The orange Hokage ! Chapter 3: The new Genins

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-Naruto- So Bee how does it feel like not to be Kage

Bee: great ! You know why i am not kage . Because Darui is . Konayaru Bakayaru .!

Obito: Naruto sama . If you need me on s rank missions then call me . Yeah . like a boss . I know we been enemies and that but ..

Naruto Stfu . All that is forgot . you have turned to the good side . So Obito how is your son ? Tobito i heard his name was

Obito : Fine and that

Obito has a son called tobito . He is only 7 years of age and studies in Academy ( very clever )

-Scene changed to madara -

Madara Ko and Jiro . I have a mission for you . Jiro will spy . Ko you will fight and Kill a genin . Would you do that ?

Ko Why not ?

Jiro Sure Sir .

The Villains are staying in a small hideout . Its main hideout is very near and they are just staying here

The doors Bash open

???: Finaly i have found some info on this crap

The man is wearing a Sunakagure uniform with a headscarf.

??: I will be reporting this to Gaara sama

-Madara Grr not him again . Get out guys . I will kill him . Perfect susanoo .

A big mean susanoo stand in front of the shinobi's eye . He looks terrified .
Madara's susanoo Gets his sword out and Slashes the House in two .Rubble is shaking down the man . He survives it

Madara susanoo sword slices the man in two

Madara Job done

Madara goes to the target . He takes out all the limbs ( Blood ,Liver , Heart and so on ...) . Then he eats it like a boss

Ko This Madara is so arrogant . The safehouse were in was an emergency one and he ruined it . Idiot

Yuu makes a poker face .

Yuu Dafuq did i just see

Madara : That tastes so nice!

Dai : Err , Yuck

Madara:: Now Ko and Jiro get off .

-Them two pair leave-

-scene changes to Naruto and the whole villagers 3 hours later

Naruto: Hello to all you genins, Chuunins , Jonins and err Kages .

The five Kages are there . Darui , Choujiro , Kitsuchi, Gaara, . Mei and A and Tsunade are still here . Onoki died as Madara Killed him .
Mifune is also there , as respect to the Shinobi's

Shikamru: Guys . We are going to announce the Genin and Jonin of the teams . But first of all 3 Acadamy teachers come up . And Chuunins , Kei , Ken , Haruki , Shin

Naruto I was Genin . And you know who helped me during my path to sucess . iruka sensei .

Iruka Thank you Naruto

Iruka sits back down

Naruto : Team 1 . The team is

Jonin : Lee
Ai - Tentens daughter thats 8 . Wants to Be weapon expert
Eiji - A boy that wants to master elements . He has no Dad but has a mom . Isamu Hyuga . Hanabi's Son ( She also has a daughter thats 3 years old ) He has lots of Courage . He is also a strong shinobi with excellent taijutsu

Team 7

Leader : Shino Aburame
Akira Uchiha Haruno . Sister of Ken and Son of Sakura and Sasuke . Has Pink hair . Way useful than her mother . She is good at taijutsu and Wants to become a healer like Tsunade . Tsunade says when she is Chuunin she will teach her .
Katsu Yamato . Yamato's son . Born with wood style and very kind heartead .
Kazuki - Progidy Of all and is very clever .

Team 8
Jonin leader: Aki Sarutobi . Asuma;s son and wind master . . Also knows earth .
genin : Inzuka Haru . Begginer dog user .
Icho - Was supposed to Be genin but Died for some Unknow reason . Aburame Kyo - Insect user ( Already being as strong as Shino)
Team 10
Leadear : Chouji ( Ino was busy , Shika is Naruto right hand man )
Genin : Shiko Nara ( Shikamru son and clever )
Inoka Yamanka : Shins Sister and posses Mind transfer Jutsu
Cho Akichimi . Chouji's son



Naruto: These are all the teams . They will Be called the New Konaha 11

Kushina: Woo son

Naruto: Kei hand the head bands to team 7 . Ken hand it to Team 8 . Haruki hand it to Team 1. Shin hand it to team 10 .

Kei : Blue and Black only ?

Naruto: yes . If they want any colors they can request now . Go shout it out Kei

Kei: Hello . Who wants a Pink headband ?

Akira puts her hands up . Kei gives it to her.

Kei : Anyone else wants personalised ?

None picks up hand

Kei : Oh well .

The 4 members hand out the head bands . Academy teachers are Happy and talking to the new genins

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How do you like my new chapter ?comment would be appreciated
 

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The characters feel a little OOC and the dialogue is a bit random at times. I'm sure this could turn into a great fic with some hard work and improvements in your writing along the way. So far this is an okay story with some potential, if I see the next chapter I'll check it out.
 

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Hey! That one was much better than the previous 2 imo :D you should keep it like that ;)
Nice chapter and keep up the good work :uruhara:
Thank u
The characters feel a little OOC and the dialogue is a bit random at times. I'm sure this could turn into a great fic with some hard work and improvements in your writing along the way. So far this is an okay story with some potential, if I see the next chapter I'll check it out.
Thanks for the feedback
 
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