The Formation Of Akatsuki

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chapter 1:itachi's recruitment part one

The wind blew a harsh cold breeze. There at peak of the mountain was a shinobi. Pain was standing atop of a mountain with his eyes closed, a blank expression was drawn across his face.

“Konan, you remember our childhood?” asked Pain “We are going to make it so that no child, WILL EVER go through what we did.”

Suddenly, a few sheets of papers were arranging themselves to make a human like figure.

“Yes, Pain I remember…But to do such a thing, we will need to create a organization or military force of some sort, and no we cannot have a million copies of ourselves.” Breathed Konan as the paper figure took its form.

“Heh, that night with the Red Moon…and that war, I shall not waver a second from that memory, as it carved into my memory, our friends, family relatives all being slaughter , as we hid and watched so helplessly…”recalled Pain as he slowly opened his eyes to reveal his Rin’ngan.

“Konan. I have decided. We will make an organization. We shall call it…. Akatsuki to remind us all of that night with the Red Moon and blood being spilled.”

“Ah, I had thought you’d do something like that Pain. But you do remember WE are being hunted by ANBU and bounty hunting ninja from every country and each of our heads are worth much more than ?100,000 each and are considered S ranked rogue ninja.” Reminded Konan.

“….Konan. I do not have amnesia. But since we are exiled ninja, we will have to find other exiled ninja to join us,” stated Pain in a bored tone.

“Konan, do you know what they’ve been saying lately?”asked Pain.“…..”

“Uchiha Itachi, from the Uchiha clan of Konoha has slaughtered his entire clan and has fled his country, I plan on letting him join us, and convince him to become an Akatsuki member. Konan you are the third member.”“……….”

Itachi was travelling alone, bordering the Fire Country. His armour covered, in splats of blood, his eyes dulled, and his body looking lifeless. As he noticed Pain approach him in a black cloak with red cloud patterns he asked “What business would you have with me? You do not look like a bounty ninja nor ANBU.” said Itachi coldly.

“ANBU? Bounty ninja? hmph. I am Pain. Also an exiled ninja. Uchiha Itachi you will join us and become our fourth member.” commanded Pain.

“And why would I oblige? Do you know what I have did?” asked Itachi in the same cold voice.

“I do not know what you have done nor do I need to. But you WILL join us.” Answered Pain in an equally cold voice.

“And what if I refuse?” asked Itachi menacingly.

“Then you shall be subdued.”

In an instant Itachi activated his Sharingan and drew one shuriken, and threw it aimed at Pain.

“Taiyu Kage Shuriken no Jutsu!” ( mass shadow shuriken jutsu)

Instantaneously the shuriken had multiplied and were soaring towards its target.

Without moving, Pain thumped his right arm down on the floor beneath him with his left arm he made the seal of the Tiger.

“Kuchiyose no Jutsu” (summoning technique/jutsu) muttered Pain.......


next chapter : itachi's recruitment part two
 
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I thought pain wanted to cause pain so that everyone understood pain and then there would be peace and that madara formed the Akatsuki?

Sorry to pick fault, but thats really good man cant wait for next chapter :D
 

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I thought pain wanted to cause pain so that everyone understood pain and then there would be peace and that madara formed the Akatsuki?

Sorry to pick fault, but thats really good man cant wait for next chapter :D
nevermind finding faults.........its habit to do mistakes.............and thanks man for commenting it ...........but i thought bringing the story abt madara later would be good........never mind.........in the next few chap hopefully i will bring madara in........
 

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I like how you brought in itachi and next chapter its about him joining, are you going to introduce them chapter by chapter then have like which villages hired them in the wars? that would be cool :D
 

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I like how you brought in itachi and next chapter its about him joining, are you going to introduce them chapter by chapter then have like which villages hired them in the wars? that would be cool :D
ya i have the idea of introducing each one in each chapter............and in the next chapter i'm thinking of introducing kekkai genkai for itachi and pain..............i'm just half way writin it but i will hopefully finish tonight and i think i can post it tomorrow.......hope so...
 

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Either later today or miday tomorrow :)
And yeh im in college why?
i'm waiting for ur next fanfic ............man actually i love jiraya very much.......and ur story suits his character..........thats why ur fanfic is great........man i'm just schooling now........its borin...........more exams.........but college life is enjoyable..............right???????????? and where are u from???????????
 
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i'm waiting for ur next fanfic ............man actually i love jiraya very much.......and ur story suits his character..........thats why ur fanfic is great........man i'm just schooling now........its borin...........more exams.........but college life is enjoyable..............right????????????
I love jiriaya thats why i chose to write about him :) and college is fun alot less subjects and its more chilled :)
 

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u r pretty good with it. But i guess u made a mistake when Orochimaru was remembering his old days fighting against Sasuke Pain, Kisame, Sasori and Konan were already Akatsuki members. So Itachi should come after those mentioned. Anyways great work manxd
 

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u r pretty good with it. But i guess u made a mistake when Orochimaru was remembering his old days fighting against Sasuke Pain, Kisame, Sasori and Konan were already Akatsuki members. So Itachi should come after those mentioned. Anyways great work manxd

just a thought man ........and thank u for correcting the mistakes
 
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