Shade Dracova
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The Rise And Fall Of The Midato
Chapter 1
Prologue
Long Ago, Back in the time before the five great ninja nations, before The Senju and Uchiha, and even before the so called creator of the Sage of Six Paths himself was born the entire world was one clan called the “ArcMosuro”. They didn’t have the jutsu or ninja we have today. They each had large sums of chakra comparable to 2000 jinchuriki today. Each and every one of them had an ocular jutsu but they didn’t understand its purpose. But besides the fact they were divided amongst each other as 2 sub clans known as “The Sharingan” and the “Byakugan”. They didn’t except each others as equals because they didn’t understand thus creating the hatred between the great five nations we know today. They didn’t bother each other but they wanted one to be the best. So they would have on and off fights.
Chapter 2
The Battle Of Brothers
One day the ruler of the village “Katsuo The Dragon Warrior” who possessed neither Kekkei Genkai was stripped when it was found he had a brother named “Midato The II”. Thus they would have to battle over power. The battle began they exchanged rapid blows. Katsuo was winning and it his final hour something special happened. His eyes change in a second and now he could see everything clearer and suddenly he felt a rush in his right arm. Wind and a blue aura spun around it creating a concentrated energy in his hand. The crowd was amazed and the elders were confused. Midato was amazed and felt a sudden rush of courage. Even his brother Katsuo was scared the battle must end and he knew Midato was coming. In one motion Midato jumped in the air and made contact with Katsuo using his energy ball and the battle was over. As he dropped to the floor dazed and barely alive his last words were “Brother I want you to name this power Rasengan, It was the name I was going to give my first son goodbye”. Then after that he stood on his chest with a smile. “Im sooo cool” Midato said.
Chapter 3
A New Life
Starting his new life as leader of the village Midato was called the Stardust Ninja in the village because of the power he possessed. But not to many people were against his throne so a few punches were thrown and a couple of deaths appeared thus starting the “First Ever ArcSuro War”. There were 5 sides Fire, Water, Wind, Earth, and Lightning. Each had thought for a new world of peace. But as Lord Midato Stated “there will never be true peace if it is forced upon people”. Lives were lost and people were injured. Lord Midato wished for the end of the war. He constructed a study on how his special power rasengan worked so he came across as the energy we know as chakra in our bodies. He constructed experiment and he found people around that time had the power to do anything so he created a series of techniques called jutsu which he used to manipulate all 5 elements but he wasn’t sure how to specially use it. He constructed experiment on his servant’s allies and even himself. During the War He met a Special Girl call Ying. It was love at first sight and they grew to have a eternal bond together and one day they gave birth to Midato’s son Midato The III. But he would later on be known as the Sage Of Six Paths.
To Be Continued
The End Of Part I
The Rise And Fall Of The Midato
Chapter 1
Prologue
Long Ago, Back in the time before the five great ninja nations, before The Senju and Uchiha, and even before the so called creator of the Sage of Six Paths himself was born the entire world was one clan called the “ArcMosuro”. They didn’t have the jutsu or ninja we have today. They each had large sums of chakra comparable to 2000 jinchuriki today. Each and every one of them had an ocular jutsu but they didn’t understand its purpose. But besides the fact they were divided amongst each other as 2 sub clans known as “The Sharingan” and the “Byakugan”. They didn’t except each others as equals because they didn’t understand thus creating the hatred between the great five nations we know today. They didn’t bother each other but they wanted one to be the best. So they would have on and off fights.
Chapter 2
The Battle Of Brothers
One day the ruler of the village “Katsuo The Dragon Warrior” who possessed neither Kekkei Genkai was stripped when it was found he had a brother named “Midato The II”. Thus they would have to battle over power. The battle began they exchanged rapid blows. Katsuo was winning and it his final hour something special happened. His eyes change in a second and now he could see everything clearer and suddenly he felt a rush in his right arm. Wind and a blue aura spun around it creating a concentrated energy in his hand. The crowd was amazed and the elders were confused. Midato was amazed and felt a sudden rush of courage. Even his brother Katsuo was scared the battle must end and he knew Midato was coming. In one motion Midato jumped in the air and made contact with Katsuo using his energy ball and the battle was over. As he dropped to the floor dazed and barely alive his last words were “Brother I want you to name this power Rasengan, It was the name I was going to give my first son goodbye”. Then after that he stood on his chest with a smile. “Im sooo cool” Midato said.
Chapter 3
A New Life
Starting his new life as leader of the village Midato was called the Stardust Ninja in the village because of the power he possessed. But not to many people were against his throne so a few punches were thrown and a couple of deaths appeared thus starting the “First Ever ArcSuro War”. There were 5 sides Fire, Water, Wind, Earth, and Lightning. Each had thought for a new world of peace. But as Lord Midato Stated “there will never be true peace if it is forced upon people”. Lives were lost and people were injured. Lord Midato wished for the end of the war. He constructed a study on how his special power rasengan worked so he came across as the energy we know as chakra in our bodies. He constructed experiment and he found people around that time had the power to do anything so he created a series of techniques called jutsu which he used to manipulate all 5 elements but he wasn’t sure how to specially use it. He constructed experiment on his servant’s allies and even himself. During the War He met a Special Girl call Ying. It was love at first sight and they grew to have a eternal bond together and one day they gave birth to Midato’s son Midato The III. But he would later on be known as the Sage Of Six Paths.
To Be Continued
The End Of Part I
