*Nowness City* - Chapter Nº1 "Find her!"

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Nowness City

Chapter Nº1 - Find her!

Nowness City, New York - The last populated city.
Isolated in 400 miles of roadless wilderness.
Absorbed every year in 65 days of darkness!


Nowness City - November 02, 2018 - First day of night

Snowstorm. A single man in a rowboat...A STRANGER...forges through the icy waters toward the coast.
It’s hard to say how old he is... 40's, maybe 50's??? because he’s so filthy and red-eyed and yet so fiercely driven.

In shadows behind him stands the eerie, forbidding SHIP which brought him this far. Hitting the edge of the ice,
the Stranger clambers out of his boat and trudges inland, smiling thinly as he sees the boat drift away, no use to him anymore...

As we follow the Stranger through the wide, eerie twilight of the Nowness wilderness dragging a large black bag...
blasted by the wind yet persevering, too yearning and wild-eyed to slow down...
As he crests a small ridge of ice, we see a clutch of lights shimmering in the distance: NOWNESS CITY, NEW YORK.
An icy outpost of a town caused by the enlarging cold of the darkness, an oil and mining outpost ringed with derricks and
tundra.
The Stranger grins as he sees NOWNESS CITY twinkling through the snowstorm, and presses onward...
inclining himself over a cliff of ice, the stranger drops the huge black bag into the endless icy waters of NOWNESS CITY...


Nowness City - November 02, 2031 - First day of night

Several buildings in ruins. A landscape in hell...
The cars are stopped in rusted rows, still bumper to bumper. The skyline of buildings beyond has been shattered by some unimaginable force like a row of kicked-down sandcastles. Wind blows through the desolation, keening with the sound of ten million dead souls.
It scurries the ashes into drifts, stark white in the moonlight against the charred rubble.

heaps of fire-blackened human bones. Beyond the mound is a vast tundra of skulls and shattered concrete.
The rush hour crowd burned down in their tracks.

A MAN stands, back to the setting sun, his face cloaked in shadows...until he turns thoughtfully,
the light gradually revealing a weathered and soulful gaze.
He is ELITE SOLDIER HEATH NORMAN, early 30's...



HEATH: 3 billion human lives ended on December 22th, 2020.
The survivors of the nuclear fire & the second coming of pandemic BLACK DEATH called it THE END OF DAYS.
They lived only to face a new nightmare, the war against the Cyborgs & the mutants...

A rusted tricycle... next to the tiny skull of its owner. A deep voice speaks...

GENERAL FURY, earnest, 40s, wearing a deputy’s badge and shining a flashlight into a snowbank west of NOWNESS CITY.

A metal foot crushes the skull like china. The general has a cybernetic leg made of metal.


GENERAL: You're my best soldier, Heath. And the right person to execute this mission.
You know the present and our faith depends on this. Mankind as we know it depends on this!

HEATH: I'm well aware of the vitality and importance of my upcoming mission, sir.

GENERAL: You must find ORORO and bring her back... She's the only faith we have in saving the world from the
doom,misery and disgrace we got sunked in.

GENERAL: Today it starts the 65 days of night.
We have the advantage that Cyborgs will be battling mutants as well as us through this cycle of days but they will hunt us as well.

HEATH: I know!! At this time i have to have special attention to mutants as it's their hunting season.

*65 days of night Mutants, being vulnerable to heat, take advantage of the prolonged darkness to feast upon the town's inhabitants.

GENERAL: Cyborgs will be hunting them down as well for experiences.
My indications is that ORORO was last seen about 35 miles to the north, close to the empty mall that was turned into a shelter.

HEATH: They probably don't even know what she is...

GENERAL: We'll stay in contact through our devices. When you find her, give her this Ship which contains a very important message.
I'll be expecting news from you, soldier.

GENERAL proceeds to handle a little USB Ship to HEATH.


HEATH: I will bring her!


HEATH climbs on his MOTORDRONE* and starts heading to the north of NOWNESS at high speed.

MOTORDRONE* are automated motorcycles. A specialized cold weather.
The Motordrone has red optic sensors and plasma emitters on its sides.
The Motordrone are seen to possess incredible agility, with the sensors calculating debris or obstacles ahead,
even viewing them in slow motion. With this trait, they easily avoid any obstacle, such as a car wreckage.
The Motordrone apparently seems to be the fastest land based machine, with top speeds of 200 miles per hour.

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20 MINUTES AWAY FROM THE MEETING

A humanoid machine holding a massive battle rifle.
It looks like a CHROME BRAWLER... a high-tech Death figure.
It is the endoskeleton of a Series 800 cyborg. Its glowing red eyes compassionlessly sweep the dead terrain, hunting.

The SOUNDS of ROARING TURBINES. Searchlights blaze down as a formation of flying HK (Hunter-Killer) patrol machines passes overhead.
PAN WITH THEM toward the jagged horizon, beyond which we see flashes, and hear the distant thunder of a pitched battle in progress.


