Guys it may be a bit long and have a few errors hear and there but it is technically a different version of one piece. It has the same story background about pirates going into great pirate age, but apart from that there is nothing else similar. I just started the story and am not close to finishing it, can you guys tell me if I should continue or star anew. Please and Thanks. 
The Start of Adventure
By: Shan D.
The Coffin
The rain poured down on the never ending river stream. The thunder boomed louder than anything ever heard. The river was overflowing and flooding the area around the river. In the river there was a boat no bigger than a canoe, bobbing up and down in the the wild river. There were 3 people, 2 holding a coffin. The coffin top was painted a pirate sign on it. The pirate sign was blue and had two guns instead of bones. The skull was grinning while holding a cigar in its mouth. The two men lifted the coffin ready to throw it into the river. One of the them made a cross sign with his left hand.
“Rest in peace Pirate of all seas.”
Then with those words they dropped the coffin into the river. The thunder boomed in union of the splash of the coffin. The coffin bobbed along in a river with no end in sight. As the two men paddled their boat in the wild river back to a ship anchored in the distance.
Aron
The sea churned slowly and calmly, as the morning sun was shining off of it. The sea was peaceful and was very quiet, nothing made a noise except the seagulls that honked at something in the sea. There was no one to see this but two sailors on a pirate ship scouting for marines and other pirate ships. The two sailors who saw this were called Grivous and Grivous. Their names were spelled the same but were pronounced differently. The second Grivous was pronounced Gryvous but apart from the different pronouncing they were absolutely the same in everything else. From same black shoes to black pants and golden shirts with black pirate hats to top it all off. They both wore a golden pirate sign in the back of the black t-shirts. The pirate ship they were on was a pitch black ship with no detail expt in front of the ship where it showed a mermaid stuck to the front, but the mermaid had no head.
“Uhhhhhh,there is nothing special today,” Grivous said.
“Yeah, no-,” Gryvous was about to say until he saw the coffin bobbing in the ship's direction. “Look, Look there something in the sea,” Gryvous said in excitement.
The two men swimed to the coffin and put it in the the ship like there was nobody inside.When they brought the coffin on board the crew mates all looked and observed at the new object.
“Hmm, the coffin was very light like there was nothing in there. Might be a fool's coffin,”Grivous improvised. A fool's coffin was a coffin in which there was nothing in there but a dead animal like a perret or a dog. It was called a fool's coffin because if you found a coffin of a very important pirate you could turn his head into the bounty and get a fortune, but if you found a coffin of a dead animal it will do nothing but stink up your pirate ship.
“It could be treasure or gold,” Gryvous said, “Let's just open it and find out now,”
“Gold is treasure,” Grivous said completely ignoring Gryvous comment on opening it now. “Help me get this down to captain he might be happy if this isn't a fool's coffin and telling from the pirate sign labeled on it this coffin will get us lots of money. The crew members that were watching all left at the thought of more work. Leaving Grivous and Gryvous to carry the coffin down to captain. When they reached the lower deck it seemed more golden than usual as Captain Gold Digger sat in his chair made of gold. The captain looked at them and at the coffin.
“What have you brought me now my crew man. Another false box full of treasure.” Captain Gold Digger mused.
“N-no Captain Gold Digger. We brought a coffin. It must be full of gold and treasure,” Gryvous stuttered.
“Gold and Treasure. Their the same thing you buffon. And coffins don't hold gold you moron there must be a dead body inside. I have nothing to do with dead bodies; throw it back to sea,” Gold Digger commanded.
“But captain look at the pirate sign it has its from the Hot Shot Pirates,”Grivous whimpered out desperate not to look like a retard in front of the captain's best crew men.There was a long silence. Grivous thought he spoke out of turn and was about to excuse himself and leave the captain.
“Hmmm,really,” Captain Gold Digger finally said. “If that's the case, fine then, open it. We might find some money from the pirate group. Open it then, we might have hit the mother load.
