The End is Near Chapter 4-James

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The End is Near Chapter 4- James

Hello peeps I'm back with The End is Near. This Chapter will be a short one about well James xd enjoy.

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James, the son of Reggie and Jessica Johnson awoke tied down to bed in utter darkness.

" I see you're awake young James." a mysterious voice called out.

" Huh? Who who are you?" James asked.

" Don't worry about that right now. Just rest young James."

" Where is mommy and daddy?" James asked.

" For all I know and care they could dead!" The mystery man spat.

James started to cry.

" However knowing your father he's still alive looking for you, but that doesn't mean he'll find you."

James sobs stopped for the moment.
" You you know my daddy?"

" Know him? Me and your dad go way back kid we were like brothers."

***​

Reggie is walking around town with is Katuna strapped to his back and has an AK in his right hand. Reggie then reaches for his left pocket, picks up the walkie talkie and speaks in it.

"Jess, Derrick, any luck?" Reggie asked.

"No nothing yet, we aren't done yet but so far no good." Derrick responded.

"Dammit ok."

Reggie then changes the channel.

" Eric, Britz how are you guys doing?"

" Not so good bro this part of town is full of the dead. We're gonna have to head back soon if it gets any worst." Eric whispered.

"Ok I understand stay safe out there."

"Will do man will do."

Reggie changed the channel once more.

"Randell anything?"

Reggie waited for an answer but didn't get one.

"Randel can you hear me?"

Still no answer.

"Randell what the hell? Answer me!"

"I......hear you....but......barley.....connection......."

"What about the connection?"

" The.....connection........"

At the moment Randell voice cut out into the static.

"Dammit his connection must be horrible." Reggie said to him self.

"Well then I hope he's alright." Reggie thought to himself.

3 hours later​

Reggie changed the channel on his walkie talkie so everyone can here him.

"Ok everyone let's hang it up for the night." Reggie instructed

Everyone responded and they all headed back to Reggie's house. They then sat in the living room with the lights off in silence. Reggie soon broke the silence.

"I just don't get it, we looked everywhere but we still couldn't find him." Reggie said kinda sobbing he was clearly upset.

"Look sweetheart its ok we'll find him next time." Jessica said trying to reassure her husband.

"No no we won't for all we know he's one of this god damn things and then and then we'll have to take him out!" Reggie yelled.

The whole room went silent. Reggie's wife, Jessica then got up and walked towards him. She then slapped him as hard as she could across his face.

" Don't you ever say that about our son every again!" Jessica screamed at Reggie.

Reggie just stood there in shock. He soon regained his composer and walked up the stairs towards his room.

"I'm sorry everyone" He said softly before disappearing.

***​

"So you knew mommy and daddy in school?" James asked.

"Yes I did." the man replied.

Who are you?" James asked.

The mystery man paused before he spoke.

"Just call me Uncle Tommy." he said with a sinister look upon his face.


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Alright, your story and characterization seems pretty solid. One thing I do have to stress is your edits. Make sure you're checking over your punctuation and diction. A couple of function words were missing, for example;

"For all I know and care they could dead...."

There's a "be" missing here.
Also, at the beginning of the chapter, where you're describing James, you repeat the word 'young' quite a bit as an adjective, making it a tad bit repetitive. Chances are, you would be alright omitting the second 'young' altogether, though if you were determined to set it like that, you could use another word with similar or synonymous meaning.

Other than that, very solid, nicely done Cobra! Keep up the good work bud!
 
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