The Midnight Play

Hikari Uchiha Senju

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Be free to tell me what you think :y




Intro

"So,we finally meet." said the man in the dark as the flashes of dead bodies and blood pools appeared. Sweat and tears were poring down her red cheeks and her blue hair was all over her face as the girl woke up. Koi jumped of her bed and ran to the kitchen quickly grabbing a glass of water which was standing on the table. Her hands were still shaking... It has been the fourth time she had the same dream this month. So many strange things have been happening in her life recently that she taught she'll lose her mind. She calmed herself,went to bed again,but couldn't close her beautiful grey eyes.

When the orange light appeared on the sky Koi was wide awake and ready for a new day. "Koi,hunny,what are you doing up so early?" said a sleepy man "...We have...some preparations for the exams,dad..." "Oh,ok. Hey,should I drive you of to school? I'll be ready in a sec." "Hmm,alright than"
Than of course,in just minutes time,she was already in front of that nasty building,the "brain-washing prison",which people normally called school. As she walked trough the empty hallways,a blurry flash of the same hall,only with wooden floor and laminates appeared. Koi almost fainted,but was caught by a classmate. "Wow,are you ok?" said the short girl with curly dark purple hair and black eyes "Yes,thank you Chibitsuna." "Haha,nos problemos!". When she left her,Koi went to the psychologist as fast as she could,complaining about her problems...She felt a huge relef when she was told she just needed to relax and have a good night of sleep.
Than,as the classes were about to start,she went to the classroom. But when she sat,a tiny,loud voice told "Well,well...miss emo-princess finally arrived. Did you came by a dragon or a unicorn,un?" "Shut up,Bella,you f****** b****! I've had it,enough is enough-" "-I'm tired of this god damn snakes on this god damn plane?" Everyone laughed. Koi's cheeks were burning and she almost cried...in her mind she already killed this fancy girl over 10 times. Why is she so rude to her and why is she so popular,oh how would her life be good if there wasn't this girl with long brown hair and dark "tired" eyes. Than an image of a crying couple appeared,Koi was shocked. "Oh,you're going to c-" Bella didn't even finish the word when the professor came in.
After school Koi,avoid to fight again and ran home remembering school's psychologist's words even tough she didn't belive it...




EDIT: "Lol,I just noticed there's another ff with a similar name...damn it! :shy: "

Chapter I:
 
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Epic beginning, quite curious about chapter 1. :) :D
Just try to make it original so that it's fun to read. A lot of people tend to have good ideas in the beginning and then they ruin them by trying too hard ^^
Gl :)
 

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The Cobra Aproves!!!!! :hint: great job there
 

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I like it i read chapter ||| first

but i came back to read the rest :)
 

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not too shabby for a first time,

form a technical point of view though, don't censor swear words and make some space between dialogue and what-not, and also there should be space after a coma
 

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