The Legendary Sage of Konoha 3

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Loving it so far and I can't wait to continue reading and I love how you are sneaking in little hints about the hokage but the main one was 'Narrator: As Tsunade and Sakura were healing Konohamaru, Neji and Rock Lee headed towards Keiji, while Sai and Shino headed towards Kazuki. Naruto and Shikamaru were watching as they approached the fallen Akatsuki members.'

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Loving it so far and I can't wait to continue reading and I love how you are sneaking in little hints about the hokage but the main one was 'Narrator: As Tsunade and Sakura were healing Konohamaru, Neji and Rock Lee headed towards Keiji, while Sai and Shino headed towards Kazuki. Naruto and Shikamaru were watching as they approached the fallen Akatsuki members.'

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Lolxd I thought I had eliminated the only flaw, but it seemed to be another one months later:p Changed it;)

So anyway, glad that you like it so far, hope you will read on and give me a review when you catch up:p
 

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This chapter is indeed awesome! And you were right about having the music on while reading your fic! I was trying to find a few that fit the current fight and I have to say I found quite a few! :3

Not to mention the 2 new Akatsuki seem to fight alot. They had me laughing quite a bit and they sort of reminded me of Sasori and Deidara as they argued a bit with Sasori mocking Deidara about dying young and such. XD
 
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You confused me a little. So who is the current hokage, Minato? Also, I didn't like that you make Konohamaru the anbu leader. You made him far too strong in comarison to how he was and isn't mature at all. For an anbu leader you wouldn't expect him to use an attack which is dangerous for himself.
 
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Retrospective after-thoughts part 3:

People were hyping this up sooo damn much back then I just can't xD How? Why? :ROFLMAO:
It's not really that good to begin with, or at least looking back with the perspective and experience I have now it doesn't feel like that, it's almost as if I can't really understand why it took off as much as it did to begin with, even if the later years I improved a whole lot (and that's when these readers weren't even here lol). That's not even mentioning winning the first contest I entered and beating RokuNR himself with these 3 first chapters. Maybe I've over-evaluated the grandness of it all, both myself, RokuNR, and/or NB in general, or maybe, maybe I'm just looking at this with too strict eyes, like from a book perspective or the standard I put before myself in the later years, the one I am used to now. After all, this is a Fanfiction in script style, it's not suppose to be more than a fun side adventure to go alongside the manga chapters, which it did at the time... I dunno, I might just be getting old, lol.

The story so far is interesting I guess, and I suppose that is what was the main driving-point, so it's not without its merits. Some aspects of it now feels very cringe but back then they were cool and hip I suppose xP Thinking back I do believe I always thought my first story was the weakest of the bunch so I guess it is to be suspected, we shall see.

This is either the best so far or the worst one, I can't even tell, lol. It had its charm and the humor was okay at times I guess. I'll give it a 7/10 :lok:
 
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