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I'd like to keep going on with my story. I would appreciate an honest comment, positive or negative. I must say that honest comments could really hurt, but I firmly believe that it is the best way to improve.
In my effort to suit both the readers and myself. I made two versions for this. The dialogue-type version and the version I used with the previous chapters.
Here's the dialogue-type:
And for those who likes to go deeper into a character's feelings, here's my usual format.
CHAPTER THREE: Taiyougakure, Village Hidden in the Sun
“Sai!” Naruto, greeted Sai as he saw him standing by the Konoha Gate with Sakura.
“Ohio, Sakura-chan!” he smiled sweetly.
“NAAA-RU-TOO!” Sakura replied rage. “Are you following Kakashi-sensei’s footsteps? You are as late as him!”
“A-a-a-a-ah, Sakura-chan, please!” Naruto stepped back as he tries to avoid a sure hit from Sakura.
“I-I-I was late for a reason!” He tried to explain, pleading Sakura not to hit him.
“Hmmn” Sai mumbles as he went through the pages. “When a woman tries to hit you, don’t hit back. Hold and hug her closer to you instead and - -“
“A-r-r-g-g-h-h!” Sakura exclaimed furiously.
Sai was unable to finish his reading as he felt a sudden rush of pain in his head. Like he have been hit with a rock!
“Y-You’re useless, Sai.” Naruto dizzily whispered and Sai, also getting dizzy, realized that Sakura just wacked his head with Naruto who was just about to get a hitting from her awhile ago.
“MORONS!” Sakura exclaimed back with face so red with anger.
“Haaaaay” Naruto and Sai wearily replied as they laid their backs dizzily on the ground.
After two more hours, Sakura started grumbling again.
“It’s almost ten and Kakashi-sensei has not arrived yet! When will he ever improve?!”
“HAAT- -!” She turned to the entrance gate in rage and was about to shout out Hatake Kakashi in rage when right in front of her was Kakashi stooping down on her.
“He-e-e…sorry, sorry…” Kakashi said with what looks like a smile behind his mask. “I met a little girl and she was cry--...”
“Liar!” Naruto and Sakura chorused before Kakashi could finish up an excuse.
“Being late always does not promote a hearty relationship with friends.” Sai mumbled as he read through a page from the book.
“Good point, Sai!” Naruto said as he and Sakura giggled over Sai’s naivety of what he just said.
“Ah, Naruto!” Kakashi cut in with a stern look. “I know you were late, too.” He continued with a raised brow.
Naruto let out a big smile, scratching his head in a guilty posture. ‘So, he did notice me’. Naruto said to himself.
“Sai, you better keep your readings to yourself and let’s start out. We are to meet the prince and his personal guard in seventy-four hours.”
“W-W-What?!” Naruto exclaimed.
“We could have left yesterday. We’re one day late and you came just…in…time today!” Naruto crossed his arms, twisted his lips and gave him a snooty face.
"Ah, right." Kakashi agreed, and stooped over Naruto with stern eyes directly glaring on his. "But we can always take a short-cut."
“You mean, there is a short-cut?” Sakura asked.
“Aha” Kakashi nodded cold as ever.
“Why didn’t you say so?!” Naruto, excitedly exclaimed. “Yosh! Let’s go!”
And so the team head on immediately.
And so the team head on immediately, traveling by day, resting by night.
“This should be it.” He said.
“So this is the path that leads to the village hidden from the sun?” Sakura asked as she surveyed the place.
“A village hidden from the sun?” Naruto asked in wonder.
“Yes,” Sai replied and continued.
“The village used to be mysteriously hidden that only by following the sun’s rays in the morning will you be able to see it.” Sakura continued.
“Really?” Naruto wondered and then looks up to the sun.
“Really?” Naruto wondered and then looks up to the sun, trailed the path with his eyes and ended it up to what looked like rumbles of a village gate.
“H-how did that happen? It’s my first time here, and I could see a path that leads to an entrance gate…there!”
“That’s why, I said USED TO BE, idiot!” Sakura emphasized with a raised blow. She wanted to hit Naruto in the head again to let him come up to his senses but then she realized that even her did not know the answer and so she put them down.
“Huuurrrmmmnn” Twisting his lips, Naruto ignored Sakura and began to analyze what she said. “So, it got destroyed, then? Why? What happened to the village and the people in it?”
Sai and Sakura looked at each other, and then to Kakashi. That was all they knew about the village hidden from the sun so they are hoping that he could put in more information.
