The Amazing Adventures Of Kotetsu & Izumo!: Chapter ONE

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The Amazing Adventures of Kotetsu & Izumo


Chapter ONE: Shell In The Ocean

Prologue: The story takes place at some point prior to the Great Fourth Ninja World War. Luminous rays of light shine through a window and onto a female's face as she began to answer. A stern expression had been plastered upon her leader's visage as something rather odd had surfaced. A few moments later, two figures suddenly appear before a large desk as the puff of smoke begins to clear.

Izumo: Good morning, Tsunade-sama

Kotetsu: *Sigh* (In thought) Show off..

Tsunade: You both have been assembled this morning for a mission-you both will be a two-man group and the gist is to locate an heirloom my grandfather concealed in undisclosed areas-

Kotetsu: Hmm..interesting-

Narrator: Annoyed by his partner's rudeness, Izumo's eyes shut and he lightly presses a clutched fist onto his lips before letting out a sound.

Izumo: Ahem..excuse him Hime-

Tsunade: I know how he can be..

Kotetsu: My apologies Godaime..

Izumo: (In thought) Baka!

Tsunade: As I was saying..these items were not given to me directly rather mentioned on an old scroll I happened to come across yesterday. For fear of Uchiha Madara or any formidable enemy coming into contact with it was the sole purpose why it had been hidden all this time and once I was able to defend myself and Nawaki-

Narrator: A moment of silence consumes the room as she pauses.

Izumo: (In thought) Tsunade-sama...

Tsunade: ...Forgive me.....at the point in time me and my brother were able to defend ourselves would be when my grandfather permitted us to search for it. The directions were made into a riddle that he knew only we would be able to decipher which I already have. They're six items in total-five special crystal gems symbolizing the five elements though each having a distinct dark tint..

Kotetsu: You mean the same material that your grandfather's necklace was made from?

Izumo: I apologize again-

Tsunade: That is fine-I don't mind his curiosity...and it is in the same shape as well..

Kotetsu: Ah..

Izumo: (In thought) Geez..

Tsunade: The last item is a special safe box and when the gems are situated in its proper placing..it will open. Each gem is scattered in the origin of its represented element and one of the gems have already been found-Take a look..it represents our fire country-

Kotetsu: Its luster is beautiful-

Izumo: Indeed

Tsunade: I have cleared passage in every country you are to visit and everything is listed in this scroll. Lastly-I want these precious stones retrieved in the same condition found!

Izumo: We will not falter you my princess!

Kotetsu: He is right (In thought) Oh no...this isn't what I thought we'd be assigned and how will we be able to find these items!

Tsunade: I see you Kotetsu but I can assure you that this mission will not be easy and without danger..

Kotetsu: (In thought) Alright!

Narrator: Her words possessed adrenaline which turned Kotetsu’s slight frown into excitement.

Kotetsu: Um..I never had a problem Godaime..

Tsunade: Hmm..Right...lastly take this..

Narrator: Izumo held out a stretched hand as Tsunade places a turquoise colored shard onto it.

Tsunade: That fragment will glow in response to any of the item's whereabouts and will cause the gems to unseal.

Kotetsu: It looks exactly like-

Tsunade: It is a piece of the original gem and he enclosed it with the letter in case something were to happen to the necklace.

Izumo: Your grandfather..a very knowledgeable man planning this far in advance..

Tsunade: That he was..

Narrator: With the given assignment discussed, the two head to their homes to prepare for the complex and time consuming journey. As the door closes behind them the gambling Kage interlaces her fingers and begins to ponder.

Tsunade: (In thought) What did you leave behind for us..ojii-sama?

Narrator: The Konoha pair in possession of a backpack exit the Konoha gates and paced through the vast forests and grasslands towards the coastal pier where a boat awaited them. They eventually meet up and are greeted by the boat operator who then started the motor as they began jetting off towards Nami no Kuni and soon pass through the misty waters.

