The 6th Great Ninja War XVI

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Epic chapter. One of the best so far.
I enjoyed the library part/story of the 8th jinchuu the most.
The fight is great too, but i think -no offense- your writing skills show even better when you write down an "idea", like the: "lost in library but finding secrets".
 

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The fight descriptions are very finely detailed, nice work. You got all of Kaito's moves perfectly too O_O

Though Cali seems to rely a lot on Kiyoshi stuff xd
 

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The fight descriptions are very finely detailed, nice work. You got all of Kaito's moves perfectly too O_O

Though Cali seems to rely a lot on Kiyoshi stuff xd
Well, it's part of who he is now. Much of Caliburn's history is going to be explained next chapter ^_^

I'm surprised nobody has commented on how hardcore Caliburn was in his fight with Kaito. I mean...he literally forced his dagger through his throat out of his stomach to get a weapon. If that isn't badass, I don't know what it xd
 

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Roku and Akira moved out of the way and start searching through the vast collection of books on that particular level of the Hall. Caliburn and Kaito rushed at each other, swords out, and Katio slashed first, horizontally, but Caliburn flipped into the air with full force, avoiding the attack and swiping downward for an arching sideways strike which Kaito blocked overhead. Caliburn kicked Kaito’s sword with his feet and used the recoiling force to pushed off and land on the ground by flipping backward. Kaito held his ground firmly and smirked. Akira and Roku found a scroll titled “The Birth of the 7th Raikage”.
A burst of Energy, completely transparent and only visible by the distortion around the edges of the pulse, hit Kaito in midair, pushing him against a large bookcase and dealing significant damage. Kaito wiped the subtle amount of blood off his mouth. The dust cleared and Caliburn rose from the ground with only a few small cuts and few bruises. Kaito’s red eyes focused in on Caliburn, full of excitement. Caliburn held both his long sword and his katana up for a second and then unleashed a barrage of slashes toward Kaito that released white whips, bullets, blasts, waves, and slashes of pure chakra.

Kaito rushed at Caliburn once more with great speed, dodging each and every single slash left and right as his Sharingan activated. Several were too close, so Kaito swung his sword and released blasts of large fire to match each chakra wave. Kaito’s sword gained an aura of red around it and shark-like teeth appeared on the edges, resulting in the blade spinning and vibrating rapidly, although seemingly subtly, like a chainsaw. A violent flare of flame-like chakra surrounded the weapon. As Kaito finally approached the last stride, Caliburn lifted his sword and prepared another powerful downward slash, but Kaito was quick and pivoted his footing, turning his sword with his body to go to the left, as if he were swinging it himself to attack, but instead to block Caliburn’s vertical attack. He overpowered Caliburn and pushed him back against another bookshelf, this time turning his sword’s position out to the side to stab Caliburn in the face, but Caliburn ducked and slapped his hand on Kaito’s side, imbuing Pure Chakra into Kaito’s abdomen. Kaito, however, was quick to stop this and impulsively thrust his blade through Caliburn’s arm, slipping through it like soft butter. Caliburn felt a chilling sensation, a pain so great and paralyzing, and a fear that came with so much despair that he could hardly move. He could not keep himself from feeling his fear. Caliburn coughed hard, blood shrieking through his mouth since his dagger was still in place between his teeth. Caliburn almost lost his tight grip on his sword and let go for a split second, but caught it again on instinct. Kaito frowned and, using his index and middle fingers extended, jabbed Caliburn in the gut, causing him to swallow the sword dangerously. However, Kaito placed his palm, which was in the tiger-style form, against Caliburn’s throat and guided it down to his stomach. He then grabbed Caliburn’s katana and long sword with his right hand before ripping his sword out of Caliburn’s arm. Caliburn, free from the paralyzing fear for that moment, released a small energy wave that blew Kaito back about forty feet. Caliburn coughed, gasping and wheezing for breath. With the fifth cough, he finally breathed. He panted heavily for a while, watching Kaito carefully for a majority of that period. His eyes were nearly bloodshot. He faced his left hand down, drawing green Energy from the Hall with it. The Energy rose up to his wound and covered it from both ends, stopping the incredibly paralyzing sensation and blocking out some of the pain. Caliburn was without a weapon, but he lifted his hands toward Kaito.

