[CJ] Trading with my Personal Sensei

[Yuse]

Alrighty, lets get to business.

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Suiton: (Kureopatora yūwaku-teki shison) — Water Release: Cleopatra's Seductive Offspring
Type: Supplementary/Defensive
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (-10 for every turn active)
Damage Points: 20 (per attack)
Description: The user will focus his suiton chakra to create a sentient creature composed of water, whose appearance is always a feline, most commonly a lion. The creature is sentient due to being linked to the users chakra. The creature regardless of its form will always have a light misty blue coloration and the creature's size can vary depending on the users wishes, but at most can be slightly larger then the user. The creature upon being created can passively release a mist from its body covering that of long range and continues to do so whenever there is a lack of mist. The mist itself is equivalent to the cannon D-rank version ( Meaning Byakugan can see through it). It is used well in conjunction with the creatures special ability. The creature has the ability to disperse itself into mist and merge with any existing mist in the area and travel through it at the speed of a kunai. Able to reform part of its body or its entire being at anytime to attack a target. Its body due to its feline characteristics will always have a sharp property meaning its attacks consist of sharp slashes and bites although the slashes can not tear off a limb or pierce deeply into flesh and muscle. While it is traveling through the mist it is extremely hard to locate due to it being made of mist itself, even fooling chakra sensory and doujutsu due to being composed of the same chakra as the mist it released or any mist it merges with due to them both being composed of suiton chakra.

Note: Lasts three turns
Note: Can only be used twice
Note: Can not be used in consecutive turns
Note: Having the creature release mist from its body upon creation costs an additional move
Note: Can only be taught by Yusei

Explain, and ask any questions u-u

 

[Sharingdork]

Why does it only do 20 damage? :|

So, you draw a water cat out of the water (can be any kind of cat, your choice), and then the cat acts as it wishes (which, in RP terms, means it does what you want). The cat constantly (if you want, which you probably do) emits mist as if he just got out of the sauna, creating a constant Hidden in Mist Technique. He can then meld with the mist (or any mist) and move about like a kunai, reforming to strike whilst also being invisible to both eyes and sensors because he has the same chakra as the mist, just like my B-rank technique (which has more damage points than this <.<). It looks like creating the mist counts as a technique, but melding with mist as well as attacking does not.

Aside from what I asked before, I guess my only real question is why is this classified as defensive? Also, may as well ask, when it attacks does it have to reform into it's water state, or does it remain like "sharp mist"?

 

[Yuse]

Why does it only do 20 damage? :|

So, you draw a water cat out of the water (can be any kind of cat, your choice), and then the cat acts as it wishes (which, in RP terms, means it does what you want). The cat constantly (if you want, which you probably do) emits mist as if he just got out of the sauna, creating a constant Hidden in Mist Technique. He can then meld with the mist (or any mist) and move about like a kunai, reforming to strike whilst also being invisible to both eyes and sensors because he has the same chakra as the mist, just like my B-rank technique (which has more damage points than this <.<). It looks like creating the mist counts as a technique, but melding with mist as well as attacking does not.

Aside from what I asked before, I guess my only real question is why is this classified as defensive? Also, may as well ask, when it attacks does it have to reform into it's water state, or does it remain like "sharp mist"?

Alright before anything I need to address this defensive issue, that was one hell of a typo (I'll ask pervy if he can edit it) >.>. Hmm You are right about it releasing mist from its body, upon creation of the technique you can choose whether to have it release the mist or not. This costs a move initially, but spewing out mist from its body from that point on wards when there is a lack of mist is passive, not requiring a move. Also keep in mind the technique states any pre-existing mist, that includes natural mist. Of course if the feline were to merge with a natural mist they would simply be invisible to normal eyes, whilst doujutsu and sensory would pick up the chakra within the natural mist. Indeed the "initial" release of mist from the felines body counts as a move, merging and attacking does not.

As for your two questions. Well the reason the attack power is so low is the difficulty of countering. However keep in mind attacking does not cost a move thus you can virtually attack many times, with each attack doing 20 damage points. Apply a boost to it and you got yourself something dangerous. Also despite the relatively weak attack power, one would only need to get one swift slash across the eyes or throat to do some real damage. Now for your final question, it forms back into its water state. While merged with the mist it has no form. Its best to usually have it reform a single limb to attack with, as if the opponent manages to destroy it the rest of the body will be mist and thus unaffected.

