Black despair Part 19 "KUROI ZETSUBOU"

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BLACK despair

PART NINETEEN
"KUROI ZETSUBOU"

[Setting change: Konohagakure no Sato forest outskirts]

Narrator: Upon the three ANBU arriving, the sensing Shinobi detects something.

Fuu: (In thought) I can faintly sense..Ukusa?

Assailant #13: Fuu?

Fuu: You two inform and assist Danzou-sama..I sense an ANBU and I will go to investigate..

Assailant #13: Roger..let’s go

Assailant #12: Yes

Fuu: (In thought) You were on your first mission but if you three are on your way back..

Fuu: (Continued in thought) Why do I only sense you alone and not moving either?

Narrator: Fuu hastily headed towards Ukusa’s sensed chakra.

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Assailant #12: Danzou-sama we have come to inform you of the mission!

Danzou: Have you tracked down Dokueki?

Assailant #12: We were lead away and tricked by what Fuu believed to be a member out of Dokueki

Narrator: Elder leader’s eyebrow arches a bit.

Assailant #13: When we found out it was too late as he had masked his chakra..

Assailant #13: (Continued) However we came to the conclusion that the enemy headed here and it is evident as the set ploy was for us..

Danzou: (In thought) ..So this is who killed the two iryou-nin and the reason behind it all is Ukusa..

Danzou: Where is Fuu?

Assailant #12: He sensed an ANBU and went to inspect the situation..

Danzou: ..I see…there has been an attack here resulting in two iryou-nin’s deaths..Renki..you are to join in the search for this ninja

Character Insight - Assailant #13:

● Name: Renki (a code name given to one of the many Root shinobi members in current time) (added)

Danzou: (Continued) Zeru you are to keep watch over Ukusa..

Character Insight - Assailant #12:

● Name: Zeru (a code name given to one of the many Root shinobi members in current time) (added)

Renki: Understood Danzou-sama

Zeru: Yes Danzou-sama

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) I’ve done all I could do..he is gone

Torune: (In thought) Hiliosu..I was a careless leader and we have lost men not only on the battlefield..

Torune: (Continued in thought) But here as well..Danzou-sama what is happening?

Narrator: Zero appears before the Head iryou–nin.

Zeru: Head-san I am here to keep an eye over Ukusa..

Head Root Iryou-nin: He is in the next room..

Zeru: What! he is not here..could that be the ANBU Fuu sensed?

Zeru: (Continued) ..Regardless I must search for him at once..

[Setting change: Konohagakure no Sato forest outskirts]

Kuza: We have searched every area possible

Bakurai: The culprit is long gone..

Kuza: The question is how far has he gotten..

[Setting change: Konohagakure no Sato forest]

Fuu: (In thought) …That light again..

Narrator: Having seen the light, Fuu knew to stay back.

Fuu: (In thought) It is decreasing..

Fuu: (Continued in thought) My opportunity is now..

Narrator: As the light diminished the ANBU raced towards Ukusa.

Fuu: (In thought) I cannot make out if this is the enemy although..I can sense that he is

Fuu: (Continued in thought) I could have even possibly ended up the same as this shinobi..but for some reason I didn’t the time I was affected by this light of his

Narrator: As Fuu faces the unconscious ANBU, he witnesses one of his eyes opened with the pupil dilated and the iris beginning to glow white revealing a chrome colored cross-like symbol as four more smaller slits then begin to protrude in the center creating an x.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: Unknown
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu, Jikuukan Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A fourth jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from one of the user’s eyes. The eye will dilate and glow white as a chrome cross-like slit marking with four smaller slits appears. This is done in an attempt to cure any at all impurities within the body. It is all done however, with the user unconscious. This is due to not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai.

Fuu: What???

Narrator: The sensing ANBU was reluctant to even touch Ukusa although, the eye reverted and the adolescent was quickly placed over his shoulders as he made his way to Root.

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Torune: You may report to Danzou-sama the numbers of casualties and survivors

Gio: Understood

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) We have taken a big hit..Danzou-sama

Narrator: Gio exited and passes by Fuu who then enters the infirmary.

Fuu: He was found unconscious..with an eye that suddenly glowed with a symbol..

Head Root Iryou-nin: ..Where was he found?

Fuu: Konoha forest

Head Root Iryou-nin: I attended to him earlier and he was unconscious then..how did this occur?

