The Rise of Killick [part 2]

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The Rise of Killick
The Path of Revenge

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Heres part one for those who want to read




Killick began to stir, awakening after what seemed a lifetime. He'd lay in horror living his worst nightmare, the death of his parents. Relieved to be able to wake he began to open his eyes slowly, as the light hurt. He began to sit up straight trying to look around, but the scene was still blury due to the light.​

Maxi: Killick, killick, you're awake!
Killick: Wha...
Trey: What happened? The last thing we saw was you leaping through the village.
Killick: What are you guys on about, that was just a bad dream...


Suddenly killicks eyes became alert of his surroundings and he could see propperly. He was sat on a mat that he had been placed on after he passed out. In a shock of horror he realised that his nightmare was reality. He head whipped around quickly seeing many injured lay around him, then looking over in the distance saw white clothes covering the shapeds of bodies, which he realised were the people that had died.​


killick: Mother... Father...
Trey: Killick, we are sorry, by the time we got to you it was too late...
Maxi: We tried to help your father but he was too badly injured...
Trey: By the time we found your mother there was nothing we could do...


Horror struck killick as it all hit him... his father dying for him, hearing that his mother was dead... the village being mostly destroyed... his head began to throb as his heart beat faster and harder. He gripped his chest in pain. Maxi put one hand on killicks back and his chest pushing him downward slowly.​


Maxi: Lie down, calm down, breathe...
Killick: What about everyone else...
Trey: My parents were out of the village on business and Maxi's dad hid with his mother in their underground basement. They went to your house first but your mother was gone and your father told them to get to safety saying he would find her.
Maxi: Hey killick, what happened to you... the last time we saw you, you were dashing off into the village and then the next thing we know, your unconcious next to an enermy ninja.


Killick began to recount the story of his father saving him, and how he remembers his emotions but wasnt quite sure of what happened.​


Maxi: The shop keeper said that you grew chakra like wings made from pure chakra... but i thought that only happened when you took the red pill...
Killick: It does, well so my father told me, i honestly dont know what happened...
Trey: Wow thats insane...
Killick: Were you guys hurt? How is everyone?
Maxi: We are fine, by the time we got to where you were, the main enermy had left the village and the ones that remained had been beaten by the konoha ninja that tracked them here...
Killick: Why were konoha ninja here? Why did they attack us? My father said they were looking for someone, but who?
Trey:We don't know, no one will tell us, though one of the konoha ninja wants to speak with you, when you are feeling well...


Killick lay and rested for a while trying to regain his strength, while he took in everything that had happened. Who could Orochimaru be looking for? And why would they come here? Who would want to speak to me about it? Why were the konoha ninja here too? After an hour or so, killick ate some bread and soup then got up and headed to the tent outside the village that the konoha ninja had set up. There were 2 guards stood outside.​


Guard 1: Who are you, what business do you have here?
Killick: My name is killick... killick... akimichi...
Guard 1: Oh, sorry for my rudeness, im glad you've come, come inside, someones waiting to meet you.


Killick followed the guard into the tent which was split up into rooms, 2 on the left, 2 on the right, and one at the end, though he couldn't see into any of them. The guard led him to the room at the end and motioned him to enter alone.​


Guard 1: Good luck, if you need anything, give me a shout.


The guard walked back to the entrance and stood guard like before. Killick lifted the cloth to enter the room, to see one man stood in front of the fire. As he entered the man turned around to face him....

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Choza: Hello, im Choza akimichi...
Killick: You're... you are the leader of the Akimichi clan of konoha... what would you want with me...?


Killick was shocked almost speachless. He couldn't understand why the head of the akimichi clan had wanted to speak with him.​


Choza: I was once a good friend of your fathers, and also his brother...
Killick: Brother.... but that means....
Choza: Yes, im your uncle...
Killick: If your my uncle why didn't my father ever mention you? Why did he leave the village? And why were we attacked?!?!


Hundreds of questions began to flow through killicks mind as he recalled everything that had happened. He wanted answers, he wanted revenge.​


Choza: Your father had his reasons, which i will tell you when you're older. But as for the attack. Orochimaru is looking for your fathers best friend, Yoshimitzu nara.
Killick: Yoshimitzu.... but he became a samurai long ago in the land of iron... he used to live here when i was a kid... why would orochimaru want him?
Choza: Because he knows the secret to the akimichi pills and the power they contain...
Killick: But... why now? Why are you here? Why didn't my father tell me anything about all this?
Choza: To protect you...


Next time: A fathers dying wish


Meh... wasnt too good i guess...
 

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The length is just fine, bro. :)pwes!) Well, Orochimaru's search for the secret pill is just boring*sigh* think of something more intense!:D Or, you're saving that for the best part ha? ^_^ So far so good, really!!!:)

What hit me just so in this chapter is that Killick is an Akimichi and he aint fat! Hehehe, at least that was definitely a variation. I like the chakra wings, must be same as with Chozi's, right? Only, I can imagine it looking better than Chozi's, judging from the image that you set out for Killick. Or, how about making his dragon wings, instead?O_O

Oh! I forgot to mention back in chapter 1. The bow technique is certainly amazing with that fire burning around with it!:) Keep writing, bro!:)
 

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Liked it! could have been a bit longer though, but I already said that ;).
You got no proof that I said that!
There!:p

Lmao, this chapter was a fail, but it should get better, him not being fat is why he passed out. Right after growing his wings
You always say you fail:/ Oh, I haven't consider the fact that the Akimichis being fat had something to do with their abilities? Hmm,:rolleyes: I might be able to grow butterfly wings without fainting then!xdLOL!

Well, can it be dragon wings instead of butterfly wings?:D
 
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No. The manga says butterfly wings so leave them damned butterfly wings alone, Nikkou! Jesus! xd

And that's still no proof. That could of been anyone. O_O.
 

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No. The manga says butterfly wings so leave them damned butterfly wings alone, Nikkou! Jesus! xd

And that's still no proof. That could of been anyone. O_O.
Shut up, Wes! This is FanFiction, remember? Or did you forget what fiction means?xd:p

Of anyone?O_O Someone hacked your NB account and posted that?:eek:

Go with the dragon wings, bro! Butterfly wings is just so gay. Are you going gay, Wes?OMG!!!:overjoy:
 
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