[Romance] Girl , come in to my dreams

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Girl , come in to my dreams
fill my heart with sorrow
come in to my dreams
steal my sleep , i don't know why ?
I'm remembering you this much
i don't want to cry
but why ? i don't know why
this much pain in my heart...

I remember those times
you were with me
i never felt loneliness
because you had many things
to tell me , to talk about
you made me believe in myself....
to stand up to anything that comes
but without you life doesn't feel same

I wish you could come back
to take away this feelings
before my heart break
i can't erase these memories
I'm tired . I'm weary . I'm broken
but that doesn't stop me
from loving you . girl .
my heart beating within , in a sorrowful rhythm

Come to my dreams...
please ! come to my dreams......
hurt my heart
don't let me forget you
because i want to hold you
closer to me in my dreams....
it doesn't matter
how much it hurts in night .

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

very nice poem but why are there no rhymes?

 

[-R-]

very nice poem but why are there no rhymes?

This. ^^^^^^

 

[The Sach]

Wow, that was nice Poem. You wrote it for someone special??:ilu:

 

[Dreckerplayer]

Poems don't have to rhyme.

Poem is okay.

As for the concept,

I'd prefer to forget about my girl after a breakup...stay out my dreams, so i can get some good sleep.

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

very nice poem

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but why are there no rhymes?

This. ^^^^^^

Sorry about that i tried but that didn't give the meaning to my feelings i tried to express .

Wow, that was nice Poem. You wrote it for someone special??:ilu:

Yeah someone special from school days .

Poems don't have to rhyme.

Poem is okay.

As for the concept,

I'd prefer to forget about my girl after a breakup...stay out my dreams, so i can get some good sleep.

Thanks .
It was long ago but can't forget lessons learned and wounds just heals there's always scars .

 

[dark legion]

I 'll take this poem for my English homework tomorrow ..Very Sensitive ...

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

I 'll take this poem for my English homework tomorrow ..Very Sensitive ...

Tomorrow is Christmas you have to go school ? and write a one . if you used this it will be cheating .

 

[Lorizle]

very nice poem but why are there no rhymes?

Poetry does not have to me rhythmic. It is not essential, but in fact just a popular style which some/most poets use to appeal to a wider audience. Yeah I know, rhyming can be quite cool but like I said before it is not an essential element in poetry.

OP: I thought your poem was very interesting and emotional, not romantic to me however. It seemed very personal as if it was based on true events that have occurred because of someone who is no longer in your life. If that is the case, my advice would be to let it go; seriously! Obsessing over someone, anyone is quite simply "Not Healthy" It may not be easy but, life goes on, you'll meet new interests (girls) regardless of if you want to right now or not.

Back to the poem; it was very poignant but well written, there were a few grammatical errors but nothing so detrimental that it would affect the style or the flow. All in all a good poem, keep it up

 

[FemmeFatale]

Awww, it was sweet <3...well not sweet it was very heartfelt.

 

[Naijakid]

Yap....its good

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

Poetry does not have to me rhythmic. It is not essential, but in fact just a popular style which some/most poets use to appeal to a wider audience. Yeah I know, rhyming can be quite cool but like I said before it is not an essential element in poetry.

OP: I thought your poem was very interesting and emotional, not romantic to me however. It seemed very personal as if it was based on true events that have occurred because of someone who is no longer in your life. If that is the case, my advice would be to let it go; seriously! Obsessing over someone, anyone is quite simply "Not Healthy" It may not be easy but, life goes on, you'll meet new interests (girls) regardless of if you want to right now or not.

Back to the poem; it was very poignant but well written, there were a few grammatical errors but nothing so detrimental that it would affect the style or the flow. All in all a good poem, keep it up

Well then i guess all the words i ever wrote to my ex-gf was poetry lol

example, the words that brought her back to me when i was losing her

Spoiler

Love....Love is the first word that comes to my mind when i think of you! Despite all my anger towards your actions, you are Still in my heart as a true touch of Love! - and i believe that my love is infact boundless!

