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... missin commas which you placed where they weren't needed? and a missing to and what not.
I am no proof reader. :|

Use commas after If and but.. that's the rule .. isn't it?
You sire are my A student. I was more referring to using a colon but you have found the error. A colon is used when it is followed by a list; which does follow it.
 

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LOL! WOW! Good one. That is actually correct. It's one of my unnecessary things to add to any paper I write. Always on my to do list. However, it isn't wrong, just unnecessary.
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lol i was always told to stray away from unnecessary things in a paper xd my creative writing teacher beat me in the head with those words. "If it's unnecessary then why do you put it in there?" :shrug: old habbits die hard ;)
 

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lol grammar quiz thread is fun.
LOL! I would have given you the A+ if you hadn't make a pretty common mistake: and, or, and but, require commas. You can never go wrong using them unless the sentence is akin to 4 words long. Then, it is just retarded to add it. For instance, "remember or look up transitional phrases".
 
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LOL! WOW! Good one. That is actually correct. It's one of my unnecessary things to add to any paper I write. Always on my to do list. However, it isn't wrong, just unnecessary.
A+
Not technically wrong but, not impressive either. Just like starting a repeting same words, starting two or more sentenses with the same words etc..
or constantly writing in passive voice ( ~_~)

I didn't vote for Zombie's fic just because the third time use of handbra annoyed me.. How many times one can repeat a joke in a same story within few paragraphas..
 

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Not technically wrong but, not impressive either. Just like starting a repeting same words, starting two or more sentenses with the same words etc..
or constantly writing in passive voice ( ~_~)

I didn't vote for Zombie's fic just because the third time use of handbra annoyed me.. How many times one can repeat a joke in a same story within few paragraphas..
I'd agree to that, except repeating sentence starters is a capital offence punishable by death. Not quite the same as using 'and' after a semicolon.
 
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LOL! I would have given you the A+ if you hadn't make a pretty common mistake: and, or, and but, require commas. You can never go wrong using them unless the sentence is 4 words long. Then, it is just retarded to add it.
According to Wren and Martin: A comma is generally not placed before the word preceded by and.

Exclamation marks are used after interjection and after phrases or sentences expressing sudden emotion or wish..
 

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According to Wren and Martin: A comma is generally not placed before the word preceded by and.

Exclamation marks are used after interjection and after phrases or sentences expressing sudden emotion or wish..
I'd have to go check, but I think my comma was after the 'and'. Nonetheless, note the bolder text.
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Carol Tenopir, University of Tennessee - Knoxville
Donald W. King
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Communication patterns are part of a function of requirements for channel attributes such as information content accuracy, comprehensiveness and currentness, as well as, availability, accessibility, and costs. Because information needs and requirements differ, scientific communication has evolved into the multitude of modes, channels, distribution means, and media-each establishing an important niche in an array of communication processes that help scientists more effectively create, communicate, and use scientific information.
 
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I'd have to go check, but I think my comma was after the 'and'. Nonetheless, note the bolder text.
lol... same thing.. think about it.

Exclamation marks are used after interjection and after phrases or sentences expressing sudden emotion or wish..
Noted and bolded. But, as I had said in my very first post regarding that exclaimation- it's a rather matter of opinion.
 
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I'd have to go check, but I think my comma was after the 'and'. Nonetheless, note the bolder text.
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Carol Tenopir, University of Tennessee - Knoxville
Donald W. King
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Communication patterns are part of a function of requirements for channel attributes such as information content accuracy, comprehensiveness and currentness, as well as, availability, accessibility, and costs. Because information needs and requirements differ, scientific communication has evolved into the multitude of modes, channels, distribution means, and media-each establishing an important niche in an array of communication processes that help scientists more effectively create, communicate, and use scientific information.
Come on- Wren and Martin has no where used comma after or before and in its paras.

I have too many books laying aorund in my house- none of which do. I know sometimes they do use it that way- but, it's not standard. Not using comna with and is more comman and grammatically accepted.

Check out more grammar resourses.
 
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lol... same thing.. think about it.
Not quite the same. But, that's why there are exceptions to rules since they bring about contention of opinions. If it's late where you are as it is for me, you'd best get some sleep. That's precisely what I'm about to do; got to get up at 8am. You kept me interested though, which is pretty good :)
 

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Biggest advice I can give regarding English would be, never start new sentences with the same word used in a previous (within the same paragraph, but better if within 2), use articles (the) properly, and remember or look up transitional phrases to substitute when you've ran out of ways to start a new sentence. This is the aim for English teachers: to see that you can think about what you are writing; and, this forces you to use new words. Also, use more semicolons (two sentences that can be joined together based on how fast you would continue onto the next sentence if you were speaking out-loud, basically), colons ("which includes"... Other than that I never found a quick way to explain this. Meh!), italicizing (emphasis, which gives life to the story) and commas. I've left references of each as well. :) Good luck!

EDIT: I made a mistake in my first sentence (as there probably are in others), Kudos to you if you can find it.
Originally Posted by Isthatnecessary
According to Wren and Martin: A comma is generally not placed before the word preceded by and.
= this

Originally posted by Makeril
I'd have to go check, but I think my comma was after the 'and'.
= this

Not quite the same. But, that's why there are exceptions to rules since they bring about contention of opinions. If it's late where you are as it is for me, you'd best get some sleep. That's precisely what I'm about to do; got to get up at 8am. You kept me interested though, which is pretty good :)
Well, I was refering to that. :|

Does preceded by and means preceding and? .

I have to go to.. bye for now. But, it was nice talking to you too. I hope we will get to discuss topics again.
 
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There are alot of brackets though, what is up with the brackets? xd lol

She strove to remain independent as she strayed away from tradition. Which demonstrated a shift in power from: women succumbing to traditional ways, to them choosing the paths they wish.

Instead of the first she, use her actual name

Yeah seriously a lot of brackets lol anyway I noticed a lot of repetition along with incomplete sentences...it seems to me like you are saying more then is necessary in some parts and in your attempt to thoroughly explain things you are over-explaining it. The thing is though...you said it was around 700 words and you needed around 500 right? well if you clean up the repetition and over-explained parts of it that just might take care of that.
 

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Yeah seriously a lot of brackets lol anyway I noticed a lot of repetition along with incomplete sentences...it seems to me like you are saying more then is necessary in some parts and in your attempt to thoroughly explain things you are over-explaining it. The thing is though...you said it was around 700 words and you needed around 500 right? well if you clean up the repetition and over-explained parts of it that just might take care of that.
Lol, mad late buddy, everything's been fixed. Thanks anyway.
 
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