Naruto: Jounin Adventures Chapter 5

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I meant other than the general story. Bad storyline is different than bad writing. Out of character?

Yes, most of your characters are "out of character".

For instance, Naruto would NEVER being Neji up as a joke.
 

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I thought it was good.
 

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impressive work as always
 
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