Hey guys, here is the 2nd chapter that some friends and I have been working on. 
Hope you like it and tell me if you have any suggestions for the next chapter(s)!
If you missed Chapter 1, click this link:
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Satoshi makes his way home, through the abandoned streets. Everyone is back inside by this time, no one would dare to break curfew. Still, Satoshi is unable to stop thinking about what Ace and Hikari said:
"It can't be true. Father would never... would he? What do I even say to him? Hi father, I heard that you were a dictating tyrant.”
Almost home, he walks up a long ramp leading into the Therakage's palace. It is an ornate yet imposing building, casting it's shadow own upon Satoshi. He greats the guard team at the doors and then heads up to his room on the third floor. "What do I even say to him? Hi father, I heard that you were a dictating tyrant.” Satoshi flings his door open and tosses himself onto his bed. As his thoughts turn, he stares blankly at the ceiling. What to say? Or should i even say anything? What to believe? Should I believe anything? A few minutes pass and all is peaceful until he hears his bedroom door begin to open. With his heart pounding, Satsohi sits up quickly from his bed. The golden doorknob twists, and from behind the door the Therakage emerges.
Roice, the Therakage, ducks his head to enter his son’s room. His enormous muscles are visible through his clothing. His everlasting stern look is plastered to his face.
"F-father, you're home early," Satoshi sputters out nervously. He feels a drop of sweat running down the back of his spine.
"This is true,” Roice says with a deep voice. “Is something troubling you?”
"Oh... umm, nothing sir," Satoshi replies with a trembling voice.
"How is your training?" Roice calmly asks.
"I am beginning to master your lightning style jutsu: Collapsing Shock, but," Satoshi's voice cracks, and he pauses, looking down in shame, "It's no where near as powerful as yours."
-----FLASHBACK-----
Screams resound across the battlefield as shinobi fall to the the ground in agony. It is truely a scene of mass carnage. Some ninja lay upon the earth taking their last breaths while others fight with all they’ve got. Kunai fly through the air, some strike their targets and some miss. Medics rush to the wounded and the dead are left stagnant. Sensory ninja on both sides feel a huge source of chakra heading toward their location.
"Finally, Roice is here! Everyone, get back!" a ninja shouts. Thirty three shinobi rush past bloody kunai and mangled dead bodies to get to Roice.
"Are all of our men out of the way?" Roice asks.
"Yes sir. You're all clear," the ninja replies.
The commander signals and the Ash’s shinobi begin retreating.
Roice does a five motion hand seal.
Blackout
Instantly the sky turned black and darkness covered the entire battlefield. "I only sense sixty seven enemies.”
Lightning Release: Collapsing Shock
He breathes ominously, placing his hands upon the earth. Lightning strikes down from the heavens like a dagger, hitting every enemy shinobi. The blackness clears to reveal charred bodies scattered all over the ground.
"Most of them are dead." Roice says dismissively. "Finish off the survivors."
"Y-yes sir," The shinobi reply, astonished.
A few days after the battle, Kazan, the Therakage, leaves the village with an outfit KOBU members. He had planned on meeting the other Kages at an undisclosed location, but for some mysterious reason he never arrived to the meeting. Villagers begin to worry about their Kage's disappearance and never imagined that someone as powerful as him would ever be in any trouble. The elders in the Village Hidden in the Ash, after growing more and more desperate, decide they are in need of another Therakage to replace Kazan. They organize a meeting in their palace. It is grand affair, and the three village elders sit on elegant golden chairs at a marble table. The elders sit upon golden thrones with serious looks on their faces.
The first elder speaks, "Who do you believe the next Therakage should be?"
The second elder replies, “I have already set my mind on Roice. He is the most powerful shinobi in the village. I would say he is even more powerful than Kazan was."
The third elder responds, "Come on, you know we all must to decide together."
The second elder continues, “I have already decided and I am not changing my mind.”
The third elder, beginning to get a headache says, “Well, knowing you, your temper will worsen the more we debate. I agree that Roice is extremely powerful. He would do his best to defend the village.”