Fuu: I happen to believe that he was abducted

Head Root Iryou-nin: This must be linked to the culprit who murdered my two iryou-nin

Fuu: So they were in his way and he did away with them in order to reach Ukusa..

Head Root Iryou-nin: He is stable and is unconscious

Fuu: This is related to that strange light

Head Root Iryou-nin: As far as I see it..there is nothing wrong with him medically..

Head Root Iryou-nin: (Continued) But this could be a kekkei genkai or possibly something entirely different all together…

Fuu: It is probable..

Dajimu: We need to have a word with you..

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Gio: Danzou-sama I have come to inform you abou-

Danzou: The culprit?

Gio: We only arrived a little while ago and I had to assist Head iryou-nin-san with our injured unit

Danzou: I see..

Gio: The number of casu-

Zeru: Danzou-sama I have urgent news!

Gio: …

Danzou: Inform me..

Zeru: Ukusa is missing and I have searched everywhere without a trace of him..

Narrator: The Elder leader’s eye widens.

Danzou: (Continued) Gio you search through Konoha and Zeru you search the forest at once!

Gio: Understood Danzou-sama

Zeru: Yes Danzou-sama

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Ukusa: (Screams) NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!

Narrator: Shrill cries can be heard from the young ANBU as he awakens in a disturbed manner.

Head Root Iryou-nin: Hey!

Narrator: The Head iryou-nin rushed over to the ANBU after retrieving a sedative.

Ukusa: (Shouts) LEAVE ME ALONE!!!

Narrator: As the Head iryou-nin administered the drug suddenly one of Ukusa’s pupils dilate and iris glow white once again for a brief moment.

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) It happened again but why..what is the reasoning behind it?

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Narrator: Three ANBU appear before their elder leader.

Fuu: Danzou-sama..

Danzou: Yes?

Fuu: Ukusa has defeated the Dokueki enemy and here is his headband to prove it

Danzou: I see..So he was after Ukusa all along out of revenge..

Danzou: They were connected..were they not?

Fuu: Apparently so..

Dajimu: We spotted Fuu and he confirmed the link between the culprit and the Dokueki shinobi-

Tera: Being the same person..

Danzou: And Ukusa?

Fuu: ..I sensed him and saw that light and I then found him unconscious when an eye of his opened glowing white with a peculiar symbol..

Danzou: (In thought) This must be due to that extraordinary power that dwells within..

Danzou: Fuu..you are to keep me informed over Ukusa’s recovery and you two are to inform the others of our discoveries..

Danzou: (Continued) I want the forest spied on for a while and I will leave this up to you two..

Danzou: Sandaime Hokage must never know of this..

Fuu: Yes Danzou-sama

Tera: Understood Danzou-sama

Dajimu: Understood Danzou-sama

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Ukusa: …uhhh..

Ukusa: (Shouts)..I must talk with Danzou-sa-

Fuu: I have come to watch over Ukusa

Head Root Iryou-nin: I see..

Narrator: The adolescent began to sit up.

Head Root Iryou-nin: You have just regained consciousness and acted in a manner I have never seen..

Head Root Iryou-nin: (Continued) I do not think you are ready to even stand as of yet

Ukusa: What I have to say is crucial to me and Danzou-sama..

Head Root Iryou-nin: You are still under the sedation and-

Ukusa: I have to..

Head Root Iryou-nin: If you are able to pass a couple of precautions then I will allow it..

Fuu: If so..I will accompany you..

Ukusa: Understood

Narrator: Every test that followed did the young ANBU pass.

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) His will is strong..

Head Root Iryou-nin: You are free to go..

Narrator: Released and with his objective held at top priority, he was off with Fuu to meet with the elder Danzou.

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Ukusa: Danzou-sama!

Narrator: A somewhat surprised Danzou opens his eye at the sight of the adolescent.

Danzou: You have recovered?

Ukusa: Yes and…I have questions..

Danzou: Fuu you are dismissed..

Fuu: Understood Danzou-sama

Danzou: Referring?

Ukusa: Knowledge over me being a former Dokueki member and kept it silent all these years?

Danzou: Why do you ask?

Ukusa: I was told by one of their members who tried to kill me..

Danzou: No..you were found and as an orphan I took you in..

Ukusa: The reason why I was wanted dead had been due to my betrayal and they were right as I escaped when I was sent on a mission..

Ukusa: (Continued) And that was to get intel over Konoha..

