[Adventure] Wrong Turn

[Cyanide Addiction]

Life's full of turns down roads that may not last
Some are foolishly taken
Some are cautiously passed
But some are passed because we are mistaken

It's impossible to never make a wrong turn
You can pretend your perfect
But there's only so much you can remember and learn
Arrogance will only make you a reject

Some can't wait for their chance to take a turn
But then they don't know which way to go
They didn't realize, you can't have what you didn't earn
Only what you work for will you ever know

Maybe you're turning away from a lost cause
But maybe that cause isn't that lost
So stop, and put that turn on pause
Because taking it may be to high a cost

I guess what I'm trying to say..
Is that it's better to be cautious and learn
While living life day by day
Than to plan too far ahead and ignorantly make a wrong turn​

On a side note.. they seriously need to make like a "life lesson" category or something. "Other" is way to vague.
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[straightup]

the poem was well done. You should consider making some tweaks to it though. Some parts dont hit the ear right. Like
"Some are cautiously passed
But some are passed because we are mistaken" you sould find another word to replace the second passed. maybe just try to replace the second line with "Just dont go to fast and try to make it last. Life is a show and you decide the cast" that sounds a little better. A couple other things i could recommend but im not going to impose so if you want my help pm me. But otherwise good job

 

[Braveknight]

This poem or story or slice of life, what ever you want to call it was decent, but hard to read.

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[Cyanide Addiction]

the poem was well done. You should consider making some tweaks to it though. Some parts dont hit the ear right. Like
"Some are cautiously passed
But some are passed because we are mistaken" you sould find another word to replace the second passed. maybe just try to replace the second line with "Just dont go to fast and try to make it last. Life is a show and you decide the cast" that sounds a little better. A couple other things i could recommend but im not going to impose so if you want my help pm me. But otherwise good job

This poem or story or slice of life, what ever you want to call it was decent, but hard to read.

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Truthfully, I proof-read this sh!t back in the day, but I got lazy at some point. I should probably start doing that again since I started up my Killing Time Blog back up here in the forums. Thank you for your input though.

 

[Noni]

It was a basic story of life lessons. I liked it.