The Child Of Prophecy, Fighting For The Survival Of The Shinobi, Ch. 1

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kelevra

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This is a FanFic about Naruto and his ninja journey, you can call it a crossover FanFic, the time this is supposed to be in is about 2 years after the end of the war. Please give me criticism it doesn’t make which kind in my opinion is every kind of criticism good criticism, if you don’t have anything to criticise the just leave a comment with your opinion.

Hope you will like it.


Two masked men were walking down the path to the hidden leaf village, before they would be spotted by the guards they quickly formed some hand seals and transformed to two old travellers. The sun were shining, everything had been good these two last years, since the war there have been no serious conflicts between the five great nations. But soon there would be no more peace the 6th world war was about to begin. The allied Shinobi force was going up against powers, unknown to Shinobis.

The two masked man, now travellers, walked to the headquarters of the ANBU, They walked into Ibiko´s office who is now leader of the ANBU, after Danzo had been killed he was the only one fitting for the job.

Ibiko:” How did it go”

???: “ fine just after the plan,” he said while handing over the scroll to Ibiko, Ibiko opened the scroll and skimmed the text,

Ibiko:” I’ll take this to the Hokage” While standing up from the chair.

???:” I’d like to take it to the Hokage in person, I also have to talk to her about something else”

Ibiko:” Fine” he looked relieved.

The two travellers walked to the Hokage´s office, it had been while since they last saw one another.

*Knock Knock*

Hokage:” come in”

???:” Granny Tsunade the mission is accomplished, every when went the way it was supposed to be”

Tsunade:” See I told you” while looking at Shizune “ did you get anything useful”

????:” yes indeed more than we could wish for”

(In the cave’s of Jiro Island)

?:”why do we have to wait a month” he yelled

??:” none of my concern, the only thing I know is that we will march in a month and in the meantime we can’t hunt” he said calmed

?:” And who is this person who says this”

???:” the only who knows is the Boss”

????:” Speaking of the Boss where is that bastard” He yelled

The Boss:” right here” he stood behind the man who had just called him a bastard

????:” sorry boss I didn’t know”

The Boss:” of course you didn’t” he said quiet, while taking his hand around the persons head, “next time you defile my name I’ll kill you and your entire clan, Understood”

????:” ye…yes sir”

The Boss:” Good”

??:” what is he paying us”

???:”Power’s and a lot of it, The guy is some kind of scientist”

??:” what about blood? I am tired of drinking of the reserves, I want it fresh. And why now? Why reveal our existence now we have stayed underground, for millenniums, what kind of power is so strong that we are that we attack several countries”

The Boss:” you will know when the time comes”




Coment if you want to see more.
Who are thoose guys?
What is in the scroll?
Who is The scientist?

find out in the next chapter
 
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This is a FanFic about Naruto and his ninja journey, you can call it a crossover FanFic, the time this is supposed to be in is about 2 years after the end of the war. Please give me criticism it doesn’t make which kind in my opinion is every kind of criticism good criticism, if you don’t have anything to criticise the just leave a comment with your opinion.

Hope you will like it.


Two masked men were walking down the path to the hidden leaf village, before they would be spotted by the guards they quickly formed some hand seals and transformed to two old travellers. The sun were shining, everything had been good these two last years, since the war there have been no serious conflicts between the five great nations. But soon there would be no more peace the 6th world war was about to begin. The allied Shinobi force was going up against powers, unknown to Shinobis.

The two masked man, now travellers, walked to the headquarters of the ANBU, They walked into Ibiko´s office who is now leader of the ANBU, after Danzo had been killed he was the only one fitting for the job.

Ibiko:” How did it go”

???: “ fine just after the plan,” he said while handing over the scroll to Ibiko, Ibiko opened the scroll and skimmed the text,

Ibiko:” I’ll take this to the Hokage” While standing up from the chair.

???:” I’d like to take it to the Hokage in person, I also have to talk to her about something else”

Ibiko:” Fine” he looked relieved.

The two travellers walked to the Hokage´s office, it had been while since they last saw one another.

*Knock Knock*

Hokage:” come in”

???:” Granny Tsunade the mission is accomplished, every when went the way it was supposed to be”

Tsunade:” See I told you” while looking at Shizune “ did you get anything useful”

????:” yes indeed more than we could wish for”

(In the cave’s of Jiro Island)

?:”why do we have to wait a month” he yelled

??:” none of my concern, the only thing I know is that we will march in a month and in the meantime we can’t hunt” he said calmed

?:” And who is this person who says this”

???:” the only who knows is the Boss”

????:” Speaking of the Boss where is that bastard” He yelled

The Boss:” right here” he stood behind the man who had just called him a bastard

????:” sorry boss I didn’t know”

The Boss:” of course you didn’t” he said quiet, while taking his hand around the persons head, “next time you defile my name I’ll kill you and your entire clan, Understood”

????:” ye…yes sir”

The Boss:” Good”

??:” what is he paying us”

???:”Power’s and a lot of it, The guy is some kind of scientist”

??:” what about blood? I am tired of drinking of the reserves, I want it fresh. And why now? Why reveal our existence now we have stayed underground, for millenniums, what kind of power is so strong that we are that we attack several countries”

The Boss:” you will know when the time comes”




Coment if you want to see more.
Who are thoose guys?
What is in the scroll?
Who is The scientist?

find out in the next chapter
vampires in naruto
could go really good or really shit
 

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no...
you proper wrote this thinking that it was good shame on you fail
thread fail
your sincerely professorbumhole
What's your problem? o_O You don't flame on Fanfics like that. You give advice. U_U Fanfics are like Fan art. If you're just going to flame then get out. If you're going to give advice or comment it then stay.
And I liked it. :)
 

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What's your problem? o_O You don't flame on Fanfics like that. You give advice. Fanfics are like Fan art. If you're just going to flame then get out. If you're going to give advice or comment it then stay.
And I liked it.
Thanks.
 

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professorbumhole
i just say it how it is i see a fail i call it a fail i see a ugly girl i call her a ugly girl im straight worth people that's all what you wrote was terrible not even worth the effort of reading its that bad improve on on it by never doing this again ...
shame on you faillllllllllllllllllll
 

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Really people? This is for the people who voted No. People get better at writing as they write more. Nobody should tell anybody else to stop writing. That's how writers get better. And then there are other writers out there to give advice.
OP: Don't listen to the poll. :) Just continue writing and you'll get better. :)

professorbumhole
i just say it how it is i see a fail i call it a fail i see a ugly girl i call her a ugly girl im straight worth people that's all what you wrote was terrible not even worth the effort of reading its that bad improve on on it by never doing this again ...
shame on you faillllllllllllllllllll
How about you just try to give advice rather then just flame? People get better as they write, and nobody should stop writing if they love it.
 

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Really people? This is for the people who voted No. People get better at writing as they write more. Nobody should tell anybody else to stop writing. That's how writers get better. And then there are other writers out there to give advice.
OP: Don't listen to the poll. :) Just continue writing and you'll get better.
If he Wants us to tell him if we want more and we don't we have to right to say it. And just because this one wasn't perfect and people doesn't want more it doesn't mean he can't try again with another story line.

Do what you feel like with the story. I didn't like the vampireish thing but i'm only 1 person.
 
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