Danzou: ..I see

Ukusa: So they were always the enemy

Danzou: The Dokueki shinobi?

Ukusa: My memory is blank after our confrontation grew out of control..

Danzou: Are there any more questions?

Ukusa: No Danzou-sama

Danzou: Then I take it you will continue to be loyal to me and my organization?

Ukusa: I was right to have joined you Danzou-sama..

Danzou: Good..

[Numerous days later]

[Setting change: Root sub-department center chamber]

Danzou: You two were asked here for a new mission and a new name I have appointed you..

Danzou: (Continued) An S-Class nuke-nin from Kusagakure is the target…you have been renamed Yuuto

Character Insight – Assailant #9:

(Character insight revisited)

● Name: Yuuto (a code name given to the Root shinobi Assailant #9) (added)

Danzou: And you will be renamed Shin

(Initial Character Insight revisited)

Initial Character Insight - Ukusa:

● Name: Shin (a code name given to the Root shinobi Ukusa) (added)
● Weapons: Large Shuriken, explosive tags (added)

Shin: Understood Danzou-sama

Yuuto: Understood Danzou-sama

[Setting change: A vast open grassy field]

Yuuto: We are approaching the village..

Shin: Let’s exhaust oursel-

*coughs*

Shin: (In thought) …Not again..it is getting worse..

Yuuto: Are you okay?

Shin: ..Yes!

Yuuto: We should rest

Shin: …Understood..

Narrator: The two hid behind a rock, Shin soon fell asleep and Yuuto then pulls out his tiny book which he began to focus upon but too eventually fell asleep.

Yuuto: (In thought) ..The mission!

Narrator: Yuuto awakens with the thought of the mission and looks over at his partner to see if he was up.

Yuuto: ???

Yuuto: (Continued) ..How...

Narrator: What is observed by the shocked young ANBU is Shin lying in a pool of blood.

Yuuto: …I..I have to get you help…

*panting*

Yuuto: (Continued) ..He is still breathing..

Narrator: Shin was then sent atop a commanded winged creature towards Root whilst Yuuto stood back and continued with the mission.

Yuuto: (In thought) I will finish with this mission before long..I promise

[Setting change: Dokueki cellar]

Mukaku: Kurohou’s condition?

Unknown Shinobi #5: Deceased..

Mukaku: Shizo?

Unknown Shinobi #5: Deceased as well by his own accord, done in by Kurohou or by a Root member..

Mukaku: I see..

Mukaku: (In thought) Shizo did indeed succeed but at the cost of his own life..

Mukaku: (Continued in thought) Well..that was a meaningless pawn who sacrificed himself in order to accomplish my work..*snickers*

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Narrator: The young ANBU arrives and kneels before his leader.

Yuuto: Danzou-sama the mission is completed!

Danzou: He has passed away..

Yuuto: (In thought) …NO!

[ELASPED TIME]

[Pre Shin’s discovery via Fuu]

Shizo: (Continued) I won’t get to see my beloved boss..YOU WILL DIE ALONG WITH ME!!!

Jutsu InsightShizo:

● Jutsu Name: Shi no Kingukobura Seppun (King Cobra Kiss of Death)
● Classification: Ninjutsu
● Class: Offensive
● Range: Short-range
● Description: This jutsu is suicidal via a kiss. By kissing the target, a poisonous stream of chakra is forcefully poured into the mouth. If successful, the user will almost immediately die and the target will also die within a matter of moments. This type of poison is transparent in color. Once consumed into the body, it is highly difficult to detect as well as to cure.

Narrator: An undying will of Shizo enables him to force himself through the lighted spikes that continuously pierced him as he faced Shin thus kissed his lips in which he then successfully completes his final jutsu.

Shizo: D….i..ie..

Narrator: Succumbing to the deadly requirement of the jutsu, his wounded body finally falls onto the ground aside Shin who lied inanimate.


[ELASPED TIME ENDS]

Yuuto: I thought he would be brought in time

Danzou: How did this occur?

Yuuto: I don’t know..we both fell asleep and when I awoke he was already bloodied but was still alive

Yuuto: (Continued) And I sent him right away..

Yuuto: …I do remember before we slept..he was coughing and was the reason for us resting..

Danzou: It could not have been the nuke-nin you both were after because you still live..

Danzou: (In thought) It was one of those Dokueki members..

