[Horror] Sound of That Evil that Exists. Chapter 1 Part 2/2

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Chapter 1 Part. 2/2.
~The Past~
This is Part 2 of Part 1--> ( )
Charcter Appearance's .....
[Sally]
Is a young Blond 16 year old girl ... she wears a red hair clip that was given to her by her mother. Her casual clothes are a white T-shirt and a red skirt.
[Ageria]
Is a young black haired 19 year old boy... His casual clothing is a White shirt and a black pants.


-Ageria Looks at the top of the flat and he see's a Dark Human Shaped like Thing flying out of Sallys flat
He rushes up to Sallys Flat and he sees Sally lying there with her mother........
5 Years Later...
*Kids Playing around*
Sally sitting in the park in the middle of innocent children playing...Sally looks at the sky, it was an blue bright clear sky that day completely different from the day her Mother died. She had completely forgotten about the incident that happened 5 years ago .... It was almost the time of sunset and she head back home... while walking back home she saw an orange ray of the setting sun and a sudden flash happened of her seeing the time her mother died ... she rushed back again when she reached her Flat she thought for a second about going inside or not ... she opened the door and looks around and rushes to the end of the Hallway Room and sees nothing unusual .... She was glad by this ..suddenly a storm started heading this direction and the lights went out all of a sudden...And the main door opened and she was certain someone just heared someones foot steps heading in ... She is now sure something is walking right into the Room where her mother died ...She hided her self under the bed, a few seconds later she saw black shoes and and he had Black pants on... she scribbled in fear also a perfect reason for the person to find out who is hiding under the bed .... he walks to the side of the bed and lifts the bed and throws it aside easily and Sally screams as loud as she can in fear.

Until the next chapter ;)
Please share your opinions :D
And if you haven't seen part 1 you won't understand this
Here is a quick link to (also given on top of this thread)

Thank you for reading :p

 
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<div class="bbWrapper">Oh well I was hoping for a little more than that! lol! Well this is getting interesting indeed. Now I can't wait for the next chapter! You are awfully bold to be sharing your writings with the rest of us. I hoard my writings and give people the death look if they try to read them. Keep it up, it's a good story so far!</div>
 

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Oh well I was hoping for a little more than that! lol! Well this is getting interesting indeed. Now I can't wait for the next chapter! You are awfully bold to be sharing your writings with the rest of us. I hoard my writings and give people the death look if they try to read them. Keep it up, it's a good story so far!
Since you asked i will make it longer next time but it is my first fanfiction
 

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<div class="bbWrapper"><blockquote class="bbCodeBlock bbCodeBlock--expandable bbCodeBlock--quote"> <div class="bbCodeBlock-title"> <a href="/goto/post?id=11336160" class="bbCodeBlock-sourceJump" data-xf-click="attribution" data-content-selector="#post-11336160">Madara3Uchiha said:</a> </div> <div class="bbCodeBlock-content"> <div class="bbCodeBlock-expandContent"> Since you asked i will make it longer next time but it is my first fanfiction </div> <div class="bbCodeBlock-expandLink"><a>Click to expand...</a></div> </div> </blockquote>Oh yay! You got potential I can tell. It does need a lil tweaking here and there, but all in all I've enjoyed what I read thus far.</div>
 

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I saw your small reply to someone stating that you’d make your chapters bigger and for a FF beginner-it was a nice move you made by catering to one of your readers ^^ I wasn’t expecting that ending lol And I thought this chapter overall was good. I’ll be reading the third chapter soon ^^
 

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It could have been longer.... Nonetheless it's cool....
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