“Aye captain,” both Grivous and Gryvous said. When pirate one and two started opening the lid-.
“YEAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. Wakin up,” said a boy who rose out from the coffin. The pirates Gold Digger were in shock from the 14 year old boy with a blue t-shirt with a red, no sleeve jacket and and brown shorts, and to end it he had white socks with peach colored sandals. The boy had really messy black hair that matched his black necklace. The boy had also a black ring with red words spelling “[FONT="]Pirate Captain[/FONT][FONT="]” [/FONT] When the boy opened his blue colored eyes the first thing he said was “Oy were the pirate Stream”
Captain Gold Digger looked at him in shock.What could this little nobody of a boy know about the pirate stream and more over why did the boy want to such a dark area.
“The pirate stream. The pathway to the biggest treasure in all the world,” the boy told the captain just in case the captain didn't know were it was or what it was.
“I know what it is, but the bigger question is who are you and why would you want to go to a place like that. The chances of finding the treasure is almost impossible. There are too many marines, and bounty hunters there boy,”the Captain scolded eager to hear the boy's reason for such a stupid task.
“You say to much gramps I don't need your troubles on me. Because I will become the number one pirate of all the 7 seas and find the treasure. Cause I’m ARON M. LESTOR the future pirate of all seas,” Aron shouted out so the whole ship could hear his name. There was an awkward moment then laughter. The crew behind the captain started laughing so hard they all fell on the ground holding their stomachs like what Aron said was a crude joke. Everyone laughed except the Grivous and Aron. Grivous looked at the boy who still had his feet in the coffin, and remembered his dreams to be the pirate of all seas and was reduced to be a lowly pirate of the Gold Diggers.
“You, Pirate of ALL sea is absurd and stupid,” the Captain Gold Digger exclaimed “ha what a joke.” Aron then started laughing loud and bold. “What are you laughing about,” The Captain asked clearly belweder.
“Your crew, your face, and this so called pirate ship,”Aron said while laughing. Then he said darkly, “[FONT="]No one gets away with criticizing my goal and doesn't get a good beating, NO ONE[/FONT].” The whole crew felt a dangerous gust of wind flow into the deck.
“You think you're so tough, Aron well then how tough are you against this,” The captain exclaimed, and the crew around him all attacked. As Gryvous got started unveiling his knife Aron immediately backflipped out of the coffin and then hit Gryvous in the neck with his hand which knocked him out cold. Grivous immediately moved back but not fast enough Aron charged and punched grivous ten times in the chest before he could block or even say a word. After doing that he then changes position toward the crew coming toward him. He then runs into the crew running toward him. There were about fifteen of them each bigger than the one in front. Aron was outnumbered 15 to 1 but despite that Aron ran in jumped onto the side of one's head so quick in a motion that would snap a neck then slammed his other leg down on someone with force that would crack it. The boy did crazy acrobatics on the crews head so quickly anyone would think the wind was guiding him. In a matter of seconds everyone was out cold but none of them were killed.Aron looked at the captain next with cold blue eyes.
“Captain you're too weak you won't last a second against me,”Aron said coldly. At this point the captain was astonished at the boys power. Not giving a care about his situation he asked the boy.
“How did you defeat them all. No boy at your age can do something as insane as what you did,” the captain asked.
Aron smiled, “I eat the angels curse witch gave me the ability to control the air around me.I think.”
“Then let's put that to test Aron,” the captain said as more men from above came rushing down to take on Aron.
“Their weak,” Aron said then stifled a yawn.
“Watu,Watu, Shotgun!!!!!!!!!!!!” Aron shouted. He shaped his right hand into a gun shape then put his left hand over it then-. A huge bang happened and huge force push right off of Aron’s hand was sent toward the whole crew coming down which scattered the crew and shredded the ones in front.the whole crew that was coming down was defeated. When Aron turned back to face the captain, the captain was shocked at how Aron took his entire crew in a matter of seconds. At this point Grivous who was only punched was able to crawl all the way to the captain.
