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Sweat beading down his forehead, Ace and Hikari ran through the woods. “Hurry up Hikari,” exclaimed Ace. “We’ve got to get of of here!”
Hikari nodded as she kept stride with Ace. "Yeah, yeah, just because I'm a girl doesn't mean you have baby me. Plus, it's not like it’s my first time running away from the KOBU."
"The Therakuge’s Urgency Response Unit, KOBU, run through the village sprinting after Ace and Hikari "Hey! Get back here!” “Team 2, go left and cut them off! Don't underestimate them, they were some of the top jounins we had in our village!"
One after another, KOBU chased Ace and Hikari. They would stop at nothing to catch them.
The KOBU split. One group of three KOBU members ran left. The village lies at the base of a volcanic mountain so Ace and Hakiri would not be able to escape to the right.
With a smirk on his face, Ace said, "Hikari, we will go with the usual plan."
Hikari, knowing what was going happen next smiled as the plan began to unfold. "Alright."
Ace bit his right thumb and pressed it onto his left palm, "Summoning jutsu!”
Hikari disappeared out of sight as Ace summoned a rounded white staff five feet long.
Ace slashed his sword towards the earth and yelled, "Wind Scatter jutsu!"
A gust of wind came from the top of his staff. The wind hit the ground and dust flew everywhere, causing a smokescreen.
The staff appears into clouds as Ace says with a snicker, "This outta buy us some time. Swift release, Dense Friction!"
The dust in the air began to move slower and slower. The air became thick and gravity became heavier. As soon as the KOBU group entered into the dust they start to slow down and began moving in slow motion.
As the dust engulfed them, their eyes were in pain due to the small dust fragments that hit them. One of the KOBU members complained, "The dust, I can't see a thing, it's blinding me!"
Another KOBU did his best to clear his sight by waving his hands to clear the dust. "Why is this taking so long? Something’s not right!"
Thinking it was a Genjustu, one of the KOBU stopped and put his fingers in a T formation and shouted "release", but nothing changed. Ace ran further alongside the volcano. He jumped behind a bush and used his hand to press chakra onto a rock alongside the volcano. Some dirt and small rocks fell, leading him into a small room that was 12 feet by 15 feet. Inside the room he saw a familiar face. It was Hikari.
Hikari sat there with her legs crossed and an impatient look. "What took you so long?"
Ace laughed as he sat down scratching the back of his head "Well, I couldn't let them follow me for obvious reasons so I just used my Kekkei Genkai to slow them down."
This interested her. She said in a confused tone, "The one where you combined Wind and Lightening?"
"Yep." Ace says with a big grin on his face, "I haven't perfected it yet, but it can slow down or speed up an area by changing the pressure of the air and gravity.”
"You can slow them down now?" Hikari asked in a surprised tone. "I thought you could only speed things up, but I guess I was wrong! You really have gotten better. Not as good as me of course, but why did you summon your staff? Wouldn't that have just got in the way?”
"Keep talking Hikari but last time we fought each other you ended up with a kunai to your throat. I have figured out how to slow people and time down," said Ace while lying on his back. "I used my lightning to strike the ground, making the friction heavier. The thing about Dense Friction is when you are in it, you do not feel like you're slowing down but you are able see that you are not moving as fast as you normally would. So that is why I used a cloud of dust to reduce their visibility.”
"Huh. I guess your name does really fit your personality. You always have an ace up your sleeve,” remarked Hikari.
"Yeah, I'm just quick when it comes to thinking" said Ace modestly. "How did you get out of there without them following you back to our hideout?"
"I just used Water Release: Bullet Technique on some hot coals from the volcano to make steam. It allowed me to get away a lot earlier since you caused them to split up so there weren't as many eyes looking for me."
"Not to Shabby." Ace said with a chuckle.
A rage took over Hikari as she slammed her fists to the ground. "Gahh! I hate how the stupid Therakage (Th ear uh kage) won't let us leave this stupid village! We can't even get in contact with the outside world without him sicking the KOBU on us. I feel like this is just the beginning! Whats next? But gosh, he is so strict! Ahh, I hate him!" Her face was painted with rage. She took a deep breath and began to speak again. "The worst part about it is we are the only ones who see that he is evil! Everyone else follows his dumb rules like puppets."
