Shinobi futures part Ten : Naruto Uzumaki

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Wow, really good. ;)
I preferred the Sasuke one though. xd
 
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Well TBH I like some and dislike some.

I know for a fact that Naruto won't run out of chakra as he's battling it out with 2 of the strongest Uchihas+Juubi. And the fact that he is the greatest sensor so he'd know if Sasuke is alive or where he is.

Sasuke may get another powerup but he won't get a bijju for that much chakra. I won't say more.

But keep up writing!
 
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minator93 said:
Well TBH I like some and dislike some.

I know for a fact that Naruto won't run out of chakra as he's battling it out with 2 of the strongest Uchihas+Juubi. And the fact that he is the greatest sensor so he'd know if Sasuke is alive or where he is.

Sasuke may get another powerup but he won't get a bijju for that much chakra. I won't say more.

But keep up writing!
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hehe you do got some good points there. But about the chakra thing: Naruto ran out of his fox cloack. he can only keep it up for a certain amount of time. Same goes for Sasuke's Susanoo ^^
and yes Naruto is the greatest sensor when he's in either sage or kyuubi mode. but at that time he's body was almost crushed so he couldn't sense where Sasuke was at or if he's still alive or not. And by the time Naruto got healed Sasuke's long gone across the world somewhere ^^

thanks for the comment! :p
 
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badoera said:
hehe you do got some good points there. But about the chakra thing: Naruto ran out of his fox cloack. he can only keep it up for a certain amount of time. Same goes for Sasuke's Susanoo ^^
and yes Naruto is the greatest sensor when he's in either sage or kyuubi mode. but at that time he's body was almost crushed so he couldn't sense where Sasuke was at or if he's still alive or not. And by the time Naruto got healed Sasuke's long gone across the world somewhere ^^

thanks for the comment! :p
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You are welcome :)
 
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I read both and have sorta commented already on this one a bit in the Sasuke one.
Without choosing which character I prefer, I liked the Sasuke story best.

Thanks for going with NaruHina :). I have nothing against Sakura, but I prefer NaruHina.
That is at least one story that goes that direction (Kishi's still can go either way imo).
Can their daughter use Byakugan, even though she has Naruto's eyes?

I like how both Sasuke and Naruto held back in the end and that noone truly won.
Even though they dont hang out anymore with each other, they have become friends again.
Just in a not hang out with each other anymore way :p(or at least their is no conflict anymore).

Hokage Naruto has a hard job.
He no doubt, doesnt want all that cheering, for having defeated the 'criminal' Sasuke, yet he has to endure it all.
It is best for the peace and the villages. It shows that he has matured, that he became a true leader.
Telling his son not to paint on the hokages faces, strengthens this :).

The only things I would have liked to see and felt was a bit missing (but maybe it became to long than or could fit somewhere else) is more about Naruto his children.

I thought at first that I missed Kurama, but on second thought it is good that he didnt feature in the story(advice, taking part in the fighting) apart from chakra, cause this is a battle between Sasuke and Naruto.

Great story :).
 
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Joten Uchiha said:
Awesome! Simply awesome!
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Thank you!! :D

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I read both and have sorta commented already on this one a bit in the Sasuke one.
Without choosing which character I prefer, I liked the Sasuke story best.

Thanks for going with NaruHina :). I have nothing against Sakura, but I prefer NaruHina.
That is at least one story that goes that direction (Kishi's still can go either way imo).
Can their daughter use Byakugan, even though she has Naruto's eyes?

I like how both Sasuke and Naruto held back in the end and that noone truly won.
Even though they dont hang out anymore with each other, they have become friends again.
Just in a not hang out with each other anymore way :p(or at least their is no conflict anymore).

Hokage Naruto has a hard job.
He no doubt, doesnt want all that cheering, for having defeated the 'criminal' Sasuke, yet he has to endure it all.
It is best for the peace and the villages. It shows that he has matured, that he became a true leader.
Telling his son not to paint on the hokages faces, strengthens this :).

The only things I would have liked to see and felt was a bit missing (but maybe it became to long than or could fit somewhere else) is more about Naruto his children.

I thought at first that I missed Kurama, but on second thought it is good that he didnt feature in the story(advice, taking part in the fighting) apart from chakra, cause this is a battle between Sasuke and Naruto.

Great story :).
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Thanks for another great comment! Love your feedback! :eek:

hehe, I always wanted NaruHina to happen, so that's why I made it like this!
About their first daughter! No, their daughter has the Uzumaki body of Naruto ^^ the only hyuuga trait is has is Hinatas blue hair ;)
their other two children, are still to be revealed in Hinatas Future! (two sons) and one has the byakugan as you might've guessed in Naruto's future last sentence ;)

exactly like you said it!: they've become friends again, altho they'll never lay eyes on each other again. they've both chosen their paths now ^^

Hard job indeed, it feels good for him to be cheered at and that the people are happy and trust him completely as their Hokage, but ofcourse, after he just killed his best friend (killed or not, he never knows for 100% sure but he has the feeling his alive) it's a bit hard to take! - I implented the son thing painting the hokage heads just to feel a bit nostalgic to Naruto's intro in the first episode/manga ^^ (this is the youngest son with byakugan by the way)

-> about Naruto's children you're right, but it would've been too long!! but i'll tell alot about them in Hinatas future to make that up!!! :D

yeah, Kurama didn't have much to do in their rivalry, he's just there, and he always will be ;) but this fight was between two friends, all he did was lending his chakra, and healing Naruto a bit because he had alot of fractures as well ^^

love your feedback!! :D
 
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