Now, lemme learn that Mist technique of yours and make my day ;-;

 

[Sharingdork]

Cool technique. However, I can't give you that one - here are two others, though:

Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: After weaving the required handseals, the user will then focus their raiton chakra into their palm, using shape manipulation to create three tomoe's of lightning, connected in a triangular formation by smaller bolts of lightning. The user will then throw the triangle in a simmilar fashion to how Naruto throws the Rasenshuriken in Sage Mode. When the triangle makes contact with another object, it will errupt into a pillar of lightning one foot in diameter, streatching into the heavens.
Note: ~Can only be used twice per battle
~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

Okay, so you make your handseals. You form a triangle of lightning with tomoe at each of the corners. You throw it. It hits something. The triangle becomes a somewhat thin pillar that stretches infinitely upwards. It's one of my first techniques, so its not that great, but hey. Lightning.

Rank: C-Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A (depends on jutsu)
Chakra Cost: N/A (+10 to the new rank's chakra cost)
Damage Points: +5 to the new rank's damage (+5 to user for C-A; +10 to user for S-rank)
Description: The user, after forming the handseals for a lightning release ninjutsu, will then add a final handseal (unique from the common 12) and raise their dominant hand to the sky, heavily charging it with negativly charged Raiton chakra. A bolt of natural lightning will come down from the heavens, and upon meeting the same-charge hand of the user, repel into an unfocused lightning mass for a fraction of a second. The jutsu is then completed in the same fraction of the second, and is increased by one rank (changing the rank, chakra cost, and damage points accordingly).
Note: ~The user cannot use another Raiton jutsu on the same or next turn as this jutsu is used due to strain on the user's body.
~This jutsu cannot, under any circumstances, be used on a Forbidden, or can-be-Forbidden-rank (ie. Rank: S-Forbidden) jutsu.
~This jutsu cannot be used on a jutsu that causes lightning to strike (ie. Lightning Fang or Kirin), or a jutsu that requires Raiton chakra to be focused within the user's body (ie. False Darkness Spear and False Darkness).
~Due to how close it is to his body, the Raikage's armor cannot be used with this jutsu.
~This jutsu can only be used by one of a members two bios.
~This jutsu can only be used during stormy conditions, and causes the stormy conditions to dissipate afterwards.
~This jutsu can only be used three times per battle.
~This jutsu can only be used on an S-rank (becoming a Forbidden) jutsu one time per battle, and the user cannot move for one turn afterwards, even collapsing due to the ammont of strain on their body.
~This jutsu cannot be used for at least three turns after it has been used.
~This jutsu can only be taught by Sharingdork.

This technique seems nice, but I really don't like it. For starters, you require Kirin conditions to use it. "Why not use Kirin instead?" That is a very good question, to which I have no answer.
If you do choose to use this technique, you add 1 handseal to your tech and reach your hand up to the sky. Lightning strikes your hand, and your new technique takes place immediately after the lightning strikes. Your technique is boosted one rank (can't be used on F-rank), and that's pretty much it. Can't be used on shield-types that are close to your body or anything that is channeled through your body (like the techs you spit out of your mouth). When used on S-ranks, you get heavy recoil. Read through all those restrictions and ask yourself if you're really ever going to use this. :|
Only one of your bios can use it, which is weird and is something I'd like to change (I'd love to change a lot about this, but it probably won't go through).

Now for a little fun, the inspiration for this technique was taken from something someone in the manga said. You get bonus points (which are probably worth nothing) if you can tell me what it is.

Other than that, if you have any questions, ask them now.

 

[Yuse]

Cool technique. However, I can't give you that one - here are two others, though:

Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: After weaving the required handseals, the user will then focus their raiton chakra into their palm, using shape manipulation to create three tomoe's of lightning, connected in a triangular formation by smaller bolts of lightning. The user will then throw the triangle in a simmilar fashion to how Naruto throws the Rasenshuriken in Sage Mode. When the triangle makes contact with another object, it will errupt into a pillar of lightning one foot in diameter, streatching into the heavens.
Note: ~Can only be used twice per battle
~Can only be taught by Sharingdork

Okay, so you make your handseals. You form a triangle of lightning with tomoe at each of the corners. You throw it. It hits something. The triangle becomes a somewhat thin pillar that stretches infinitely upwards. It's one of my first techniques, so its not that great, but hey. Lightning.