Ace, with a cool head, replied in a calm voice. "I know what you mean, but complaining isn't gonna help us out much. Come on Hikari, let’s go back to our house. Mom is gonna be pissed if we miss dinner again.
Hikari halfheartedly shook her head. "Yeah seriously, lets go. But if I find the Therakage on the way home, I'm gonna rip his guts out!" Hikari's response evoked a big laugh from Ace and they made their way home.
They decided to take a crowded street so that the KOBU wouldn't notice them. As they were walking in the street, Hikari spotted a familiar face. “It's Satoshi, the Rakage's only son.”
Hikari ran up to him and grabbed him by the shirt. She proceeded to lift him off the ground. In a fit of rage she yelled, "I outta kill you-" Her sentence was cut short when Ace punched her in the stomach. She gasped for air and in the process, letting go of Satoshi.
In a calm manner, Ace said, "Now is not the time Hikari. The KOBU is looking for us. Do you wanna create a scene?"
Hikari was embarrassed of her behavior. As soon as Ace and Hikari turned away, the Therakages son attemped to take off running. Ace reached out his hand and in the blink of an eye, caught the back of Satoshi's shirt. “Oh no you don't. You're not getting away that easily,” said Ace.
With Satoshi’s collar in his hand, he looked for a place for the three of them to hide. Ace saw a fruit stand to hide behind. He dragged Satoshi by the back of his shirt and threw him behind the stand into a pile of empty boxes.
Satoshi was slim guy with short brown hair and brown eyes. He was 20 years old and about 5'9. He was considered a perfect child for he never gets into trouble. He gets perfect grades, he is always polite, and stays out of trouble. Satoshi was Ace and Hikari's classmate, but they never got along.
In an aggressive tone, Hikari said, "I guess it’s not your lucky day to find us here, huh Satoshi?"
Satoshi had a confused look on his face trying to remember what he could have done to deserve this. "Ace? Hikari? What do you guys want with me?" His voice had a scared tone as his mind draws blanks.
Hikari quietly whispered in his ear. "Your stupid dad is ruining everything! If he wasn't so damn protective and didn't act like everyone is a child, then this wouldn't have happened!
A confused look appeared on Satoshi's face as he responded, "What did he do? I think it's you guys and not him. Out of everyone in town, you are the only ones who cause trouble!
Aggressively, Ace replied, "He sent two squads of KOBU to capture us all because we wanted see what is beyond the walls of our Village Hidden in the Ash."
"What?" Satoshi said confused. "I never heard anything about this. But now that you mention it, I have never gone outside the walls myself. The only missions we receive are in inside the walls of our village."
"Exactly, that's why Ace and I quit the ninja academy two years ago. All we did were idiotic missions!" Hikari said grinding her teeth.
"Yeah, you've been sheltered for to long," claimed Ace. "Remember what happened to Rieko? He tried to break out of the walls and your dad slaughtered him."
There was a surprised look on Satoshi's face. "I've never heard about all this,” Satoshi said with a conflicted look on his face. “I'll talk with him and try and figure out what’s up."
"Good, and once you find out from precious daddy, come back to us." Hikari said in a mocking tone.
"I'm not taking orders from you!" Satoshi responded trying to look tough.
Hikari picked him up by his shirt again. "What did you say?"
Satoshi backed down and helplessly said, "Okay, okay, just don't hurt me!"
"Get out of here!" Ace said as Satoshi ran as fast as he could away from the scary duo.
They stood there watching him run away. With a growl from her stomach, Hikari was reminded how hungry she was. “I guess in all this commotion I forgot we needed to find some food.”
Ace just laughed and he shook his head. “Sometimes I wonder which is louder, your big mouth or your hungry stomach.” With that said, Ace and Hikari walked away into the darkness while the sun slowly set.