And so Kakashi continued…
Lost during the 3rd World Shinobi war, the Taiyougakure was a small village with only three shinobi clans. The Nikkou, Tsuuki, and the Hoishi clans. Amongst the three, the Nikkou Clan was claimed the most powerful. They possessed a very unique bloodline limit that allowed them to build a structure that will hide the village. And the sun had something to do in activating the structure’s ability.
Because of their small number, Akio of the Nikkou Clan, head of the village, decided to become allies with Konoha to protect their small village.
At the rise of the war, they decided to help Konoha, except one. He was from the Hoishi Clan who believes that he would be a better leader than Akio. Betraying the village, he sent to the enemy information about the village’s entry.
The village was easily outnumbered and defeated. It was believed that Akio was then slaughtered right in the eyes of his 8 year old daughter. Everyone regarded her as the weakest in the clan that no one ever suspected that the strongest bloodline limit that comes only once in a hundred year, ran through her.
The bloodline limit broke out as the little girl battled the fear and hatred brought about by her father’s death. And that was the end of the village leaving the little girl as the only survivor.
She was brought to Konoha. When Sandaime and Yondaime discovered her power and seeing that she was too weak to handle it, they decided to seal it. But the seal can only be performed by someone with the rarest nature element. The procedures needed were not simple. They needed to train. But they failed. The girl was lost during an attempt to seal her powers in the middle of their mission and everyone believed that she died, except him.
Kakashi stopped and began staring endlessly at the sky.
“That was tragic.” Sakura softly said with a somber tone.
Sai took a deep breath realizing the truth in Sakura’s words.
“Let’s scout the area, we’ve wasted time already.” He snapped back as Naruto, Sakura, and Sai waited for him to tell them more. But he did not want to continue.
“Sai, to the sky and check if you see any signs of our client. Sakura, you go south and Naruto to the east.” He continued with a commanding voice.
“A-a-a-a-a-a!, You haven’t ended your story yet!” Naruto insisted.
“That was the end, Naruto. Be back at this very point in 10 minutes.” Kakashi said with a hard voice and went off to the west.
In my effort to suit both the readers and myself. I made two versions for this. The dialogue-type version and the version I used with the previous chapters.
Here's the dialogue-type:
CHAPTER THREE: Taiyougakure, the Village Hidden From the Sun
At the Konoha Gate.
???: “Sai!”
Sai: *nodded to greet back*
???: “Ohio, Sakura-chan” *with a sweet voice and a cute smile*
Sakura: “NAA-RU-TOO!” *in rage, raising her arms* “Are you following Kakashi-sensei’s footsteps? You are as LATE as him!”
Naruto: “A-a-a-a-ah, Sakura-chan, please!” *steps back as he tries to avoid a sure hit from Sakura*
Naruto: “I-I-I was late for a reason…” *trembling*
Sai: “Hmmn” *mumbles over his book* “When a woman tries to hit you, try to hug her back ins—“
Sakura: “A-r-r-g-g-h-h!” *furious*
Sai and Naruto fell to the ground as Sakura whacked their heads together.
Naruto: “Y-You’re useless, Sai.” *dizzily*
Sakura: “Morons!” *face red with anger*
Naruto and Sai: :drunk:
After two more hours…
Sakura: “It’s almost ten and Kakashi-sensei has not arrived yet! When will he ever improve?!”
Sakura: “HAAT - -!” *pivots to the gate to shout but stopped, mouth still open*
Kakashi: “He-e…sorry, sorry…” *stooping over Sakura*
Sakura: “Humph!” *crossed arms, and brows*
Kakashi: “I met a little girl and she was cry--...”
Naruto and Sakura: “Liar!”
Sai: *scans thru his book* “Being late always does not promote a hearty relationship with friends.” *mumbling*
Naruto: “Good catch, Sai!”
*Naruto and Sakura giggled over Sai’s naivety of what he just said*
Kakashi: “Ah, Naruto!” *stern look* “I know you were late, too.” *raised brow*
Naruto let out a big smile, scratching his head in a guilty posture. ‘So, he did notice me’. Naruto said to himself.
Kakashi: "Sai, you better keep your readings to yourself and let’s start out. We are to meet the prince and his personal guard in seventy-four hours."
Naruto: “W-W-What?! We could have left yesterday. We’re one day late and you came just…in…time today!”
Naruto crossed his arms, twisted his lips and gave him a snooty face.
Kakashi: “Ah, right. But we can always take a short-cut.”
Sakura: “You mean, there is a short-cut?”
Kakashi: *nodded*
Naruto: “Why didn’t you say so?!” *excited* “Yosh! Let’s go!”
And so the team head on immediately, traveling by day, resting by night.
Kakashi: “This should be it.” *signals the team to halt*
Sakura: “So this is the path that leads to the village hidden by the sun?”