Nami no Kuni Translation
[Land of Waves]

Kotetsu: It sucks that we couldn’t travel through the Naruto bridge-

Izumo: I know-the construction is taking longer than expected and they still haven’t caught the suspects..

Narrator: Several weeks ago, there was an altercation between a few Konoha and Mizu shinobi which quickly turned into a battle that destroyed part of the Naruto Bridge. The Mizu shinobi were able to escape, construction began a couple days later and has yet to be completed. Thus anyone wishing to cross the bridge are forced to use a boat instead. They then arrive in the Nami no Kuni pier.

Izumo: Lets get a move on!

Kotetsu: Alright!

Narrator: The two begin traveling atop the forested now prosperous island. They make good time as they arrive to the backside of the island where the boat to Mizu no Kuni awaited the two. They greeted the boat operator who seemed bothered.

Mizu no Kuni Translation
[Land of Water]

Kotetsu: (Whispers) What his problem?

Izumo: (Whispers) Don’t worry about it..

Kotetsu: Oh well *giggle* I hope we run into some beautiful kunoichi-

Izumo: Stop joking!-A mission so dear to the princess' heart is something to be taken seriously!

Kotetsu: If that speech of love did not convince me of your obsession for Godai-

Izumo: *Blush* Enough!

Kotetsu: *Chuckle*

Narrator: Their brief conversation changed into a petulant argument which began to annoy the operator further as he rolled his eyes. As time passed, they continue jetting through several small isles before finally reaching the main land which was enveloped in mist.

Kotetsu: Check out this mist!

Boat Operator: Silence!-We may have a fair Mizukage however that does not erase the bloodlust that still plagues this land..

Izumo: Do as he says Kotetsu..

Kotetsu: Alright alright

Izumo: (In thought) I don’t like the atmosphere..

Narrator: Upon parking the boat in the coastline, the pair exit as the operator sped away in an instant.

Kotetsu: How rude..he didn’t even say bye-

Izumo: Lets focus..

Narrator: The two begin traveling through the misty grasslands then the outskirts which contained vegetative hills as the sun began setting and reached the entrance gates of Kirigakure. Suddenly, the mist around them began to thicken profoundly in the dusk of the day.

Kirigakure Translation
[Hidden Mist Village]

Kotetsu: Izumo..I can't see anything before me-

Izumo: I know this has to be a hidden mist jutsu..

[Jutsu Insight]
Name: Kirigakure no Jutsu (Hidden Mist Technique)
Classification: Ninjutsu
Type:
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Rank: D-Rank
Class: Supplementary
Description: This displacement technique is a specialty of the ninja from Kirigakure where one causes a mist to spring forth by lifting up some water from either a pre-existing source or expelled from their mouth then goes in and out of sight at will from within the white colored realm. The mist's thickness is controlled by the amount of chakra kneaded into it.

Narrator: Sounds of wet grass being quickly stepped upon can be heard.

Kotetsu: (Whispering) It appears we were not as welcomed as we thought..

Izumo: (Whispering) But who?

To be Continued...next chapter entitled "Plume"

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Like you said, I think its starting off a bit slow but I have no doubt at all that it will evolve into another of your amazing pieces of literature :D Oh and btw, I love how you use some of the most overlooked characters (but still some of my favorites!)
 

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Truly Impressive, Even For The First Chapter. Brings Out The Settings, And Character Descriptions Well. Awesome Work, Dude.

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You really didn't have to post here but I thank you for being such a good friend ;)

very nice :)
Thanks ^.^

very cool i look foward to reading the next chapter :)
Thank you and hopefully it pleases lol

Like you said, I think its starting off a bit slow but I have no doubt at all that it will evolve into another of your amazing pieces of literature :D Oh and btw, I love how you use some of the most overlooked characters (but still some of my favorites!)
Yes, it is how usually any movie, etc. begin and unfortunately I couldn't escape it xd Thank you and I hope my work stats true to what you stated. Yes which was another element as to why I was happy creating this ff as I don't think anyone has done one with these two yet lol

M'digging this. Keep going! =DD
Thank you ;)

This FF seems to be a good one bro! I havent read yet since im busy.