Ace, Hikari and Satoshi
Satoshi and Hikari
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Sweat beading down his forehead, Ace and Hikari ran through the woods. “Hurry up Hikari,” exclaimed Ace. “We’ve got to get of of here!”
Hikari nodded as she kept stride with Ace. "Yeah, yeah, just because I'm a girl doesn't mean you have baby me. Plus, it's not like it’s my first time running away from the KOBU."
"The Therakuge’s Urgency Response Unit, KOBU, run through the village sprinting after Ace and Hikari "Hey! Get back here!” “Team 2, go left and cut them off! Don't underestimate them, they were some of the top jounins we had in our village!"
One after another, KOBU chased Ace and Hikari. They would stop at nothing to catch them.
The KOBU split. One group of three KOBU members ran left. The village lies at the base of a volcanic mountain so Ace and Hakiri would not be able to escape to the right.
With a smirk on his face, Ace said, "Hikari, we will go with the usual plan."
Hikari, knowing what was going happen next smiled as the plan began to unfold. "Alright."
Ace bit his right thumb and pressed it onto his left palm, "Summoning jutsu!”
Hikari disappeared out of sight as Ace summoned a rounded white staff five feet long.
Ace slashed his sword towards the earth and yelled, "Wind Scatter jutsu!"
A gust of wind came from the top of his staff. The wind hit the ground and dust flew everywhere, causing a smokescreen.
The staff appears into clouds as Ace says with a snicker, "This outta buy us some time. Swift release, Dense Friction!"
The dust in the air began to move slower and slower. The air became thick and gravity became heavier. As soon as the KOBU group entered into the dust they start to slow down and began moving in slow motion.
As the dust engulfed them, their eyes were in pain due to the small dust fragments that hit them. One of the KOBU members complained, "The dust, I can't see a thing, it's blinding me!"
Another KOBU did his best to clear his sight by waving his hands to clear the dust. "Why is this taking so long? Something’s not right!"
Thinking it was a Genjustu, one of the KOBU stopped and put his fingers in a T formation and shouted "release", but nothing changed. Ace ran further alongside the volcano. He jumped behind a bush and used his hand to press chakra onto a rock alongside the volcano. Some dirt and small rocks fell, leading him into a small room that was 12 feet by 15 feet. Inside the room he saw a familiar face. It was Hikari.
Hikari sat there with her legs crossed and an impatient look. "What took you so long?"
Ace laughed as he sat down scratching the back of his head "Well, I couldn't let them follow me for obvious reasons so I just used my Kekkei Genkai to slow them down."
This interested her. She said in a confused tone, "The one where you combined Wind and Lightening?"
"Yep." Ace says with a big grin on his face, "I haven't perfected it yet, but it can slow down or speed up an area by changing the pressure of the air and gravity.”
"You can slow them down now?" Hikari asked in a surprised tone. "I thought you could only speed things up, but I guess I was wrong! You really have gotten better. Not as good as me of course, but why did you summon your staff? Wouldn't that have just got in the way?”
"Keep talking Hikari but last time we fought each other you ended up with a kunai to your throat. I have figured out how to slow people and time down," said Ace while lying on his back. "I used my lightning to strike the ground, making the friction heavier. The thing about Dense Friction is when you are in it, you do not feel like you're slowing down but you are able see that you are not moving as fast as you normally would. So that is why I used a cloud of dust to reduce their visibility.”
"Huh. I guess your name does really fit your personality. You always have an ace up your sleeve,” remarked Hikari.
"Yeah, I'm just quick when it comes to thinking" said Ace modestly. "How did you get out of there without them following you back to our hideout?"
"I just used Water Release: Bullet Technique on some hot coals from the volcano to make steam. It allowed me to get away a lot earlier since you caused them to split up so there weren't as many eyes looking for me."
"Not to Shabby." Ace said with a chuckle.
