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chapter 4 the chuunin exams: last time sasuke uzumaki and team did their first real mission haveing captured the missing nin kamiko 2 more weeks have passed since then the chuunin exam was annoced narutojr lets his team go in the exam as well the other senseis the first time since naruto toke it.

sasuke: gaint rasengan.

the jutsu explodes in his hand and he falls back.

sasuke: i have to keep training or i'll never beat sora i was useless while i was thinking of escape he went right in and tried to fight him if it was up to me sensei would be dead fire style; fire ball jutsu.

a fire ball came out but a small one strong enough to make a small hole in a tree.

sasuke: huff huff.

narutojr: look at him train.

naruto: reminds me of me but i didnt know fire style jutsu he'll be stronger then me one day. mean while...

sora: windstyle: wind slash jutsu.

wind starts to come at a tree slashing it over and over and a very fast rate it cuts threw the tree ( an oak tree)
and it breaks away and knocks down some more trees as it blows back.
later...

aki: they train so hard i was useless in that mission i just drag them down i cant enter the chuunin exam i'll make them weaker.

narutojr: thats not true you did good all you need is a little training thats why i choose you three to particapate in the chuunin exam, i know they'll need you plus you stopped him from moving that made it easier to get him.

the next day...

sora: aki you came after all.

sasuke: i told you now come on lets go they enter the room.

kenzo: well the weaklings are here.

sora: kenzo we kicked your butt shut up.

( we are skipping the first test because i just cant write it.)

sakura: procter saskura for the second test reporting.

sakura takes them to the forest of death.

sakura: in this test you will fight for these scrolls the heven and earth scroll.

sora: thats sound easy enough.

sakura: thats what your saying now give it 1 hour into the test you wont think that you have five day to take the two scrolls to the tower you must make it in a three man celland dont open the scrolls.

sasuke: what about food.

sakura: theres plenty of food in there just becarefull theres pionsous plants.

sakura: only 12 teams will pass this test.

the teams get there scrolls.

they go off into the forest.

1 hour later...

sora: man whats this feeling.

aki: i think we should get moving.

???: soon.

sasuke: what was that.
a kunai comes flying at them and a rock genin comes at them.
sasuke: rasengan.
the rock ninja dodges it and hits aki
sora: wind style wind dragon jutsu the ninja is blowns into a tree.

sora: darn it you have a heven scroll to.

the next day...

sora: still only one srcoll.

sasuke: we better get to it or we wont pass.

sora: come out i know your there.

???: so i'm found out already the oni clan blood i cant beleave it even a child.

a sharingan appears.

sora: what the sharingan but thats not kenzo.

???: you are right my name is madara uchiha.

sasuke: what thats not possible you were sealed by my father.

madara: yes the truth is.

flash back 12 years ago...
naruto: i'll just tightin the seal...

narutos arm stops.

madar: no as long as i have the sharingan no one can beat me.

naruto punchs himself in the face over and over trying to stop madara from getting control madara escapes and disappears.

madara: and now i will have my revenge.

sora: frankly i dont care who you are if you have a scroll we fight.

madara: either way we fight i want to test your power after all you are my pawn.

sora: huh.

madara: the whole oni clan is under my control.

sora: i dont beleave you.

madara: then let us fight a life or death battle for scrolls shall we.

madara comes at sora and punchs him but it turns out to be a clone sora comes from behind ready to hit madara madara disappers and reappers behind sora he knees sora in the back and punchs him in the side of the head sora tries to turn around to kick him but madara disappers and reappears.

sora: he's faster then sensei.

aki thorws needles they go threw madara and hit sasuke.

madara: weaklings i see sora you better be stronger then that or you will really die.
sora: what is he.

sasuke: sora whats wrong with you.

madara appears in front of sora and punchs him in the gut sora coughs out blood and starts to breathe heavly.

sora: i didnt feel the chakra to well to complety copy that jutsu but.

lighting appears around sora fist and he punchs madara in the stomach and he goes flying back into a tree.

madara: good job for a child to be able to hit me but your not good enough the oni clan should be sorry, i found them wondering from village to village no one wanted them when i saved them not only did i brain wash them they became mine,they are my minions

sasuke: so they are your army do you indent to attack the leaf.

madara: no not yet dont worry i wont interfear with this exam it should be years before i really attack i just want to test this boy see why he hasnt fallen for the brain washing.

sora appears in front of madara with a wind blade and trys to slash him with it madara garbs his arm and spins him then thorws him into a tree he crashs threw it.

madara appears under him.

madara: almighy push.

sora crashs into a tree and falls madara knees him in the gut and thorws him

madara: almighy pull.

sora comes flying over to madara.

sora: cough my body i cant move.

madara kicks sora and he hits a tree and starts coughing blood incontrollable.

sasuke: sora!

madara: weak i cant beleave how easly you are knocked down.

sora makes a fire blade and stabs madara in the shoulder.

sora backs away.

sora: windstyle hurricane the jutsu hit and a fast speed.

sora: fire style fire hurricane.

the two jutsus hit and explode with such power the ground shoke and trees five miles away bend back from the force of the jutsu.

madara appears right there unhurt by the jutsu.

sora: what how.

sora starts coughing blood he falls down.

sora starts to feel fear and starts shakeing.

sasuke: sora!

sasuke gets up on the tree and gets him to aki.

madara: you two are next.

sora: r...run he's to powerful.

sasuke: no i cant do that.

sasuke makes a rasengan and tries to hit him but it goes threw madara madara turns and kicks sasuke in the gut and elbows him in the back.

aki starts crying at the sight of it.

sasuke: cough huff huff.

sasuke tries to hit madara in the gut but it misses madara appears behind sasuke and kicks him into a tree then he uses almighty pull sasuke makes a rasengan and hits madara with it as soon as he's pulled forward he then kicks madara in the side of the head madara kicks him in the rib.

they fall back.

madara: i guess thats enough that was good entertainment.

sasuke: i wont let you go.

sasuke thorws kunai but madara disappears and the kunai hit a tree.

sora: cough.

aki: sora are you ok.

aki: he's out cold.

sasuke: whoa i never thought i'd see him all beat up.

aki: for now lets find a spot to camp and treat his wounds.

next time: um i dont have a title yet

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it could have been done better i think....
it feels a bit rushed.....
you should try to delve more into the details then just stating jutsus and continuing....
also some parts you just skipped with something happening then onwards without saying how it happened...
 
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