Naruto: “A village hidden by the sun?”
Sai: “Yes.”
Sakura: “The village used to be mysteriously hidden that only by following the sun’s rays in the morning will you be able to see it.”
Naruto: “H-how did that happen? It’s my first time here, and I could see a path that leads to an entrance gate…there!”
Sakura: “That’s why, I said USED TO BE, idiot!”
Naruto: “Huuurrrmmmnn” *twisting his lips* “So, it got destroyed, then? Why? What happened to the village and the people in it?”
Sai and Sakura looked at each other, and then to Kakashi. That was all they know about the village hidden from the sun so they are hoping that he could put in more information.
And so Kakashi continued…
Lost during the 3rd World Shinobi war, the Taiyougakure was a small village with only three shinobi clans. The Nikkou, Tsuuki, and the Hoishi clans. Amongst the three, the Nikkou Clan was claimed the most powerful. They possessed a very unique bloodline limit that allowed them to build a structure that will hide the village. And the sun had something to do in activating the structure’s ability.
Because of their small number, Akio of the Nikkou Clan, head of the village, decided to become allies with Konoha to protect their small village.
At the rise of the war, they decided to help Konoha, except one. He was from the Hoishi Clan who believes that he would be a better leader than Akio. Betraying the village, he sent to the enemy information about the village’s entry.
The village was easily outnumbered and defeated. It was believed that Akio was then slaughtered right in the eyes of his 8 year old daughter. Everyone regarded her as the weakest in the clan that no one ever suspected that the strongest bloodline limit that comes only once in a hundred year, ran through her.
The bloodline limit broke out as the little girl battled the fear and hatred brought about by her father’s death. And that was the end of the village leaving the little girl as the only survivor.
She was brought to Konoha. When Sandaime and Yondaime discovered her power and seeing that she was too weak to handle it, they decided to seal it. But the seal can only be performed by someone with the rarest nature element. The procedures needed were not simple. They needed to train. But they failed. The girl was lost during an attempt to seal her powers in the middle of their mission and everyone believed that she died, except him.
Sakura: “That was tragic.” *somber*
Sai: *sigh*
Kakashi: “Let’s scout the area, we’ve wasted time already.” *seriously*
Kakashi: “Sai, to the sky and check if you see any signs of our client. Sakura, you go south and Naruto to the east.” *with a commanding voice*
Naruto: “A-a-a-a-a-a!, You haven’t ended your story yet!”
Kakashi: “That was the end, Naruto. Be back at this very point in 10 minutes.” *hard voice*
At the Konoha Gate.
???: “Sai!”
Sai: *nodded to greet back*
???: “Ohio, Sakura-chan” *with a sweet voice and a cute smile*
Sakura: “NAA-RU-TOO!” *in rage, raising her arms* “Are you following Kakashi-sensei’s footsteps? You are as LATE as him!”
Naruto: “A-a-a-a-ah, Sakura-chan, please!” *steps back as he tries to avoid a sure hit from Sakura*
Naruto: “I-I-I was late for a reason…” *trembling*
Sai: “Hmmn” *mumbles over his book* “When a woman tries to hit you, try to hug her back ins—“
Sakura: “A-r-r-g-g-h-h!” *furious*
Sai and Naruto fell to the ground as Sakura whacked their heads together.
Naruto: “Y-You’re useless, Sai.” *dizzily*
Sakura: “Morons!” *face red with anger*
Naruto and Sai: :drunk:
After two more hours…
Sakura: “It’s almost ten and Kakashi-sensei has not arrived yet! When will he ever improve?!”
Sakura: “HAAT - -!” *pivots to the gate to shout but stopped, mouth still open*
Kakashi: “He-e…sorry, sorry…” *stooping over Sakura*
Sakura: “Humph!” *crossed arms, and brows*
Kakashi: “I met a little girl and she was cry--...”
Naruto and Sakura: “Liar!”
Sai: *scans thru his book* “Being late always does not promote a hearty relationship with friends.” *mumbling*
Naruto: “Good catch, Sai!”
*Naruto and Sakura giggled over Sai’s naivety of what he just said*
Kakashi: “Ah, Naruto!” *stern look* “I know you were late, too.” *raised brow*
Naruto let out a big smile, scratching his head in a guilty posture. ‘So, he did notice me’. Naruto said to himself.
Kakashi: "Sai, you better keep your readings to yourself and let’s start out. We are to meet the prince and his personal guard in seventy-four hours."
Naruto: “W-W-What?! We could have left yesterday. We’re one day late and you came just…in…time today!”
Naruto crossed his arms, twisted his lips and gave him a snooty face.