Rank: C-Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A (depends on jutsu)
Chakra Cost: N/A (+10 to the new rank's chakra cost)
Damage Points: +5 to the new rank's damage (+5 to user for C-A; +10 to user for S-rank)
Description: The user, after forming the handseals for a lightning release ninjutsu, will then add a final handseal (unique from the common 12) and raise their dominant hand to the sky, heavily charging it with negativly charged Raiton chakra. A bolt of natural lightning will come down from the heavens, and upon meeting the same-charge hand of the user, repel into an unfocused lightning mass for a fraction of a second. The jutsu is then completed in the same fraction of the second, and is increased by one rank (changing the rank, chakra cost, and damage points accordingly).
Note: ~The user cannot use another Raiton jutsu on the same or next turn as this jutsu is used due to strain on the user's body.
~This jutsu cannot, under any circumstances, be used on a Forbidden, or can-be-Forbidden-rank (ie. Rank: S-Forbidden) jutsu.
~This jutsu cannot be used on a jutsu that causes lightning to strike (ie. Lightning Fang or Kirin), or a jutsu that requires Raiton chakra to be focused within the user's body (ie. False Darkness Spear and False Darkness).
~Due to how close it is to his body, the Raikage's armor cannot be used with this jutsu.
~This jutsu can only be used by one of a members two bios.
~This jutsu can only be used during stormy conditions, and causes the stormy conditions to dissipate afterwards.
~This jutsu can only be used three times per battle.
~This jutsu can only be used on an S-rank (becoming a Forbidden) jutsu one time per battle, and the user cannot move for one turn afterwards, even collapsing due to the ammont of strain on their body.
~This jutsu cannot be used for at least three turns after it has been used.
~This jutsu can only be taught by Sharingdork.

This technique seems nice, but I really don't like it. For starters, you require Kirin conditions to use it. "Why not use Kirin instead?" That is a very good question, to which I have no answer.
If you do choose to use this technique, you add 1 handseal to your tech and reach your hand up to the sky. Lightning strikes your hand, and your new technique takes place immediately after the lightning strikes. Your technique is boosted one rank (can't be used on F-rank), and that's pretty much it. Can't be used on shield-types that are close to your body or anything that is channeled through your body (like the techs you spit out of your mouth). When used on S-ranks, you get heavy recoil. Read through all those restrictions and ask yourself if you're really ever going to use this. :|
Only one of your bios can use it, which is weird and is something I'd like to change (I'd love to change a lot about this, but it probably won't go through).

Now for a little fun, the inspiration for this technique was taken from something someone in the manga said. You get bonus points (which are probably worth nothing) if you can tell me what it is.

Other than that, if you have any questions, ask them now.

Alright the first technique is pretty simple in nature, I focus my lightning chakra and using shape manipulation create 3 tomoe of lightning linked by smaller bolts of lightning. I then throw it towards my target and upon contact it envelops the target in a pillar of lightning that stretches upwards with no real limit. Now I'm pretty sure that's how it works, but I want to clarify that upon contact the jutsu envelops them in the pillar and not say rips through them and then erupts into a pillar. Despite the simplicity of it I think that latter part of it stretching upwards with no real limit has potential to counter attacks in the sky. Simply aim towards the ground (a safe distance away from the user of course) and once making contact with the ground it will erupt and intercept the target in the sky. "It's one of my first techniques, so its not that great, but hey. Lightning." You are quite the Sales man Dork >.>

Alright as for Natural Lightning Enhancement I like the technique a lot. Using Natural Lightning via a handseal after a lightning technique to bring down a bolt that strengthens the technique by a rank ( nothing from the body) Now you brought up a lot of points of why I shouldn't like it, again, one hell of a sales man Dork :| Nonetheless the whole one bio thing doesn't make much of a difference as I have a tendency to only really use one bio, regardless of having two. Now the only thing I hate about this is the fact that I need storm conditions, I mean I understand the whole natural lightning concept but it bothers me a lot z.z. As for you thinking those changes wont go through, I can guarantee they will this is ...... way to restricted. Anyone's Ill talk to you on skype about possible changes you could make, with Scorps logging in every now and then we might have a chance of making this as awesome as it should be.

Was it Zetsu, talking about the speed of natural lightning while watching Sasuke and Itachi fight?

 

[Sharingdork]

Yeah, it was Zetsu. But the conversation kind of went like this, as Sasuke was making his Chidori right before Kirin:
"What technique is Sasuke using now? Chidori?"
"It doesn't matter - it's going to be empowered by Natural Lightning, so it'll be stronger than normal."

Basically, Black Zetsu implied that this technique is an innate ability for Lightning Specialists, but now it's copyrighted in this technique. I think he also implied that it wouldn't cost him chakra because it was natural lightning.

Anywho, unless there's anything else you think should be done, I believe we're finished.

 

[Yuse]

Yeah, it was Zetsu. But the conversation kind of went like this, as Sasuke was making his Chidori right before Kirin:
"What technique is Sasuke using now? Chidori?"
"It doesn't matter - it's going to be empowered by Natural Lightning, so it'll be stronger than normal."

Basically, Black Zetsu implied that this technique is an innate ability for Lightning Specialists, but now it's copyrighted in this technique. I think he also implied that it wouldn't cost him chakra because it was natural lightning.

Anywho, unless there's anything else you think should be done, I believe we're finished.

No more question, unless you want to teach me more. I never turn down knowledge, especially not when the word customs is involved.