TheObserver
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I recently posted a short summary of my light novel and actually received awesome feedback, I have recently developed it a bit further and now im in need of more feedback from my Anime Family on the Base. Make ANY corrections you like, i would appreciate any criticism. Honestly, tell me what you guys think would make my story more attention grabbing to anime heads of all ages.
Set in an alternate timeline where the world is split into three superpowers who inhabit the planet, the Humble Elves, the Samurai clan (Man), and the Sorcerer race that are hailed as the most powerful of the three. A millennium ago the Ruin began. Thirteen humanoid beings later known as Night Descents possessing various dark abilities emerged and attacked the Elf and sorcerer people. A fierce battle between the races began. The sorcerers used the highest of their skills in order to counter the attacks from the dark enemy, While the elves found the enemy vulnerable against the pure flames of their Everlasting Dragons, but defeating the dark creatures proved to be difficult for either race to eliminate alone, only once the eldest and wises of each race proposed an alliance. After an earth shacking battle, together they ultimately annihilated the assault and enslaved the Night descents. Nearly eradicated the Sorcerer race completely, few sorcerers remained. However, the two races were the victors. The history of this epic battle passed down from generation to generations in both races. they Imprisoned the powerful beings within The Lost, a realm of dragons, in a chamber created by ancient Incantations of the Sorcerers and the pure fire of the Elves Everlasting Dragons, an unescapably prison, guarded by two elder Dragons for centuries. Over many of centuries the two races held a ceremony in order to redo weakening magic used to incarcerate the beings over the centuries, and with the weakening of the prison, those of elder bloodline of the sorcerers and the purist of the elf’s were summoned to reconstruct the prison that contained these creatures. Each generation of Sorcerer and elf would have their turn to keep in place the reasonability inherited from their ancestors, reconstructing the prison known as cutting the circle. And make certain the Night Descants remained captive, for if they were to ever escape there would be none who possesses the ability to end their reign.
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Set in an alternate timeline where the world is split into three superpowers who inhabit the planet, the Humble Elves, the Samurai clan (Man), and the Sorcerer race that are hailed as the most powerful of the three. A millennium ago the Ruin began. Thirteen humanoid beings later known as Night Descents possessing various dark abilities emerged and attacked the Elf and sorcerer people. A fierce battle between the races began. The sorcerers used the highest of their skills in order to counter the attacks from the dark enemy, While the elves found the enemy vulnerable against the pure flames of their Everlasting Dragons, but defeating the dark creatures proved to be difficult for either race to eliminate alone, only once the eldest and wises of each race proposed an alliance. After an earth shacking battle, together they ultimately annihilated the assault and enslaved the Night descents. Nearly eradicated the Sorcerer race completely, few sorcerers remained. However, the two races were the victors. The history of this epic battle passed down from generation to generations in both races. they Imprisoned the powerful beings within The Lost, a realm of dragons, in a chamber created by ancient Incantations of the Sorcerers and the pure fire of the Elves Everlasting Dragons, an unescapably prison, guarded by two elder Dragons for centuries. Over many of centuries the two races held a ceremony in order to redo weakening magic used to incarcerate the beings over the centuries, and with the weakening of the prison, those of elder bloodline of the sorcerers and the purist of the elf’s were summoned to reconstruct the prison that contained these creatures. Each generation of Sorcerer and elf would have their turn to keep in place the reasonability inherited from their ancestors, reconstructing the prison known as cutting the circle. And make certain the Night Descants remained captive, for if they were to ever escape there would be none who possesses the ability to end their reign.