“Please captain save me he is going to kill me next,” Grivous begged.
“Yeah sure,” the captain said as he lifted grivous up and made him a human shield. Grivous knew what the Captain was doing he was making him a shield so the enemy would pierce him giving the captain enough time to attack the enemy while the weapon the enemy was using was stuck in the shield.Grivous knew it was over his death was now.
“[FONT="]You evil son of a *****[/FONT],” Aron said darkly. “How dare you use your own crew man as your, your, shield,” Aron said madly. “You will surely [FONT="]DIE[/FONT].” Before The captain could move, Aron said the lines, “WATU,WATU” and finished it off with “PUNCHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” and a gust of wind came out from his punch and straight for the captain but went around the human shield and hit the captain really hard that his jaw busted out and his head shaped a punch mark.The captain was out cold and the human shield was saved. Grivous couldn't believe the boy, a boy his age doing something out of the ordinary, something god like. The boy was angle in Grivous’s eyes.
“Hey you what are you useful at,”Aron said slowly sitting down.
“I-I’m a just a cleaner,why do you ask,” Grivous asked clearly scared yet joyful.
“No, what are you really good at not your job at this place,” Aron said now slowly laying down.
“I am,uh, sorta smart why do you ask,” Grivous asked again unsure if that was right choice.
“Huh a smart cleaner,” Aron wondered as he now was laying on the deck almost closing his eyes. “Lemme check if I have a ring for that,”Aron said, now with his hands in his right pocket but couldn't find anything. “AHHHHH my rings,” Aron shouted as he got back up checked his pockets then back into the coffin. Relief passed threw his face as he pulled out a brown pouch witch looked stained. He then unzipped it and shuffled through the few rings in there and took one out that said “Informationist” and then threw it to Grivous. “I need you join my crew cause you have nowhere else to go I asume, you can decide to come with me or not,” Aron said as he zipped the pouch and layed down to sleep, “when i wake you’ll have to decide then.” The whole deck was quiet with no snores at all. Aron was not making a sound like he was dead. There was no sound but the shaking of Grivous.
The Start of Adventure
By: Shan D.
The Coffin
The rain poured down on the never ending river stream. The thunder boomed louder than anything ever heard. The river was overflowing and flooding the area around the river. In the river there was a boat no bigger than a canoe, bobbing up and down in the the wild river. There were 3 people, 2 holding a coffin. The coffin top was painted a pirate sign on it. The pirate sign was blue and had two guns instead of bones. The skull was grinning while holding a cigar in its mouth. The two men lifted the coffin ready to throw it into the river. One of the them made a cross sign with his left hand.
“Rest in peace Pirate of all seas.”
Then with those words they dropped the coffin into the river. The thunder boomed in union of the splash of the coffin. The coffin bobbed along in a river with no end in sight. As the two men paddled their boat in the wild river back to a ship anchored in the distance.
Aron
The sea churned slowly and calmly, as the morning sun was shining off of it. The sea was peaceful and was very quiet, nothing made a noise except the seagulls that honked at something in the sea. There was no one to see this but two sailors on a pirate ship scouting for marines and other pirate ships. The two sailors who saw this were called Grivous and Grivous. Their names were spelled the same but were pronounced differently. The second Grivous was pronounced Gryvous but apart from the different pronouncing they were absolutely the same in everything else. From same black shoes to black pants and golden shirts with black pirate hats to top it all off. They both wore a golden pirate sign in the back of the black t-shirts. The pirate ship they were on was a pitch black ship with no detail expt in front of the ship where it showed a mermaid stuck to the front, but the mermaid had no head.
“Uhhhhhh,there is nothing special today,” Grivous said.
“Yeah, no-,” Gryvous was about to say until he saw the coffin bobbing in the ship's direction. “Look, Look there something in the sea,” Gryvous said in excitement.
The two men swimed to the coffin and put it in the the ship like there was nobody inside.When they brought the coffin on board the crew mates all looked and observed at the new object.