Danzou: ..You are dismissed

Yuuto: ..Yes Danzou-sama

[ELASPED TIME]

[Pre Yuuto’s arrival]

Bakurai: We have news regarding the one called Shin..

Danzou: ..Yes?

Bakurai: He is dead..

Danzou: (In thought) ..MY PLANS ARE RUINED!!!

Danzou: Autopsy results?

Bakurai: Head-san could not determine the cause as the autopsy did in fact come up clean..

Bakurai: (Continued) Although..due to the internal damage..Head-san assumes it to be the result of an illness

Narrator: However, unbeknownst to everyone, Shin’s death was due to the overall usage of the last technique exhausted to the point that his own body could not endure the strain. Had it been a weaker poison, the technique could have handled it, although this powerful poison caused the kekkei genkai to overwhelm itself.

(Jutsu insight revisited)

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: Unknown
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu, Jikuukan Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A fourth jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from one of the user’s eyes. This is done in an attempt to cure any at all impurities within the body. The eye will dilate and glow white as a chrome cross-like slit marking with four smaller slits appears. Though, if used exhaustedly, the user will then die as a result of strain to the body via the overwhelming of the kekkei genkai curing technique. (added)

Danzou: (In thought) ..This was Dokueki’s doing..a potent poison of sorts….at that time when he was alone with one of them..

Danzou: You are dismissed..

Bakurai: Yes Danzou-sama


[ELASPED TIME ENDS]

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Yuuto: *pant* ..Where is Shin?

Head Root Iryou-nin: I have performed an autopsy on his body but you may still see it..

Narrator: Once informed, Yuuto headed towards the room where Shin’s lifeless body remained.

*covers pulled back*

Yuuto: …I wanted to show you this..

Yuuto: (Continued) But it is too late..

[Post Shin’s passing]

Narrator: Yuuto continued his duties as a Root member however, over the time and emotional erasing of Danzou’s teachings the young ANBU eventually forgot about the shinobi Shin whom he grew to form a bond with unbeknownst to their elder leader. This shinobi in the course of time was fructuous to remember the once brother he had. The orphan child who was lied to and forced into a life he did not want, grew into a young man who eventually found most of his memories the ones he did not being how he became to be involved with Danzou and Root to then have a tragic death but he did not suffer this black despair alone as he had someone to care for and create a bond with all via a mission assigned by Danzou as well as a new code name; Sai.

FIN.​
 
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[Fanfic DATABOOK: Shin’s Kekkei Genkai]

Note: Though left unnamed in my fanfic, I decided to give each technique a name simply for the viewer’s better sense of feel for Shin's fan fictional kekkei genkai ;p

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: IchiTen no Shinseina Hoshikuzu (First Heaven’s Holy Stardust) (added)
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where bright light is released through the user’s entire body. It acts as a barrier and can leave the opponent unconscious. If this jutsu is discharged with all of your emotions out of control may the result lie in memory loss, migrating headaches and or genetic mutation. This is due to not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: NiTen no Mori (Second Heaven’s Lance) (added)
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A secondary jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from the user’s hand and forms into a long slender sharp object. It is all done however, with the user unconscious and is the result of not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai. This jutsu can be used a weapon as well as possess a nullification ability.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: NiTen no Enkou (Second Heaven’s Halo) (added)
● Classification: Hiden, Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: Branched from the secondary mysterious full body illumination jutsu. By swinging the lighted lance, two bright wave rings are unleashed onto the target at the speed of light. If the target is unable to avoid this jutsu their body will be decapitated.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: SanTen no Tooriame (Third Heaven’s Shower) (added)
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu, Jikuukan Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A third jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from the user’s body forming spiked beams. Multiple sharp beams can be shot at a rapid speed creating bullet sized holes to the impaled bodily area. It is all done however, with the user unconscious. This is due to not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: YonTen no Mokushi (Fourth Heaven’s Apocalypse) (added)
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu, Jikuukan Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A fourth jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from one of the user’s eyes. This is done in an attempt to cure any at all impurities within the body. The eye will dilate and glow white as a chrome cross-like slit marking with four smaller slits appears. Though, if used exhaustedly, the user will then die as a result of strain to the body via the overwhelming of the kekkei genkai curing technique. It is all done however, with the user unconscious. This is due to not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai.

