THE PAIN! (a dark poem and song)

[izinagi54]

WHY!
i feel the knife guilt and anger priece thy soul
it digs deeper like a mole
as feeling unravel
i most dabble
with the night and dark
and begin to regect light and divines

i chose my path to walk
through hell i have been
back is where i was sent
to repent
however the sky above
hold no sun
just like the huns arrows
that rain the horrors

many demons inside of me want thy soul
they can have forever more
this pain in my body
it begins to seep into the soul
forever this hell be my hole

- chris

 

[9Bijuu]

How is this a fanfiction? :/

Also, with no offence intended, merely just some criticism, it's a little over-dramatic and you're trying too hard to make it dark. Spelling and grammar could make it quite a bit better as well, it's really easy to misunderstand a lot of this when sentences break apart in grammar / meaning due to missing even a single letter.