Well, I think your errs have been pointed out by a couple early readers already. I hope they were able to to notice your usage of "too" and "to"?
I sort of ignored it at first, thinking that it may have just been a typo error but then, there were really a lot of them in the long runxd. I use WORD document when writing, do you? I haven't run into that beta reader as someone mentioned earlier, though. I'll most likely check on that.
One thing's for sure though, it was quite impressing of you to have imagined such a storyline! Thumbs up for that!