Such a fortunate man is the one to have you! the one to hold you..., the one who will feel your touch when i cant!, the one who will be there to see your Extraordinary Smile, eatch day, to see you happy, and in your darkest hours....To feel your heart in all its capaity...and all its beauty! - i wish to be that man!, for that is some of the very few things in life that could make me happy!, but i am always unlucky..., happiness escapes me!, Sadness follows me..., i have accepted it always and made peace with it, and i have seen sadness as a challenge in life, but in this particular matter - i wish a happy ending! - not because of happiness though! - Only because i want to hold you forever in my arms....and rest in yours!, i would say - it would satisfy me!, Simply because i love you....


for the fact is, i think of you when i wake up in the morning, and there you are infront of my minds eyes looking at me with your tender loving Smile!, and the rest of the day wherever i am, i spend Missing you and wishing i had you in my sight!, and when i do at night - I Take you along with me to my Dreams, where you are everything!, where you are my Princess and my Queen, and you are the Sun that lights up my Dream!, the light that beautifies all around! - you are the Dream in my Dreams!

Despite what i said last night when i was mad at you!, my love for you is very pure and simple, because i can define it with but a simple word - infinity!!, yet describing my love for you, is one of the hardest things i ive had to do til now!


Sometimes i wonder, what is beauty, i know that if someone asked me i would say that beauty is that which fits most with perfection in anything, yet i look in my heart, and i see differently, and i feel my soul whispering the truth to me!, that beauty is not what is perfect, but rather that which makes imperfection beautiful!, and that can only be the heart itself!, for without the heart, there is no meaning..., no truth, no beauty!!, you are my heart elly!!

wherever there is magic, there is you my love, wherever there is you, there is magic!, for you and magic are one!, and the one true magic in this world is love! - and i feel you, i feel love - every second i am with you!

this universe we live in, has many wonders, some are simple, some defy even our imagination! - yet the moment i met you, that all changed for me!, i knew that there was no wonder but you for me my Divine love!, for surely now you are my wonder of wonders and the center of my universe!

Sometimes i feel like my heart and soul are forged from the very essence of freedom, yet my freedom isnt complete - except when im close to you!, for you are the other part of me!, the part that completes me!

i will still love you this way in the Morning....

according to your definition poetry, this message could be counted as 1 ?

however i dont consider it so, here are few of the poems i wrote her. Im not a poet, but any man can become a poet in the face of true love.

Spoiler

My Star

My Shining Star, So Beautiful, and yet so Far!

Your Beauty, And your Light, Gives my Heart Delight

Your Delicate heart, from which i cannot Depart!

your Magic Wonders my mind, you words so warm, so kind!

The richness in your gaze, is like a blaze, of which i can't erase!

All the Wonders, the Magic, the Melodies on this earth, cannot fully describe your eyes wealth!

you give me all!, your love makes me Whole!

since the day i fell for you, i have but one Wish, one Dream, one Goal!

neither time, nor distance will hinder my light to reach your Soul!

i love you, my brightest Star, in a world of darkness

lend me your Divine lips, and let me be lost in your eternal Kiss!

Spoiler

Love

pain, suffering, sadness, and mistrust

blowing away the heart, in the sands of time, as nothing but Dust!

is that the cost of love, if so, where is the Just?

An evil Kindness thrown Upon the One who loves!, Guided by enemies of Love, Sensuality
and Lust!

Or is it we who are the enemies of Love, and turn its beauty into a Blast!

So i wonder, how can a heart filled with Love, endure and adjust?

Love, no different from life, life Consisting of Pain and Sadness, Joy, and Happiness, As does a Love that Lives In the heart!, for that, is a Must!

an Endless Universe Of Love, where Love lives and breeds Stronger than any life that breaths!, Immortal in your heart!

Embrace me my heart, fill me with Love, and Merge me with Life!, Make My Soul Complete!, and let us Never depart!

