.

Appearance: His hybrid form is completed as his hair takes on a raven color and grows out above his lower back, bat-like ears replace the lycanthrope ears, the lycanthrope snout retracts creating a more humanoid visage, irises slit in two colored silver and raven which overlap each other resembling an x. He gains vampire fangs. His body from head to toe becomes silver colored and is elongated. The waist down is covered in raven colored fur. Bat-like wings; raven in color protrude one from the right arm and left leg located on the right side of his wrist and from the back of his ankle that spread with a wingspan of about six feet. His tail thinned out and grew several feet in length. His healing capabilities, strength and stamina have heightened.

[Insight: Mahr]

Description: Is a female goblin which rides on people's chests while they sleep inducing nightmares while their weight causes the victim to have difficulty breathing. It’s origin is Germany.

Appearance: Is a female spirit or goblin with a hideous visage. The goblin’s body is yellow-greenish in color, stout and when crawling on its victim which are usually female; will be in a sitting position on the chest area.

[Insight: Dhampiresa]

Description: Is a type of vampire hybrid who is birthed from a vampire father and human mother. Thus is half vampire half human and the male counterpart is named Dhampir. They will usually be carrying weapons and are considered high rank in the vampire ethnicity. It's origin is Balkan.

Appearance: Her weapons are a crossbow with arrows made of silver and wooden stakes as well as a long pointed end sword made of silver; forged into a close appearance to that of a crucifix thus far have been revealed.

[Insight: Hybrid Dhampiresa]

Description: In Venera’s case, a Dhampiresa who consumed blood of a differing ethnic creature; a Lythimpir thus making this form unique.

Appearance: Venera’s pre-hybrid form causes her irises to gain two extra slits on the bottom perpendicular to each other appearing as an upside down T; glowing orchid color. Her hybrid form completes as her hair grows out past her thighs, hands and fingers stretch five inches as her finger nails grow over three inches becoming claw-like, ankles elongate as her feet stretch out and toenails grow over five inches appearing claw-like as well, two slits join the single irises creating a reversed T glowing orchid in color. Strength and stamina are heightened.

[Insight: Berserk DNA Hybrid Dhampiresa]

Description: This occurred as a result of her weakened body not being able to stabilize the blood changes and thus her own blood combats the Lythimpir blood which invokes her DNA to alter her body. This form is unique to the Dhampir solely.

Appearance: Her body then begins to float and convulses. Hair turning completely red-violet, veins protruding as well as amethyst colored slash wounds mark her entire body, the sclera becomes black in color as the irises and pupils turn indigo and her clothes become tethered. The altering seems to have affected her persona and abilities.

[Insight: Zombie]

Description: Is a corpse reanimated by a sorcerer through a spell. It’s origin is Haiti.

Appearance: The corpse is no one in particular as the sorcerer simply will cast their spell over any grave sight. However, the sorcerer is sure to use a fresh corpse as it will be much more sustainable for the commands than a decomposed body. Although, the corpse will become greatly disfigured through the spell’s process.

[Insight: Bokor]

Description: Is a sorcerer who uses black and white magic to cast spells, curses or to create creatures. It’s origin is Haiti.

[Insight: Ghoul]

Description: Is a desert dwelling jinn possessing the ability to change its form into any animal or human. Their true form is that of a spirit. It’s origin is Arabia.

Appearance: Golden colored mist appearing in the form of a footless demon. Every Ghoul’s true form varies.

[Insight: Wyvern]

Description: Is a legendary two winged, two legged, single tailed creature. It’s origin is Great Britain.

Appearance: It’s body is ruby red in color, completely covered in spikes, having no arms and a barbed tail.

[Insight: Lindworm]

† Description: Is a legendary wingless creature with a long body, bipedal and single tail with a venomous bite. It’s origin is Germany.

† Appearance: It’s body has a emerald green color, lengthy serpentine body and has parts of its body intertwined.

[Insight: Guivre]

† Description: Is a legendary creature with a long body and horned head who spreads plagues through its breath. It’s origin is France.

† Appearance: It’s body has a sapphire blue color, long serpentine body, the single tail splits in two at the end and has five horns on the head; it’s forehead containing largest two.

[Insight: Golem]

Description: Is a mythical construct created to serve its creator; either a greatly empowered sorcerer or wizard. It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud; resembling a humanoid. This construct has no mind, soul and cannot speak. It’s origin is Jewish.

