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This is a poem.. My first one.. So please don't flame on me :shy:

I wish I could hug you in real..
I wish I could kiss you in real..
Dear future husband

I wish.. I wish that everybody knew how amazing it would feel to love you ♥

(To my ex)
- You took the joy out my life me and bring me pain and sorrow..

You hit me..
And I loved you
You flirt with other girls
And I still loved you
You didn't care about my feelings..

Even then I could only see my love for you.
But things have gone too far...

You were my man and I entrust my body, my love, and my life to YOU..
But you used me and hate me instead..

I loved you... But you couldn't care less..

I opened my eyes.. I saw someone else.. That smile wasn't perfect..
Your eyes didn't look into mine.. You search for something else..
I didn't like you anymore.. I couldnt feel "the love" for you anymore...

It was time to raise up my midlefinger and say:

**** YOU..
**** your eyes..
**** your dirty minds..
Please.. **** yourself..

I don't need you anymore....

I was nothing than your thrash..
I was you nothing you chewing gum..

You find me tasty and took all my sweet.. Spit me out like your trash..

After all those months of "pure" love... Did I really meant NOTHING to you..

Did you cry when I broke up with you?
Did you missed me when I broke up with you?
Do you hate me now I finally dump you!?

Or don't you care less.. Cause you've 10 others....

I feel broken.. But I'm still standing.. I won't search for guys anymore..
I will trust in my future and dream about him.. The one I really love
♥ ♥​
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+REP for the effort yeh cuz, but as a rap artist/critic there weren't enough rhymes tru;)

EDIT: Given ya too much REP yeh, gotta spread some around before I can give some to ya yeh cuz:D
 
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Narutokyuubii said:
Sorry I can't rhyme.. I just write what I feel..
And not all poetry have to rhyme.. :shy:
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Yes, they don't have to rhyme but the thing with it is that it's expressed with different words (more deeper, something like epithets, methapors) that we normally use so it will give that flow of poetic art.
So next time when you try to do a poem, have this in consideration, as well.
 
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That's nice :) And don't worry about the rhymes, poem isn't about rhymes: it's about feelings.
So you did it correctly. It's a nice way of letting out what you were always keeping inside ^^

Pls update me whenever you make a new poem :D
 
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