Caliburn released one energy wave, then another, and then another and soon constant amounts of energy waves which seemed to be infinite were being released. Caliburn, with his two hands open and charged with energy, thrust with his palms each time, releasing a new energy pulse. Kaito ran at a high velocity, cutting through the waves one by one as fast as he could, but alas there were too many for him to keep up with. Soon, he missed one, which threw off his footing slightly, causing him to lose some momentum but Kaito still continued running. Then, he missed another, which almost tripped him completely. The next one, Kaito simply couldn’t dodge, so he blocked with all threw swords, being burst back several meters and pushing him onto the ground. Caliburn hurried and jumped, landing in front of Kaito and slamming his hand on his face, but before he landed to do this, Kaito’s hand changed position from left to right. Caliburn hadn’t seen what had happened or what he did, but soon he felt it.


A pause. Then, a gash appeared diagonally and the wound opened up rapidly. Then, blood gushed out viciously, splattering onto the ground and Kaito’s face, which he opted to wipe off. Caliburn stumbled back. Kaito rolled his feet back into the air, bent by the knees, and, using the force of his hands pushing against the ground, he leaped up with a kick to Caliburn, which brought him to standing position and made Caliburn stumbled backward even more, this time spinning disoriented. Kaito sheathed his blades and punched Caliburn dead in the face from the right, and then he swung a left hook, also landing a painful blow. Regardless, Caliburn remained standing. Whether it was because he was too surprised and disoriented to fall or whether it was because of his strong will did not seem to stop Kaito. Kaito kept punching ferociously and with savagery. Each punch dealt more and more damage to Caliburn until finally, Kaito lifted his Sanada Yukimura from it’s sheathe and gripped it tight. Caliburn’s Energy suddenly exploded, but Kaito was not in any way fazed. He proceeded to lop of Caliburn’s head from above, but Caliburn did something that surprised everyone including Roku. Caliburn could sense Kaito’s Energy, and with no hesitation, with no remorse, he violently punched himself in the gut with a chakra-enhanced fist and spit out a massive amount of blood, but also something other than a great deal of blood which pained him so: his swallowed dagger. Blood dripped from Caliburn’s mouth incessantly, but he did not let it slow him down at all. He grabbed the hilt of the dagger from his gory mouth and, channeling green Energy through the small blade, turned to block Kaito’s slash with full force.

Kaito: O_O

Caliburn was overpowering Kaito, the Energy filling him with incredible strength and great power. Roku stared in awe at Caliburn’s ruthlessness and rawness. Caliburn put his hand in front of Kaito. Time seemed to stop. There was no other sound but the beating hearts of the two opponents, racing and pumping overtime. Caliburn’s eyes flared up, burning with unbending desire and will, brightly shinining with green flames of steadfastness and absolute focus. And, from point-blank range, Caliburn fired another pulse of Energy, so powerful that Kaito could not negate it in any way.

The ground and area within the proximity shattered and tore up from the force of the massive Energy wave that knocked Kaito into the air and violently across the ground and back into the air constantly until he hit the furthest wall. His back bounced off the wall and he coughed up blood from his throat and his nose. Before he fell flat, Kaito caught himself on his right knee and faced down, panting and kneeling. Caliburn zoomed past countless bookshelves and vast collections of knowledge stored against the walls, consumed with deep intent to kill. Kaito swung his sword on last time once Caliburn got close, but Caliburn lifted into the air, remaining in the same rudimentary position by only lifting his feet in the air while still successfully dodging the blade. He pressed his feet down on Kaito, putting his dagger away, and grabbed his katana and long sword from Kaito’s sword sheathes and spinning then to regain a proper grip on them. Caliburn stabbed Kaito’s shoulders, his hands going inward, and he let go of the blades for a moment to reposition his handling on the blade hilts, having himself grab each hilt with his hands face up but the sword upside-down in perspective.
right... if you're after constructive criticism... here goes...

bold - anything in bold are mistakes...

i don't like the use of seemingly subtly... i find it a much more readable to say something along the lines of, a subtle but violent rotation and vibration of the blades gave the effect of a chainsaw. although technically i believe you mean teeth rather than the blade...