So this is another Anbu FF is it?
Thank you my friend. Yes and no however the ANBU aspect is used minimally compared to Black Despair.

Well in that case..I'll wait for the next chap but its really good ;)
Thanks again and I can't wait to release it! ^.^

@All who repped/rated-thank you! ;)
 

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Is Izumo a guy or girl? xD I guess both of them are still young since they are chuunin, no?

Btw, did i missed the part that explain the purpose of retrieving the scroll or it will reveal later?
 

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its good but why those two they are the under appreciated kind
That is the half the reason why I choose them plus the fact that Kotetsu is one of my personal favorites ^.^

Loved it.
Gotta love 'em since I made bios for them. XD
Thank you for checking my fanfiction out without me even linking you ;) Like I stated above Kotetsu is one of my favorites and I was compelled to creating a story based around these two :D

Is Izumo a guy or girl? xD I guess both of them are still young since they are chuunin, no?

Btw, did i missed the part that explain the purpose of retrieving the scroll or it will reveal later?
Dude, they both are male, were both 24 years old in part one and turned 28 in part two, both chuunin and have been shown in part one of the manga. I can understand as they do receive almost to no screentime lol Do you remember when they were assigned in a Nijuu Shoutai alongside Asuma/Shikamru to take out Hidan/Kakuzu which resulted in Asuma's death?

Yes, you did xd I explained the reasoning behind their mission and is wasn't a scroll but instead four gems (one had been previously found by Tsuande before the start of my story) representing the five elements in order to unlock an heirloom in which Tsunade's grandfather passed down.
 
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Dude, they both are male, were both 24 years old in part one and turned 28 in part two, both chuunin and have been shown in part one of the manga. I can understand as they do receive almost to no screentime lol Do you remember when they were assigned in a Nijuu Shoutai alongside Asuma/Shikamru to take out Hidan/Kakuzu which resulted in Asuma's death?

Yes, you did xd I explained the reasoning behind their mission and is wasn't a scroll but instead four gems (one had been previously found by Tsuande before the start of my story) representing the five elements in order to unlock an heirloom in which Tsunade's grandfather passed down.
ok how silly i am. lol .-. I really thought that both of the character are fictional. So u r saying these two ninjas were the one who fight alongside with Asuma and Shikamaru?

I see. My bad xD So what's inside the heirloom then? o.o
 

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ok how silly i am. lol .-. I really thought that both of the character are fictional. So u r saying these two ninjas were the one who fight alongside with Asuma and Shikamaru?

I see. My bad xD So what's inside the heirloom then? o.o
Its okay, I mean if you actually count the times they've been shown throughout the entire run of the manga-it isn't much. After the mission with Asuma, they were only briefly shown once again in the current war arc. The unfortunate thing is that for how long they've been in this series they've yet to be promoted to jounin -_-

You will have to wait my friend as for what the heirloom possesses is the main mystery of this story xd


very well done good job i liked it keep up the good work + Rep i cant wait til the next chapter let me know when you have put it up i give you a 10/10
Thank you for checking my fanfic out without linking you and for the +rep ;) I definitely will come next release ^.^

keep on .... that was great job
Thank you for your support/+rep :)
 

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I find it extremely amazing. First chapters are always a tough job, I guess but you pulled it very swiftly and with craftsmanship that's unique to you. While reading, I realized how I missed that language of yours and that literary style. It's so endearing.

One point that I found risky in this chapter was to give a mission that involves Shodaime to 2 Chuunins like Kotetsu and Izumo. But you presented them so well and made them so likable that it clicked very easily. Those constant 'mind insults/jabs' of those 2 were brilliant.

One thing that bugged me was how quickly they reached Kiri. But I guess, there was no point to lengthen that journey.

I liked the concept of the gems though and it indeed makes up for a great adventure. I expect much fun thrills, cool twists, fun moments and great battles in this one. In short, a roller-coaster FF and for a beginning, it was great. Definitely following it.

 
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