who am i

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some will stay with me, other will flow.
the sun shall still be shown and the moon glow in the night.
giving me a hopeful light, in my darkest hour

God is with me, he is in me.

both evil and good can only come of me.
who is anyone to tell who i am going to be.

Night will disolve into light
all will be made right, in his holy might.
i give thee my light.

now i must fly into the sky, in this one final plight for life.
i will never give into the strive or grieve to come.
because i know were i came from, who i am
 
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It was good but some of it was a bit confusing.

Up until "who is anyone to tell who i am going to be." it sounds kind of like a poem about uncertainty. After that is sort just goes on with that *I will persevere* attitude- which is great, but wouldn't have solved whatever question it was that you were facing in the first half.

Remember that it's spelled "strife"

Good effort ^^
 
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