Life on Streets. - Chapter One.

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Life on Streets.
Chapter One.

One random hobo who got the name Faust was asking for some money sitting near a corner shop while another mysterious hobo came to him.

???: Hey you! What the hell are you doing here, this is my daily place to ask for money...

Faust: I don't know anything about it, I'm not from here I just traveled around while noticed this nice place where a lot of people walk by, so beat it!

The mysterious hobo got angry and for no reason started hitting Faust with his legs, while Faust countered his attacks and they started fighting over the place. They were fighting for quite a while, but then they both ended up on the ground without the strength to continue...

Faust: You bitch, lets stop this useless fighting and get the money together, it will be faster and we could get something to eat and even some money for the booze.

???: Alright, but I'm still not liking this...

Faust: So tell me what is your name and maybe a beautiful circle of hobo friendship may begin.

Pervy: It's Pervy and better stop talking, ask for the money!

After a long day of asking for money they both got quite some... They both fell asleep on the same spot, since they didn't have anywhere to go anyways. Later on they both woke up and it was morning already, while Pervy started to talk.

Pervy: Hey man, I know one place where we could get the booze now, get the money we got and lets go!

Faust: Oh yeah I could do some of that, since life is shit anyways...

They both got up from the place, gathered the garbage they was carrying with them and then Pervy started to slowly walk to his known drug dealer who got more than that, while Faust followed him thinking about the stuff they could do when they got drunk and soon enough the reached the place. Pervy went around a corner and there was some large beautiful trash containers where a lot of hobos gathered...

Pervy: Hey Pesh, long time no see! You see I met this hobo and he was sitting in my spot, but we became friends anyway, so now we need the stuff!

Pesh: Hey, but keep it down, the damn cops are checking this area lately, we cant get the illegal booze out that easily now... There's a new sherif in town and he wants all the hobos gone.

Pesh looks to the sides and opens up one of the trash containers and its full of booze, he takes out few bottles...

Pervy: Finally some real shit, Faust give the guy the money we got!

Faust looks at Pervy, takes out the money and gives it to Pesh, while they are getting the booze a policeman walks from the back of them and it was the new sherif, he already saw the booze and thought that somethings not quite legal here...

Nnoitra: Hey you bitches, now freeze on the spot! Its Sherif Nnoitra here and nobody even try to get away, or your dead.

The hobo partners quickly hide the booze and looks at the sherif in despair, while Pesh is thinking that he lost his business again... But then suddenly all the hobos that were there waiting for booze started to wildly run at all the directions and the three hobos Faust, Pervy, Pesh saw a chance to get away. They fit in the running hobos and run away across the street.

Nnoitra: Damn those bastards, I knew they will try to get away! Quickly Chiryoku, get the car, were getting after them!

Chiryoku: Yes, sir!

The two policeman's runs to the car, to chase after the three hobos, while they are running away through random streets...

Pesh: You bastards! Now I have no chance but to stick with you hobos together, to get away, I had a great reputation amongst the streets you know!

Faust: Shut up faggot, run!!!

They already got away from the policeman's running with all their strength, while they found a random sewer and jumped into it, continuing their runaway underground. The two policeman drive through many streets but just couldn't find them...

Chiryoku: Aw, it seems we lost them, maybe we should rest for now and get some pie?

Nnoitra: Pie sounds fair enough, they win for now, but their not getting away! We'll get them next time...

End of Chapter One.


Well this was something random from my side, I just really wanted to create a FF myself, so this is what it came out. It was only meant for joke and not offending anybody. So I hope you like it, I'm seeing forward to continue this stuff...
Critics, comments, reps appreciated.
 

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Hmmm ... I gotta give it to you Faust... you've got imagination ^^ xd And it's really all over the place... :p Being a friend I wanna give you the most honest answer I can give you .... I liked it but you can do much better ... Anywayz... It's still effin Epic for like 30 minutes of work xd Keep up the good Work Bud ! ^^
 

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Hmmm ... I gotta give it to you Faust... you've got imagination ^^ xd And it's really all over the place... :p Being a friend I wanna give you the most honest answer I can give you .... I liked it but you can do much better ... Anywayz... It's still effin Epic for like 30 minutes of work xd Keep up the good Work Bud ! ^^
Aw, thanks, not that much imagination though. Its still my very first FF, I'll try to improve on the next chapter. ^^
 

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You should have gotten more into the character development. Especially with Pervy Hobo. You could have talked about his life as a male prostitute and his meth addiction. You could have explained why there was a new sheriff in town (ie; The old sheriff, Jamal-Sama, had been previously arrested for his involvement in Mexican donkey porn, which caused the County to elect a new stricter sheriff.). What kind of booze was it? Ripple? Mad Dog 20/20? Thunderbird? The story is there. It just needs more detail.
 

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You should have gotten more into the character development. Especially with Pervy Hobo. You could have talked about his life as a male prostitute and his meth addiction. You could have explained why there was a new sheriff in town (ie; The old sheriff, Jamal-Sama, had been previously arrested for his involvement in Mexican donkey porn, which caused the County to elect a new stricter sheriff.). What kind of booze was it? Ripple? Mad Dog 20/20? Thunderbird? The story is there. It just needs more detail.
Well thanks, I know I need to go more in detail, but I haven't slept all night and I was so into creating something. =D
Hopefully going to improve in the next chapters...
Thanks for comment, love the part about Jamal, it fits him. ;D
 

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You should have gotten more into the character development. Especially with Pervy Hobo. You could have talked about his life as a male prostitute and his meth addiction. You could have explained why there was a new sheriff in town (ie; The old sheriff, Jamal-Sama, had been previously arrested for his involvement in Mexican donkey porn, which caused the County to elect a new stricter sheriff.). What kind of booze was it? Ripple? Mad Dog 20/20? Thunderbird? The story is there. It just needs more detail.
lolwut?

Why not add photos or illustrations of the characters? Here. I'll help.

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Very nice, how did you find me ;)


Hobos!? You made me a hobo!
You lame piece of crap! >_>
He made me one too

:|
Why is Nnoitra my boss?
Your never happy about who you are in any ff


Since when have I been a sheriff or something like that? It'd work out better if I am terrorist.
You can be the badass sheriff that deals drugs


No one likes their charakters
I like mine, it suits me xd
 

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I liked it. The story is unique and cool ;)
Thanks.
Hobos!? You made me a hobo!
You lame piece of crap! >_>
Your a pimp hobo. =D
:|
Why is Nnoitra my boss?
I don't know, I wasn't sleeping all night and just did something random, I could change some stuff...
Since when have I been a sheriff or something like that? It'd work out better if I am terrorist.
I don't know, random... xD You can do drugs or be a bad one. =/
No one likes their charakters
Yeah.
yay! Faust Rule! sooooo epic! :D plz add me there in part two!
Thanks. ;p
lmao Awesome Faust,I told you youcould do it.Add me next chapter.(and the idea on msn ;))
Maybe...
 
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