Kakashi: “Ah, right. But we can always take a short-cut.”
Sakura: “You mean, there is a short-cut?”
Kakashi: *nodded*
Naruto: “Why didn’t you say so?!” *excited* “Yosh! Let’s go!”
And so the team head on immediately, traveling by day, resting by night.
Kakashi: “This should be it.” *signals the team to halt*
Sakura: “So this is the path that leads to the village hidden by the sun?”
Naruto: “A village hidden by the sun?”
Sai: “Yes.”
Sakura: “The village used to be mysteriously hidden that only by following the sun’s rays in the morning will you be able to see it.”
Naruto: “H-how did that happen? It’s my first time here, and I could see a path that leads to an entrance gate…there!”
Sakura: “That’s why, I said USED TO BE, idiot!”
Naruto: “Huuurrrmmmnn” *twisting his lips* “So, it got destroyed, then? Why? What happened to the village and the people in it?”
Sai and Sakura looked at each other, and then to Kakashi. That was all they know about the village hidden from the sun so they are hoping that he could put in more information.
And so Kakashi continued…
Lost during the 3rd World Shinobi war, the Taiyougakure was a small village with only three shinobi clans. The Nikkou, Tsuuki, and the Hoishi clans. Amongst the three, the Nikkou Clan was claimed the most powerful. They possessed a very unique bloodline limit that allowed them to build a structure that will hide the village. And the sun had something to do in activating the structure’s ability.
Because of their small number, Akio of the Nikkou Clan, head of the village, decided to become allies with Konoha to protect their small village.
At the rise of the war, they decided to help Konoha, except one. He was from the Hoishi Clan who believes that he would be a better leader than Akio. Betraying the village, he sent to the enemy information about the village’s entry.
The village was easily outnumbered and defeated. It was believed that Akio was then slaughtered right in the eyes of his 8 year old daughter. Everyone regarded her as the weakest in the clan that no one ever suspected that the strongest bloodline limit that comes only once in a hundred year, ran through her.
The bloodline limit broke out as the little girl battled the fear and hatred brought about by her father’s death. And that was the end of the village leaving the little girl as the only survivor.
She was brought to Konoha. When Sandaime and Yondaime discovered her power and seeing that she was too weak to handle it, they decided to seal it. But the seal can only be performed by someone with the rarest nature element. The procedures needed were not simple. They needed to train. But they failed. The girl was lost during an attempt to seal her powers in the middle of their mission and everyone believed that she died, except him.
Sakura: “That was tragic.” *somber*
Sai: *sigh*
Kakashi: “Let’s scout the area, we’ve wasted time already.” *seriously*
Kakashi: “Sai, to the sky and check if you see any signs of our client. Sakura, you go south and Naruto to the east.” *with a commanding voice*
Naruto: “A-a-a-a-a-a!, You haven’t ended your story yet!”
Kakashi: “That was the end, Naruto. Be back at this very point in 10 minutes.” *hard voice*
END OF CHAPTER THREE
Next chapter would be The Mysterious Encounter
Next chapter would be The Mysterious Encounter
CHAPTER THREE: Taiyougakure, Village Hidden in the Sun
“Sai!” Naruto, greeted Sai as he saw him standing by the Konoha Gate with Sakura.
“Ohio, Sakura-chan!” he smiled sweetly.
“NAAA-RU-TOO!” Sakura replied rage. “Are you following Kakashi-sensei’s footsteps? You are as late as him!”
“A-a-a-a-ah, Sakura-chan, please!” Naruto stepped back as he tries to avoid a sure hit from Sakura.
“I-I-I was late for a reason!” He tried to explain, pleading Sakura not to hit him.
“Hmmn” Sai mumbles as he went through the pages. “When a woman tries to hit you, don’t hit back. Hold and hug her closer to you instead and - -“
“A-r-r-g-g-h-h!” Sakura exclaimed furiously.
Sai was unable to finish his reading as he felt a sudden rush of pain in his head. Like he have been hit with a rock!
“Y-You’re useless, Sai.” Naruto dizzily whispered and Sai, also getting dizzy, realized that Sakura just wacked his head with Naruto who was just about to get a hitting from her awhile ago.
“MORONS!” Sakura exclaimed back with face so red with anger.
“Haaaaay” Naruto and Sai wearily replied as they laid their backs dizzily on the ground.
After two more hours, Sakura started grumbling again.
“It’s almost ten and Kakashi-sensei has not arrived yet! When will he ever improve?!”
“HAAT- -!” She turned to the entrance gate in rage and was about to shout out Hatake Kakashi in rage when right in front of her was Kakashi stooping down on her.
