The new school year

Sophie Ezra

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Chapter 1

The new school year

Its 7am in the Morning and the alarm goes off Naruto then reaches over and turns it off.

Hi my Name is Namikaze Naruto, & today I will be starting my first year at Konoha high School I am 13 my best friends are Uchiha Sasuke, Sai & Nara Shikamaru.

I have a Sister her name is Kaede she & is 10 and she will be starting a new year of School at Konoha Primary, with her best friend Inori but she will be going to Konoha primary. Our Mothers Name Is Kushina and our fathers name is Minato & we all live in Japan in the small city of Konoha.

Kushina: NARUTO & KAEDE you are both going to be late for your first day of School and Naruto your friends will be here any minute.

Kaede: Okay mum I will be down in a minute

Naruto: OKAY mum I will be down in a few minutes

Naruto finished getting into his high school uniform and went down stairs & Kaede was already sitting at the table eating breakfast.

Naruto: Morning mum, Morning Kaede

Kushina: Good Morning

Kaede: Good Morning Brother

Kushina: Naruto I have made yours and Kaede’s lunch but starting tomorrow Naruto I will give you money for lunch.

Naruto: okay Mum thank you where is Dad

Kaede: Mum that is so not fair

Kushina: you will be getting money twice a week Kaede and he had to go into work early today he said he would see you after school.

Naruto: okay

Kushina then gave Naruto his breakfast he then sits down at the table & starts to eat his breakfast, five mins later the door bell rings Kushina then left the kitchen to go answer the door.

Kushina: Hi Sasuke, Sai & Shikamaru oh and who else is with you

Sasuke, Sai & Shikamaru:hi Mrs Namikaze

Shikamaru: oh this is Konohamaru he is my Fathers best friends’ son, his dad asked if he could walk with us he goes the Primary school next to the high school.

Kushina: Fair enough hello Konohamaru it’s nice to meet you come in all of you Naruto is in the kitchen eating his breakfast he should be done by now. Naruto your friends are here.

Naruto: Hi Guys

Kaede: hey everyone its is good to see you all

Sai & Shikamaru: Hey Kaede & Naruto

Sasuke: Hey Kaede & Naruto, are you ready to go

Shikamaru: oh and Naruto this is Konohamaru

Naruto: Yeah I am ready, and it’s nice to meet you Konohamaru

Konohamaru: it is nice meeting you and your Mother as well

Sasuke I think we should be going now guys

Naruto: yeah your right Sasuke bye mum see you after school

Kaede: Wait for me bye mum

Kushina: Bye Naruto & Kaede

Fifteen minutes later

Konohamaru: & Kaede: see you after School everyone

Sasuke, Sai , Naruto: & Shikamaru: yeah Catch you after school we will meet right here.

Naruto along with Sasuke, Shikamaru and Sai decided it was time to go find their homeroom they then split up five mins later, Naruto found his homeroom he was the first one to arrive and not long after Sasuke followed by Sai & Shikamaru.

Sasuke Hey Naruto I guess it seems we are all in the same home room

Naruto: yeah it would seem so

Shikamaru: & Sai yeah lol

The four friends then sat down in the back row of the class room and talked until the rest of their class room, field up with alot of new faces of people none of them knew.

The Teacher then walked in

Iruka: Hi class I will be your home room teacher my name is Mr Umino I will now do roll call to see who is here.

Ino: here

Hinata: here

Sakura: here

Naruto: here

Sasuke here

Shikamaru: here

Sai: here

Choji: here

Garra: here

Kiba: here

Shino: here

Yahiko: here

Karin: Here

Konan: here

Nagato: here

Rin: here

Sora: here

Akane: here

Hikari: here

Once everyone had their names called out and they had answered, the bell rings for the first lesson everyone then checks their time table.

Iruka: I am the English teacher if you have English now stay seated if you don’t have this lesson please go to your first lesson.
Only couple of students left the room to go to their first lesson.

Iruka: I will now begin today’s lesson we will be reading this book Haruno
Sakura can you begin reading.

Sakura: Yes Mr Umino

Sakura then began reading

An hour later
Iruka: That is all the lesson is over you may go to Recess

Naruto and the others then left the classroom & went out and found a spot in the yard to sit down & eat.

Mean while Sakura, Ino & Hinata had just sat down to eat as well when Neji came over, Tenten and Rocklee were not far behind him.

Neji: hi Hinata and friends

Hinata: hi Neji Sakura & Ino this is my cousin Neji and his friends Tenten & Rocklee.

Sakura: & Ino: it is nice to meet you all

Hinata: you don’t have to check on me Neji

Neji: Your father asked me to you are family after all

Hinata: I am not a little girl any more Ino, Sakura lets go

Ino: & Sakura: wait up Hinata

As Hinata, Sakura & Ino where walking away from Neji they spotted the four boys that where in their homeroom so they approached them.

Hinata: do you mind is we join you

Naruto: not at all these are my friends Shikamaru, Sasuke and Sai.

Hinata: I am Hinata and these are my friends Ino & Sakura it is nice to meet you all.

They then sat down & started talking to each other, twenty minutes later the bell rang they all got up checked there timetables.

Naruto: I have Gym

Hinata: so do I, I will walk with you

Sai I have art catch you all later I guess we will meet back here at lunch time

They all agreed and headed off to their next lessons.



i thought i would start something different tell me what you think :)
 
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i really liked the new idea (am so into high school FF
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Well, it was definitely different. Like another Naruto series altogether. Like the others stated earlier, there were misspellings/grammar however that is a very common thing so don't let that get you down. Next time simply re-read/double check before posting and that could potentially help a great deal. I liked how everyone got along and overall I thought it was interesting. I'm looking forward to see how you will progress with this peculiar story ;)
 
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i really liked the new idea (am so into high school FF
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), but i think adding more details and punctuation, will make it more interesting and enjoyable, other than that it's really great
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, so keep it up :D
thank you :) & i am glad you enjoyed it

Well, it was definitely different. Like another Naruto series altogether. Like the others stated earlier, there were misspellings/grammar however that is a very common thing so don't let that get you down. Next time simply re-read/double check before posting and that could potentially help a great deal. I liked how everyone got along and overall I thought it was interesting. I'm looking forward to see how you will progress with this peculiar story ;)
i am glad you liked it

once again thank you both for yor advice
 

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I really liked it! And as everyone else said some commas would be helpful, but I had that problem a lot too! xd I can't wait to read more. :) +rep~
 

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Its quite good +rep! I take it it is not set in the ninja world then? :D But yeah like others said there are a few grammar errors but apart from that it is very good!
 

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Sorry, I'm late. I've read this before, didn't comment cuz I was in a rush. I like the whole new story where everyone's normal and don't let the comments on the mistakes get you down, just double check. Let me know when next chap is out.
 
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