IN A VERY DISTANT PLACE - THE CIRCLE OF VIOLENCE

We see a figure guarding a HUGE DOOR. This figure is the guard of the Seventh Circle of HELL.

MINOTAUR : What do you want Krane?

KRANE is the most feared murderer of the seventh circle of the INFERNO. Capable, fearless and emotionless with a huge thirst for blood and flesh.
This man thrives on watching people die before him at his hands.

A VOICE IS HEARD...


VOICE : Let him pass, Minotaur. It was me who called him here.

MINOTAUR opens the big gates of HELL and KRANE goes deep into this huge room.
A figure is seated on a BIG THRONE...


FIGURE'S VOICE : You'll be sent to the Earth on a mission.
Your mission is to eliminate a subject called ORORO and everything that is between you and the goal of this mission.

KRANE - What if i say no!

FIGURE'S VOICE : I'll reduce your existance to ashes right here! Right now!

KRANE : I was just testing waters. I see this is important...

FIGURE'S VOICE : You'll have 31 days to complete this task. Your faith will be decided in the outcome of your feats.

KRANE : What happens if i fail?

FIGURE'S VOICE : You don't wanna know...

Nowness City - November 02, 2031 - First day of night

HEATH continues through roads of desolation heading to the north. Driving through empty, dark streets.
HEATH with his gaze on the road, peering through the snow, he suddenly lifts his gun...
He step out, searching down the street, but there’s nothing visible in the snowy haze.


HEATH : I know i saw something...

still staring dead ahead, straining his eyes through the blackness.

The dark snowy landscape washed in green and deep within in... A SHADOW MOVING, COMING RIGHT AT HIM...

HEATH gets back in his MOTORDRONE.

WHOMP! Something HITS him. He reaches for his gun... He reaches out and aims his pistol at the UNKNOWN FIGURE, FIRING!!!




END OF CHAPTER
 

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Interesting storyline you got here. I can both see and say for sure that it got a good and big plot to evolve around.
Felt like the first chapter was kind of a mix between "The day after tomorrow", "Terminator" and "Land of the dead":p
 

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Interesting storyline you got here. I can both see and say for sure that it got a good and big plot to evolve around.
Felt like the first chapter was kind of a mix between "The day after tomorrow", "Terminator" and "Land of the dead":p
Definitely it has a "punch" of Terminator. The others i never saw.
I have to admit i don't feel as excited writting this as i was with "Utopic Monkeys" and specially "The Past creates the Future" but hopefully it will build up on me...
 

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Definitely it has a "punch" of Terminator. The others i never saw.
I have to admit i don't feel as excited writting this as i was with "Utopic Monkeys" and specially "The Past creates the Future" but hopefully it will build up on me...
Hehe, well The day after tomorrow is a disaster film were the world frezes over, don't really remember too much of it. And Land of the dead is a movie placed in a town were... yeah I think you get it:p

Oh, I see. Well I guess it do something to a person when his last chapter gets trashed and his other work warned, but if you do your best, people will come again and I believe you will find your "mojo" back;) Best of luck!:)
 

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Hehe, well The day after tomorrow is a disaster film were the world frezes over, don't really remember too much of it. And Land of the dead is a movie placed in a town were... yeah I think you get it:p

Oh, I see. Well I guess it do something to a person when his last chapter gets trashed and his other work warned, but if you do your best, people will come again and I believe you will find your "mojo" back;) Best of luck!:)
Thanks mate and thanks for the thumbs up on your chapter!
 

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Hey, mate, I see you're back behind the desk writing great fanfics ;) Thumbs up for your first chapter, it was great, especially with the sudden cliffhanger at the end :) Oh my God, I sure hope Heath survives! O.O Can't wait to see what happens next :D And who that mysterious man in the rowboat was and is he connected to the cyborg and mutant war. Knowing how much time you haven't made any fanfics, I am really surprised you picked up so well with this one, but, on the other hand, I expected nothing less from you of all people :)
 
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Hey, mate, I see you're back behind the desk writing great fanfics ;) Thumbs up for your first chapter, it was great, especially with the sudden cliffhanger at the end :) Oh my God, I sure hope Heath survives! O.O Can't wait to see what happens next :D And who that mysterious man in the rowboat was and is he connected to the cyborg and mutant war. Knowing how much time you haven't made any fanfics, I am really surprised you picked up so well with this one, but, on the other hand, I expected nothing less from you of all people :)
Not much more to add here.
Fantastic work!
I'm very curious about the Krane character from hell. You always mix up so many crazy stuff.
In this one is hell, future,black death, cyborgs, mutants. AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 

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Like Since yesterday stated you do indeed conjure up some CRAZY STUFF!!! This new Fanfic-the one your not too thrilled about has a grand depth of detailing (I’m actually jealous, my friend). I do not think I could ever hope to produce something like this. While it has some elements from past movies it does not quite feel like it. You’ve created something pretty original. I like it’s dark scientific fantasy theme and it is a Fanfic that puts your brain to think-at least it did for me ;) As I continued to read, it seemed like a movie/novel in my honest opinion. You may not be happy with it now however, I think it is the best work as far as detailing goes and you should truly be proud of yourself for this fantastic accomplishment! ;p​
 

