The Orange Hokage ! Chapter 4 : Ko And jiro Are spotted

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Chapter 3 that was
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Neji: Ahh it must be really nice there in the genin team huh ? ( talking to himself )

Tenten Yes neji ? Why are you hear , are you not in the Summit of the New genins ?

Neji I was .. Busy you know

-Scene Switches to Naruto-

Naruto: Evreyone may leave . Expect the genins, Jounins of genin team , The 4 Chuunins and Daddy and Mommy

-Minato- Why you need me ?

Naruto Because i want you too stay . Anways Genins Congratulation on being genin . You will wear your Leaf village headbands out of loyalty . Never forget them . Behave and become Strong shinobi's !

Shino ( thinking) Naruto made me leader of team 7. He never forgot me

-Scene switches to Neji -

Pss , psst

Neji:Your dad ! Who is that

Ko : Is that neji ? now is my time to kill him

Next to jiro there was Two dead men . They are fodders.

Ko Hi ! Its me

Neji K,K,Ko?

Ko You Brach bastard . I have come here to kill you

Jiro:No we have not !

Tenten What ? Who are you . Oh i see Ko . Get ready to die

Jiro: Haruki should die

Neji: Tell Hokage Sama

-She rushes off fast- The summit is only five min away

5 minutes Later

Naruto You may now leave

Tenten: Hokage sama ! Two missing nins have come . Ko Hyukga and the other seems to be a Hozuki

Naruto Jonins . Leave with your genin teams .Hinata take Kei , Sasuke take Ken , Ino take shin and Haruki go with Hinata

Hinata : come on Kei Honey . And haruki come !

Naruto Shikamaru come with me . We will inform this to evreyone . Minato , Obito and Kakashi go to the situation . Dad please teleport me to the headquarters .

Minato: Go yourself you got Very good base speed and ftg itself . But anyways i take youy
1 second later naruto is at the headquarters. Minato leaves with Kakashi and obito

Shikamaru : Guys there is an important announcement

Every TV and radio is turned to News channel

Naruto There is an 2 missing Nins from a new group . They are dangerous . Do not come out and stay at home . This is your Hokages first Order!

-Scene switches to Neji -

Ko does a gentle fist on Neji's neck . Its is already bleeding .

Obito: What do you think your doing ?

kakashi Yeah !

Ko gets a sword out . All 5 elements shine on that .

Ko Die neji Die!

Minato runs and pushes neji , saving him .

Obito and Kakashi attacks Jiro

Jiro does Hydrifiction technique . Kakashi Kamui's half his body .

Straight away tenten with Kunai's stabs jiro over and over again .

Jiro Aghh craap

Tenten : No one messes with my son !

Jiro does Hydrifiction technique . His other part of his body is restored.

Kakashi Makes Raikri . He does it on Ko

Neji does 64 palms on Ko as well .

Just as his about to finish him Jiro pulls Neji from the back .Neji does 64 palms On jiro , the place where tenten hit him with the Kunai .

Obito does the Great Firball Jutsu . It finishes Ko and Burns him .

Jiro quickly turns into hydrifiction mode , takes Ko's sword and Takes the two men killed .

Kakashi : Danm he escaped .!

Obito and Kakashi do a jutsu to confirm Ko is dead .

Minato: Good work Students . Im so happy that my students have grown into strong shinobi's

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I hope you liked it
 

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You need to work on your grammar and spelling, also it sounds a lot better when you combine the words like instead of: "Who is that?" you could say, "Who's that"? It sounds more natural and realistic. Overall though an okay chapter, I'd suggest to have someone read over it before you post it to point out the mistakes.
 
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