Appearance: It is constructed from inanimate matter consisting usually of rock or mud thus the body will have a brownish color of sorts; resembling a humanoid. It has no mind, soul and cannot speak.

[Insight: Căpcăun]

Description: This is a type of ogre having the head of a dog and body of a man. It is muscular and usually carries a club of sorts. Although, sometimes it can have two heads.

Appearance: A cruel and bloodthirsty creature this is. They can range from giant to dwarf size and are strong. Their bodies’ colors vary but are usually in the brownish area. The head resembles that of a dog and the body are humanoid appearing like a muscular man.

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

So, in the end of this chapter Atilla and Venera appear to be dead, Octavian seems to be losing, Rahmah has won his own battle and Tiberiu is yet to fight, eh? That's quite some development, I like the variety of aura-based weapons you put in. I just can't wait for the grand finale xd
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

So, in the end of this chapter Atilla and Venera appear to be dead, Octavian seems to be losing, Rahmah has won his own battle and Tiberiu is yet to fight, eh? That's quite some development, I like the variety of aura-based weapons you put in. I just can't wait for the grand finale xd
indeed lol

good job, as always ^^
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

So, in the end of this chapter Atilla and Venera appear to be dead, Octavian seems to be losing, Rahmah has won his own battle and Tiberiu is yet to fight, eh? That's quite some development, I like the variety of aura-based weapons you put in. I just can't wait for the grand finale xd
Indeed those two do and poor Octavian *twiddles thumbs in sadistic manner* hehehe Okay, you referred to Rahmah as a male by stating "has won his own battle" XD Dude you truly crack me up! I knew the sudden turn of events would be something to take in ^.^ Thank you and if you or anyone else only knows about this ending-I mean the trails/errors were immense lol I cannot wait to release it myself ;)

cool chapter
Thanks :)

indeed lol

good job, as always ^^
Thanks dude ;)

Awesome chapter
Thank you and as well for following my work since the beginning I presume? ;p
 

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I have one deep regret after reading this chapter and thinking back on the journey of Tiberiu and his troops till here - If only, you had enough finance to make an manga/anime out of this! This really shows the pinnacle to your work. When you visually-read it, you really can only be in awe to the depiction of the battles and events. It's wonderfully depicted thanks to your fantastic English and concept. Fantastic!

This chapter's battle were really well-depicted and you could almost feel the pain of all Tiberiu's group's pain. I had a visual manga overflowing in my head thanks to our language. There's been other awesome chapter from you before (some more than this one also in terms of story) but this one really translated the feelings, emotions and sufferings of the characters like no other. I don't think that your FF can be qualified as a Fanfiction really. It's novel-language with anime/manga/movie-level concept - that's how good it is!

From the lethargic pace of excellent characters and story depiction and the unfolding of events, your 'art' is getting more nail-biting as ever. In fact, this one shows how much epic the final battles are gonna be.

On this chapter, well, I liked the things I mentioned above obviously -this, including the story and battles but I also like how you are now moving slowly with Tiberiu and Lulian's final confrontation.
The Bokor seems interesting really - he reminds me of Kabuto with his slyness with pawns. Sad really how Venera's end was! You really didn't went easy on her by not only putting her in handicap position agaisnt the Pureblood but by also having the Bokor interfering.

In fact, the thing that you're presenting those Purebloods as so powerful surprises me as it questions the reader that if pawns are of this level, then how powerful Lulian and that Bokor actually are?
They are literally destroying Tiberiu's group. Initially, I thought that while some may fall, some (especially Venera and Octavian since they are the two, you pretty developed with utmost care and intrigue) may have to assist Tiberiu on his final battle. While this may still occur, you seriously put it into doubts, I must say. Venera and Attila seems gone, Octavian is in serious jeopardy and Rahmah, though she won, is not in her best state. Well, at-least she prevented the chapter from being the "Supreme Pwnage of Lulian's pawns" chapter :p

Anyways, you really are putting the stacks against Tiberiu more and more. It almost seems that your story is gonna end with the villains' winning which should be a extreme twist. Keep going, I must say and frankly, you really are collecting all the necessary elements to make an epic finale as never before.

For this chapter on an overall note, I'll say - Blockbuster!
 

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I have one deep regret after reading this chapter and thinking back on the journey of Tiberiu and his troops till here - If only, you had enough finance to make an manga/anime out of this! This really shows the pinnacle to your work. When you visually-read it, you really can only be in awe to the depiction of the battles and events. It's wonderfully depicted thanks to your fantastic English and concept. Fantastic!