Spoiler

incomplete poem
May the winds of love, unveil the stars and push the clouds

And this ocean of truth i harbor ridd your heart of doubts

What is true,is impossible to lie,and to doubt the undoubtable love is a paradox begun

For how can the night not love the moon?, and the day live, if absent the sun?



Unknown is the truth of hearts, If Unspoken, shall it fade in time

The world of truth that lies within, if Intuited, so wondrously sublime

Beneath these shades of lies, where lies, an Untold Love, Indescribeable in words!

Yet as words can go, behold my truth, behold my love, unpierce my heart of hidden swords!



Your heart, oh fountain of love, you are my reason for breath

Your touch, oh tangible love, in your embrace i fear no death

Those lips, oh heaven made flesh, eternity lies in your kiss

Those eyes, oh mirrors of dreams, they are my windows to bliss

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Poetry does not have to me rhythmic. It is not essential, but in fact just a popular style which some/most poets use to appeal to a wider audience. Yeah I know, rhyming can be quite cool but like I said before it is not an essential element in poetry.

OP: I thought your poem was very interesting and emotional, not romantic to me however. It seemed very personal as if it was based on true events that have occurred because of someone who is no longer in your life. If that is the case, my advice would be to let it go; seriously! Obsessing over someone, anyone is quite simply "Not Healthy" It may not be easy but, life goes on, you'll meet new interests (girls) regardless of if you want to right now or not.

Back to the poem; it was very poignant but well written, there were a few grammatical errors but nothing so detrimental that it would affect the style or the flow. All in all a good poem, keep it up

I know obsessing over something is bad but she was hell of a girl that i must admit . poems help me to vent somethings i feel that's one of the reasons i write poems .
Thanks man . not making grammatical errors are something i must learn .

Awww, it was sweet <3...well not sweet it was very heartfelt.

Thanks girly .

Yap....its good

Thanks sis =D

 

[Lorizle]

Well then i guess all the words i ever wrote to my ex-gf was poetry lol

example, the words that brought her back to me when i was losing her

Spoiler

Love....Love is the first word that comes to my mind when i think of you! Despite all my anger towards your actions, you are Still in my heart as a true touch of Love! - and i believe that my love is infact boundless!

Such a fortunate man is the one to have you! the one to hold you..., the one who will feel your touch when i cant!, the one who will be there to see your Extraordinary Smile, eatch day, to see you happy, and in your darkest hours....To feel your heart in all its capaity...and all its beauty! - i wish to be that man!, for that is some of the very few things in life that could make me happy!, but i am always unlucky..., happiness escapes me!, Sadness follows me..., i have accepted it always and made peace with it, and i have seen sadness as a challenge in life, but in this particular matter - i wish a happy ending! - not because of happiness though! - Only because i want to hold you forever in my arms....and rest in yours!, i would say - it would satisfy me!, Simply because i love you....


for the fact is, i think of you when i wake up in the morning, and there you are infront of my minds eyes looking at me with your tender loving Smile!, and the rest of the day wherever i am, i spend Missing you and wishing i had you in my sight!, and when i do at night - I Take you along with me to my Dreams, where you are everything!, where you are my Princess and my Queen, and you are the Sun that lights up my Dream!, the light that beautifies all around! - you are the Dream in my Dreams!

Despite what i said last night when i was mad at you!, my love for you is very pure and simple, because i can define it with but a simple word - infinity!!, yet describing my love for you, is one of the hardest things i ive had to do til now!


Sometimes i wonder, what is beauty, i know that if someone asked me i would say that beauty is that which fits most with perfection in anything, yet i look in my heart, and i see differently, and i feel my soul whispering the truth to me!, that beauty is not what is perfect, but rather that which makes imperfection beautiful!, and that can only be the heart itself!, for without the heart, there is no meaning..., no truth, no beauty!!, you are my heart elly!!

wherever there is magic, there is you my love, wherever there is you, there is magic!, for you and magic are one!, and the one true magic in this world is love! - and i feel you, i feel love - every second i am with you!

this universe we live in, has many wonders, some are simple, some defy even our imagination! - yet the moment i met you, that all changed for me!, i knew that there was no wonder but you for me my Divine love!, for surely now you are my wonder of wonders and the center of my universe!

