the rise of the uzumaki dynasty ch1 ( fan flick)

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forgive me for any spelling or grammer my first fan flick

Ch1 life hangs by a thread

4 weeks after the war naruto still in a coma from over using his chakara the 3 remaining kage A,garra and mei argue over new border lines for villages how other countries will help out and if the damiyo would agree

A: enough ive haded you all just sat on your asses while thousands died for their will to be free
damiyo of lightning: come now A we were dicussing on the new borders of the countries due to being hardly any villages left
damiyo of fire: yes and the goals both human and money to be weighed in
garra: what is wrong with you can you see we need to stand togather not make borders why now when everyone is accoustumed to eachother why are you willing put the old system back
mei: i agree if there should be more people like akatsuki we must stand together
Medical nin: EVERY ONE come quickly
everyone: what!
Medical nin: naruto sama hi-his body is failing him
A : what going on
garra: na naruto n-n-n no
*everyone runs to the medical were naruto is put on live support many nin are trying to use every medical jutsu there is *
med nin 1 : no come on breath
med nin 2 : the hearts slowing
med nin 3 : damn it come on pull thourgh
Sakura: noo! come on
*Sasuke rushes into the room*
sasuke: whats happining
sakura: he is dying
* the rest of kohana 11 arrives *
hinata: na naruto kun *she screams* trying to rush to him
* everyone pulls her back*
med nin: please everyone leave now
*4 hours later *
med nin walks in
hinata: how is he
med nin: he breathing again but he far from outta of the woods if does this again he'll die permenantly
everyone gasps
sasuke: is there anything we can do
med nin: yes belive in him he is in a battle for his life
hinata: can i stay and help
med nin: i do not see why you can't but there is little you can do for his condition
hinata: i know
*everyone else leaves*
*hinata goes over to naruto and places her hand on his*
hinata: if you come out of this i will be there waiting

will naruto live,why are damiyo acting like a the old ways are better and what will everyone else do. come back in the next 48 hours to find out
 

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You were the first to post in your own fanfic stating that you knew it sucked but I don't think so in my opinion. Yes, it definitely contained incorrect grammar/spelling. Simply be sure to double check your work before you post. I like so far where this plot is going though it is still to early to tell where exactly. I loved the fact that you incorporated Sasuke somehow into your story and he seems to have changed for the better! :D Looking forward to the next chapter! ;)
 
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