This chapter's battle were really well-depicted and you could almost feel the pain of all Tiberiu's group's pain. I had a visual manga overflowing in my head thanks to our language. There's been other awesome chapter from you before (some more than this one also in terms of story) but this one really translated the feelings, emotions and sufferings of the characters like no other. I don't think that your FF can be qualified as a Fanfiction really. It's novel-language with anime/manga/movie-level concept - that's how good it is!

From the lethargic pace of excellent characters and story depiction and the unfolding of events, your 'art' is getting more nail-biting as ever. In fact, this one shows how much epic the final battles are gonna be.

On this chapter, well, I liked the things I mentioned above obviously -this, including the story and battles but I also like how you are now moving slowly with Tiberiu and Lulian's final confrontation.
The Bokor seems interesting really - he reminds me of Kabuto with his slyness with pawns. Sad really how Venera's end was! You really didn't went easy on her by not only putting her in handicap position agaisnt the Pureblood but by also having the Bokor interfering.

In fact, the thing that you're presenting those Purebloods as so powerful surprises me as it questions the reader that if pawns are of this level, then how powerful Lulian and that Bokor actually are?
They are literally destroying Tiberiu's group. Initially, I thought that while some may fall, some (especially Venera and Octavian since they are the two, you pretty developed with utmost care and intrigue) may have to assist Tiberiu on his final battle. While this may still occur, you seriously put it into doubts, I must say. Venera and Attila seems gone, Octavian is in serious jeopardy and Rahmah, though she won, is not in her best state. Well, at-least she prevented the chapter from being the "Supreme Pwnage of Lulian's pawns" chapter :p

Anyways, you really are putting the stacks against Tiberiu more and more. It almost seems that your story is gonna end with the villains' winning which should be a extreme twist. Keep going, I must say and frankly, you really are collecting all the necessary elements to make an epic finale as never before.

For this chapter on an overall note, I'll say - Blockbuster!
The length and meaning of this post was astonishing to say the least. I mean I know that you are capable but this one caught me off guard! What can I say-I love feedback especially one as detailed and as huge as yours lol Thank you for all of your compliments ;) I truly don’t believe that my work is as high and mighty as you state but to be commended is a wonderful feeling ^.^ It would be something to have my work be taken and made into a manga/anime XD I had wondered how you would take in the up coming acts as I knew they would differ from the theories you previously presented. Happy to hear that it is still exceptable and not failure on my part lol I didn’t even realize that the way I expressed the main character’s pain could be sensed. You definitely are understanding how everything is unfolding which is fantastic. I like the comment about Bokor being reminiscent of Kabumaru :) Your words are very resonating as they even position me to think lol I do worry a little in how the ending will affect the entire story. I hope it does not result in a botch -_- I myself have seen this many times with movies, etc. I know how complex it can b e sometimes to having a good ending to a good story and I hope that I may pull it off. Thank you again for your feedback as it was an inspiration for me ;)
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

Woah O_O It seems like Tiberiu's team Is in a way similar to the Sound Five in that most of them basically get epicly owned but will the fallens deaths be in vain or will the ultimate goal be achieved? Quite interesting indeed! Keep on going and can't wait for the grand finale! :D
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

Woah O_O It seems like Tiberiu's team Is in a way similar to the Sound Five in that most of them basically get epicly owned but will the fallens deaths be in vain or will the ultimate goal be achieved? Quite interesting indeed! Keep on going and can't wait for the grand finale! :D
I like your comparison lol XD Yes-that is something that will be revealed soon ^.^ I definitely wanted to stray away from as much clichéd outcomes as possible. I hope the route I choose will be accepted in a positive manner but who knows. Thank you again friend ;)
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

So, in the end of this chapter Atilla and Venera appear to be dead, Octavian seems to be losing, Rahmah has won his own battle and Tiberiu is yet to fight, eh? That's quite some development, I like the variety of aura-based weapons you put in. I just can't wait for the grand finale xd
^ This, Lol. Soo much is taking place that's it's almost hard to keep track
of everything, but it's all soo interesting. (Y)
 

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Re: Helvetes Gjenfødelse [Infernal Rebirth] Act VX: Cringe

^ This, Lol. Soo much is taking place that's it's almost hard to keep track
of everything, but it's all soo interesting. (Y)
lol at you quoting Dani ^.^ Yes, this is what I love to do something different and continue to make my story as unexpected as possible, the twists and turns etc. Well, I don't mean to go too out of range with the situations but maybe I can become too carried away for my own good -_-
 
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