The first elder nods his head and replies, “I see that Roice has won the majority vote then. I will send my aide to bring Roice back here and we will inform him of his new position.”
The first elder sends her aide to retrieve Roice from his home. The aide shortly arrives at Roice’s house and together, they both travel back to the elder’s palace.
Roice opens the large wooden doors with a single hand. “What’s this all about?” he asks.
“Kazan has been absent for so long so we must assume he has passed,” the second elder says.
“The time has come for a new Therakage,” the third elder adds.
“We have decided to make you the new Therakage,” the first elder states.
"I see,” Roice says calmly as he clenches his fists, “I will uphold my position with the highest honor. I will not fail the village!”
----END FLASHBACK----
"I don't expect you to be at my level yet. How is your healing jutsu progressing?" Roice asks his son without expression, or maybe even disappointment. .
"I’m slowly getting better at it but it's harder than I thought," Satoshi says in a low tone.
The Therakage replies, "I see," and begins exiting Satoshi’s room.
Satoshi blurts out eagerly, "Father wait!"
Roice's feet stop and his head turns back, "What is it?"
Satoshi remains quiet for a moment, suddenly unsure as to whether he should continue. But then he speaks up, "Why did you send KOBU after Ace and Hikari?"
Roice raises an eyebrow and calmly says, "Simple, they broke the law."
Satoshi becomes infuriated and asks, "Why do we have these dumb rule in the first place? Why can't we go outside these stupid village walls?!"
Roice turns his body around and faces his son. “As the Therakage and as your father, I am not required to answer your question.”
The Kage turns to again to exit Satoshi’s room, but stops in the doorway. His formidable frame fills the space. Satoshi draws his breath.
“True peace lies within the village.” the Therakage murmurs.
-End-
So that was chapter 2 part 1! Please comment on what you thoughts are! What could i improve on and what did i improve on! What would you like to see in the upcoming chapters? I will probably incorporate any of the ideas you guys give me. haha
Like always, i couldn't have done it without these guys!
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Thanks for reading all the way to here. It means a lot guys! If you wanna share this with any of your friends, i might just love you forever. : )
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"Unaffected" Fanfic Chapter 2 part 1
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Satoshi makes his way home, through the abandoned streets. Everyone is back inside by this time, no one would dare to break curfew. Still, Satoshi is unable to stop thinking about what Ace and Hikari said:
"It can't be true. Father would never... would he? What do I even say to him? Hi father, I heard that you were a dictating tyrant.”
Almost home, he walks up a long ramp leading into the Therakage's palace. It is an ornate yet imposing building, casting it's shadow own upon Satoshi. He greats the guard team at the doors and then heads up to his room on the third floor. "What do I even say to him? Hi father, I heard that you were a dictating tyrant.” Satoshi flings his door open and tosses himself onto his bed. As his thoughts turn, he stares blankly at the ceiling. What to say? Or should i even say anything? What to believe? Should I believe anything? A few minutes pass and all is peaceful until he hears his bedroom door begin to open. With his heart pounding, Satsohi sits up quickly from his bed. The golden doorknob twists, and from behind the door the Therakage emerges.
Roice, the Therakage, ducks his head to enter his son’s room. His enormous muscles are visible through his clothing. His everlasting stern look is plastered to his face.
"F-father, you're home early," Satoshi sputters out nervously. He feels a drop of sweat running down the back of his spine.
"This is true,” Roice says with a deep voice. “Is something troubling you?”
"Oh... umm, nothing sir," Satoshi replies with a trembling voice.
"How is your training?" Roice calmly asks.
"I am beginning to master your lightning style jutsu: Collapsing Shock, but," Satoshi's voice cracks, and he pauses, looking down in shame, "It's no where near as powerful as yours."
-----FLASHBACK-----
Screams resound across the battlefield as shinobi fall to the the ground in agony. It is truely a scene of mass carnage. Some ninja lay upon the earth taking their last breaths while others fight with all they’ve got. Kunai fly through the air, some strike their targets and some miss. Medics rush to the wounded and the dead are left stagnant. Sensory ninja on both sides feel a huge source of chakra heading toward their location.