“He-e-e…sorry, sorry…” Kakashi said with what looks like a smile behind his mask. “I met a little girl and she was cry--...”
“Liar!” Naruto and Sakura chorused before Kakashi could finish up an excuse.
“Being late always does not promote a hearty relationship with friends.” Sai mumbled as he read through a page from the book.
“Good point, Sai!” Naruto said as he and Sakura giggled over Sai’s naivety of what he just said.
“Ah, Naruto!” Kakashi cut in with a stern look. “I know you were late, too.” He continued with a raised brow.
Naruto let out a big smile, scratching his head in a guilty posture. ‘So, he did notice me’. Naruto said to himself.
“Sai, you better keep your readings to yourself and let’s start out. We are to meet the prince and his personal guard in seventy-four hours.”
“W-W-What?!” Naruto exclaimed.
“We could have left yesterday. We’re one day late and you came just…in…time today!” Naruto crossed his arms, twisted his lips and gave him a snooty face.
"Ah, right." Kakashi agreed, and stooped over Naruto with stern eyes directly glaring on his. "But we can always take a short-cut."
“You mean, there is a short-cut?” Sakura asked.
“Aha” Kakashi nodded cold as ever.
“Why didn’t you say so?!” Naruto, excitedly exclaimed. “Yosh! Let’s go!”
And so the team head on immediately.
And so the team head on immediately, traveling by day, resting by night.
“This should be it.” He said.
“So this is the path that leads to the village hidden from the sun?” Sakura asked as she surveyed the place.
“A village hidden from the sun?” Naruto asked in wonder.
“Yes,” Sai replied and continued.
“The village used to be mysteriously hidden that only by following the sun’s rays in the morning will you be able to see it.” Sakura continued.
“Really?” Naruto wondered and then looks up to the sun.
“Really?” Naruto wondered and then looks up to the sun, trailed the path with his eyes and ended it up to what looked like rumbles of a village gate.
“H-how did that happen? It’s my first time here, and I could see a path that leads to an entrance gate…there!”
“That’s why, I said USED TO BE, idiot!” Sakura emphasized with a raised blow. She wanted to hit Naruto in the head again to let him come up to his senses but then she realized that even her did not know the answer and so she put them down.
“Huuurrrmmmnn” Twisting his lips, Naruto ignored Sakura and began to analyze what she said. “So, it got destroyed, then? Why? What happened to the village and the people in it?”
Sai and Sakura looked at each other, and then to Kakashi. That was all they knew about the village hidden from the sun so they are hoping that he could put in more information.
And so Kakashi continued…
Lost during the 3rd World Shinobi war, the Taiyougakure was a small village with only three shinobi clans. The Nikkou, Tsuuki, and the Hoishi clans. Amongst the three, the Nikkou Clan was claimed the most powerful. They possessed a very unique bloodline limit that allowed them to build a structure that will hide the village. And the sun had something to do in activating the structure’s ability.
Because of their small number, Akio of the Nikkou Clan, head of the village, decided to become allies with Konoha to protect their small village.
At the rise of the war, they decided to help Konoha, except one. He was from the Hoishi Clan who believes that he would be a better leader than Akio. Betraying the village, he sent to the enemy information about the village’s entry.
The village was easily outnumbered and defeated. It was believed that Akio was then slaughtered right in the eyes of his 8 year old daughter. Everyone regarded her as the weakest in the clan that no one ever suspected that the strongest bloodline limit that comes only once in a hundred year, ran through her.
The bloodline limit broke out as the little girl battled the fear and hatred brought about by her father’s death. And that was the end of the village leaving the little girl as the only survivor.
She was brought to Konoha. When Sandaime and Yondaime discovered her power and seeing that she was too weak to handle it, they decided to seal it. But the seal can only be performed by someone with the rarest nature element. The procedures needed were not simple. They needed to train. But they failed. The girl was lost during an attempt to seal her powers in the middle of their mission and everyone believed that she died, except him.
Kakashi stopped and began staring endlessly at the sky.
“That was tragic.” Sakura softly said with a somber tone.
Sai took a deep breath realizing the truth in Sakura’s words.
“Let’s scout the area, we’ve wasted time already.” He snapped back as Naruto, Sakura, and Sai waited for him to tell them more. But he did not want to continue.
“Sai, to the sky and check if you see any signs of our client. Sakura, you go south and Naruto to the east.” He continued with a commanding voice.
“A-a-a-a-a-a!, You haven’t ended your story yet!” Naruto insisted.
“That was the end, Naruto. Be back at this very point in 10 minutes.” Kakashi said with a hard voice and went off to the west.
END OF CHAPTER 3
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