“Hmm, the coffin was very light like there was nothing in there. Might be a fool's coffin,”Grivous improvised. A fool's coffin was a coffin in which there was nothing in there but a dead animal like a perret or a dog. It was called a fool's coffin because if you found a coffin of a very important pirate you could turn his head into the bounty and get a fortune, but if you found a coffin of a dead animal it will do nothing but stink up your pirate ship.
“It could be treasure or gold,” Gryvous said, “Let's just open it and find out now,”
“Gold is treasure,” Grivous said completely ignoring Gryvous comment on opening it now. “Help me get this down to captain he might be happy if this isn't a fool's coffin and telling from the pirate sign labeled on it this coffin will get us lots of money. The crew members that were watching all left at the thought of more work. Leaving Grivous and Gryvous to carry the coffin down to captain. When they reached the lower deck it seemed more golden than usual as Captain Gold Digger sat in his chair made of gold. The captain looked at them and at the coffin.
“What have you brought me now my crew man. Another false box full of treasure.” Captain Gold Digger mused.
“N-no Captain Gold Digger. We brought a coffin. It must be full of gold and treasure,” Gryvous stuttered.
“Gold and Treasure. Their the same thing you buffon. And coffins don't hold gold you moron there must be a dead body inside. I have nothing to do with dead bodies; throw it back to sea,” Gold Digger commanded.
“But captain look at the pirate sign it has its from the Hot Shot Pirates,”Grivous whimpered out desperate not to look like a retard in front of the captain's best crew men.There was a long silence. Grivous thought he spoke out of turn and was about to excuse himself and leave the captain.
“Hmmm,really,” Captain Gold Digger finally said. “If that's the case, fine then, open it. We might find some money from the pirate group. Open it then, we might have hit the mother load.
“Aye captain,” both Grivous and Gryvous said. When pirate one and two started opening the lid-.
“YEAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. Wakin up,” said a boy who rose out from the coffin. The pirates Gold Digger were in shock from the 14 year old boy with a blue t-shirt with a red, no sleeve jacket and and brown shorts, and to end it he had white socks with peach colored sandals. The boy had really messy black hair that matched his black necklace. The boy had also a black ring with red words spelling “[FONT="]Pirate Captain[/FONT][FONT="]” [/FONT] When the boy opened his blue colored eyes the first thing he said was “Oy were the pirate Stream”
Captain Gold Digger looked at him in shock.What could this little nobody of a boy know about the pirate stream and more over why did the boy want to such a dark area.
“The pirate stream. The pathway to the biggest treasure in all the world,” the boy told the captain just in case the captain didn't know were it was or what it was.
“I know what it is, but the bigger question is who are you and why would you want to go to a place like that. The chances of finding the treasure is almost impossible. There are too many marines, and bounty hunters there boy,”the Captain scolded eager to hear the boy's reason for such a stupid task.
“You say to much gramps I don't need your troubles on me. Because I will become the number one pirate of all the 7 seas and find the treasure. Cause I’m ARON M. LESTOR the future pirate of all seas,” Aron shouted out so the whole ship could hear his name. There was an awkward moment then laughter. The crew behind the captain started laughing so hard they all fell on the ground holding their stomachs like what Aron said was a crude joke. Everyone laughed except the Grivous and Aron. Grivous looked at the boy who still had his feet in the coffin, and remembered his dreams to be the pirate of all seas and was reduced to be a lowly pirate of the Gold Diggers.
“You, Pirate of ALL sea is absurd and stupid,” the Captain Gold Digger exclaimed “ha what a joke.” Aron then started laughing loud and bold. “What are you laughing about,” The Captain asked clearly belweder.
“Your crew, your face, and this so called pirate ship,”Aron said while laughing. Then he said darkly, “[FONT="]No one gets away with criticizing my goal and doesn't get a good beating, NO ONE[/FONT].” The whole crew felt a dangerous gust of wind flow into the deck.