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Like Since yesterday stated you do indeed conjure up some CRAZY STUFF!!! This new Fanfic-the one your not too thrilled about has a grand depth of detailing (I’m actually jealous, my friend). I do not think I could ever hope to produce something like this. While it has some elements from past movies it does not quite feel like it. You’ve created something pretty original. I like it’s dark scientific fantasy theme and it is a Fanfic that puts your brain to think-at least it did for me ;) As I continued to read, it seemed like a movie/novel in my honest opinion. You may not be happy with it now however, I think it is the best work as far as detailing goes and you should truly be proud of yourself for this fantastic accomplishment! ;p​
Thanks alot my friend. Always a very knowledgeable and insightful comment from your behalf my friend.
I hope you enjoy the ride and ride along through this Fanfiction.
 

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Hmn, what should I say?...Uhm, I'm not a pro nor can I say that I am good in writing but I do read a lot and when I do, I consider the following in bold and what follows is what I think of this FanFiction. :)
Writing style - Hmmn, considering the genre of audience in this forum, I'd give it a 10/10. Sentence construction, choice of words, the tone of the statements - smooth and nicely done. Genre - Futuristic?, action, adventure - nice! Perhaps there'll be something for Heath and Ororo later (?) :rolleyes:xd:D Storyline - I still don't have an idea of how it would evolve though, that's why I'd like to have the next chapters ASAP :D But if you have a synopsis for this then, perhaps you can share it to me? :)

And oh, one more thing - the way you work things in here, I felt like I was reading a novel. I believe you can do one if you try. :)
 

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Very good first chapter
Thanks alot! You're welcome.

Hmn, what should I say?...Uhm, I'm not a pro nor can I say that I am good in writing but I do read a lot and when I do, I consider the following in bold and what follows is what I think of this FanFiction. :)
Writing style - Hmmn, considering the genre of audience in this forum, I'd give it a 10/10. Sentence construction, choice of words, the tone of the statements - smooth and nicely done. Genre - Futuristic?, action, adventure - nice! Perhaps there'll be something for Heath and Ororo later (?) :rolleyes:xd:D Storyline - I still don't have an idea of how it would evolve though, that's why I'd like to have the next chapters ASAP :D But if you have a synopsis for this then, perhaps you can share it to me? :)

And oh, one more thing - the way you work things in here, I felt like I was reading a novel. I believe you can do one if you try. :)

Hello Nikkou!! Thanks alot for reading the first chapter of my new world of fantasy fiction.
Your words mean alot to me as i'm just starting this FanFiction and i don't feel with the excitement and confidence of before (in last works).

The new chapter is in the works and i can already tell you that it's another "build up" type of chapter. Obviously because it's still there much to develop before we go into full-action mode but i'll keep things interesting with some action, i promisse :) .

As for the synopsis, even i am leaving things in the open and nothing is set in stone as far as future developments.
Meanwhile i can preview that another vital character to the story will be introduced in chapter 2.

As far as the subject you have touched about the audience of this forum, that's what dismotivates me a bit as most users only read Naruto related Fanfictions and i would like to have some frequent readers and people to comment my work to keep me going. I feel like many don't even give a chance to Naruto Non-Related FanFictions.

If you wanna read a bit more about my two previous works, here's the link for my well known fanfiction "Utopic Monkeys", Michael92 was a huge fan for example:



I hope you enjoyed it and join the ride here in my newest FanFiction.
 
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Thanks alot! You're welcome.



Hello Nikkou!! Thanks alot for reading the first chapter of my new world of fantasy fiction.
Your words mean alot to me as i'm just starting this FanFiction and i don't feel with the excitement and confidence of before (in last works).

The new chapter is in the works and i can already tell you that it's another "build up" type of chapter. Obviously because it's still there much to develop before we go into full-action mode but i'll keep things interesting with some action, i promisse :) .

As for the synopsis, even i am leaving things in the open and nothing is set in stone as far as future developments.
Meanwhile i can preview that another vital character to the story will be introduced in chapter 2.

As far as the subject you have touched about the audience of this forum, that's what dismotivates me a bit as most users only read Naruto related Fanfictions and i would like to have some frequent readers and people to comment my work to keep me going. I feel like many don't even give a chance to Naruto Non-Related FanFictions.

If you wanna read a bit more about my two previous works, here's the link for my well known fanfiction "Utopic Monkeys", Michael92 was a huge fan for example:



I hope you enjoyed it and join the ride here in my newest FanFiction.
Okay then.
[Ehehehe, such a short response to a long post, right? xd:D Its because everything's all good. :)]
 

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Hmm...Very interesting. :'D Never read a futuristic FF before in this base, this is my first time and I can see your FF can go very far ;D I like the plot, the character's seems to be detailed described. Good work! :) Tell me when you released a 2nd part.
 
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