[Conclusion]

I would like to take the time to say thank you to all of my viewers who withstood me/my work up until the end -arigatou gozaimasu, it truly has been a joyful/enlightening experience for me as I hope it has been for all of you ;) ^.^ XD​
 
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Re: Black despair Part 18 "KUROI ZETSUBOU"

Good job Kuroi! Although, I had missed a handful of your chapters...but still I manage to understand this Awesome chapter! Its awesome! Not just an "awesome" but more than that my friend :) Its Magnificent! But honestly this is the best chapter out of your other chapters! And the ending...! Its brilliant!
 

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Good job Kuroi! Although, I had missed a handful of your chapters...but still I manage to understand this Awesome chapter! Its awesome! Not just an "awesome" but more than that my friend :) Its Magnificent! But honestly this is the best chapter out of your other chapters! And the ending...! Its brilliant!
Thank you ;) I am pleased that you think so and I am simply thankful that someone actually likes the ending I've decided for it ^.^
 
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Very, very good. I have big expectations for your new fanfiction, if you decide to make one.
Thank you! ;) I definitely will be taking an indefinite hiatus just because I need the time off as this fanfic took a lot out of me lol However, in the future I may do another ^.^
 
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Re: Black despair Part 18 "KUROI ZETSUBOU"

EDIT: Holy cow what an ending:eek: No way, he was Sai`s "brother" from his book?!:eek: Epic story man! Even thou it was the last chapter, it was one of the very best, and it was a perfect end too!

So Sai was indeed a part of the most of the story even thou you could easily miss it, nicely done mate:p

I must say I agree with Dante, me too want a new FF another time by you:D;)
 
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EDIT: Holy cow what an ending:eek: No way, he was Sai`s "brother" from his book?!:eek: Epic story man! Even thou it was the last chapter, it was one of the very best, and it was a perfect end too!

So Sai was indeed a part of the most of the story even thou you could easily miss it, nicely done mate:p

I must say I agree with Dante, me too want a new FF another time by you:D;)
Yes-I got that little incident with the numbering fixed with the help of Lawliet O.O Thanks! I will let you in on a little secret, I was originally intending for the main protagonist to be Sai o_O However, My brother as I like to call him, my advisor gave me the idea of changing the character to his brother Shin and at first I was like WHAT!!! Though, I eased into the idea and decided with the swap. I think the biggest reason for that decision was because if I did choose Sai the readers most likely would have figured his identity much faster than what I had planned for. As a matter of fact, on one of the recent parts, you even commented and stated that you thought the main character was indeed Sai. Thanks for that I am pleased that you felt so ;) Yes he was! I tried desperately to conciel Sai’s role in the fanfic and it worked!!! XD

Yeah, his right. Come on Kuroi, make another one ;) Make another cool fanfictions! We'll support you xd
@At you two, I am going on a hiatus where fanfics are concerned but I will consider the possibility of creating another ^.^
 
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Yes-I got that little incident with the numbering fixed with the help of Lawliet O.O Thanks! I will let you in on a little secret, I was originally intending for the main protagonist to be Sai o_O However, My brother as I like to call him, my advisor gave me the idea of changing the character to his brother Shin and at first I was like WHAT!!! Though, I eased into the idea and decided with the swap. I think the biggest reason for that decision was because if I did choose Sai the readers most likely would have figured his identity much faster than what I had planned for. As a matter of fact, on one of the recent parts, you even commented and stated that you thought the main character was indeed Sai. Thanks for that I am pleased that you felt so ;) Yes he was! I tried desperately to conciel Sai’s role in the fanfic and it worked!!! XD
Hehe you`re truly a mastermind of conspirations:p Who would have guessed it to be his brother instead:eek:
All the things you came up with, all the twists, and so was amazing, and no wonder this is a true masterpiece. I hope you will make another one in the future my friend;)
 

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Hehe you`re truly a mastermind of conspirations:p Who would have guessed it to be his brother instead:eek:
All the things you came up with, all the twists, and so was amazing, and no wonder this is a true masterpiece. I hope you will make another one in the future my friend;)
Well thank you-I did not think of myself as such ;) Thank you for following my work till the end and my mind is in thought about creating a new fanfic or not ^.^
 

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For a post on your second part I guessed that it was his brother. The grey hair gave it away.
After using his keki genki you spoke of his hair turning grey. So, big fan of yours.
 
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Brilliant sorry i didn't comment on the other chapters i was reading one after the other it was so good had me locked to my computer for most of the afternoon lol. Very good work the ending got me i had to read it again to make sure i read it right, i will get to reading your other FFs soon.
 
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