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Chapter 1

Its been three years since Ace's and Blade's father and Mother died they were still training. Ace's twelfth birthday is today and he's happier than ever. Ace has tall icy blue spiky hair with a spiky bang covering his left eye, black eyes, tan skin, a red shirt with blue sleeves, blue pants, and red shinobi shoes.

Blade: Happy Birthday Ace. 14 year old Blade has a tall black fro-hawk, tan skin, black eyes, a blue vest, a red undershirt, cloth wrapped around his right and left hands, black pants, and blue shinobi shoes. Blade and Ace were in the middle of training where they were throwing and dodging Kunai and Shurakin.

Ace: Thanks Blade, but can we get back to training?

Since Rin and Kinko died birthdays were never the same no pat on the back from Rin no kisses from Kinko and most of all no "I Love You."

Blade: sigh*, Ace, come on it's your birthday you should be happy.

Ace Frustrated: No Blade I should be training, thinking about my birthday makes me think about our parents the parents that I only known three years! Tears flooded out of Ace's eyes and he ran deeper into the forest.

Blade: Ace wait! Blade had forgotten that Reji was only one when their mom died and three their father was murdered. Blade chased after Ace the two were heading closer and closer to the hidden leaf village.

Blade: Ace where are you going!

Ace running and jumping from tree to tree: Just leave me alone I need to think! Ace turned around facing Blade and slammed into an elderly old man only a few inches taller than Ace with gray eyes and wearing traditional cloths it was Kinko's father. Ace and Kinko's father fell flat on their butts.

Ace: Sorry mister I wasn't looking. Kinko's father was studying Ace and his features. Blade landed beside Ace and picked the two up.

Blade: Sorry sir my brother wasn't watching where he was going. Kinko's father began to look at the both of them.

Kinko's father: Oh no worries but you must be careful your parents will be worried if they knew you ran into a stranger. Right after he said that Ace and Blade looked down with sad faces.

Blade: Well mister you see.

Ace interrupting: Our parents are dead. As soon as Ace said that Kinko's father looked at Blade and him with as if he had seen a ghost.

Kinko's father: You’re alive! Kinko's father kneeled down and hugged the two. Ace wiggled free of Kinko's fathers grip and jumped back.

Ace confused: Yeah who are you?

Kinko's father: I'm your mothers father but you may call me grandpa Myo.

Blade: So this is our grandfather on moms side.

Ace: I always imagined he would be more, um, you know less wrinkled.

Myo: Well sorry I'm not the village's next top model come with me we have much catching up to do. So Ace, Blade, and Myo walked to the Ramen Shop and began to eat.

Ace slurping up noodles: So Grandpa Myo you're a Huuga right?

Myo: Yes why?

Blade: Well our mom said that the Huuga are very strong ninja that have moves that take away chakra and that since we have the part of the Byakugan we might be able to one day do the same.

Myo: Ha, ha, I see you're interested in out gentle fist.

Ace: Gentle fist?

Myo: Yes its a taijutsu move create by our clan that hits the chakra points directly causing the opponent to be unable to use ninjutsu.

Blade and Ace: Ninjutsu? Taijutsu?

Ace: Slow down I just turned twelve and if this is how adults talk I'm not looking forward to fighting them.

Myo: What do you mean fight them?

Blade: Well you see Ace and I want to become ninja just like our dad. Myo smiled and began to eat his noodles.

Myo thinking to himself: Well, well Rin the kids really look up to you. Myo stood up and smiled at Ace and Blade.

Blade: What's wrong grandpa Myo?

Myo: How would you two like to live with me? Ace stood up and jumped with joy.

Ace: Yes! this is the best birthday ever!

Blade: Of course if you don't mind.

Myo: Why would I you two are my grandchildren it’s my duty as an old person to take care of you. Ace and Blade gave each other a look of excitement. Ace jumped up and hugged Myo.

Ace: You’re the best grandpa Myo!

Blade: Thank you very much. Blade bowed down in gratitude.

Myo: Now come on I want to show you the Huuga's side of the Leaf village. Myo, Ace and Blade walked to the Huuga side of the village the streets where full of brown buildings and they stopped at an old three story brown building with slide doors and a beautiful painting of Yin and Yang symbols.

Ace: Is this where you live grandpa Myo?

Myo: Yes I know it looks a little ruff, but soon you will learn to love it.

Blade: Whatever you say gramps so what do we do?

Myo: You two can walk around and explore the village but if anyone asks you what you’re doing here say that you have permission from the head branch leader Myo. After Myo said that, Ace took off jumping from building to building.

Blade: Hey Ace don’t just wonder off! Blake jumped on top of a building and began to chase after Ace. The two were incredibly fast jumping from building to building but they were acting as if the speed they were going as slow as they could.

Ace: Come on Blade your going to have to be faster than that to catch me!

Blade: Alright you asked for it!

Blade leaped over several buildings catching up to Ace and knocking him over.

Ace: Hey watch it!

Blade stopped running and stood over Ace.

Blade:Sorry bro I guess I took it a bit far.

Blade pulled Ace up and suddenly a boy with long black silky hair, going to his back, a black hidden leaf village headband, gray eyes with no pupils as far as Ace and Blade could see, a red shirt covering up his neck, black pants, and back shinobi shoes the boy was the same height as Blade but looked as young as Ace.

Mysterious boy: What is your business here?

Ace: Nothing much our Grandpa, I mean the head branch family leader sent us to check things around the Huuga's side.

Blade: Yeah so don't worry we'll just be on our way back.

Blade and Ace turned around and headed back for the old brown house where they left but suddenly the mysterious boy grabbed a Kunai and threw it at Blade and Ace.

Blade: Ace get back.

Ace: No way we've been training for I wanna know how my skills work against a Huuga.

Ace swung around on a pole dodging the Kunai and landing in front of the boy.

Ace: Before we get all in the fight what's your name?

Boy: You won't be alive when I'm done with you so I will tell you my name is Gizmo.

Ace: You're pretty cocky for a guys that's about to get beat up.

Blade: Be careful.

Gizmo: If you won't make the first move then I will!

The young Huuga charged straight for Ace and Ace pulled out a Kunai the battle has began!


-Speed-
 
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Plot was great, the ending was great, it built very great intensity, setting up the battle for the next chapter, only thing i'd change is when the character's are talking, you should have the character talk like this

Character: and what they say.

And then when theyre not talking anymore you should just put it in a seperate line so people dont get confused. But thats just my opinion.

Good work :)
 
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