Proceeded to lop off generally means he did lop off his head, rather than attempt to.

Kaito: O_O - i don't like this style personally, he doesn't say O_O you could quite easily have used a description or combined description with dialogue.

i find some sections quite long and straining on the eyes... however that's personal opinion as i tend not to read unless it interests me.

however apart from that it was very well wrote and very descriptive... i'll continue to read more chapters if i tend to notice them and find time in my busy day to day life... i happened to make time for reading this by taking a break from the countless sigs i've been making for people...




my comment about what was missing wasn't malicious or meant to be hurtful... it was nothing but light banter masking my true emotions... you don't know how i feel ... you could at least find yourself lucky how so many people read your fanfics... when i wrote my fanfics it was a struggle to get anyone to read it cos no-one gives a damn about me...

that's how it was... and that's how it always will be... kiwi will always be the idiot left behind and not cared about by anyone...
 

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Well, it's part of who he is now. Much of Caliburn's history is going to be explained next chapter ^_^

I'm surprised nobody has commented on how hardcore Caliburn was in his fight with Kaito. I mean...he literally forced his dagger through his throat out of his stomach to get a weapon. If that isn't badass, I don't know what it xd
Probably because it has been al long running gag that I'm a swordbiter...especially Emperor mocks it daily.

Isn't that right, schizo-plant?

right... if you're after constructive criticism... here goes...

bold - anything in bold are mistakes...

i don't like the use of seemingly subtly... i find it a much more readable to say something along the lines of, a subtle but violent rotation and vibration of the blades gave the effect of a chainsaw. although technically i believe you mean teeth rather than the blade...

Proceeded to lop off generally means he did lop off his head, rather than attempt to.

Kaito: O_O - i don't like this style personally, he doesn't say O_O you could quite easily have used a description or combined description with dialogue.

i find some sections quite long and straining on the eyes... however that's personal opinion as i tend not to read unless it interests me.

however apart from that it was very well wrote and very descriptive... i'll continue to read more chapters if i tend to notice them and find time in my busy day to day life... i happened to make time for reading this by taking a break from the countless sigs i've been making for people...




my comment about what was missing wasn't malicious or meant to be hurtful... it was nothing but light banter masking my true emotions... you don't know how i feel ... you could at least find yourself lucky how so many people read your fanfics... when i wrote my fanfics it was a struggle to get anyone to read it cos no-one gives a damn about me...

that's how it was... and that's how it always will be... kiwi will always be the idiot left behind and not cared about by anyone...
About the chainsaw part, that wasn't just a comparison or some allegory, he was really wielding a chainsaw O_O. At the moment Roku started this FF, Kaito was still one of the 7SM who wielded Sanada Yukimura and it has the ability to be infused whith chakra, which then appears like shark-like teeth around the edges and then start spinning like a chainsaw. Just to let you know >.>
 

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Probably because it has been al long running gag that I'm a swordbiter...especially Emperor mocks it daily.

Isn't that right, schizo-plant?



About the chainsaw part, that wasn't just a comparison or some allegory, he was really wielding a chainsaw O_O. At the moment Roku started this FF, Kaito was still one of the 7SM who wielded Sanada Yukimura and it has the ability to be infused whith chakra, which then appears like shark-like teeth around the edges and then start spinning like a chainsaw. Just to let you know >.>
i call hax... :|
xd

if it was a chainsaw then it's fine and a mistake on my part
 

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right... if you're after constructive criticism... here goes...

bold - anything in bold are mistakes...

i don't like the use of seemingly subtly... i find it a much more readable to say something along the lines of, a subtle but violent rotation and vibration of the blades gave the effect of a chainsaw. although technically i believe you mean teeth rather than the blade...

Proceeded to lop off generally means he did lop off his head, rather than attempt to.

