WTF Jiriaya:For the Ladies

[maxhawk91]

Hey Have we met.
My name is Jiriaya.
I am not the guy,
With the debt.

You are so hot,
Ya' put my eyes on fire.
You sing like an angel!
Wanna' be in the choir?

You have great thoughts,
And the will to inspire.
Yet your so untouchable,
I call ya' barbed-wire.

Maybe we should exchange our numbers.
Get a date arranged.
Got some spare change?
Then I'll know if your deranged.





~To my girl s0ciaL0utcast~

 

[EnvyMyApex]

So cheesy... I'll still +Rep you though.

 

[Pain is reality]

+rep entertaining

 

[Legendary Broly]

rep + for effort

 

[Bi0hazard]

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[MetalDuck]

A+ for effort. I think the content is ridiculous, but that's my opinion.

As far as constructive criticism, it does appear to follow any rhyme pattern. Since you'r clearly trying to rhyme, I suggest a pattern. Such as ABAB, AABB, etc.

 

[~Dream~]

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[maxhawk91]

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Dang gurl!

 

[WhistleBlower]

really cheesy +rep though for it being original

 

[0neCrazyAngel]

as what i have said, how can u not like someone who makes u laugh??? love it! thanks for making a wtf jiraiya poem. i know ive been bugging u for one! so brace ur self here's ur big :hug:

 

[Wakoo]

sweet

 

[maxhawk91]

Think it is okay?
Should it be continued?
I can do this all day.
He's an awesome dude.
Yet he's got a Make Out,
Pair of Dice dishin' out hate.

 

[MWQ]

rep+ for your effort brother

 

[~Dream~]

You two together in real life to? If not, that's pretty sad...U_U

 

[Flash]

It doesn't rhyme.....content was good