"Finally, Roice is here! Everyone, get back!" a ninja shouts. Thirty three shinobi rush past bloody kunai and mangled dead bodies to get to Roice.
"Are all of our men out of the way?" Roice asks.
"Yes sir. You're all clear," the ninja replies.
The commander signals and the Ash’s shinobi begin retreating.
Roice does a five motion hand seal.
Blackout
Instantly the sky turned black and darkness covered the entire battlefield. "I only sense sixty seven enemies.”
Lightning Release: Collapsing Shock
He breathes ominously, placing his hands upon the earth. Lightning strikes down from the heavens like a dagger, hitting every enemy shinobi. The blackness clears to reveal charred bodies scattered all over the ground.
"Most of them are dead." Roice says dismissively. "Finish off the survivors."
"Y-yes sir," The shinobi reply, astonished.
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A few days after the battle, Kazan, the Therakage, leaves the village with an outfit KOBU members. He had planned on meeting the other Kages at an undisclosed location, but for some mysterious reason he never arrived to the meeting. Villagers begin to worry about their Kage's disappearance and never imagined that someone as powerful as him would ever be in any trouble. The elders in the Village Hidden in the Ash, after growing more and more desperate, decide they are in need of another Therakage to replace Kazan. They organize a meeting in their palace. It is grand affair, and the three village elders sit on elegant golden chairs at a marble table. The elders sit upon golden thrones with serious looks on their faces.
The first elder speaks, "Who do you believe the next Therakage should be?"
The second elder replies, “I have already set my mind on Roice. He is the most powerful shinobi in the village. I would say he is even more powerful than Kazan was."
The third elder responds, "Come on, you know we all must to decide together."
The second elder continues, “I have already decided and I am not changing my mind.”
The third elder, beginning to get a headache says, “Well, knowing you, your temper will worsen the more we debate. I agree that Roice is extremely powerful. He would do his best to defend the village.”
The first elder nods his head and replies, “I see that Roice has won the majority vote then. I will send my aide to bring Roice back here and we will inform him of his new position.”
The first elder sends her aide to retrieve Roice from his home. The aide shortly arrives at Roice’s house and together, they both travel back to the elder’s palace.
Roice opens the large wooden doors with a single hand. “What’s this all about?” he asks.
“Kazan has been absent for so long so we must assume he has passed,” the second elder says.
“The time has come for a new Therakage,” the third elder adds.
“We have decided to make you the new Therakage,” the first elder states.
"I see,” Roice says calmly as he clenches his fists, “I will uphold my position with the highest honor. I will not fail the village!”
----END FLASHBACK----
"I don't expect you to be at my level yet. How is your healing jutsu progressing?" Roice asks his son without expression, or maybe even disappointment. .
"I’m slowly getting better at it but it's harder than I thought," Satoshi says in a low tone.
The Therakage replies, "I see," and begins exiting Satoshi’s room.
Satoshi blurts out eagerly, "Father wait!"
Roice's feet stop and his head turns back, "What is it?"
Satoshi remains quiet for a moment, suddenly unsure as to whether he should continue. But then he speaks up, "Why did you send KOBU after Ace and Hikari?"
Roice raises an eyebrow and calmly says, "Simple, they broke the law."
Satoshi becomes infuriated and asks, "Why do we have these dumb rule in the first place? Why can't we go outside these stupid village walls?!"
Roice turns his body around and faces his son. “As the Therakage and as your father, I am not required to answer your question.”
The Kage turns to again to exit Satoshi’s room, but stops in the doorway. His formidable frame fills the space. Satoshi draws his breath.
“True peace lies within the village.” the Therakage murmurs.
-End-
So that was chapter 2 part 1! Please comment on what you thoughts are! What could i improve on and what did i improve on! What would you like to see in the upcoming chapters? I will probably incorporate any of the ideas you guys give me. haha
Like always, i couldn't have done it without these guys!
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- Editing.Thanks for reading all the way to here. It means a lot guys! If you wanna share this with any of your friends, i might just love you forever. : )
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