Kaito: O_O - i don't like this style personally, he doesn't say O_O you could quite easily have used a description or combined description with dialogue.

i find some sections quite long and straining on the eyes... however that's personal opinion as i tend not to read unless it interests me.

however apart from that it was very well wrote and very descriptive... i'll continue to read more chapters if i tend to notice them and find time in my busy day to day life... i happened to make time for reading this by taking a break from the countless sigs i've been making for people...




my comment about what was missing wasn't malicious or meant to be hurtful... it was nothing but light banter masking my true emotions... you don't know how i feel ... you could at least find yourself lucky how so many people read your fanfics... when i wrote my fanfics it was a struggle to get anyone to read it cos no-one gives a damn about me...

that's how it was... and that's how it always will be... kiwi will always be the idiot left behind and not cared about by anyone...
Thanks, Kiwi. ^_^ Next time I'll make sure that I have a flawless, 7-page-long chapter O_O

You can't really blame me for getting Kaito's characterization perfect, as I normally depict people very well. The fact that I don't know Kaito well enough to perfectly depict him is my only excuse for that, really.
The others are just grammar mistakes, which aren't really that big of a deal, so long as you can understand it well.

But overall, thanks for your criticism, although I wasn't really looking for people to find faults, but rather to give their opinions on what you found was good or appealing about the story O_O
But if pointing out spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes floats your boat, Kiwi...>_>'

Probably because it has been as long running gag that I'm a swordbiter...especially Emperor mocks it daily.

Isn't that right, schizo-plant?



About the chainsaw part, that wasn't just a comparison or some allegory, he was really wielding a chainsaw O_O. At the moment Roku started this FF, Kaito was still one of the 7SM who wielded Sanada Yukimura and it has the ability to be infused whith chakra, which then appears like shark-like teeth around the edges and then start spinning like a chainsaw. Just to let you know >.>
Exacta! O_O
 
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i call hax... :|
xd

if it was a chainsaw then it's fine and a mistake on my part
Thanks, Kiwi. ^_^ Next time I'll make sure that I have a flawless, 7-page-long chapter O_O

You can't really blame me for getting Kaito's characterization perfect, as I normally depict people very well. The fact that I don't know Kaito well enough to perfectly depict him is my only excuse for that, really.
The others are just grammar mistakes, which aren't really that big of a deal, so long as you can understand it well.

But overall, thanks for your criticism, although I wasn't really looking for people to find faults, but rather to give their opinions on what you found was good or appealing about the story O_O
But if pointing out spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes floats your boat, Kiwi...>_>'



Exacta! O_O
>_> read post above...

and you focussed just about the bad points... i complimented you on it... and what do i get? sarcasm and " >_>' "

i merely pointed the spelling mistakes so you could change them for anyone else who reads this, and the lopping off the head bit just caused confusion because i thought he'd actually cut it off so it was a wtf moment... >_>

the story is pretty good... i can't say things to change about the story if there are none can i?...
 

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>_> read post above...

and you focussed just about the bad points... i complimented you on it... and what do i get? sarcasm and " >_>' "

i merely pointed the spelling mistakes so you could change them for anyone else who reads this, and the lopping off the head bit just caused confusion because i thought he'd actually cut it off so it was a wtf moment... >_>

the story is pretty good... i can't say things to change about the story if there are none can i?...
Mkay...
And everyone loves online sarcasm xd
 

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Epic chapter as usual, a constructively criticized argument between roku and hasashi after that, and then finishing off with the pointing out of Roku's grammar mistakes and another convo there between him, Kiwi (who imo is not an idiot (how could you call yourself that btw, :()), cali, and partially emp xD.

Brilliant.
 

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Epic chapter as usual, a constructively criticized argument between roku and hasashi after that, and then finishing off with the pointing out of Roku's grammar mistakes and another convo there between him, Kiwi (who imo is not an idiot (how could you call yourself that btw, :()), cali, and partially emp xD.

Brilliant.
i have issues O_O xd
 

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bravo roku amazing chapter tho sixth sense is my most fable technique but anyways you used my taijutsu well and thanks for the death befitting a true shinobi... and rock on caliburn
 
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