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chapter 2 un beatable rep if you like it heres the link to

Trunks: fater are you ok?

Vegeta: Trunks...

Vegeta holds his side in pian.

Trunks: what happened?

Vegeta:... go get Kakarot's childen get every one we need them all this time.

Trunks: ( what happened)

Trunks flies off towards gokus house...

mean while at gokus house...

Goten: hey Gohan its been a while...

Gohan and Pan stand in the door way of gokus old house.

Gohan: yeah Goten atleast 7 years now.

Goten: come in i'm sure mom's been dying to see you again.

they walk in...

Goten turns around and starts to walk back in

Goten: why are you here trunks?

Trunks: something bad happened.

Goten: what?

Gohan: what is it, hey trunks.

Trunks: Gohan,Goten come with me.

Pan looks over to side to see Gohan Goten and Trunks fly off.

Pan: (where are they going?)

Pan flies off after them...

Vegeta: so your all here now...

Trunks: now tell us what happened.

vegeta explains every thing.

Trunks: An evil goku?

vegeta: he is much more powerful then me even in my super sayian four form he wasnt even transformed.

Goten: if he did this much damage i'm guessing he really is.

Gohan: if you didnt stand a chance in super sayian four then how will we beat him?

Vegeta: I can think of only one way...

later...

Gohan now has his tail back Goten now has a tail Trunks also has a tail...

Gohan: and haveing our tails will help how?

Vegeta: super sayian four with 4 of us teaming up on him in super sayian four it might just work.

Pan arrives

Pan: wow every one has tails now whats going on/

Gohan tells Pan.

Pan:what!?

Gohan: dont interfere Pan he's stron.

Vegeta: yes but that doesnt mean do nothing go get Uub and find a safe place if we cant finish him its up to you two to get every one off earth and continue the fight another day.

Vegeta,Goten,Gohan and Trunks turn super sayian and fly off.

Gohan: so how will we become super sayian four

Vegeta: theres a much easier way then the way me and Kakarot went threw to get it.

Gohan: how then?

vegeta: its this dudes fanfic he can make you super sayian four with out any effot that's how xd

they arrive at a city which is in pices torn apart by evil goku

person; get awayyou monster

he shots a bullet at Evil goku it does nothing Evil goku releases a Ki blast at him killing him

Evil goku: you again and i see you brought friends.

Vegeta: this time you die.


Evil goku disappears and reappears behind vegeta and kicks him sending him forward vegeta stop and turns around he releases 2 ki blasts then the final flash Goten and Gohan apear behind him and fire a kamehameha wave at him ( both and the same time.) Trunks appears over him and useing burning attack. Evil gku stands there and does nothing the blasts all hit him the smoke clears to reveal Evil goku standingt there.

Vegeta: of corse i knew it won't work.

Evil goku; do you give up then?

Vegeta: no we have only began.

vegeta transforms into super sayian four so does Gohan Goten and trunks

Evil goku; more weaklings won't change the out come

Gohan appears behind Evil goku and and punchs the back of his head Evil goku bends backwards and flips kicking Gohan in the gut sending him flying into a building 1 mile away Goten appears to his left and starts to punch at a fast rate Evil goku counters each punch on the last punch Evil goku gets under his arm and knees him in the gut goten goes flying into Gohantrunks trys to slash Evil goku with his sword and vegeta appears behind evil goku Evil goku ducks and the blade hits vegetas left arm. Evil goku now faceing them prepares a ki blast

Evil goku: ka me ha me HA!

the large black kamehameha wave hits them they hit the ground.

Vegeta: Trunks darn he's out cold

Trunks turns back to normalGohan appears behind Evil goku and punchs him 7 time in the back then knees him in the back sending him flying.

Gohan: vegeta are you alright?

vegeta: Im fine.

evil goku: was that it? Its my turn

evil goku appears beside vegeta and gives him five quick punchs to the face and knees him in the rib the cage he then ends it with a punch to the gut vegeta doubles over in pain holding his stomach evil goku then turns super sayian and punchs vegeta over his head sending him into the ground face first.

Gohan: this power.

Evil goku then begins to punch Gohan gohan manges to block each punch but bearlyEvil goku then jumps over gohan and knees his back and punchs him two times in the same spot he then backs away and begins to fire thousands of ki blasts at Gohan Trunks ( haveing re awaekened)appears behind him and slashs his back evil gokus tail takes trunks leg and and forces him to fall to the ground Evil goku truns around and releases one large ki blast Goten appears over him and releases a kamehameha wave down on him Evil goku appears in front of him and kicks his head down wards sending goten into the same rubble as Vegeta.

Evil goku: *yawn* was that it.

Gohan appears in front of eveil goku and knees him in the gut and punchs him in the face. evil goku appears behind gohan and elbows his spine he then kicks gohan into trunks who was on his way to help they land in the rubble with goten and vegeta.

vegeta: get off of me.

gohan goten and trunks get up and vegeta then does to.

Evil goku: you just dont know when to quit do you?

vegeta:huff huff

Gohan: even all four of us cant beat him...

evil goku: and i'm only in super sayian.

vegeta: die!

vegeta flies up and puts his hand apart like he does for final flash in one hand ki appear to be blue in the other yellow

vegeta: take this final light flash attack

he brings his hands together and releases a himanges amount of blue and yellow ki at him.

evil goku releases a black kamehameha eave it over powers vegeta move and it is send back at him hitting vegeta he falls to the ground once more

vegeta: he's to strong for us at our current level Gohan Goten cover me

gohan and goten stand in front of vegeta as he powers up

the ground begins to break vegetas arms and muscles grow bigger and his ki becomes larger vegetas becomes the same size as broly was in his super sayian form.

evil goku; huh

vegeta: are you ready to face a super sayian five!

next time super sayian five
 
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Well, I doubt it will win FF of the month, theres a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. And it seems like everyone is getting so strong too fast.
Even if the four of them somehow went SS5, it still would do nothing if Goku did this much damage in only super saiyan form. I think its a bit rushed man.
 

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Well, I doubt it will win FF of the month, theres a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. And it seems like everyone is getting so strong too fast.
Even if the four of them somehow went SS5, it still would do nothing if Goku did this much damage in only super saiyan form. I think its a bit rushed man.
I agree. Spelling and grammar aren't the issue really, or atleast the main one, but for DBZ you need to build a story. Nice FF, but make it more deep.


SS5? Epic, but way too soon.
 

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How and yeah I admit I rushed it vegeta wouldn't be able to do much now after all that don't worry I'll try to make it slower but how?
I didn't mind the SSJ5 part, but the way you described his body to grow, it makes him a bit too bulky, the whole point in going into a new SSJ level is keeping speed and power, so if he's growing in that much muscle mass then it sounds more of like an Ultra Super Saiyan 4 (Essentially like when Goku, Trunks, and Vegeta learned how to get more powerful in their Super Saiyan form in the HBTC during the Android Saga, but found out the massive power had a weakness, which was being much more slower than normal so they chose not to transform into USSJ1 anymore)

Otherwise, loved reading it :) and laughed at the part where you broke the fourth wall by making Vegeta mention the fanfiction haha.
 
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