A rage took over Hikari as she slammed her fists to the ground. "Gahh! I hate how the stupid Therakage (Th ear uh kage) won't let us leave this stupid village! We can't even get in contact with the outside world without him sicking the KOBU on us. I feel like this is just the beginning! Whats next? But gosh, he is so strict! Ahh, I hate him!" Her face was painted with rage. She took a deep breath and began to speak again. "The worst part about it is we are the only ones who see that he is evil! Everyone else follows his dumb rules like puppets."
Ace, with a cool head, replied in a calm voice. "I know what you mean, but complaining isn't gonna help us out much. Come on Hikari, let’s go back to our house. Mom is gonna be pissed if we miss dinner again.
Hikari halfheartedly shook her head. "Yeah seriously, lets go. But if I find the Therakage on the way home, I'm gonna rip his guts out!" Hikari's response evoked a big laugh from Ace and they made their way home.
They decided to take a crowded street so that the KOBU wouldn't notice them. As they were walking in the street, Hikari spotted a familiar face. “It's Satoshi, the Rakage's only son.”
Hikari ran up to him and grabbed him by the shirt. She proceeded to lift him off the ground. In a fit of rage she yelled, "I outta kill you-" Her sentence was cut short when Ace punched her in the stomach. She gasped for air and in the process, letting go of Satoshi.
In a calm manner, Ace said, "Now is not the time Hikari. The KOBU is looking for us. Do you wanna create a scene?"
Hikari was embarrassed of her behavior. As soon as Ace and Hikari turned away, the Therakages son attemped to take off running. Ace reached out his hand and in the blink of an eye, caught the back of Satoshi's shirt. “Oh no you don't. You're not getting away that easily,” said Ace.
With Satoshi’s collar in his hand, he looked for a place for the three of them to hide. Ace saw a fruit stand to hide behind. He dragged Satoshi by the back of his shirt and threw him behind the stand into a pile of empty boxes.
Satoshi was slim guy with short brown hair and brown eyes. He was 20 years old and about 5'9. He was considered a perfect child for he never gets into trouble. He gets perfect grades, he is always polite, and stays out of trouble. Satoshi was Ace and Hikari's classmate, but they never got along.
In an aggressive tone, Hikari said, "I guess it’s not your lucky day to find us here, huh Satoshi?"
Satoshi had a confused look on his face trying to remember what he could have done to deserve this. "Ace? Hikari? What do you guys want with me?" His voice had a scared tone as his mind draws blanks.
Hikari quietly whispered in his ear. "Your stupid dad is ruining everything! If he wasn't so damn protective and didn't act like everyone is a child, then this wouldn't have happened!
A confused look appeared on Satoshi's face as he responded, "What did he do? I think it's you guys and not him. Out of everyone in town, you are the only ones who cause trouble!
Aggressively, Ace replied, "He sent two squads of KOBU to capture us all because we wanted see what is beyond the walls of our Village Hidden in the Ash."
"What?" Satoshi said confused. "I never heard anything about this. But now that you mention it, I have never gone outside the walls myself. The only missions we receive are in inside the walls of our village."
"Exactly, that's why Ace and I quit the ninja academy two years ago. All we did were idiotic missions!" Hikari said grinding her teeth.
"Yeah, you've been sheltered for to long," claimed Ace. "Remember what happened to Rieko? He tried to break out of the walls and your dad slaughtered him."
There was a surprised look on Satoshi's face. "I've never heard about all this,” Satoshi said with a conflicted look on his face. “I'll talk with him and try and figure out what’s up."
"Good, and once you find out from precious daddy, come back to us." Hikari said in a mocking tone.
"I'm not taking orders from you!" Satoshi responded trying to look tough.
Hikari picked him up by his shirt again. "What did you say?"
Satoshi backed down and helplessly said, "Okay, okay, just don't hurt me!"
"Get out of here!" Ace said as Satoshi ran as fast as he could away from the scary duo.
They stood there watching him run away. With a growl from her stomach, Hikari was reminded how hungry she was. “I guess in all this commotion I forgot we needed to find some food.”
Ace just laughed and he shook his head. “Sometimes I wonder which is louder, your big mouth or your hungry stomach.” With that said, Ace and Hikari walked away into the darkness while the sun slowly set.
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