The Apprentice Chapter Four

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Hello all! Time for chapter four. Any feedback is welcome positive or negative!


The Apprentice

Chapter Four

Yoru: Well let’s start from the beginning shall we guys?
Kuron+ Akari: Wait but how?
Madara: Well you took your time to awaken didn’t you?
Yoru: You Knew?
Madara: Of course I knew you fool; I am the head of the Uchiha clan!
Yoru: Can you tell me what happened?
Madara: Right here we go!

SFX: Boom

The four of them were transported back in time to a battle field.
Akari: Ah! Watch out kunais incoming
Yoru: Madara what did you do?!
Madara: Relax you three, it’s a genjutsu I cast on us all.
As this was said a Senju teleported through Akari and sliced through an Uchiha.



Yoru: Did you see that jutsu! That was amazing right Madara?!
Upon hearing this Madara spin kicked Yoru in the stomach.
Akari: As funny as that was Madara-san why did you do it?
Madara: That was not just a simple Uchiha that was my brother Inzuna. I promised my father to protect him… but look what happened.
Yoru: I’m… so sorry Madara.
Madara: Well anyway over there look, there is an Uchiha warrior being healed by a Senju woman. Now let’s flash forward a few months then shall we.



The same man and woman were seen sitting under a tree, enjoying what seemed to be a picnic. The man then stood the woman up, he and went down on one knee.
Man: Look I now this is wrong but; our son will be born soon and I think he should grow up knowing who is parents are.
Woman: (Tears in her eyes) Yes I agree with you my love!
Man: (Reach’s into robe) Will you…



As soon as he was about to speak another word the same flash was seen as the one that killed Inzuna, before instantly teleporting away
Madara: Now there is only one man able to use that technique and who owns that sword.
Yoru: (Tears begin to stream down his face as his Sharingan begins to spin around before mutating in to a new form
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Madara: Ah… your father’s eyes have finally arrived Yoru!
Yoru: Wait what?
Akari: But how did he not even some of the Uchiha elders have awoken the Mangekyō Sharingan.
Kuron: This is wrong how, why?
Madara: No… they are the Eternal Mangekyō Sharingan. His brother was killed and begged him to take his eyes so he could be his new light.
Madara: Let’s get closer, now.



The group teleports towards the Yoru’s parents
Man: You must… take my (cough cough) eyes, dear
Woman: Your eyes why?
Man: They hold (He is now spitting up blood) great power, give them to our son when his is born, tell no one must know about my eyes being taken. Tell them the killer destroyed the eyes.
Woman: But what if they call my lie?
Man: They will not his brother will be very angry if he finds out the second in command of the Uchiha clan was murdered by his own brother. Tell them nothing.
Woman: (Tears now streaming down her face) I’m sorry this is all my fault!
Man: No it is not, some people did not accept us we must move forward tell no one about this day.
Madara from that time then appears.
Yoru’s Madara: Well, look at that sexy beast over there.
Yoru: Really Madara at this point? (Trying to hit Madara)
Madara: (Blocking Yoru’s Punch) Sorry can’t hide the facts



Past Madara: What happened to Hantai? Kaigo what happened?
Hantai: Madara it was some rouge ninja after the Sharingan, he caught me off guard.
Madara: Where are your eyes?
Hantai: Kaigo has them I want my son to have them.
Madara: I swear to you I will watch over your son and train him myself.
Hantai: Madara… thank you.
Hantai then slowly passed away. Even due to Kaigo’s healing attempt the wounds were to deep.
Madara: I will take the body
Kaigo: Thank you Madara



Madara slowly picks his best friends body before leaving a single tear streams down his cheek. Kaigo slowly wakes home. A few weeks later Yoru is born, and is given his father’s eyes.
Yoru: Let’s get out here!
All four simultaneously say ‘Release!’ They are now back in present time.
Madara: Yoru where are you going?
Yoru: To kill Tobirama Senju! (He says drawing his sword and activating his EMS)


To Be Continued…


Chapter Three:
Chapter Five:
 
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Yoru is angry! Watch out, Tobirama!
Your fanfiction is phenomenal!
Its kind of difficult to read, though. The grammar or wording is off in a way that makes my head spin. Like here: "They hold (He is now spitting up blood) great power, give them to our son when his is born, tell no one must know about my eyes being taken." It'd be easier to read if it read "... Tell no one! Nobody must know..."
Dont worry, it really is good! I would like to read chapter 5, so please VM it to me. And you are one of my readers, so feel free to criticize my chapters. We can help each other improve.
 
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