Sometimes i feel like my heart and soul are forged from the very essence of freedom, yet my freedom isnt complete - except when im close to you!, for you are the other part of me!, the part that completes me!

i will still love you this way in the Morning....

according to your definition poetry, this message could be counted as 1 ?

however i dont consider it so, here are few of the poems i wrote her. Im not a poet, but any man can become a poet in the face of true love.

Spoiler

My Star

My Shining Star, So Beautiful, and yet so Far!

Your Beauty, And your Light, Gives my Heart Delight

Your Delicate heart, from which i cannot Depart!

your Magic Wonders my mind, you words so warm, so kind!

The richness in your gaze, is like a blaze, of which i can't erase!

All the Wonders, the Magic, the Melodies on this earth, cannot fully describe your eyes wealth!

you give me all!, your love makes me Whole!

since the day i fell for you, i have but one Wish, one Dream, one Goal!

neither time, nor distance will hinder my light to reach your Soul!

i love you, my brightest Star, in a world of darkness

lend me your Divine lips, and let me be lost in your eternal Kiss!

Spoiler

Love

pain, suffering, sadness, and mistrust

blowing away the heart, in the sands of time, as nothing but Dust!

is that the cost of love, if so, where is the Just?

An evil Kindness thrown Upon the One who loves!, Guided by enemies of Love, Sensuality
and Lust!

Or is it we who are the enemies of Love, and turn its beauty into a Blast!

So i wonder, how can a heart filled with Love, endure and adjust?

Love, no different from life, life Consisting of Pain and Sadness, Joy, and Happiness, As does a Love that Lives In the heart!, for that, is a Must!

an Endless Universe Of Love, where Love lives and breeds Stronger than any life that breaths!, Immortal in your heart!

Embrace me my heart, fill me with Love, and Merge me with Life!, Make My Soul Complete!, and let us Never depart!

Spoiler

incomplete poem
May the winds of love, unveil the stars and push the clouds

And this ocean of truth i harbor ridd your heart of doubts

What is true,is impossible to lie,and to doubt the undoubtable love is a paradox begun

For how can the night not love the moon?, and the day live, if absent the sun?



Unknown is the truth of hearts, If Unspoken, shall it fade in time

The world of truth that lies within, if Intuited, so wondrously sublime

Beneath these shades of lies, where lies, an Untold Love, Indescribeable in words!

Yet as words can go, behold my truth, behold my love, unpierce my heart of hidden swords!



Your heart, oh fountain of love, you are my reason for breath

Your touch, oh tangible love, in your embrace i fear no death

Those lips, oh heaven made flesh, eternity lies in your kiss

Those eyes, oh mirrors of dreams, they are my windows to bliss

First and foremost 'wow' you are actually a very talented writer. I do hope however that not all of your poetry was written for this girl. My reasoning for this is simple; your writing style is deeply descriptive, emotionally pulling and definitely gets your full heartfelt emotions and state of mind across. It would be good if you stretched this talent out into different areas of writing, you never know, you may inspire and/or help someone in some way.

Okay forward to your first post; Yes, that is a poem. It's written in the format of a letter and covers too subjects (love & beauty) I must admit that it was a bit of a stretch to read, but in all honesty it was worth it. Very emotional yet charismatic. I could sense the passion and that truly impressed me. I also enjoyed the other poems but the first one did stand out the most to me, in terms of intensity and passion. However, one phrase from your 'incomplete poem' was so powerful it had me on the edge thinking 'wow' this is some good stuff

May the winds of love, unveil the stars and push the clouds

And this ocean of truth i harbor ridd your heart of doubts

I thought that the remainder of the poem was average at best but, those two stanzas right there 'Gold' I hope that you are still writing and continue to write, you most definitely have a gift there.

P.S. sorry for the late reply, was busy cooking and all sorts in prep for Christmas dinner lol hope this reply gets to you though.