Demon Reaper: Chapter 2 Be my Limiter!

[WhyShouldIBecomeASage]

Reply Positively or Negatively. Tell me what you think.

Narrator: From then on Mizumi and Demon were inseparable. Mizumi acted as Demon's limiter to his abilities so that he wouldn't run wild with rage. Mizumi decides to become a shinigami, so Demon goes to the school with her.

Teacher: As you knew each Shinigami has their own special ability that manifest it's self at birth. Now is the time to show your abilities.

Miyuki: I have the ability to control flames.

(Flames emerge and surround her.)

Teacher: I see. Next!

Aye: My family has always had the abilty to control lightning.

Teacher: Excellent! I see you are from the Orimoto clan. Quite impressive. And what is your ability?

Mizumi: Well I have the ability to cast spells.

Teacher: So you're a witch?

Mizumi: Yeah. But I prefer Spell Caster.

Teacher: Anyway who is he?

(Points towards Demon)

Mizumi: Oh Demon. He's my familiar.

Teacher: Well that's a first you have another reaper as your familiar. What are your abilities young reaper?

Demon: I'm the ultimate weapon!

Mizumi: He has the ability to transfrom any part of his body into any weapon.

Teacher: Impressive! I will have to watch him, this is the child whom is supposed to bring chaos to the world. Well that's it for class today, see you bright and early in the morning students.

 

[Gitanshu]

negative

 

[WhyShouldIBecomeASage]

negative

Okay, But next time explain your reason for your comment. No one word comments please.

 

[Jack Spicer]

Seems to short for my liking, but in one of my stories I made the first chapter short and made the rest super long xd, so about length, I don't really care.


I think it has potential, but you need alot more backstory. I saw the first chap, but it was also short. Not enough stuff.

You're creating all new characters, and a world. It has to be longer. My feedback is positive, but informative. I like the story though.

 

[WhyShouldIBecomeASage]

I made these chapters short because I wanted to see how people replied to the story. And thanks for you're advice. I will make the other chapters longer.

 

[Jack Spicer]

Welcome

Looking forward to the next chapter.

 

[WhyShouldIBecomeASage]

Thanks
I can actually upload the next chapter I wrote like ten chapters into the story. But the FF isn't getting many replies. Maybe I should have wrote about Naruto like all the other FF.

 

[Jack Spicer]

Thanks
I can actually upload the next chapter I wrote like ten chapters into the story. But the FF isn't getting many replies. Maybe I should have wrote about Naruto like all the other FF.

Don't. Write what you want. I write two Naruto FFs, and an Avatar one. I LOVE my Avatar one, but nobody views it. Nobody cares, but I do. Do what you want. I feel similar. Believe me.


Keep this going. Don't let kill it, despite it not being popular. Someday someone might like it. I like yours. I'll follow it. Main thing is that you love what you do.


My speech is done xd

 

[WhyShouldIBecomeASage]

Thanks I will continue with this FF. Nice Speech Btw!
Posting chapter 3 now First Mission Burning Spirit.

 

[Jack Spicer]

When it comes to speeches about FF, I am like a semi-Chuck Norris! xd Thanks.

I'll read it as soon as I wake up. It's 5:21 in America (West Virginia wise. Stupid state, I know). It's really early. I'll read as soon as I wake up!