“You think you're so tough, Aron well then how tough are you against this,” The captain exclaimed, and the crew around him all attacked. As Gryvous got started unveiling his knife Aron immediately backflipped out of the coffin and then hit Gryvous in the neck with his hand which knocked him out cold. Grivous immediately moved back but not fast enough Aron charged and punched grivous ten times in the chest before he could block or even say a word. After doing that he then changes position toward the crew coming toward him. He then runs into the crew running toward him. There were about fifteen of them each bigger than the one in front. Aron was outnumbered 15 to 1 but despite that Aron ran in jumped onto the side of one's head so quick in a motion that would snap a neck then slammed his other leg down on someone with force that would crack it. The boy did crazy acrobatics on the crews head so quickly anyone would think the wind was guiding him. In a matter of seconds everyone was out cold but none of them were killed.Aron looked at the captain next with cold blue eyes.
“Captain you're too weak you won't last a second against me,”Aron said coldly. At this point the captain was astonished at the boys power. Not giving a care about his situation he asked the boy.
“How did you defeat them all. No boy at your age can do something as insane as what you did,” the captain asked.
Aron smiled, “I eat the angels curse witch gave me the ability to control the air around me.I think.”
“Then let's put that to test Aron,” the captain said as more men from above came rushing down to take on Aron.
“Their weak,” Aron said then stifled a yawn.
“Watu,Watu, Shotgun!!!!!!!!!!!!” Aron shouted. He shaped his right hand into a gun shape then put his left hand over it then-. A huge bang happened and huge force push right off of Aron’s hand was sent toward the whole crew coming down which scattered the crew and shredded the ones in front.the whole crew that was coming down was defeated. When Aron turned back to face the captain, the captain was shocked at how Aron took his entire crew in a matter of seconds. At this point Grivous who was only punched was able to crawl all the way to the captain.
“Please captain save me he is going to kill me next,” Grivous begged.
“Yeah sure,” the captain said as he lifted grivous up and made him a human shield. Grivous knew what the Captain was doing he was making him a shield so the enemy would pierce him giving the captain enough time to attack the enemy while the weapon the enemy was using was stuck in the shield.Grivous knew it was over his death was now.
“[FONT="]You evil son of a *****[/FONT],” Aron said darkly. “How dare you use your own crew man as your, your, shield,” Aron said madly. “You will surely [FONT="]DIE[/FONT].” Before The captain could move, Aron said the lines, “WATU,WATU” and finished it off with “PUNCHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” and a gust of wind came out from his punch and straight for the captain but went around the human shield and hit the captain really hard that his jaw busted out and his head shaped a punch mark.The captain was out cold and the human shield was saved. Grivous couldn't believe the boy, a boy his age doing something out of the ordinary, something god like. The boy was angle in Grivous’s eyes.
“Hey you what are you useful at,”Aron said slowly sitting down.
“I-I’m a just a cleaner,why do you ask,” Grivous asked clearly scared yet joyful.
“No, what are you really good at not your job at this place,” Aron said now slowly laying down.
“I am,uh, sorta smart why do you ask,” Grivous asked again unsure if that was right choice.
“Huh a smart cleaner,” Aron wondered as he now was laying on the deck almost closing his eyes. “Lemme check if I have a ring for that,”Aron said, now with his hands in his right pocket but couldn't find anything. “AHHHHH my rings,” Aron shouted as he got back up checked his pockets then back into the coffin. Relief passed threw his face as he pulled out a brown pouch witch looked stained. He then unzipped it and shuffled through the few rings in there and took one out that said “Informationist” and then threw it to Grivous. “I need you join my crew cause you have nowhere else to go I asume, you can decide to come with me or not,” Aron said as he zipped the pouch and layed down to sleep, “when i wake you’ll have to decide then.” The whole deck was quiet with no snores at all. Aron was not making a sound like he was dead. There was no sound but the shaking of Grivous.
