[Adventure] The Last Of Human Race... (Short Story)

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This is my first fanfic. I never tried writing before.

English is not my native language, and not even my second. There can be many mistakes and typos, please, let me know if you find some, I'll try to fix them
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The Last Of Human Race​




"I AM RAPHAEL"​

World has been almost destroyed by The Dark Angels. We know that Angels are good but, The Dark Angel born from the dark side of human. His name is Lucard..... When human show their negative emotions, Lucard gain a huge power. Because of this, Lucard feels that he can rule all of the Universe by him self. He is starting to destroy the Human world and Angels world.

Knowing all of this, Rachel the Leader of white angels being mad. Rachel commands Noel His Right-Hand Angels to put Lucards down. Lucards already knows that this kind of thing would be happen, so Lucard makes so many of traps. Before Noel arrives to the place where Lucards Lives, he is dying cause of Lucard traps. Noel know that he would end so he choose to go down to earth. On Earth he picked a human who can be his second reincarnation. After his picking a human, he make seal to that human for he can be reincairnated.


Seeing the incident all of the White Angels feeling loss. And Rachel make a promise " I'm not gonna sleep 'til He is suffering for what hes done to all Living things."




10 Years Later​

10 years already pass since the incident. Human still feeling unwell cause of the havoc that has been done by Lucard. But not for this man... Raphael. Raphael walks out from his house saying " Yosh ! Lets make a perfet day with a training ". On His way to the field for training, he is found some strange gem. He looked at the gem and start feeling unconscious. In this situation he start seeing a vision of war that does not exist in that time. In his vision there is a man wearing a white suits calling his name " Hey Raphael.. I am you and you are me, together we can save the universe ".

After seeing all of his vision, he feels confused and continue going to the field. After arrives at the field he start the training, during the practice he says " I feels like..I ever go to war lately, aghhh am i really Raphael ? or maybe iam the guy with the White Suits ? What ever it is, I'm still Raphael ".


Thanks for Reading Guys ! I will try to make another Chapter =D
-Kyubi Mode =D
 
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I hate English u_u

But my corrector says you have 16 advanced grammar issues and 31 critical issues (spelling/grammar).

The highest for advance being in "word choice" (6) -


Word Choice: the writer creates a mental picture for the reader by using words that are specific and accurate. The writer uses strong action verbs whenever possible to show the reader what is happening rather than tell the reader.
 
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